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My Manga - .:J:. - Feb. 04, 2012

Hey guys so You might know that i've been writing stories for a while now, but i've decided to start my own manga, Name not thought up yet. I am a massive fan of manga and I wanted to give it a go, so every so often I will post pages of the manga when I've finished editing them from original drawings. As I know you guys need to have a taster i'll just give you a drawing that takes up two pages at the start of the manga.

Pic 1:

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I would be pleased if I could have some C & C's on my drawing style before I put some more on.

RE: My Manga - Odin - Feb. 04, 2012

This is just what I see as "off", listed in no particular order. Don't think I'm trying to shoot you down, though.

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As I said, that's just my observations. Take them with a grain of salt.

Compliments (Click to View)

Now, I know it seems like there are many more criticisms, but what I've mentioned in compliments are some of the things that make manga great. So, I suggest that you keep practicing drawing, and rework that later. Also, I think that coloring the drawing, and adding a background, would help immensely.

Also, I'm going to make a shameless plug: ask for CnC on Otaku Space. I can almost guarantee that it will help you.

RE: My Manga - .:J:. - Feb. 04, 2012

I guess I should explain, to answer alot of your critisicm.

1) I based this on myself, and I have a big head in comparison to the rest of my body, so I thought I should put that in. I tried making the hands the same scale as I used my head, aka the palm fits over most of the face.

2) Part of the legs are covered by the plasma ring at the bottom, and as it shows in page 4 he has made a crater which he's standing in, hence making him look smaller, didn't really explain that much.

3) I failed with that. what I was going for was his elbow is jutting behind him, as in he's pulled his arm back about to strike, which he does page 3.

4) i'm guessing you based the hands were to big based on the height of my character and so forth? if so I think before might help with confusion.

5) glad you saw that, it was a trick drawing, I wanted to see if people noticed the objects in the pile. along with a clock and a pencil most of the neck is covered by a large collar.

6) his eyes change when he uses the attack, but revert to ordinary eyes after.

7) There hidden underneath his hair, And normally I don't draw stuff you can't see, even though alot of manga artists do.

8) can you please explain further?

9) again do you mean you were drawn to the plasma more than the rest of the picture?

RE: My Manga - Temporal - Feb. 05, 2012

For 8, I can explain. The lines are just that-lines. They're somewhat to...straight, I guess. They make the character look a bit like a puppet. Sort of. (Assuming it's the same problem as I see.) As Odin said, take my opinion worth less than a grain of salt, as I can't draw very well.

RE: My Manga - .:J:. - Feb. 07, 2012

heres a (lets call it a extract) from a page in my manga foucsing on one point perspective backgrounds and coloured in greyscale, this is edited in gimp and was not inked before scanning:

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Just to show that I do have more skills than the first image I posted. C & C's again please. after this I won't post until I finish a page.

RE: My Manga - Pikachu0909 - Feb. 08, 2012

This is pretty cool. I like where your going with this. Keep up the good work Smile

RE: My Manga - .:J:. - Feb. 08, 2012

thanks for that, and yeah, lots more to come soon.