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Art of Life - Roan - Aug. 19, 2011
Just another poem, doo-de-doo.
"Art of Life"
These same words have been written by many men
Caught in the zephyr of metamorphosis;
Yet somehow I know I will never again
Go back to being the same blank canvas.
I have come to life in brilliant color;
Love is the fuel that flows spiritually through my veins.
I have penned this adventure, I am the author,
And I have written that I will break the chains.
Breathe into me and I will breathe into you
The zest I have been so very blessed to find;
For the world is alive in shades and hues,
And by its masterful strokes we are outlined.
I feel as if I am soaring, like a dove;
Alive with the transformative power of love.
RE: Art of Life - Ga' - Aug. 19, 2011
Yet another masterpiece, Roan.
I see an idea of breaking free of an old self and becoming a new person, a person who can love and be loved in return (hence the metamorphosis).
The rhyme scheme is simply A B A B, yes?
Great job. It's short, but very meaningful and complex.
RE: Art of Life - Roan - Aug. 20, 2011
That's more or less the gist of it, yup. This has been a very good, productive and transformative year for me, in many different ways. I was reflecting on that today and I felt inspired, so this is what became of it.
Yeah, it's a typical ABAB scheme. It's not quite a sonnet, I had to break form a few times for the sake of keeping things clear, but it's more or less a sonnet.
EDIT: Also, masterpiece? Pfft, hardly, lol.
RE: Art of Life - Roan - Aug. 21, 2011
So, I know we're totally not supposed to do this, but...
*shameless self bump*
RE: Art of Life - Sparta - Aug. 21, 2011
Hrm, the first few lines in stanza 2 didn't really flow right. I think the tempo was off...
Stanza 3 is my favorite. It really expresses itself, and the word choice was flawless. So I guess just fix #2, but great poem otherwise.
1 more thing: what format was this?
RE: Art of Life - Roan - Aug. 21, 2011
Stanza 2 probably doesn't "sound" right because I had to stretch the syllables a bit to get what I wanted to say across in the second line.
It's closest to being a sonnet, but I didn't keep with all of the "rules", so I guess it's a quasi-sonnet.