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The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 04, 2011 I haven't written a story in a while, and that's because I was saving up for this puppy. Here's a little note on it: I got this idea from a series of dreams I had for a few days. For some reason, every dream played off the other one (I didn't even think that was possible!), and they all featured beyblades. So, I used the base ideas from these dreams and created this story. I am also going to use some of the ideas I've been saving up (I always do ). Furthermore, since I've never, ever completed any WBO story in my life, I've decided to put away all of my other ones and just focus on this one. That's right, just this story until I finish it. You can expect updates every saturday evening, since that's my least busy day. With luck, I'll finish in a year or two. And now, I will end my rambling and simply lift the curtain on the dramatic tale of: The Sphere Keepers It has been lost. It has been taken. It has been thrown away and forsaken. It's power is too great, For any one person, But by the hands of three, From it's place it may be taken Chapter 1 (Click to View) Chapter 2-Part 1 (Click to View) RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - DynaZord - Aug. 04, 2011 Nice first chapter, I'll be looking forward to the rest ^^ I found one problem: Sparta Wrote:preform code orangeShould be Sparta Wrote:perform code orange, correct? Just one grammatical error, nothing too bad. Also, the Sparta Wrote:It has been lost.Sounds like a nifty little prophecy, if a prophecy ^^ RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - Katsuya - Aug. 04, 2011 Nice story Sparta I Like how you made Being grounded serious and Had to make code names. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - Sparta - Aug. 04, 2011 (Aug. 04, 2011 10:55 PM)Coasters "R" Us Wrote: Nice first chapter, I'll be looking forward to the rest ^^Yup, you are absolutely correct. Thanks! (Aug. 04, 2011 10:55 PM)Coasters "R" Us Wrote: Also, theI will plead the fifth for the sake of dramaSparta Wrote:It has been lost.Sounds like a nifty little prophecy, if a prophecy ^^ RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - Temporal - Aug. 05, 2011 Uheheheh. "Code Orange". This was pretty funny, but there is one mistake. Para 1, Line 5- "It wasn't y fault the vase fell and broke, and yet I get grounded. What gives?" You didn't put the 'm' in my. Otherwise, great start, Sparta. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - Sparta - Aug. 07, 2011 Ugh, I finished the second half, but it was pretty much all dialogue. Sorry about that, but please comment regardless! RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey story-can you believe it?!) - Sparta - Aug. 07, 2011 Bumped! I've already started working on chapter 2, part 1. I'll post it on friday, unless there is more demand for it. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - TITAN - Aug. 07, 2011 Dang it, you beat me to first-person omniscient. Still, job well done. So this means no more Bus Stops 'til this is done? RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 07, 2011 (Aug. 07, 2011 6:56 PM)Titan Writer Wrote: Dang it, you beat me to first-person omniscient. Still, job well done. So this means no more Bus Stops 'til this is done? Yeah, for now I think it's probably best I just focus on one thing. That way, I can put my best foot forward for each chapter. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 14, 2011 Meh, I seem to be doing things every time I need to update. I'll change the day to saturday. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 17, 2011 I'm sorry I haven't updated in such a long while. I'll make the chapter now. OK, I updated. Critique? RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - MaximumX - Aug. 18, 2011 Again, a good start to a story. I have a feeling that pink orb will be important later. Just one more thing: You are SO ditching this halfway through or sooner. RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 18, 2011 (Aug. 18, 2011 2:33 AM)DrigerMV Wrote: Again, a good start to a story. I have a feeling that pink orb will be important later. No, I won't! Promise! Guarantee! The OP doesn't lie! Yes, it will be. Very much so (As in, read the title ) RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 22, 2011 Alright, guys. Sorry for not updating recently, but I've already started working on the next part of chapter 2. Expect it wednesday-or sooner! RE: The Sphere Keepers (Bey Story-Stopping All Work For This!) - Sparta - Aug. 30, 2011 OK, I don't normally do this, but I wrote the chapter in advance to me editing the OP! Amazing, eh? Perhaps it's because I'm thinking about not procrastinating on school assignments... Anyways, just need to put some final touches on. |