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A Poem - lord Wolfblade - Jul. 14, 2012
well.. i never have written a poem before... but my recent breakup has given me something to write about... so without further ado.. my first poem
from my feelings i try to refrain
but i cant stop feeling the pain
oh how it haunts me night and day
why oh why do i feel this way
You have no idea how much I love you,
Before I could say, you said, "we're through"
it is your touch that i miss
as i long for your gentle kiss
i remember those days, when our lips would meet
back when life was oh so sweet
now i try to let you go
as i know it will never be so
and i hang my head as i sigh
while the days start to wither by
for in this bed in witch i lie
i slowly fall asleep, as i cry
so yeah, some feedback would be awesome
RE: A Poem - DefStamina88 - Jul. 14, 2012
Wow, this is actually a pretty decent poem! Been a while since I've seen one of those! I love how the rhyme isn't screwed too much, and if you focus, you can tell what the poem is about.
Sorry for what you're going through, but a nice piece! Good Job!
RE: A Poem - lord Wolfblade - Jul. 14, 2012
thankyou very much.. i just put me feelings down on paper really XD
thanks man, luckily getting it out through writing has helped a bit
RE: A Poem - *Converse* - Jul. 14, 2012
Great poem....ryhmes were good, and I almost cried when I read it XD. Is this for schoolwork?
RE: A Poem - lord Wolfblade - Jul. 14, 2012
(Jul. 14, 2012 3:23 AM)MBN Wrote: Great poem....ryhmes were good, and I almost cried when I read it XD. Is this for schoolwork?
thanks..
not for school.. i wanted to write it cause its how i feel XD.. so i did XD
RE: A Poem - CosmicPegasus80 - Jul. 14, 2012
Nice and pretty decent poem
just a quick question
What made you feel whatever emotion to make you write this
RE: A Poem - lord Wolfblade - Jul. 14, 2012
(Jul. 14, 2012 11:36 AM)GalaxyPegasus80 Wrote: Nice and pretty decent poem
just a quick question
What made you feel whatever emotion to make you write this
thankyou, and
(Jul. 14, 2012 1:48 AM)lord Wolfblade Wrote: but my recent breakup has given me something to write about...
RE: A Poem - JesseObre - Jul. 14, 2012
nice job lord, i actually do poems too maybe ill post one up to see how good it is