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Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 14, 2012

Here is where I will show you guys some essays I've done. Please, don't steal my ideas.

The Rock Machine

The Layers of the Earth

Atlantis

Why the Pledge is Important

The Volcano

Weather Instruments

Computer Saftey

Ronald Regan (Click to View)

Stem Cells (Click to View)

Humanities Enrichment Application (Click to View)

Essay- Last Train to Paradise (Click to View)



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RE: Essays I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 16, 2012

Any comments? I want to see if anyone has any suggestions on how they could be better. Also, I need some criticism. Thanks!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - thebladebomber - Apr. 17, 2012

The pledge one was very VERY well written


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 18, 2012

Thanks, thebladebomber. I work hard on my essays.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - thebladebomber - Apr. 18, 2012

Well they deserve to be read


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 19, 2012

Again, anyone have some criticism? I want to know how to make them better, if I can.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - Sparta - Apr. 20, 2012

Well, I wouldn't recommend starting your sentences with a question. Also, making each statement afterwards bulleted by numbers makes it seem less formal. Unless it was a requirement, try just stating the evidence, minus the bullets.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 21, 2012

Oh. Okay. And yes, it was a requirement. I forgot to change it.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - Kaira - Apr. 21, 2012

Hey guys I want to know what you think of this OC character profile :http://www.fanpop.com/spots/beyblade-metal-fusion-oc-characters/articles/131734/title/kaira-hakura-gingkas-guardian-blader
Sorry if I'm not supposed to put it here, but I'm not accustomed with threads in the least.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 22, 2012

This is my thread. Put that in your own thread by pressing the "new topic " button in the your creations forum.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 24, 2012

Any more comments?


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 30, 2012

More?


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - Nearr - Apr. 30, 2012

I red the Atlantis one. What happened to Sumer inventing the wheel? Other than that, makes sense because Cyprus is around Greece...


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Apr. 30, 2012

IDK... Maybe sumer didn't invent the wheel?! Also, any more comment s?


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - May. 24, 2012

Any more comments? I would truely appreciate them. Thanks!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Nov. 08, 2012

"Computer Safety" essay added!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - SilverChronos - Nov. 08, 2012

This is pretty good. KIU on the essays.


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - Nov. 27, 2012

"Ronald Regan" essay up!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - May. 09, 2013

"Stem Cells" Essay up!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - May. 11, 2013

"8th Grade Humanities Enrichment Application" Up!


RE: Essays/Stories I have written for school! - TakasuMouce - May. 14, 2013

"Last Train to Paradise" Essay Up!