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Mr. N's Beyblade Story (CHAPTER 3 IS UP!) - Mr. N - Mar. 14, 2011

I've decided to write my own Beyblade story!

Unfortunately, I have not thought of a title, so if you guys are willing to post suggestions in the comments, feel free to!

Well, here goes...
Prolouge

Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3



RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Minidona - Mar. 14, 2011

Good prologue.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 14, 2011

(Mar. 14, 2011  12:09 AM)Brielyranger Wrote: Good prologue.

Thanks! I'll try to get the first episode up tonight or tommorow.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - X1 - Mar. 14, 2011

Come'on Very Good Story. But Who Is The Mystery Boy - Kyoya,Tsubasa Or Masamune.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Wolverine Mode - Mar. 14, 2011

Great story! I like it Smile. Just wondering who that boy would be...


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 15, 2011

(Mar. 14, 2011  9:22 AM)X1 Wrote: Come'on Very Good Story. But Who Is The Mystery Boy - Kyoya,Tsubasa Or Masamune.

Sorry if this is disappointing, but it will be a made up character.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - The Fire Wyrm - Mar. 15, 2011

Or it could be Ryo Hagane Eee


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Kujikato - Mar. 15, 2011

do you accept character requests? if so...


Name: Izuma Inzori
Name: Sonai Inzori
Name: Rez Inzori
also, great proluge


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Wolverine Mode - Mar. 15, 2011

Where is the second part? You said it will be soon...O_O


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 16, 2011

(Mar. 15, 2011  4:52 PM)Legendary 4 Wrote: Where is the second part? You said it will be soon...O_O

Sorry, I don't have lots of time during the weekdays. I'll do extra for the weekends! Please be patient

Edit: I just remembered that sometimes I think of a character and how he/she fits into the story, but I can't think of a good name for them. I know this is embarassing not to have character's names for my own story, but could you guys help me if I ask for some names?


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Kujikato - Mar. 16, 2011

@ the question, sure! i have a list of names on my laptop eg: Takachi, Nerizno, Ratamachi and ect,


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - C-Dub - Mar. 16, 2011

good story i wanna see where it goes.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 16, 2011

(Mar. 15, 2011  3:47 PM)Dracovianauis Wrote: do you accept character requests? if so...


Name: Izuma Inzori
Name: Sonai Inzori
Name: Rez Inzori
also, great proluge

Thanks! I'll use the characters, but will you mind if I tweak their roles a bit? Oh yeah, their ages might be a bit different, since it was before Gingka saved the world...


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - C-Dub - Mar. 16, 2011

I have a character request:
NameTongue_outhantom
Bey:MF Haunting Phantom F135 IR2F
Gender:Boy
Side:Good or bad...doesnt reall matter to me as long as he's a main character.
Age:15
Type:Attack,Left spin
Bey Descripton:The face bolt says Phantom across and black surrounding the word.:The energy ring is black wth a little shade of dark purple there are P's on the left and right side of the energy ring with an oval in the middle of the ring and spikes surrounding the P's.The fusion wheel ,Haunting, is like pegasis energy ring with the wings only their stickin out of the side of the fusion wheel and there are 3 like the points of a triangle and in the gaps are little needles about 5 millimeters long sticking out too.The spin track ,F135, stands for fabric and it wobbles so when the opponent tries to attack the track they'll just fall over,but it's a mystery how it supports the fusion wheel,energy ring, and facebolt.The performance tip ,Ir2f,stands for invisibleR2f.If you take it off of the spintrack it becomes visible again.
Personality:Mysterious,dark,doesn't talk much,doesnt really use his full power,trustworthy until u make him mad,he's always cool and contained even when he loses,doesn't love any thing exept his family,friends,and bey.He knows karate and only battles strong opponents.
Looks like:He has black eyes,brown drooping hair like reiji over his right eye,he's about 5'11'',wears all black,black jordans,skinny jeans,black open sweatshirt with a black t-shirt,and black gloves that the UFC fighters wear.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Dan - Mar. 16, 2011

I cannot tell much about your prose or writing style with so little written, but I'm pretty sure the first guy to save the world with beyblades was Tyson. (Of course you did not mean it like that, but I felt bringing it up was appropriate. :V)
'In a world where spinning-tops seem to dictate man-kind.. One boy..'
Keep it up so I can see how much of a writer you are!


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 16, 2011

Episode 1 is up. Kevin won't get his Beyblade until Episode 3. The first 2 episodes are to set things up!


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Kujikato - Mar. 19, 2011

i like the preview of episode 3


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Mr. N - Mar. 19, 2011

Yeah, I know it isn't interesting now, but I promise it'll get better when Kevin gets his Bey. Speaking of his Bey, what should it be?

Edit: @ Dracovianauis, is it OK if Inferno is modified (you might have to change the name) so that you can use Boost Mode, since with normal mode, it kind of defeats the point of BD145.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story - Kujikato - Mar. 22, 2011

im ok with any changes, just have my characters in lol, seroiusly


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (Episode 2 Up This Weekend! Taking Character Requests!) - RAW - Mar. 26, 2011

Good Job!

I was going to give you tow charectars but this has inspired me to do my own.


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (Episode 2 Up This Weekend! Taking Character Requests!) - Mr. N - Mar. 26, 2011

Episode 2 is up. I need ideas for Kevin Bey...

I also need names:

Doji/Dr. Ziggurat eqivalent

Ryuuga/Faust equivalent

Spy (I won't say anything about it.)


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (EPISODE 2 IS UP!) - C-Dub - Mar. 26, 2011

hey what about my character?!?!?!?Anyway good chapter!


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (EPISODE 2 IS UP!) - Mr. N - Mar. 26, 2011

(Mar. 26, 2011  8:41 PM)C-Dub Wrote: hey what about my character?!?!?!?Anyway good chapter!

Don't worry, your character will appear after the tournament.

Post your suggestions for Kevin's Bey!


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (EPISODE 2 IS UP!) - C-Dub - Mar. 26, 2011

I have an suggestion:
Name:Ray Anubis R85 WHF
Description:
R85:Rubber85
WHF:WideHoleFlat


RE: Mr. N's Beyblade Story (EPISODE 2 IS UP!) - Mr. N - Mar. 26, 2011

(Mar. 26, 2011  9:07 PM)C-Dub Wrote: I have an suggestion:
Name:Ray Anubis R85 WHF
Description:
R85:Rubber85
WHF:WideHoleFlat

I actually have a Metal Wheel Already, so I just need Clear Wheel, Track, and Bottom. Preferably something new for all three.