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The Bladers' Destiny - Nitrohammer - Jun. 20, 2012
The Bladers’ Destiny
Chapter 1:
“LET IT RIP!†Rex shouted as he launched his beyblade in to action. His bey spun around and around in the circle like dish, known as a beystadium. Rex’s eyes were focused on his bey, “Go Befall!†he shouted. His beyblade was spinning at an amazing speed as he kept cheering it on, “ You can do it, we’re almost there!†he coached. CLANG! Rex’s beyblade was knocked out of the stadium, and was hit straight into a wall. As soon as his Evil Befall beyblade hit the wall it split in half. Rex couldn’t move, he slowly fell to his knees. “That’s what you get newbie.†A voice said to him.
Rex slowly stood up and looked the kid in the eyes. He had dark blue hair that covered his eyes, was wearing a light green shirt with a dragon on it, blue jeans, and sneakers. “What’s wrong? You want your mama?†the kid teased. Rex picked up his broken bey, and ran away. Rex ran through the streets crying his eyes out. He arrived at Nina’s beyblade shop. Rex ran up to the counter, “Please fix my bey†he begged. Nina looked up and her eyes widened. “What happened?†She asked. Rex just stared her in the eyes and said, “Please…fix it…â€. Nina nodded. Nina took the broken bey and put it under a glass dome. She walked over to her computer and started pressing buttons at incredible speeds. Rex’s bey started to glow and little balls of light started circling it. Rex ran around the counter and pressed his face against the dome.
He stared at the bey in awe, as it changed shape. Nina stood up and walked over to Rex. “It’ll only take a few more minutes now.†She told him. “Intil then, check out my outfit!†she exclaimed while showing off her pink dress, pink shoes, light pink hair, and blue eyes. Rex didn’t look over though, he was hypnotized by the steam coming from his bey. “Oh it’s done.†Nina realized. She opened the dome and gave Rex his bey. Rex looked at it in awe, “What is it?†he asked while staring at his new and improved beyblade.
Chapter 2:
“That my friend, is a Flame Pegasus ED145 CS.†She explained. “It’s a balance type that focuses on stamina and attack. But because I took off the blades on the Eternal Defense spin track, it won’t have as much defense as it should and-“ Rex was already on the other side of the counter rushing out of the door, “Thanks for the new bey!†he exclaimed while running out of the door. Rex ran down the street as fast as he could, ripcord launcher in one hand, and beyblade in the other. His light blue shirt and white and gray hoodies were blown in the wind, his short spiky orange hair blew behind him, his blue jeans were full of holes, and his brand new sneakers were shining in the light of the sun. Rex arrived at the World Beyblade Organization’s battle center. “Here I go.†He said to himself. He gripped his beyblade, “Show them what you got Pegasus!†he thought.
Rex opened the door and walked through, he saw lots and lots of people gathered around one beystadium. Rex ran over to see what was going on, he pushed his way through the crowd and the first thing he saw was a beyblade. Rex watched the bey spin at amazing speeds, it was so fast that he could barely see it. Soon an amazing light flashed and everyone was shot back from the stadium except Rex. As soon as he opened his eyes he saw a man standing in the stadium, and holding the beyblade that was spinning. The man walked up to Rex and looked him in the eyes, “My name is Nick, and I challenge you Rex, to a beybattle.†The man said.
Rex stepped back eyeing the man carefully, “How do you know my name?†Rex demanded. “And who in the world are you?†The man just walked to the other side of the beystadium and took out his string launcher. Rex glared and took out his ripcord launcher, “I guess I’ll force some answers out of you!†Rex exclaimed, taking out his beyblade. The man took out his beyblade and put it on to his launcher. “You’ll stand no chance against my Thermal Gemios T125 S!†the man exclaimed. Rex and the man stared each other in the eyes and both shouted “ 3…2…1…â€
Chapter 3:
“LET IT RIP!†they both shouted as the launched their beyblades in to action! Flame Pegasus started off strong by charging straight toward the other bey, but then the man’s Thermal Gemios started to glow and the ground started to shake. Rex’s eyes widened, “What is that thing doing?!†Rex demanded, “ Tell me NOW!â€. The man looked at Rex with dark green eyes, “Let me start from the beginning. My name is Stan, and I’m from the year 5012. That’s about 3,000 years from now, and in my time Beyblade and the world are in danger. I’ve come to this time period so I can find a blader that is strong enough to join me.†Stan explained.
Thermal Gemios started to spin at amazing speeds and the beystadium started to crack under its power. “Now do it! Special move, MULTI-STRIKE!†Stan yelled. Thermal Gemios then suddenly split into 10 of its self and charged toward Pegasus. Rex was blank in the brain, he’s never seen such power before. His mind raced and all he could manage to say was, “PEGASUS LOOK OUT!â€. CLANG! The next thing everyone knew Thermal Gemios was shot out of the beystadium, by the same bey that broke Rex’s Evil Befall. The kid walked up to the beystadium and jumped in. He walked straight for his bey and grabbed it. Then he picked up Rex’s bey and threw it to him.
Chapter 4:
He walked to the other end of the beystadium and turned around, “My name is Percy, and I’m leader of the Bey Bashers. Oh and by the way, I challenge you to a battle.†Percy told Rex. Stan was already next to Rex, holding Thermal Gemios. Rex simply took out his launcher, locked on his beyblade, and took hold of the ripcord. “I guess all take that as a yes.†Percy giggled. Percy had dark eyes, the blade like strands of hair going down his face just enough to cover his eyes were blue, he had on a bracelet that had a picture of a demon on it, red sneakers, navy blue sweat pants, and a light blue sweater that said “LET IT RIP!†on it. “I’ll be ref!†Stan notified.
He ran to the un-taken side of the beystadium and grinned. “Bladers take your positions!â€, Rex and Percy held out their launchers and prepared to launch. “3…2…1…†Stan called the chant. “ LET IT RIP!†the three of them shouted in perfect sync. Rex and Percy launched their beys, and the two tops went straight for each other at the start! “Focus on attacking him!†Rex coached, “Hit him straight out of the beystadium!†Percy roared. The two beys hit each other and, CLANG! Flame Pegasus was shot back in a gust of wind, and was starting to wobble. Luckily it soon caught balance with its Coat Sharp performance tip. Percy grinned, “Is that all you got?†he teased.
Rex glared at Percy, “Not even close!†he spit back. He quickly changed his attention to his beyblade, “HIT HIM PEGASUS! It’s time to create a special move just like the Beyblade hero known as Kenta did!†Rex exclaimed. “ Take this! Special move, ETERNAL FLAME ATTACK!†Rex commanded. In almost an instant, Flame Pegasus started to spin so fast that s circle of fire came around it. Then Flame Pegasus was captured in a ball of fire! “BRING IT ON!†Percy challenged, “Special move! SENTENCING SLASH! Do it Gravity Destroyer Attack!†Percy commanded. The two beys charge at each other, one on fire, and the other with the power of a brutal sword. CHING!
P.s. Im looking for character ideas so just tell me their name, bey, describe them, good or evil, and special move.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - Duck - Jun. 20, 2012
Wow! This story is epic, and your grammar is nearly perfect, but there is one big problem: the dialogue. Always remember that dialogue goes like this:
"Hi Trisha!!!" I screeched, charging at my best friend.
"Ach! Um, hi Kally," she sighed, prying me off of her back.
"Can we go to the park together? Please, pretty please?" I begged.
"Okay," she relented.
Other than that, wonderful job! Keep up the great writing!
Character request time:Name: Tristy Dodora (female, good)
Bey: Poison Libra 145ES
Special Moves: Poison Mirage, Crushing Scale
Appearance: Long black hair, hot pink eyes, tan skin, freckles, wears a black leather jacket over a hot pink t-shirt, blue jeans, black tennis shoes, and a pink headband...
Personality: Despite her appearances, she is very shy and kind. She is not a rebel of any sort, even though she looks like one. She has a phobia of spiders and a phobia of teenage boys.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - DefStamina88 - Jun. 20, 2012
EARLY NOTE: If you're thinking on putting sections of the Chapters in different threads, DON'T. They'll be closed. Just edit this thread...
Now honestly, I like this story!!! You should put your chapters in separate spoilers, but it's a good story!
Here's my Character Request...
Name: Antoine Lenkun (Male, evil)
Appearance: Neon Blue Shirt, White shorts, White Shoes, and bandages around his hands...
Personality: Quite a bully. Usually picks on most weak bladers... Tends to be a coward...
Bey: Counter Striker 230S
Special Moves: Striker Pierce, Horn Bullseye
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - Nitrohammer - Jun. 22, 2012
Chapter 5:
The two beys went straight through each other, and were now next to each other. As the two beyblades started to slow down Flame Pegasus suddenly fell.
"No...way..." Rex stammered.
Percy's bey spun straight at him at Percy and he caught it,
"Good try noobie but looks like I win.".
Stan walked over to Rex and pulled him away,
"Don't let that guy get to you. He's only a jerk."
Rex nodded and slowly walked over to Percy, he looked him in the eye and held out his hand. Percy just spit at the ground and walked away. Rex glared at him as he left,
"What a jerk!" he grumbled.
"Don't worry about him." Stan told him.
"But as I was saying, I'm from the future and the future needs a team of strong bladers to save it." Stan explained.
"I'll be back in 3 days, 'til then get at least 2 comrades" Stan finished.
"Alright, see you soon. I gotta get my beyblade updated to start with." Rex agreed.
Rex ran out of the battle center and down the street, he was heading over to Nina's beyblade shop again.
"I lost because of my lack of defense, so all I have to do is get a stronger defense." he thought as he came upon the shop.
He rushed up to the counter and looked at the parts, he went from t125 to h145 but then he found it. The perfect spin track to make Flame Pegasus strong enough to beat Percy. It was called...
Chapter 6:
"D125!" Rex shouted.
Nina rushed from behind the two white doors and stood behind the counter,
"How may I help you now Rex?"
"I'd like to trade in my ED145, for a D125." Rex told her.
Nina nodded and took Rex's Pegasus. In less than a minute she had the two spin tracks switched.
"There you go Rex, how is it?" she asked.
"AMAZING!" Rex shouted straight in to her face, "Thanks, I owe ya!"
Rex ran out the doors and around the corner, but then he slowed down to a walk. Then he stopped walking and sat against the wall of Nina's shop.
"How will I ever find 2 strong bladers in 3 days?" he questioned himself. "Maybe I should try and find that girl named Tritsy Dodora." he thought.
"AAAAAAAAAH! NO NOT MY BEYBLADE!" A voice yelled.
Rex jumped up and ran the direction of the scream. He found himself upon a beystadium. A girl with light purple hair, purple eyes, gloves that don't cover her fingers, a black shirt, and black jeans with holes in them, was battling a guy with a neon blue shirt, white shorts, white shoes, and bandages around his hands. The girl pumped her fist into the air,
"Do it Phoenix!" she coached.
Her Burn Phoenix started to spin so fast that fire was under it, Phoenix charged toward the other beyblade leaving a trail of fire behind it and...
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - Hitsugiya - Jun. 22, 2012
I think you should try putting the four chapters you have in the op in spoilers like this [spoiler*][insert text here [/spoiler*], the text inside don't have to have brackets, but the spoilers do, and the asterisks don't belong there either, I was just using them to prevent the thing from actually happening. Also, add chapters 5 & 6 to the OP in spoilers also.
Also, if it's not too late......
Name: Tatsuma Newgate [Male,Anti-Hero]
Appearance: Black Jacket (not leather), White (golf) Shirt, Black Skinny Jeans, Blue High Tops Shoes, Flat Hair (covers eves)
Personality: Loathes bladers with skill levels lower than his. Mostly quite, but is easily frustrated. Has a habit of lurking in shadows.
Bey: Hell Jupiter R145 MF
Special Moves: Wrath Bolt, Heaven Crusher
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - Nitrohammer - Jun. 22, 2012
Thanks for the views and comments everyone. I just love writing stories!
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - Duck - Jun. 22, 2012
(Jun. 22, 2012 12:29 PM)Nitro52 Wrote: Thanks for the views and comments everyone. I just love writing stories!
No problem! So do I!
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - Nitrohammer - Jul. 07, 2012
Chapter 7:
ZIIIIING! The girl's beyblade shot straight through the other beyblade, breaking it into tiny scraps. Rex ran over to the girl and saw that a little girl with blond hair and blue eyes was behind her.
"Thank you for saving me Luna." the little girl said, then ran off.
Luna picked up her bey and turned to Rex,
"What are you looking at?!" she threatened.
Rex moved out of her way and let her go by. Then it hit him,
"Hey wait!" he shouted.
Luna turned around and stared at Rex.
"How about battling me, huh?" Rex challenged.
Luna went to the other side of the stadium, as the boy she challenged ran away. She took out her red ripcord launcher, and attached her Burn Phoenix to it. Rex smiled and then took out his launcher, and attached Flame Pegasus to it. The two bladers stared at each other and started shouting the cry.
"3....2....1...LET IT RIP!"
They both launched their beys into the stadium. Rex glared,
"Let's end this quick! Special move! ETERNAL FLAME ATTACK!"
Pegasus was gulped into the flames and started rushing toward Phoenix. Luna giggled as she watched Pegasus come at her beyblade.
"NOW PHOENIX!! VOLCANIC DESTRUCTION!" she instructed. All the land around Phoenix suddenly fell into the ground, including Pegasus. Then lava shot out of all of the crater made. As the lava erupted Pegasus flew out of the crater and out of the beystadium. Rex's eyes widened, he picked up Pegasus and watched as Luna grabbed her beyblade.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - blader7228 - Jul. 28, 2012
character request
name:gerdre(male,good)
appearence:black shirt,red hair,green pants,blue shoes
personality:a shy,calm fellow.he keeps the secret that he is rich
beyblade:Grand pices ES
special moves:distourtawave,confushark attack.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - Nitrohammer - Aug. 04, 2012
Does it have a spintrack?
RE: The Bladers' Destiny Chapters 1-4 - flippy4212 - Aug. 05, 2012
(Jun. 22, 2012 12:29 PM)Nitro52 Wrote: Thanks for the views and comments everyone. I just love writing stories!
me 2 lol
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - Beychamp76 - Aug. 05, 2012
great story and my character request is
name- Azhar Awan (male, good)
Bey- Twisted pegasus 100 wd
Special Move- Twisted Star attack ( the bey charging down from the sky at supersonic, hitting the bey in the middle
making the bey wobble a lot and then freeze the bey in one place and charge at it to ko it
Description- A tall boy (11 years old and is 5-8) with a big bey spirit but always wants to win and has never been defeated
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - UkzZ-Element - Aug. 06, 2012
Name: Keenen Arcadia (Good)
Age:14
Bey: Tornado Orion SW145 WD
S.Moves: Windy Blitz & Death Bite
Personality: Focused on destroying evil beys. He always has smile on his face.
Appearance: Has long black hair up to waist and has green eyes. He has a diamond earring on left ear. Wears black and white things mostly.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - goten17 - Aug. 09, 2012
It's a good story.
Character request
Goten v. (Male,good)
Age 15
Bey:stormaquiro 100 hf/s
Appearance: blue hair,brown eyes, wears blue shorts red shirt white shoes. Band with aquario's symbol
Personality: shy calm kind hearted. Easily startled unless he's blading.
Special move tiger claw attack, storm attack
Character request
Melody d.(girl,good)
Age:15
Blade:rockleon 105 hf
Appearance:blonde hair blue eyes white T-shirt with leone's symbol blue pants green shoes. Goten. And her always hang out.
Personality: calmed when alone. Worry when goten is around. Always smiling.
S.move: leone roar. Extreme speed.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - Nitrohammer - Aug. 10, 2012
Ill write the next chapter once i get some free time.
RE: The Bladers' Destiny - Nitrohammer - Aug. 11, 2012
Chapter 8:
Rex ran over to Luna,
"Hey, you should join our team." he told her.
Luna smirked, she then just walked away. Rex had a shocked look on his face.
"I wonder why she left..." he thought.
He then looked down at Flame Pegasus.
"I'm gonna need an upgrade." he thought.
He walked in the other direction, towards Nina's beyshop. In a few minutes he arrived.
"Hey Nina, sorry to bother you...again. But I really would like a bey with more stamina, if you can do that." Rex asked.
He handed Nina his Pegasus.
"No problem!" Nina exclaimed, as she took Rex's bey.
She walked over to the small dome, and put in Rex's Flame PegasusD125CS. FLASH! Nina took out the bey and handed it to Rex.
"Say hello to your new Flame GemiosED145S! It has alot of stamina, plus some defence power and some balance." She explained.
But Rex was already out of the door, running over to beypark. Then he saw it. It was a poster, that said this: COME ONE, COME ALL! TO THE BEYPARK BEY TOURNAMENT. THE TOP THREE WILL BECOME A BEYBLADE TEAM. SO COME ON AND LET IT RIP!