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Beyblade Burst: Midnight Episode 1 Part 2 - DeletedYT - Aug. 16, 2022
Ryker: What-
Lucas: Oh yeah,you better believe it! You just got burst!
Ryker: You don't need to rub it in.
(the championship turns on)
Ryker: The title match!
Lucas: Yeah! Lets watch!
Hanami:Welcome back bladers! For this title match we have our black nova, Bell Daikouten versus the old champion, Ben!
Ben: You'll never beat Bellerus!
Bell: We'll see about that.
Ref: Ready,Set!
Crowd: 3! 2! 1!
Ben and Bell: LET IT
Ben and Bell: RIP!
Bell: Go! Divine Launch!
Ben: Take the center! Bellerus!
(Bellerus is in defense+ mode)
Hanami: Divine Belial is making a flurry of attacks but its not making a dent in Ultimate Bellerus!
Bell: Belial! Make this quick! Divine Bomber!
Ben: CMON BELLERUS! WE WON'T LOSE! BELLERUS!
Bell: YES YOU WILL! BELIAL,NOW!
Ben: ULTIMATE NOVA!
Bell: ONE MORE TIME! DIVINE BOMBER!
(all of belials gears which is the d gear, v gear, l gear and a gear shine)
Bell: BELIALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL!
(Bellerus bursts)
Ben: No,Bellerus!
Bell: Oh yeah! Thats the power of Divine Belial!
Ref: Ready,Set!
Crowd: 3! 2! 1!
Bell and Ben: LET IT!
Bell and Ben: RIP!!!!!!!
Bell: Finish this now! Divine Launch!
Ben: NO,BELLERUS!
(Bellerus gets knocked out)
Hanami: OH! Bell wins with no mercy!
Ref: Bell wins with a score of 3-0! The title stays!
Ryker: That..
Lucas: Was..
Ryker and Lucas: AWESOME!
Lucas:Are you thinking what im thinking?
Ryker: I think so!
Ryker and Lucas:ITS TIME FOR A TRIP TO JAPAN!
(End of Episode 1)
if your wondering, this is 3 years after WizardBladers' Beyblade Metal Burst.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Midnight Episode 1 Part 2 - Hollowmind13 - Aug. 16, 2022
it is worth mentioning that it is way better if you post all chapters in a single thread, as well as everything related to the fic itself. That helps by not clogging up the forums with oneshot threads that are worthless after creation and concentrate a "mini community point" about that same fic.
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As for the chapter itself, it was rather short and lacking in detail due to that. Your writing style is also rather basic but that evolves with experience anyways. The pacing is also awkward and makes me question space and time (did they went home to watch the match or phone? Did they do it as soon as the match was over? wow. Why they suddenly want to go to Japan? Just because they saw a boy getting clapped doesn't mean much for such a drastic choice)
I do question the merging of it with WizardBlader's fic, does it come to play? Or at the very least you got permission to do it?
Overall, not the best but can always improve. If I had to give it a rating, 2/10? Still, pretty early on and prob your first written piece of fictional media.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Midnight Episode 1 Part 2 - Stupid Blader - Sep. 03, 2022
Kind of short and boring. I agree with Hollow's opinion,he is actually right in a way.