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BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Raigeko13 - Mar. 21, 2012 Quote:Flash Sagittario 230WD is the last 4D release, as well as the last regular release for Metal Fight Beyblade before the beginning of Beyblade Zero-G. It marks the end of the BB- code product line. Need weights. Thoughts? Criticism? This is also my first actual article I wrote, I hope it isn't too bad. Copied the 230 and WD spots. Flash hasn't been really tested in Stamina mode so I couldn't really write much about it. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Justaway - Mar. 21, 2012 Quote:4D Metal Wheel: Flash That should have been either 'type' or 'Metal wheel' Also, the second sentence starting with 'Paired...' seems somewhat wrong. But again, I am bad in grammar so I might be wrong. In the combos, R145 variant is not tested a lot IIRC so the H145,GB145, D125 or CH120 variants can be mentioned... or just mention mid-height tracks. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - th!nk - Mar. 21, 2012 R145 isn't as good as other tracks for obvious reasons. Flash works well on a huge variety of tracks, so we're trying to narrow down the best, but anything from 105-145 height works well as long as it doesn't obscure contact points (BD145) or have poor synergy (R145, though it still works decently). RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Ultra - Mar. 21, 2012 I don't like the overall section much because of a few things. Here are the things I think are wrong with it: - The Flash MW should be mentioned first in the overall since it's the most important part of the bey. -More on Flash wheel. You should say about how the wheel works on a variety of tracks too in the overall. -Take out the bit about Flash being proven through testing to be one of the best attack metal wheels. It's obvious enough it doesn't need saying. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Dan - Mar. 23, 2012 Definitely not enough information in some places.. I'll fix it up. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - JBladerMS - Mar. 23, 2012 Nice article, Dan. As you said, add information. State the performance of each mode for Flash, and which is better. In the overall section, omit the part about Flash being good and it was proven through testing. It's slightly redundant because the WBO tests EVERYTHING on Beywiki. Mentioning that it was tested makes it seem like we don't usually test parts haha. I'm half-asleep right now, so that's all I could catch. I'll help out more later. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Ultra - Mar. 23, 2012 Unless Raigeko13's name is actually Dan you're wrong there. Also I already mentioned some of that. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Janstarblast - Mar. 23, 2012 We are seemingly speaking too much about appearance there, instead of performance I guess... Also, I'd like to know about tests that proved Sagittario to be a well balanced CW... I was desperately waiting for those... Also, as N0body mentioned, the second sentence seems somewhat wrong... Replacing "Pairing with...." with "Thanks to...."(or something that means the same) would actually make the sentence more meaningful than its current state. But even after that, the sentence would need to be reworded a bit... I look forward to Dan's rendition of this article. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Serotonin - Mar. 23, 2012 Personally, I think it makes more sense to describe the Wheel's appearance and its various modes, before delving into the more detailed analysis of its performance. As a few others have mentioned it still needs a bit of fleshing out in terms of details too, but I'm sure that can be added by others. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Janstarblast - Mar. 23, 2012 Yes, we do need to speak of the appearance, but there should be more info for the performance too. As there is no real info about the performance, the details of the appearance seem to be "more than required", which they probably aren't. Just get in more info about the performance, and things will look balanced. That is why I concluded my post saying that I'll be waiting for Dan to redo this a bit. Unfortunately, Rai is probably away for a few days... RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - LeonTempest - Mar. 23, 2012 After a quick, glance, the information here looks pretty solid, but there are ALOT of run-on sentences. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Cannon - Mar. 25, 2012 Isn't the CW Orange?, not Yellow? Or is it just me .. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Byerg - Mar. 25, 2012 It's really a combination of both, I'd say it's more on the Orange side though... Anyways, apart from the other mistakes pointed out before, I see no more. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Raigeko13 - Mar. 25, 2012 (Mar. 23, 2012 1:14 AM)Dan Wrote: Definitely not enough information in some places.. Yes, I couldn't think of much to say in the Core and Frame parts, they definitely need mroe detail, and even in some other places. Can't wait to see how you revamp the article, haha. (Mar. 23, 2012 8:52 PM)LeonTempestXIII Wrote: After a quick, glance, the information here looks pretty solid, but there are ALOT of run-on sentences. Show me and I'll believe you. Edited my article to what everyone has said. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Shabalabadoo - Mar. 25, 2012 I don't see any run on sentences. There's a little rearrangements needed to be done, but I'll do that after Dan's edits. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - LeonTempest - Mar. 25, 2012 Rai: You already fixed the big sentence I had an issue with in the Flash section at some point. It is much better now. Nothing else to add, other than what was already said. Good article Rai. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Ultra - Mar. 25, 2012 In the bit about the Flash wheel in the overall say that it works on a variety of tracks. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Dan - Mar. 25, 2012 I'll be honest, I'm not sure I'll get to it this week/end so please do start without me! Don't want to slow down the crippled wiki any more than it already is .. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Janstarblast - Mar. 26, 2012 Ooh wow, Rai! It looks better now! OK, so I wanted to ask- th!nk told me that Dan told him that Flash (even VariAres) suffers from some kind of wearing issues? Is it worth the mention in the article? RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Dan - Mar. 27, 2012 I'm yet to see other members' Flash's 'come down' with this.. Perhaps it is just mine, or I just used to really heavily. (I did.) Not only this but no one decided to corroborate VariAres being worn other than Uwik.. Get checking! RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Raigeko13 - Mar. 31, 2012 Mine has some minor wear right now, a bit blunt, however it isn't nearly as bad as how bad Vari gets. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Ultra - Mar. 31, 2012 You should mention in the overall that the main reason to get this is the flash wheel which isn't that clear since you spend nearly the whole paragraph talking about 230 for some reason. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Raigeko13 - Mar. 31, 2012 I really just copied and pasted it from the Flame Byxis 230WD article, but I'll get to that. RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - Ultra - Mar. 31, 2012 I know I must sound insane by this point but I really really don't agree with the recoil of attack wheel thing. It's never been a big problem as long as MF and MF-H have been around. I mean we don't just not use VariAres because it has recoil... RE: BB-126 Flash Sagittario 230WD Rough Draft - th!nk - Mar. 31, 2012 I don't use my variares because it has too much recoil, actually. If a wheel has too much recoil, it will self-ko after every hit. |