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Blinded By It (ANOTHER Bey story...) - Printable Version

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Blinded By It (ANOTHER Bey story...) - Synth - Nov. 25, 2011

*Foxtrot, we got a problem. seems like another story is cluttering the YC. prepare to open fire, copy.**roger that, Delta*

Well, Delta was right. another story IS going to clutter YC YET AGAIN.
Meh, Who cares?

Prologue


Hope you like the first one! as usual, Pro's and Con's accepted!(Note: I do not want to add a poll cause it is useless, and wont help me improve)


RE: Blinded By It (ANOTHER Bey story...) - JCx06 - Nov. 25, 2011

You put capitals in places the're not supposed to be Tongue_out
and it's you're Tongue_out
I would suggest "He whipped out his launcher, and attached his bey."
Cool story though! Grin


RE: Blinded By It (ANOTHER Bey story...) - Synth - Nov. 25, 2011

Thanks! It'll be helpful!