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Flash! Flash! - Roan - Aug. 31, 2008
Crashed her car
Into a semi
Crawled out of the heap
In nothing but her burning Levi's
Flash! Flash!
Lost her name
And half her face
Speeding along to heaven
At an incredible pace
Flash! Flash!
Ambulance and police
Have taped off the scene
Scraping her off the pavement
Quick, line it up on-screen!
Flash! Flash!
Skin grafts
And laser correction surgery
Have rendered her nothing
But a humanoid wannabe
Flash! Flash!
Two years in the hole
And now she's finally free
We'll be there broadcasting every second
On national TV!
Flash! Flash!
Oh, hello world!
Give salutations to her new face
She still has no sight in her left eye
But she can move it with such lifelike grace!
Flash! Flash!
Here comes the bride
Version two point carp oh
She's looking better than ever
Since she sunk to an all time low
Flash! Flash!
Mismatched eyes
And Uncanny Valley teeth
Can only do so much
To hide her pain beneath
Its a tragic tale
That could never be produced
If only we could secure the rights
Imagine the ratings boost!
Flash! Flash!
RE: Flash! Flash! - James - Aug. 31, 2008
Wow, I think this is your best one Yet! This line below made me chuckle a bit even though the idia itself is pretty sad.
(Aug. 31, 2008 7:09 PM)Roan Wrote: Flash! Flash!
Here comes the bride
Version two point carp oh
She's looking better than ever
Since she sunk to an all time low
RE: Flash! Flash! - Bey Brad - Aug. 31, 2008
I like it. However, I would warn against writing too much in this style.
RE: Flash! Flash! - Roan - Sep. 01, 2008
Yeah I've been experimenting with different stuff. I don't normally write like this.
I like taking cynical views on things and presenting them in a critical manner but I'm having a hard time writing stuff down that doesn't come out with the 1 and 3 rhyme scheme.
RE: Flash! Flash! - Bey Brad - Sep. 01, 2008
Well moreso I mean, you're using this very sarcastic style with lots of exclamation marks and things like that ... I'm sure you get what I mean. Just saying, don't overuse it.
RE: Flash! Flash! - Roan - Sep. 01, 2008
Yeah I know what you mean.
RE: Flash! Flash! - brandonk129 - Sep. 01, 2008
does this poem relate to mirrors edge in any way?
RE: Flash! Flash! - Roan - Sep. 01, 2008
(Sep. 01, 2008 10:01 AM)brandonk129 Wrote: does this poem relate to mirrors edge in any way?
...
What?
No.