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The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 24, 2012

Author's Note: I just thought I would make a story about the Quetzalcoatl Bey, since I have ideas popping up in certain places.

Prologue

Act 1: Enter Alexander Arkwright
Act 2: The Underground Temple
Act 3: Quetzalcoatl Awakens
Act 4: The Boy with the Bey of Pegasus
Act 5: The Left-Spinning Dragon, L-Drago! Part 1
Act 5-2: The Left-Spinning Dragon, L-Drago! Part 2
Act 6: The Ferocious Roar of Leone!
Act 7: A New Special Move, The Fearsome Howl of Wolf, And A Good Idea!
Act 8: An Old Friend of Henry, the Balance of Libra, and the Perilous Poison of Escolpio!
Act 9-1: Ryuu-oh's Return! Part 1
Act 9-2: Ryuu-oh's Return! Part 2
Act 10-1: Blaze, the Atlantean Bey of the Sun! Part 1
Act 10-2: Blaze, the Atlantean Bey of the Sun! Part 2

So, what do you guys think?
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Below here is the profiles of the Bladers so far

Alexander "Alex" Arkwright

Tlaneci

Nigel Robinson

Abigail "Abby" Dillidow

Ryuu-oh (calls himself the "Dragon Emperor")

Henry Arkwright

Leon Strowbridge

Lionel Strowbridge

Donovan Lupus

Bradley Morgan McSmith AKA Brad

Victor Venomous

Grandmaster Mikab Invictus

Sol Invictus



RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - L phoenic - May. 24, 2012

I likes it, I think its a good idea to base it on quetzalcoatl if you don't mind please pm me when there's another chapter


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Duck - May. 24, 2012

Wow!!! Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow! Did I mentiom wow? This is amazing! As far as I can see, it has perfect grammar, and a great plot! I'm hooked; I'm excited! I think yes! I can't WAIT for more!!! Oh yes, and please PM me too when you write more!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 24, 2012

Many thanks! I'll get to work on Act 2 as soon as I can!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 24, 2012

Act 2: The Underground Temple

"Now that we're here", started Henry, "Let's see what we can find at this city", as he, Alex, and the other archaeologists went to work, reading the symbols on the ruined structures, finding fabulous treasures, and locating the entrance to the underground temple. They've deciphered the symbols, found plenty of treasure, but no entrance to the underground temple. Just when they were going to give up on finding the temple, Alex had gotten an idea, "What if the entrance to the temple was disguised as a well?", at which his father replied, "Now there's an idea, son! I recall seeing a well near the temple of the high priests. Perhaps we could find the secret entrance there!". Kenneth Phelps, a fellow archaeologist remarks, "Well, what are we waiting for, fellows? Let's investigate that well!", as they went to where the temple of the high priests are, and found the well. Alex yells into it, "Hello?! Anyone down there?!", as it echoed back. Little did he know, is that the call awakened something, deep within the bowels of the underground temple. Five obsidian statues that resemble Aztec Jaguar warriors were all standing in a row, when suddenly, they came to life, knowing that someone had come to have found the entrance to the temple. The archaeologists lowered a rope into the dark entrance below. Each lit up a lantern, so that they would see their way through the darkened corridors of the temple. One by one, the archaeologists, including Alex, climbed down the rope into the resting place of Quetzalcoatl.

The group slowly walked their way through the hallways, taking in the sights of the carvings on the wall, depicting the history of Quetzalcoatl. Darrel S. DeLynch, another one of Henry's fellow archaeologists, asks fearfully, "What if the obsidian guardians find us? They might cut our hearts out to sacrifice us!", at which a deep, strong, intimidating voice replies out of nowhere, and in perfect English, "Actually, pale-faced mortal, that job only applies to the high priests of the city!". At the sound of the voice, Henry demands, "Who said that?!", to which another foreign voice says back ominously, "Right behind you all...", as the group turned around slowly...to see the five living obsidian statues standing in front of them, in fighting poses with weapons at the ready. "The obsidian warriors...", Alex gasped in awe, as his father calmly explained, "Great obsidian warriors, we mean no harm. We have come to study the temple, and to discover the secrets that lie within.", to which another one of the warriors replied gruffly, "Liars! You have come steal Quetzalcoatl from its resting place!", pulling out a sharp, obsidian-tipped spear.

Just as the warriors seemed ready to attack, an authoritative female voice calls out, "Warriors, stand down!", as its owner stepped forward from the shadows; a tall, tan-skinned woman with voluptuous curves, especially on her well-endowed chest. She is also dressed in the kind of clothing worn by the high priests. Her hair is a deep black, and reaches down to her posterior region. "Lady Tlaneci!", gasped the warriors, as they knelt down respectfully. The priestess, known as Tlaneci, asks the archaeologists, "May I ask you strangers on how you have managed to find your way to this city?", to which Henry replied, "We have found our way to this place, by the way of an ancient map found in an earlier expedition that I have lead.", as he showed her the map to Tollan. "I am not that surprised, to tell you the truth, at how you've followed the map. What I am surprised at, however, is how you've managed to find it, for my fellow priests had hidden that map well enough to prevent those vile Conquistadors from finding it.", she remarked, looking over the map.

Alex blushed, seeing how beautiful Tlaneci is, hid behind his father shyly. She saw this, and asks Henry with a smile, "And who is this child?", as he replied, "That would be my son, Alexander. Alex for short.", before whispering to him, "Say hello, Alex.", as he slowly drew out from behind Henry, waving "hello" to the priestess nervously. She knelt down to his eye level, giving him a reassuring smile, as he remarks, "You know, Tlaneci, you're quite beautiful.", at which she replies with a giggle, "Why thank you kindly, young Alexander.", before standing back up. She turned towards the obsidian warriors, and calmly ordered to them, "Lead us to the chamber, warriors.", as they replied in unison, "Yes, Lady Tlaneci.", as they got up, and proceeded to guide the group through the halls of the temple, before finally coming upon the inner sanctum, a chamber where the Beyblade of Quetzalcoatl rests, embedded in the wall. "We have arrived at the resting place of Quetzalcoatl", announced Tlaneci, before ushering Alex to step forward towards the wall, having a hunch that he might be the "Chosen One"...

Chapter End

Be sure to review! Constructive criticism is most appreciated!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

Act 3: Quetzalcoatl Awakens

Alex drew closer to the wall where Quetzalcoatl was embedded. When he was no more than a foot away from it, he slowly draws his right hand to the Beyblade. Just when he was about to touch it, Tlaneci advises, "Do not just simply pull it out of the wall with your hand; Remove it with your spirit.", as he nodded to her. He places his hand on the long-dormant Beyblade, as he then closed his eyes and concentrated his spirit. As he does so, the Bey started glowing a bright yellow, as glowing cracks started spreading out from the area where it is, and with one final tug, Alex pries Quetzalcoatl from the wall, also sending a few rocks flying. "I knew it", smiled Tlaneci, "He is the Chosen One", at which Henry curiously asks, "Chosen One? What do you mean by that?", as she replies, "There was a prophecy in which a group of strangers will come forth to the city from beyond, and one of them would become a Chosen One to wield the sacred power of Quetzalcoatl. Now, that prophecy had come true, for your son has been chosen. I would like to teach your son on how to use Quetzalcoatl's power, so that he would not be driven mad by it.", before asking Alex, "How did it feel to hold Quetzalcoatl in your hands, child?", as he replied, "I feel honored, Tlaneci, thank you.", as he bowed respectfully.

"Now", she started as she pulled out what appears to be a launching apparatus with a small handle attached to a retracting string at the end, with hooks on a circular bottom, as she gives to Alex, "I shall teach you on how to properly use the power of Quetzalcoatl", as she then brings out a similar apparatus and a metal top that appears to be similar to Quetzalcoatl, but different-looking and represents a different deity. "You have a metal top, too!", gasps Alex, at which she replies, "I believe the proper term for these tops are Beyblades. Before you can match your Quetzalcoatl against my Xochiquetzal, I will teach you the proper techniques on using a Beyblade.", as she suddenly raised her arms dramatically, and as if by magic, a stone podium rose forth from the floor of the sanctum. It also had a smooth, bowl-like interior area, as well. "For your first lesson", she started, "Attach your Beyblade to the bottom hooks of your launcher, like so.", as she attaches her Xochiquetzal to her launcher, and Alex following suit. He asks her respectfully, "What's next, Tlaneci?", as she replies, "Aim your launcher over the podium, and then pull the handle as fast as you can, while yelling 'Go Shoot!', which is the traditional battle cry for starting a Beyblade battle.", while sending in a training dummy Bey. Alex aims his launcher over the podium, and with one swift flick of the wrist and swing of the arm, he shouts, "Go Shoot!", sending the Beyblade spinning into the podium, as it circled around aggressively inside the 'bowl'. Tlaneci then says, "For your second lesson, you must tell your Beyblade where to move and what Special Moves to use. Quetzalcoatl, at the moment, has the Ishidal Impact Special Move, and it is powerful, I can assure you.", as Alex nodded in understanding, as he orders to the Beyblade, "Quetzalcoatl, Special Move: Ishidal Impact!". With that, Quetzalcoatl glows a bright yellow, and smashes into the dummy Bey, causing an explosion that sends it flying out of the podium, as it clinks onto the floor. "Awesome power, personified in what would be considered a child's plaything...", smiled Henry, as his son returned Quetzalcoatl to his hand, smiling at it, before saying to the priestess, "You're right, the Ishidal Impact is powerful. So, what's the next test going to be?", to which she replies, "For your final test, child, you will have to beat me and my Xochiquetzal in a Beyblade battle.", aiming her launcher over the podium, as Alex does the same.

3...

2...

1...

"Go Shoot!", they both yell, launching their Beyblades into the podium BeyStadium. The two Beys clashed, move for move, counterattack for counterattack, and neither were willing to forfeit. The battle seemed to last forever, but it ended with Quetzalcoatl sending Xochiquetzal out of the Stadium with the Ishidal Impact. "Congratulations, Alex, you have beaten me.", praised Tlaneci, as she shook hands with him, also explaining, "You have definitely proven worthy of using Quetzalcoatl. Be sure not to abuse its power. Now, there are four different types of Beyblades. Your Quetzalcoatl is an Attack-type Beyblade, due to its aggressive movement. Attack-types typically have high offensive power, but little stamina and defense. There is a launch technique that can be used to make up for these flaws. Defense-types have better defensive capabilities, and their stamina is a bit higher than Attack-types, and their offensive capabilities are average, sometimes none at all. Stamina-types have plenty of stamina to spare in battle, but little offensive and decent defensive power. Balance-types usually combine two of the three basic types, and there are qualities that must be sacrificed in order to obtain victory in battle. My Xochiquetzal is a Balance-type, combining Defense and Stamina, with below average offensive power. A Beyblade's type can be determined by what parts are used in its creation. Oh, I have almost forgotten, Beyblades are composed of four parts. There is the Face, which holds the other three parts together, the Metal Wheel for attacking and defending, the Track to determine the height, and the Bottom to determine the movement pattern. Quetzalcoatl has a low-profile Track, and an aggressive Bottom, as part of its nature as an Attack-type.", as she then hands him a small, wrench-like object. "So I can use this thing to take apart Quetzalcoatl and put it back together?", asks Alex, to which she replies, "Very good, Alexander."

Moments later, we see the archaeologists departing the city, as Alex waved good-bye to Tlaneci, who was also waving back, along with the obsidian warriors, as they went back into the temple. Re-tracing their steps through the jungle, they made it back to the town outside of the jungle, ready for the return trip to the United States. As they sat on the train, Alex thought, "I'm going to miss that nice priestess. She seemed nice enough.", as he held Quetzalcoatl in his hand.

Chapter End

Be sure to review! Again, constructive criticism is appreciated! Wink


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Duck - May. 25, 2012

Beautiful! I love the name Tlaneci! I thought you were gonna PM us when you wrote more, though... ;3; ... Anyway, you should put the chapters in the OP, and put them in a spoiler, like this (but without the spaces):

[ spoiler ]text[/ spoiler ]


It should work like this:




RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ Duck: Sorry about that!

EDIT: Oh and also, Tlaneci is a Mesoamerican term meaning "dawn"


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - *Ginga* - May. 25, 2012

I am hooked! That's a great story! PM me when the next chapter is up!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

Why would you guys want to be PM'd whenever a new chapter shows up?


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Duck - May. 25, 2012

(May. 25, 2012  12:31 AM)T. L-Drago 9207 Wrote: Why would you guys want to be PM'd whenever a new chapter shows up?

Because this story is amazing, and whenever you write a new chapter, we'd like to know right away! With so many 'New Posts', sometimes you can miss the important stuff!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ Duck: Oh, I gotcha then


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Kaneki - May. 25, 2012

Hey Cool Cool Cool i Love this Story. i Love this. i will Read it and Read it all over. Great Work T. L-Drago 9207 i Love it why cant it be a Real Book or a anime?.can wait for more Chapters to comeSmile.realy i am Shock at how Great it is.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ galaxy blade: It is easier to type. Plus, it's not easy to find someone who would publish this 'fic!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Kaneki - May. 25, 2012

i no. but i realy Love no Lie


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

(May. 25, 2012  12:48 AM)galaxy blade Wrote: I know. But I really love it, no lie!

Hope you don't mind the correction!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Gravity Brave - May. 25, 2012

This story is epic. Nice plot. Can't wait for more!!!


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

Thanks, man! Maybe I'll have Act 4 introduce a new character who has Pegasis 100HF, and establish a friendly rivalry with Alexander.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Flash! - May. 25, 2012

At first I thought it was death Quetzalcoatl but then you said it was an attack type and I was like "oh that Quetzalcoatl". Nice plot too I can't wait for act 4.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ Hobbybey: I'm sure you can! Wink


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Flash! - May. 25, 2012

What do ya mean?


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ Hobbybey: I see that you're eager, and I bet that you can wait for Act 4 to come out.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Flash! - May. 25, 2012

Sorry but this is a good story.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - T. L-Drago 9207 - May. 25, 2012

@ Hobbybey: Yeah, I came up with it last night.


RE: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl - Byerg - May. 25, 2012

You should probably be adding the new Acts to the OP actually Smile
Then just put them in separate spoilers to keep the OP from looking huge, haha.