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Flare - Minho - Aug. 03, 2011
Im totally devoted to this book... i will be updating this fortnightly...
PROLOGUE
Spoiler (Click to View)
Please tell me if this is a good idea... regardless i will be making fortnightly updates
RE: Flare - Giraton - Aug. 03, 2011
wow, exciting proluge, i would like to see more. very streight to the point making alot of things that need to be cleared up in the story, witch im sure will happen.
RE: Flare - Minho - Aug. 03, 2011
yeah... im not sure whats wrong with my writing style actually :p...
I like to make it puzzling then piece the puzzle at the end of the story... anyone else like that?
I might post a new chapter tommorow...
RE: Flare - Minho - Aug. 04, 2011
people can i have some opinion here?
RE: Flare - TenshouTsubasa - Aug. 04, 2011
Too short.
RE: Flare - Sparta - Aug. 04, 2011
(Aug. 04, 2011 10:50 AM)天翔翼 TenshouYoku Wrote: Too short.
So was your post
But really, it is a little on the short side. Add something to grab our attention, or at least add some fillers.
RE: Flare - .:J:. - Aug. 04, 2011
well the idea of the transmission is pretty good, but it is pretty small, take a notch out of mine, spartas and nights books, they need to be pretty long, trust me, it will make more people read it, not much has been explained, you said you didn't know what's wrong with your writing style, it could be the length, or it could be the fact it did give you more questions than answers, but I do see a good chance of this being a successful story.
RE: Flare - Minho - Aug. 10, 2011
you do know what a prologue is right.... its meant to be short...
RE: Flare - BeybladerPotter - Aug. 10, 2011
Show not tell. Yes, that. Don't tell the name, show it..... if you know what I mean.
RE: Flare - .:J:. - Aug. 10, 2011
yes i know what a prologue is, but it's still very small for a prologue
RE: Flare - Minho - Aug. 11, 2011
well, everyones a critic...