Beyblade: Origins - UnknownIfirit - Mar. 19, 2022
Tired of being only known as Aiga Akaba's son, eleven year old rookie Ace Akaba decides to embark on a journey to be more powerful and famous than his father Aiga ever was; winning the upcoming world championships is included in that. With his very own Achilles in hand, will he succeed? Follow Ace Akaba as he strives to secure his title as a future blading legend.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - Hollowmind13 - Mar. 19, 2022
(Mar. 19, 2022 8:21 PM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: I saw you guys' "fan fictions" and I decided that it would be cool if I could try one!
Lyvvi Hisoki, a 14 year old rookie blader, suffers a major loss in a tournament. Saddened, he turns over a new leaf, creating both a new system, the Incognito system, and a new beyblade, Cognizant Loki! However, upon doing this, he realizes that heading back into the beyblade world will cause him too much embarrassment, so he creates a new identity for himself, dubbed "The Rogue". Under this new identity and new status as a blader, Lyvvi plans to start a new journey to the top, as well as keeping his identity a secret. However, as a slightly suspicious blader approaches him one day, Lyvvi becomes uneasy and questions whether or not he really is a good blader. With this, will he become one of the best? And more importantly, will he decide to come out of this identity shell?
Characters:
Lyvvi Hisoki
Beyblade: Cognizant Loki-Arc 2'+Mitigate
(More characters will be added as the story continues on)
Incognito System Explained:
These are the parts of the Incognito System. (Listed from how you put them: top to bottom parts)
Essence: This part of the beyblade is similar to a core from Beyblade Burst DB, or a chip from Beyblade Burst Sparking. However, in addition to these cores and chips being able to be put vertically and horizontally, the Essence is able to be put on diagonally as well. Also, like its predecessors, it has teeth (primarily rubber, but in rare cases it can be metal), and also hosts the face of the beyblade's avatar.
Sheath: This part of the beyblade is the part where the Essence clicks into. It can have a variety of details, such as jagged blades, smooth, circular blades, or sharp blades.
Performance Tip: https://beyblade.fandom.com/wiki/Performance_Tip
Cognition Gear: Due to the Forge Disc not being present in this system, the Cognition Gear can be seen as a replacement. However, it is bigger (about the size of a Chassis) and has more prominent details than a forge disc.
Siege Wheel: This part of the beyblade clicks into the Sheath. It is sort of an excess layer, giving the bey a boost of properties, such as attack, stamina, and/or defense.
To end this off, lets say there was a bey called Envious Lucifer-Double 3+Sash. The "Envious" part would be the Sheath, "Lucifer" would be the Essence, "Double" would be the Siege Wheel, "Sash" would be the Cognition Gear, and "3" would be the Performance Tip.
Episodes:
Episode 1: Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
Episode 2: Judgement's Incentive! Cognizant Insignia!
Episode 3: Tenacious Pursuit! Barbaric Fenrir!
Side Note - I will be uploading 2 times each weekend, but since today is my first day making this, tomorrow should be the date of the first episode. .
Here's some tips:
1. Be mindful of the plot, you should have a line from start to end to not make any plotholes or wierd stuff.
2. Don't be too much unrealistic, this isn't mfb (I think).
3. A Character is a human, so they should behave like one.
4. don't give yourself time limits, this might lower the quality of a chapter because you would rush it sometimes to hit the deadline. Only make time limits if you know for sure you can do it and do not fear to delay it if you need.
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Cool premise I guess, and funny system. I'll keep an eye
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - DragoonGalaxy15 - Mar. 19, 2022
looks interesting, if you need more characters or help with writing hit me up
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - LegendJustice - Mar. 20, 2022
(Mar. 19, 2022 8:21 PM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: I saw you guys' "fan fictions" and I decided that it would be cool if I could try one!
Lyvvi Hisoki, a 14 year old rookie blader, suffers a major loss in a tournament. Saddened, he turns over a new leaf, creating both a new system, the Incognito system, and a new beyblade, Cognizant Loki! However, upon doing this, he realizes that heading back into the beyblade world will cause him too much embarrassment, so he creates a new identity for himself, dubbed "The Rogue". Under this new identity and new status as a blader, Lyvvi plans to start a new journey to the top, as well as keeping his identity a secret. However, as a slightly suspicious blader approaches him one day, Lyvvi becomes uneasy and questions whether or not he really is a good blader. With this, will he become one of the best? And more importantly, will he decide to come out of this identity shell?
Characters:
Lyvvi Hisoki
Beyblade: Cognizant Loki-Arc 2'+Mitigate
(More characters will be added as the story continues on)
Incognito System Explained:
These are the parts of the Incognito System. (Listed from how you put them: top to bottom parts)
Essence: This part of the beyblade is similar to a core from Beyblade Burst DB, or a chip from Beyblade Burst Sparking. However, in addition to these cores and chips being able to be put vertically and horizontally, the Essence is able to be put on diagonally as well. Also, like its predecessors, it has teeth (primarily rubber, but in rare cases it can be metal), and also hosts the face of the beyblade's avatar.
Sheath: This part of the beyblade is the part where the Essence clicks into. It can have a variety of details, such as jagged blades, smooth, circular blades, or sharp blades.
Performance Tip: https://beyblade.fandom.com/wiki/Performance_Tip
Cognition Gear: Due to the Forge Disc not being present in this system, the Cognition Gear can be seen as a replacement. However, it is bigger (about the size of a Chassis) and has more prominent details than a forge disc.
Siege Wheel: This part of the beyblade clicks into the Sheath. It is sort of an excess layer, giving the bey a boost of properties, such as attack, stamina, and/or defense.
To end this off, lets say there was a bey called Envious Lucifer-Double 3+Sash. The "Envious" part would be the Sheath, "Lucifer" would be the Essence, "Double" would be the Siege Wheel, "Sash" would be the Cognition Gear, and "3" would be the Performance Tip.
Episodes:
Episode 1: Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
Episode 2: Judgement's Incentive! Cognizant Insignia!
Episode 3: Tenacious Pursuit! Barbaric Fenrir!
Interesting, The Humiliation and creating a new persona is defiantly something new I look forward to reading this
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - UnknownIfirit - Mar. 22, 2022
Episode 1!
Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Episode 1!
The Prince of Fire! Cognizant Loki!
(A green haired boy runs across a street, tears falling down his face as he cradled in his hands what looked to be very small, broken pieces)
???: W-Why would he do such a thing? Why would anyone do such a thing? (The boy dodged an incoming car, then proceeded to run through the busy streets of Tokyo, Japan)
(Finally, after a good 6 minutes of running, the green haired boy burst through a house door, ran up the stairs, went through a room, and planted his face into his pillow)
???: I-I thought we would become the best... ever since... that day...
(A flashback occurs, with the green haired boy holding a beyblade in his hand, looking a bit younger. He was surrounded by a spacious, woodland environment. Next to him was a man taller than he, adorned with a beard, a grey shirt, black shorts, and running shoes)
???: Here you go! I used to use it in my old days, but now its yours, Lyvvi!
Lyvvi: WOW! Uncle, is this really a beyblade?! (He'd say, his eyes sparkling with excitement)
Uncle: Yep! Passed down from my dad! I figured, since you love those beyblade tournaments, that you would love to actually have a beyblade yourself! (He'd say, ruffling Lyvvi's messy green hair) Now take good care of it, y'hear me?
Lyvvi: Don't worry, Uncle, I'll take care of this with all I have! (He'd say, holding his bey up to the gleaming sun) Together, we'll totally become the best in the world!
(Lyvvi's Uncle would chuckle, and the image would fade back into Lyvvi's room, where he was still crying)
Lyvvi: But now, your broken. I failed to achieve our goal. It's all my fault-
???: Are you seriously crying while talking to your beyblade? Jeez, what is wrong with you?
(Lyvvi turned around)
Lyvvi: R-Reiki, what are you doing here?
Reiki: Just came to stop by and see what the heck you were crying about. But, seriously, what happened?
Lyvvi: (He wiped a tear from his cheek) Well, it all started when we were having a beyblade battle...
(Another flashback, yet this time it's at a BeyPark)
(Lyvvi rushes up to a stadium, panting and sweating from the running he did, then approaching a particularly medium height teen)
Lyvvi (panting): I'm finally here, Douma... (He'd hold up his bey, Magma Ragnarok Giga Venture-3) Let's battle!
Douma: Tch! So you really did come, loser? (He'd hold up his bey, Cyclone Phoenix Over Atomic-2) Well, don't be surprised once you lose! (He'd say as he'd push up his purple, spiky hair)
(A person would walk up to the BeyStadium, then instantly started to stare at Dakota)
Random Person: Wait a minute... is that Douma Izumi? The winner of the local tournament?
Douma: Yep, that's my name. Don't wear it out though.
Random Person: O-Oh my gosh! C-Could I please get your autograph?
Douma: Well, unfortunately, I don't have a p-
(Suddenly, an entire crowd encircled the BeyStadium Lyvvi and Douma would be battling in)
Crowd: DOUMA!!
Lyvvi (Mind): Of course. Typical Douma, always in the spotlight.
(The entire crowd made a thundering uproar, either shouting Douma's name or asking for his autograph)
Douma: Alright, alright, settle down, you all.
(The crowd became absolutely silent)
Lyvvi: Can we just start the battle already?
Douma: Fine then! If you're so desperate to lose... (He'd grab his launcher from the belt on his waist, then he'd click his beyblade in)... then allow me to assist you! (He'd smirk)
Random Person (Crowd): Douma's battling? Wow, I truly feel bad for his opponent! (He'd snicker)
Douma: I'll be the one who counts down! (He'd position his launcher over the stadium, and Lyvvi would do the same) First battle! Ready, and set!
(As if on cue, the entire crowd started chanting)
Crowd: DOUMA! DOUMA! DOUMA!
Lyvvi and Dakota: Three! Two! One! Go... SHOOT!
(The two beyblades would descend from their launchers, falling until they hit the stadium floor)
Lyvvi: Go in for an attack, Ragnarok! (He'd yell, pumping his fists forward)
(Magma Ragnarok surges towards Cyclone Phoenix)
Douma: You fool! Think I'm just gonna let you attack? Phoenix, dodge it! (He'd yell, raising his hand before suddenly dropping it)
(Phoenix easily dodges the attack, then begins to close in on Ragnarok)
Douma: Now go!
(Phoenix clashes with Ragnarok, creating an intense burst of wind as Ragnarok crashes into the wall from the impact)
Lyvvi: Not giving up now! Hit him with another attack!
Douma: Intercept it!
(Ragnarok ricochets off the wall, then goes for another hit on Phoenix! However, Phoenix meets the attack with its own, creating a large shockwave throughout the stadium)
Lyvvi and Douma: C'mon!
(Finally, both beys push each other towards the stadium wall. Ragnarok, hitting the stadium wall, starts to waver from the impact)
Lyvvi: (Gasps) W-What?
Random Person: It's over now! That kid should've gave up from the beginning!
Douma: Heh. Now's my chance! NOW, PHOENIX!
(Phoenix then becomes enveloped in a red aura)
Douma: SHOULDN'T HAVE MESSED WITH ME, HISOKI!
(Phoenix finally charges towards Ragnarok, creating an impact that completely knocked Lyvvi off his feet)
Lyvvi: What the...
Douma: Now BURST!
(Phoenix then throws Ragnarok into the air. It starts to form tiny cracks all over it, until those cracks start to become gradually bigger)
Lyvvi: No... please...
(Finally, Ragnarok breaks, with both the Magma blade and Ragnarok core shattering into tiny pieces)
(Both Lyvvi and Douma gasp, both surprised at the result of the battle)
Lyvvi: No... NO! (He'd fall to his knees, picking up the broken pieces of Ragnarok in horror)
(A grave silence filled the area)
Douma: Tch... well, that's what you get for picking a battle with me!
(As soon as he said that, the entire crowd started bellowing in laughter)
Lyvvi: NOOO! (He'd then turn around, running off towards the street as the memory faded)
Reiki: So long story short, your bey broke and you started crying and weeping like a baby?
Lyvvi: It wasn't just a bey, Reiki. It was a gift. The last thing Uncle Itsuki gave us before he left to America.
Reiki: Uncle... Uncle Itsuki, huh?
Lyvvi: Yeah. This bey meant the world to me, but now it's shattered to pieces! (He started crying again, banging his fists on the wall)
Reiki: Lyvvi, calm down. I have a solution for this. Come with me. (He'd say, motioning his hand for Lyvvi to follow him)
(Lyvvi wiped his tears once more, proceeding to follow Reiki downstairs)
(Lyvvi follows Reiki into their house's basement, where BeyStadiums, 3D printers, and several blueprints lay scattered)
Reiki: Well, Lyvvi, this is my workshop-
Lyvvi: You have a workshop?! You never told me about this! (He said as he races around the room, looking at the different beyblade pieces and blueprints)
Reiki: Yep. I do enjoy making beys and launchers in here!
Lyvvi: Wow! That's totally wicked, big bro!
Reiki: Yeah. Anyways, let's get started on your new bey, shall we?
Lyvvi: Yeah! Lets do it!
(They'd both grab various scraps of metal, place them into the 3D printer, and started to work on Lyvvi's new bey!)
Reiki: So, which system do you want to base your bey off of? There's GT, Sparking, Dynamite Battle...
Lyvvi: Well, actually, I was thinking about making my own system-
Reiki: You WHAT? Don't you know how difficult and lengthy the process of making a new system is? There's planning, and proofreading, and testing, and-
Lyvvi: I know... but I'm sure we can do it! Besides, I already have plans for it!
Reiki: Oh really? Well then, let's get on it!
(They'd each grab one piece of paper, a pencil, and Lyvvi would guide Reiki through the new system)
Lyvvi: So, this new system will be called the Incognito system, since at first everyone will think I'm weak, but when I show off my amazing new bey, I'll be known as the new strongest blader!
Reiki: Pssh! Sure, keep on dreaming.
Lyvvi: Ooh! It will also have a very unique set of parts, like never before! I'll draw it.
(Lyvvi would pick up a pencil, then he'd start to draw various Bey parts, ranging from slightly small to medium sized)
Lyvvi: Done!
Reiki: Hmm... alright, I see! Let's get to work, then!
(They both put on gloves, and safety goggles, then they get to work on Lyvvi's new bey)
(Finally, after 5 laborious hours of hard work, Lyvvi and Reiki are finally finished with Lyvvi's new bey)
Reiki (Tired): So... Lyvvi, what're you gonna name your bey? (Yawns)
Lyvvi (Tired): Well... I'm thinking of naming it... (He plants his face into the table, falling asleep)
Reiki (Tired): (Sighs) W-Wait, Lyvvi, wake up- (He'd also slowly descend to the table, following his little brother in dreamy pursuit)
"Lyvvi, wake up!"
Lyvvi: Ugh... Ms. Perkins, I promise, my dog ate my homework- wait, who's talking to me?
???: It's me, your avatar.
Lyvvi: Avatar? What's that?
???: The spirit of your beyblade, of course. It gives said beyblade power and soul energy to harness into its special moves.
Lyvvi: Wait a minute- beyblade? So, I really did finish with making you?
???: Indeed. And this is the avatar realm, where I reside and restore my energy.
Lyvvi: Amazing! Wait, so you're my beyblade?
???: Yes. But, first, you shall name myself to make our bond that much more unique.
Lyvvi: Name you? I thought we just-
???: That which you said is unfortunately incorrect. We spirits are given names to further amplify our battle performance, and our bonding with our partners.
Lyvvi: Oh! I get it now... so, what should I name you?
???: That it up to you to decide.
Lyvvi: Oh. Ok... how about... (Snaps fingers) I got it! How about Loki! And my full beyblade's name will be named Cognizant Loki! People can call me the Jack of all Trades!
Loki: Very amusing. Also, very splendid choice of a name! Loki does have a good ring to it. So, tomorrow, are you ready to set off on our journey?
Lyvvi: You betcha! This'll be my way of retribution for my uncle, and payback for all those times I was messed with! Especially by Douma Izumi!
Loki: Very well then! Now it is time for you to rest. Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Yeah! Let's do it!
(Lyvvi and Loki would high-five as the avatar realm would fade away)
[Morning]
(Lyvvi would arise from the chair he was currently sitting on. To his left, his brother, Reiki, was still asleep)
Lyvvi: Gotta stay quiet. Don't wanna wake Reiki up!
(He quietly grabbed his bey from out of the 3D printer)
Lyvvi (whispering): Loki, if you can hear me, let's go completely wild today!
(As if if heard what Lyvvi said, Loki glimmered, the entire bey illuminating as it did so)
Lyvvi: Alright then, lets go- wait... uh oh!
[Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: Alright Douma! I've forged a new bey and I'm here for a rematch-
Douma: HAH! You, coming to battle me? What a pitiful notion! (He then burst into laughter)
(Suddenly, an entire crowd bellows in laughter)
Lyvvi: W-What?!
[Out of Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: If I return, I'll just get made fun of... and who's to say that I'll actually win against Douma with my new bey? I haven't even trained yet... wait, I have an idea! (He'd run of towards his room)
(In his room)
Lyvvi: Reiki did give me a black jacket once... I might be on to something! (He'd rush to his closet, grabbing a black jacket. It didn't have a zipper, and the bottom was spiky)
(Lyvvi would then go into his drawer, grabbing a green mask with black pupils, and two black spikes going on the top of it. It also have various black details on the main part of the mask)
Lyvvi: (He'd put on the mask) So from now on, I'll be known as... the Rogue Oni! (He'd say, pumping his fist upward) Since nobody will know who I am, I'll be able to enter back into the beyblade world as a new person!
(Lyvvi would take Loki from out of his pocket)
Lyvvi/Rogue Oni: Let's cause some havoc, Loki!
(Loki would glimmer as a deep voice would laugh in the distance)
Constructive Criticism is welcome! I would like to note my mistakes and grow better from them!
Episode 2 Sneak Peek:
Lyvvi: I'll take revenge on Douma using this new persona!
Lyvvi: Hah! I'll take you all on! Let's go, Loki!
Lyvvi: What's that? Confidence I see? A single person wants to challenge me!
Lyvvi: Let's show 'em what we're made of, Loki!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
Three... two... one! Go... SHOOT!!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - Hollowmind13 - Mar. 22, 2022
(Mar. 22, 2022 2:24 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: Episode 1!
Episode 1!
Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
(A green haired boy runs across a street, tears falling down his face as he cradled in his hands what looked to be very small, broken pieces)
???: W-Why would he do such a thing? Why would anyone do such a thing? (The boy dodged an incoming car, then proceeded to run through the busy streets of Tokyo, Japan)
(Finally, after a good 6 minutes of running, the green haired boy burst through a house door, ran up the stairs, went through a room, and planted his face into his pillow)
???: I-I thought we would become the best... ever since... that day...
(A flashback occurs, with the green haired boy holding a beyblade in his hand, looking a bit younger. He was surrounded by a spacious, woodland environment. Next to him was a man taller than he, adorned with a beard, a grey shirt, black shorts, and running shoes)
???: Here you go! I used to use it in my old days, but now its yours, Lyvvi!
Lyvvi: WOW! Uncle, is this really a beyblade?! (He'd say, his eyes sparkling with excitement)
Uncle: Yep! Passed down from my dad! I figured, since you love those beyblade tournaments, that you would love to actually have a beyblade yourself! (He'd say, ruffling Lyvvi's messy green hair) Now take good care of it, y'here me?
Lyvvi: Don't worry, Uncle, I'll take care of this with all I have! (He'd say, holding his bey up to the gleaming sun) Together, we'll totally become the best in the world!
(Lyvvi's Uncle would chuckle, and the image would fade back into Lyvvi's room, where he was still crying)
Lyvvi: But now, your broken. I failed to achieve our goal. It's all my fault-
???: Are you seriously crying while talking to your beyblade? Jeez, what is wrong with you?
(Lyvvi turned around)
Lyvvi: R-Reiki, what are you doing here?
Reiki: Just came to stop by and see what the heck you were crying about. But, seriously, what happened?
Lyvvi: (He wiped a tear from his cheek) Well, it all started when we were having a beyblade battle...
(Another flashback, yet this time it's at a BeyPark)
(Lyvvi rushes up to a stadium, panting and sweating from the running he did, then approaching a particularly medium height teen)
Lyvvi (panting): I'm finally here, Dakota... (He'd hold up his bey, Magma Ragnarok Giga Venture-3) Let's battle!
Dakota: Tch! So you really did come, loser? (He'd hold up his bey, Cyclone Phoenix Over Atomic-2) Well, don't be surprised once you lose! (He'd say as he'd push up his purple, spiky hair)
(A person would walk up to the BeyStadium, then instantly started to stare at Dakota)
Random Person: Wait a minute... is that Dakota Bushida? The winner of the local tournament?
Dakota: Yep, that's my name. Don't wear it out though.
Random Person: O-Oh my gosh! C-Could I please get your autograph?
Dakota: Well, unfortunately, I don't have a p-
(Suddenly, an entire crowd encircled the BeyStadium Lyvvi and Dakota would be battling in)
Crowd: DAKOTA!!
Lyvvi (Mind): Of course. Typical Dakota, always gotta be in the spotlight.
(The entire crowd made a thundering uproar, either shouting Dakota's name or asking for his autograph)
Dakota: Alright, alright, settle down, you all.
(The crowd became absolutely silent)
Lyvvi: Can we just start the battle already?
Dakota: Fine then! If you're so desperate to lose... (He'd grab his launcher from the belt on his waist, then he'd click his beyblade in)... then allow me to assist you! (He'd smirk)
Random Person (Crowd): Dakota's battling? Wow, I truly feel bad for his opponent! (He'd snicker)
Dakota: I'll be the one who counts down! (He'd position his launcher over the stadium, and Lyvvi would do the same) First battle! Ready, and set!
(As if on cue, the entire crowd started chanting)
Crowd: DAKOTA! DAKOTA! DAKOTA!
Lyvvi and Dakota: Three! Two! One! Go... SHOOT!
(The two beyblades would descend from their launchers, falling until they hit the stadium floor)
Lyvvi: Go in for an attack, Ragnarok! (He'd yell, pumping his fists forward)
(Magma Ragnarok surges towards Cyclone Phoenix)
Dakota: You fool! Think I'm just gonna let you attack? Phoenix, dodge it! (He'd yell, raising his hand before suddenly dropping it)
(Phoenix easily dodges the attack, then begins to close in on Ragnarok)
Dakota: Now go!
(Phoenix clashes with Ragnarok, creating an intense burst of wind as Ragnarok crashes into the wall from the impact)
Lyvvi: Not giving up now! Hit him with another attack!
Dakota: Intercept it!
(Ragnarok ricochets off the wall, then goes for another hit on Phoenix! However, Phoenix meets the attack with its own, creating a large shockwave throughout the stadium)
Lyvvi and Dakota: C'mon!
(Finally, both beys push each other towards the stadium wall. Ragnarok, hitting the stadium wall, starts to waver from the impact)
Lyvvi: (Gasps) W-What?
Random Person: It's over now! That kid should've gave up from the beginning!
Dakota: Heh. Now's my chance! NOW, PHOENIX!
(Phoenix then becomes enveloped in a red aura)
Dakota: SHOULDN'T HAVE MESSED WITH ME, HISOKI!
(Phoenix finally charges towards Ragnarok, creating an impact that completely knocked Lyvvi off his feet)
Lyvvi: What the...
Dakota: Now BURST!
(Phoenix then throws Ragnarok into the air. It starts to form tiny cracks all over it, until those cracks start to become gradually bigger)
Lyvvi: No... please...
(Finally, Ragnarok breaks, with both the Magma blade and Ragnarok core shattering into tiny pieces)
(Both Lyvvi and Dakota gasp, both surprised at the result of the battle)
Lyvvi: No... NO! (He'd fall to his knees, picking up the broken pieces of Ragnarok in horror)
(A grave silence filled the area)
Dakota: Tch... well, that's what you get for picking a battle with me!
(As soon as he said that, the entire crowd started bellowing in laughter)
Lyvvi: NOOO! (He'd then turn around, running off towards the street as the memory faded)
Reiki: So long story short, your bey broke and you started crying and weeping like a baby?
Lyvvi: It wasn't just a bey, Reiki. It was a gift. The last thing Uncle Itsuki gave us before he left to America.
Reiki: Uncle... Uncle Itsuki, huh?
Lyvvi: Yeah. This bey meant the world to me, but now it's shattered to pieces! (He started crying again, banging his fists on the wall)
Reiki: Lyvvi, calm down. I have a solution for this. Come with me. (He'd say, motioning his hand for Lyvvi to follow him)
(Lyvvi wiped his tears once more, proceeding to follow Reiki downstairs)
(Lyvvi follows Reiki into their house's basement, where BeyStadiums, 3D printers, and several blueprints lay scattered)
Reiki: Well, Lyvvi, this is my workshop-
Lyvvi: You have a workshop?! You never told me about this! (He said as he races around the room, looking at the different beyblade pieces and blueprints)
Reiki: Yep. I do enjoy making beys and launchers in here!
Lyvvi: Wow! That's totally wicked, big bro!
Reiki: Yeah. Anyways, let's get started on your new bey, shall we?
Lyvvi: Yeah! Lets do it!
(They'd both grab various scraps of metal, place them into the 3D printer, and started to work on Lyvvi's new bey!)
Reiki: So, which system do you want to base your bey off of? There's GT, Sparking, Dynamite Battle...
Lyvvi: Well, actually, I was thinking about making my own system-
Reiki: You WHAT? Don't you know how difficult and lengthy the process of making a new system is? There's planning, and proofreading, and testing, and-
Lyvvi: I know... but I'm sure we can do it! Besides, I already have plans for it!
Reiki: Oh really? Well then, let's get on it!
(They'd each grab one piece of paper, a pencil, and Lyvvi would guide Reiki through the new system)
Lyvvi: So, this new system will be called the Incognito system, since at first everyone will think I'm weak, but when I show off my amazing new bey, I'll be known as the new strongest blader!
Reiki: Pssh! Sure, keep on dreaming.
Lyvvi: Ooh! It will also have a very unique set of parts, like never before! I'll draw it.
(Lyvvi would pick up a pencil, then he'd start to draw various Bey parts, ranging from slightly small to medium sized)
Lyvvi: Done!
Reiki: Hmm... alright, I see! Let's get to work, then!
(They both put on gloves, and safety goggles, then they get to work on Lyvvi's new bey)
(Finally, after 5 laborious hours of hard work, Lyvvi and Reiki are finally finished with Lyvvi's new bey)
Reiki (Tired): So... Lyvvi, what're you gonna name your bey? (Yawns)
Lyvvi (Tired): Well... I'm thinking of naming it... (He plants his face into the table, falling asleep)
Reiki (Tired): (Sighs) W-Wait, Lyvvi, wake up- (He'd also slowly descend to the table, following his little brother in dreamy pursuit)
"Lyvvi, wake up!"
Lyvvi: Ugh... Ms. Perkins, I promise, my dog ate my homework- wait, who's talking to me?
???: It's me, your avatar.
Lyvvi: Avatar? What's that?
???: The spirit of your beyblade, of course. It gives said beyblade power and soul energy to harness into its special moves.
Lyvvi: Wait a minute- beyblade? So, I really did finish with making you?
???: Indeed. And this is the avatar realm, where I reside and restore my energy.
Lyvvi: Amazing! Wait, so you're my beyblade?
???: Yes. But, first, you shall name myself to make our bond that much more unique.
Lyvvi: Name you? I thought we just-
???: That which you said is unfortunately incorrect. We spirits are given names to further amplify our battle performance, and our bonding with our partners.
Lyvvi: Oh! I get it now... so, what should I name you?
???: That it up to you to decide.
Lyvvi: Oh. Ok... how about... (Snaps fingers) I got it! How about Loki! And my full beyblade's name will be named Cognizant Loki! People can call me the Jack of all Trades!
Loki: Very amusing. Also, very splendid choice of a name! Loki does have a good ring to it. So, tomorrow, are you ready to set off on our journey?
Lyvvi: You betcha! This'll be my way of retribution for my uncle, and payback for all those times I was messed with! Especially by Dakota Bushida!
Loki: Very well then! Now it is time for you to rest. Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Yeah! Let's do it!
(Lyvvi and Loki would high-five as the avatar realm would fade away)
[Morning]
(Lyvvi would arise from the chair he was currently sitting on. To his left, his brother, Reiki, was still asleep)
Lyvvi: Gotta stay quiet. Don't wanna wake Reiki up!
(He quietly grabbed his bey from out of the 3D printer)
Lyvvi (whispering): Loki, if you can hear me, let's go completely wild today!
(As if if heard what Lyvvi said, Loki glimmered, the entire bey illuminating as it did so)
Lyvvi: Alright then, lets go- wait... uh oh!
[Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: Alright Dakota! I've forged a new bey and I'm here for a rematch-
Dakota: HAH! You, coming to battle me? What a pitiful display! (He then burst into laughter)
(Suddenly, an entire crowd bellows in laughter)
Lyvvi: W-What?!
[Out of Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: If I return, I'll just get made fun of... and who's to say that I'll actually win against Dakota with my new bey? I haven't even trained yet... wait, I have an idea! (He'd run of towards his room)
(In his room)
Lyvvi: Reiki did give me a black jacket once... I might be on to something! (He'd rush to his closet, grabbing a black jacket. It didn't have a zipper, and the bottom was spiky)
(Lyvvi would then go into his drawer, grabbing a green mask with black pupils, and two black spikes going on the top of it. It also have various black details on the main part of the mask)
Lyvvi: (He'd put on the mask) So from now on, I'll be known as... Hearthstone! (He'd say, pumping his fist upward) Since nobody will know who I am, I'll be able to enter back into the beyblade world as a new person!
(Lyvvi would take Loki from out of his pocket)
Lyvvi/Hearthstone: Let's cause some havoc, Loki!
(Loki would glimmer, a deep voice laughing in the distance as Lyvvi exited the room, headed back for the BeyPark)
Constructive Criticism is welcome! I would like to note my mistakes and grow better from them!
Episode 2 Sneak Peek:
Lyvvi: I'll take revenge on Dakota using this new persona!
Lyvvi: Hah! I'll take you all on! Let's go, Loki!
Lyvvi: What's that? Confidence I see? A single person wants to challenge me!
Lyvvi: Let's show 'em what we're made of, Loki!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
Three... two... one! Go... SHOOT!! .
Surprisingly enough, it is quite well written (not talking plot wise, I have no power to discuss plot).
The concept, as said before, is interesting. Although not sure if the stakes are that high, I guess having an influencer of some sorts making fun of you does work.
Some words got swapped, like "here" instead of "hear"
Writting style is not that bad, quite good actually.
.
Hearthstone? I mean, cool name but a hearthstone is, well, a flat rock that makes or is part of a hearth, which in turn is the floor of a fireplace or the base/lower part of a furnace where molten metal collects.
I guess it could be taken as in he was born anew, like how molten metal is shapeless and can be forged into anything (kinda like a new life of some sorts). So it "kinda" fits.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - UnknownIfirit - Mar. 22, 2022
(Mar. 22, 2022 11:34 AM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Mar. 22, 2022 2:24 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: Episode 1!
Episode 1!
Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
(A green haired boy runs across a street, tears falling down his face as he cradled in his hands what looked to be very small, broken pieces)
???: W-Why would he do such a thing? Why would anyone do such a thing? (The boy dodged an incoming car, then proceeded to run through the busy streets of Tokyo, Japan)
(Finally, after a good 6 minutes of running, the green haired boy burst through a house door, ran up the stairs, went through a room, and planted his face into his pillow)
???: I-I thought we would become the best... ever since... that day...
(A flashback occurs, with the green haired boy holding a beyblade in his hand, looking a bit younger. He was surrounded by a spacious, woodland environment. Next to him was a man taller than he, adorned with a beard, a grey shirt, black shorts, and running shoes)
???: Here you go! I used to use it in my old days, but now its yours, Lyvvi!
Lyvvi: WOW! Uncle, is this really a beyblade?! (He'd say, his eyes sparkling with excitement)
Uncle: Yep! Passed down from my dad! I figured, since you love those beyblade tournaments, that you would love to actually have a beyblade yourself! (He'd say, ruffling Lyvvi's messy green hair) Now take good care of it, y'here me?
Lyvvi: Don't worry, Uncle, I'll take care of this with all I have! (He'd say, holding his bey up to the gleaming sun) Together, we'll totally become the best in the world!
(Lyvvi's Uncle would chuckle, and the image would fade back into Lyvvi's room, where he was still crying)
Lyvvi: But now, your broken. I failed to achieve our goal. It's all my fault-
???: Are you seriously crying while talking to your beyblade? Jeez, what is wrong with you?
(Lyvvi turned around)
Lyvvi: R-Reiki, what are you doing here?
Reiki: Just came to stop by and see what the heck you were crying about. But, seriously, what happened?
Lyvvi: (He wiped a tear from his cheek) Well, it all started when we were having a beyblade battle...
(Another flashback, yet this time it's at a BeyPark)
(Lyvvi rushes up to a stadium, panting and sweating from the running he did, then approaching a particularly medium height teen)
Lyvvi (panting): I'm finally here, Dakota... (He'd hold up his bey, Magma Ragnarok Giga Venture-3) Let's battle!
Dakota: Tch! So you really did come, loser? (He'd hold up his bey, Cyclone Phoenix Over Atomic-2) Well, don't be surprised once you lose! (He'd say as he'd push up his purple, spiky hair)
(A person would walk up to the BeyStadium, then instantly started to stare at Dakota)
Random Person: Wait a minute... is that Dakota Bushida? The winner of the local tournament?
Dakota: Yep, that's my name. Don't wear it out though.
Random Person: O-Oh my gosh! C-Could I please get your autograph?
Dakota: Well, unfortunately, I don't have a p-
(Suddenly, an entire crowd encircled the BeyStadium Lyvvi and Dakota would be battling in)
Crowd: DAKOTA!!
Lyvvi (Mind): Of course. Typical Dakota, always gotta be in the spotlight.
(The entire crowd made a thundering uproar, either shouting Dakota's name or asking for his autograph)
Dakota: Alright, alright, settle down, you all.
(The crowd became absolutely silent)
Lyvvi: Can we just start the battle already?
Dakota: Fine then! If you're so desperate to lose... (He'd grab his launcher from the belt on his waist, then he'd click his beyblade in)... then allow me to assist you! (He'd smirk)
Random Person (Crowd): Dakota's battling? Wow, I truly feel bad for his opponent! (He'd snicker)
Dakota: I'll be the one who counts down! (He'd position his launcher over the stadium, and Lyvvi would do the same) First battle! Ready, and set!
(As if on cue, the entire crowd started chanting)
Crowd: DAKOTA! DAKOTA! DAKOTA!
Lyvvi and Dakota: Three! Two! One! Go... SHOOT!
(The two beyblades would descend from their launchers, falling until they hit the stadium floor)
Lyvvi: Go in for an attack, Ragnarok! (He'd yell, pumping his fists forward)
(Magma Ragnarok surges towards Cyclone Phoenix)
Dakota: You fool! Think I'm just gonna let you attack? Phoenix, dodge it! (He'd yell, raising his hand before suddenly dropping it)
(Phoenix easily dodges the attack, then begins to close in on Ragnarok)
Dakota: Now go!
(Phoenix clashes with Ragnarok, creating an intense burst of wind as Ragnarok crashes into the wall from the impact)
Lyvvi: Not giving up now! Hit him with another attack!
Dakota: Intercept it!
(Ragnarok ricochets off the wall, then goes for another hit on Phoenix! However, Phoenix meets the attack with its own, creating a large shockwave throughout the stadium)
Lyvvi and Dakota: C'mon!
(Finally, both beys push each other towards the stadium wall. Ragnarok, hitting the stadium wall, starts to waver from the impact)
Lyvvi: (Gasps) W-What?
Random Person: It's over now! That kid should've gave up from the beginning!
Dakota: Heh. Now's my chance! NOW, PHOENIX!
(Phoenix then becomes enveloped in a red aura)
Dakota: SHOULDN'T HAVE MESSED WITH ME, HISOKI!
(Phoenix finally charges towards Ragnarok, creating an impact that completely knocked Lyvvi off his feet)
Lyvvi: What the...
Dakota: Now BURST!
(Phoenix then throws Ragnarok into the air. It starts to form tiny cracks all over it, until those cracks start to become gradually bigger)
Lyvvi: No... please...
(Finally, Ragnarok breaks, with both the Magma blade and Ragnarok core shattering into tiny pieces)
(Both Lyvvi and Dakota gasp, both surprised at the result of the battle)
Lyvvi: No... NO! (He'd fall to his knees, picking up the broken pieces of Ragnarok in horror)
(A grave silence filled the area)
Dakota: Tch... well, that's what you get for picking a battle with me!
(As soon as he said that, the entire crowd started bellowing in laughter)
Lyvvi: NOOO! (He'd then turn around, running off towards the street as the memory faded)
Reiki: So long story short, your bey broke and you started crying and weeping like a baby?
Lyvvi: It wasn't just a bey, Reiki. It was a gift. The last thing Uncle Itsuki gave us before he left to America.
Reiki: Uncle... Uncle Itsuki, huh?
Lyvvi: Yeah. This bey meant the world to me, but now it's shattered to pieces! (He started crying again, banging his fists on the wall)
Reiki: Lyvvi, calm down. I have a solution for this. Come with me. (He'd say, motioning his hand for Lyvvi to follow him)
(Lyvvi wiped his tears once more, proceeding to follow Reiki downstairs)
(Lyvvi follows Reiki into their house's basement, where BeyStadiums, 3D printers, and several blueprints lay scattered)
Reiki: Well, Lyvvi, this is my workshop-
Lyvvi: You have a workshop?! You never told me about this! (He said as he races around the room, looking at the different beyblade pieces and blueprints)
Reiki: Yep. I do enjoy making beys and launchers in here!
Lyvvi: Wow! That's totally wicked, big bro!
Reiki: Yeah. Anyways, let's get started on your new bey, shall we?
Lyvvi: Yeah! Lets do it!
(They'd both grab various scraps of metal, place them into the 3D printer, and started to work on Lyvvi's new bey!)
Reiki: So, which system do you want to base your bey off of? There's GT, Sparking, Dynamite Battle...
Lyvvi: Well, actually, I was thinking about making my own system-
Reiki: You WHAT? Don't you know how difficult and lengthy the process of making a new system is? There's planning, and proofreading, and testing, and-
Lyvvi: I know... but I'm sure we can do it! Besides, I already have plans for it!
Reiki: Oh really? Well then, let's get on it!
(They'd each grab one piece of paper, a pencil, and Lyvvi would guide Reiki through the new system)
Lyvvi: So, this new system will be called the Incognito system, since at first everyone will think I'm weak, but when I show off my amazing new bey, I'll be known as the new strongest blader!
Reiki: Pssh! Sure, keep on dreaming.
Lyvvi: Ooh! It will also have a very unique set of parts, like never before! I'll draw it.
(Lyvvi would pick up a pencil, then he'd start to draw various Bey parts, ranging from slightly small to medium sized)
Lyvvi: Done!
Reiki: Hmm... alright, I see! Let's get to work, then!
(They both put on gloves, and safety goggles, then they get to work on Lyvvi's new bey)
(Finally, after 5 laborious hours of hard work, Lyvvi and Reiki are finally finished with Lyvvi's new bey)
Reiki (Tired): So... Lyvvi, what're you gonna name your bey? (Yawns)
Lyvvi (Tired): Well... I'm thinking of naming it... (He plants his face into the table, falling asleep)
Reiki (Tired): (Sighs) W-Wait, Lyvvi, wake up- (He'd also slowly descend to the table, following his little brother in dreamy pursuit)
"Lyvvi, wake up!"
Lyvvi: Ugh... Ms. Perkins, I promise, my dog ate my homework- wait, who's talking to me?
???: It's me, your avatar.
Lyvvi: Avatar? What's that?
???: The spirit of your beyblade, of course. It gives said beyblade power and soul energy to harness into its special moves.
Lyvvi: Wait a minute- beyblade? So, I really did finish with making you?
???: Indeed. And this is the avatar realm, where I reside and restore my energy.
Lyvvi: Amazing! Wait, so you're my beyblade?
???: Yes. But, first, you shall name myself to make our bond that much more unique.
Lyvvi: Name you? I thought we just-
???: That which you said is unfortunately incorrect. We spirits are given names to further amplify our battle performance, and our bonding with our partners.
Lyvvi: Oh! I get it now... so, what should I name you?
???: That it up to you to decide.
Lyvvi: Oh. Ok... how about... (Snaps fingers) I got it! How about Loki! And my full beyblade's name will be named Cognizant Loki! People can call me the Jack of all Trades!
Loki: Very amusing. Also, very splendid choice of a name! Loki does have a good ring to it. So, tomorrow, are you ready to set off on our journey?
Lyvvi: You betcha! This'll be my way of retribution for my uncle, and payback for all those times I was messed with! Especially by Dakota Bushida!
Loki: Very well then! Now it is time for you to rest. Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Yeah! Let's do it!
(Lyvvi and Loki would high-five as the avatar realm would fade away)
[Morning]
(Lyvvi would arise from the chair he was currently sitting on. To his left, his brother, Reiki, was still asleep)
Lyvvi: Gotta stay quiet. Don't wanna wake Reiki up!
(He quietly grabbed his bey from out of the 3D printer)
Lyvvi (whispering): Loki, if you can hear me, let's go completely wild today!
(As if if heard what Lyvvi said, Loki glimmered, the entire bey illuminating as it did so)
Lyvvi: Alright then, lets go- wait... uh oh!
[Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: Alright Dakota! I've forged a new bey and I'm here for a rematch-
Dakota: HAH! You, coming to battle me? What a pitiful display! (He then burst into laughter)
(Suddenly, an entire crowd bellows in laughter)
Lyvvi: W-What?!
[Out of Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: If I return, I'll just get made fun of... and who's to say that I'll actually win against Dakota with my new bey? I haven't even trained yet... wait, I have an idea! (He'd run of towards his room)
(In his room)
Lyvvi: Reiki did give me a black jacket once... I might be on to something! (He'd rush to his closet, grabbing a black jacket. It didn't have a zipper, and the bottom was spiky)
(Lyvvi would then go into his drawer, grabbing a green mask with black pupils, and two black spikes going on the top of it. It also have various black details on the main part of the mask)
Lyvvi: (He'd put on the mask) So from now on, I'll be known as... Hearthstone! (He'd say, pumping his fist upward) Since nobody will know who I am, I'll be able to enter back into the beyblade world as a new person!
(Lyvvi would take Loki from out of his pocket)
Lyvvi/Hearthstone: Let's cause some havoc, Loki!
(Loki would glimmer, a deep voice laughing in the distance as Lyvvi exited the room, headed back for the BeyPark)
Constructive Criticism is welcome! I would like to note my mistakes and grow better from them!
Episode 2 Sneak Peek:
Lyvvi: I'll take revenge on Dakota using this new persona!
Lyvvi: Hah! I'll take you all on! Let's go, Loki!
Lyvvi: What's that? Confidence I see? A single person wants to challenge me!
Lyvvi: Let's show 'em what we're made of, Loki!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
Three... two... one! Go... SHOOT!! .
Surprisingly enough, it is quite well written (not talking plot wise, I have no power to discuss plot).
The concept, as said before, is interesting. Although not sure if the stakes are that high, I guess having an influencer of some sorts making fun of you does work.
Some words got swapped, like "here" instead of "hear"
Writting style is not that bad, quite good actually.
.
Hearthstone? I mean, cool name but a hearthstone is, well, a flat rock that makes or is part of a hearth, which in turn is the floor of a fireplace or the base/lower part of a furnace where molten metal collects.
I guess it could be taken as in he was born anew, like how molten metal is shapeless and can be forged into anything (kinda like a new life of some sorts). So it "kinda" fits. Thank you for your feedback! Also I changed it last minute because I didn't quite like how "The Rogue" sounds. However, I may just change it back into the Rogue or Masked Rogue.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - Hollowmind13 - Mar. 22, 2022
(Mar. 22, 2022 11:41 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: (Mar. 22, 2022 11:34 AM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: .
Surprisingly enough, it is quite well written (not talking plot wise, I have no power to discuss plot).
The concept, as said before, is interesting. Although not sure if the stakes are that high, I guess having an influencer of some sorts making fun of you does work.
Some words got swapped, like "here" instead of "hear"
Writting style is not that bad, quite good actually.
.
Hearthstone? I mean, cool name but a hearthstone is, well, a flat rock that makes or is part of a hearth, which in turn is the floor of a fireplace or the base/lower part of a furnace where molten metal collects.
I guess it could be taken as in he was born anew, like how molten metal is shapeless and can be forged into anything (kinda like a new life of some sorts). So it "kinda" fits. Thank you for your feedback! Also I changed it last minute because I didn't quite like how "The Rogue" sounds. However, I may just change it back into the Rogue or Masked Rogue. .
The mask description you gave makes it sound like an Oni, maybe you could name his disguise: "virescent oni"?, idk. Perhaps "Rogue/Masked Oni" could work too.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - DragoonGalaxy15 - Mar. 22, 2022
(Mar. 22, 2022 2:24 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: Episode 1!
Episode 1!
Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
(A green haired boy runs across a street, tears falling down his face as he cradled in his hands what looked to be very small, broken pieces)
???: W-Why would he do such a thing? Why would anyone do such a thing? (The boy dodged an incoming car, then proceeded to run through the busy streets of Tokyo, Japan)
(Finally, after a good 6 minutes of running, the green haired boy burst through a house door, ran up the stairs, went through a room, and planted his face into his pillow)
???: I-I thought we would become the best... ever since... that day...
(A flashback occurs, with the green haired boy holding a beyblade in his hand, looking a bit younger. He was surrounded by a spacious, woodland environment. Next to him was a man taller than he, adorned with a beard, a grey shirt, black shorts, and running shoes)
???: Here you go! I used to use it in my old days, but now its yours, Lyvvi!
Lyvvi: WOW! Uncle, is this really a beyblade?! (He'd say, his eyes sparkling with excitement)
Uncle: Yep! Passed down from my dad! I figured, since you love those beyblade tournaments, that you would love to actually have a beyblade yourself! (He'd say, ruffling Lyvvi's messy green hair) Now take good care of it, y'hear me?
Lyvvi: Don't worry, Uncle, I'll take care of this with all I have! (He'd say, holding his bey up to the gleaming sun) Together, we'll totally become the best in the world!
(Lyvvi's Uncle would chuckle, and the image would fade back into Lyvvi's room, where he was still crying)
Lyvvi: But now, your broken. I failed to achieve our goal. It's all my fault-
???: Are you seriously crying while talking to your beyblade? Jeez, what is wrong with you?
(Lyvvi turned around)
Lyvvi: R-Reiki, what are you doing here?
Reiki: Just came to stop by and see what the heck you were crying about. But, seriously, what happened?
Lyvvi: (He wiped a tear from his cheek) Well, it all started when we were having a beyblade battle...
(Another flashback, yet this time it's at a BeyPark)
(Lyvvi rushes up to a stadium, panting and sweating from the running he did, then approaching a particularly medium height teen)
Lyvvi (panting): I'm finally here, Dakota... (He'd hold up his bey, Magma Ragnarok Giga Venture-3) Let's battle!
Dakota: Tch! So you really did come, loser? (He'd hold up his bey, Cyclone Phoenix Over Atomic-2) Well, don't be surprised once you lose! (He'd say as he'd push up his purple, spiky hair)
(A person would walk up to the BeyStadium, then instantly started to stare at Dakota)
Random Person: Wait a minute... is that Dakota Bushida? The winner of the local tournament?
Dakota: Yep, that's my name. Don't wear it out though.
Random Person: O-Oh my gosh! C-Could I please get your autograph?
Dakota: Well, unfortunately, I don't have a p-
(Suddenly, an entire crowd encircled the BeyStadium Lyvvi and Dakota would be battling in)
Crowd: DAKOTA!!
Lyvvi (Mind): Of course. Typical Dakota, always gotta be in the spotlight.
(The entire crowd made a thundering uproar, either shouting Dakota's name or asking for his autograph)
Dakota: Alright, alright, settle down, you all.
(The crowd became absolutely silent)
Lyvvi: Can we just start the battle already?
Dakota: Fine then! If you're so desperate to lose... (He'd grab his launcher from the belt on his waist, then he'd click his beyblade in)... then allow me to assist you! (He'd smirk)
Random Person (Crowd): Dakota's battling? Wow, I truly feel bad for his opponent! (He'd snicker)
Dakota: I'll be the one who counts down! (He'd position his launcher over the stadium, and Lyvvi would do the same) First battle! Ready, and set!
(As if on cue, the entire crowd started chanting)
Crowd: DAKOTA! DAKOTA! DAKOTA!
Lyvvi and Dakota: Three! Two! One! Go... SHOOT!
(The two beyblades would descend from their launchers, falling until they hit the stadium floor)
Lyvvi: Go in for an attack, Ragnarok! (He'd yell, pumping his fists forward)
(Magma Ragnarok surges towards Cyclone Phoenix)
Dakota: You fool! Think I'm just gonna let you attack? Phoenix, dodge it! (He'd yell, raising his hand before suddenly dropping it)
(Phoenix easily dodges the attack, then begins to close in on Ragnarok)
Dakota: Now go!
(Phoenix clashes with Ragnarok, creating an intense burst of wind as Ragnarok crashes into the wall from the impact)
Lyvvi: Not giving up now! Hit him with another attack!
Dakota: Intercept it!
(Ragnarok ricochets off the wall, then goes for another hit on Phoenix! However, Phoenix meets the attack with its own, creating a large shockwave throughout the stadium)
Lyvvi and Dakota: C'mon!
(Finally, both beys push each other towards the stadium wall. Ragnarok, hitting the stadium wall, starts to waver from the impact)
Lyvvi: (Gasps) W-What?
Random Person: It's over now! That kid should've gave up from the beginning!
Dakota: Heh. Now's my chance! NOW, PHOENIX!
(Phoenix then becomes enveloped in a red aura)
Dakota: SHOULDN'T HAVE MESSED WITH ME, HISOKI!
(Phoenix finally charges towards Ragnarok, creating an impact that completely knocked Lyvvi off his feet)
Lyvvi: What the...
Dakota: Now BURST!
(Phoenix then throws Ragnarok into the air. It starts to form tiny cracks all over it, until those cracks start to become gradually bigger)
Lyvvi: No... please...
(Finally, Ragnarok breaks, with both the Magma blade and Ragnarok core shattering into tiny pieces)
(Both Lyvvi and Dakota gasp, both surprised at the result of the battle)
Lyvvi: No... NO! (He'd fall to his knees, picking up the broken pieces of Ragnarok in horror)
(A grave silence filled the area)
Dakota: Tch... well, that's what you get for picking a battle with me!
(As soon as he said that, the entire crowd started bellowing in laughter)
Lyvvi: NOOO! (He'd then turn around, running off towards the street as the memory faded)
Reiki: So long story short, your bey broke and you started crying and weeping like a baby?
Lyvvi: It wasn't just a bey, Reiki. It was a gift. The last thing Uncle Itsuki gave us before he left to America.
Reiki: Uncle... Uncle Itsuki, huh?
Lyvvi: Yeah. This bey meant the world to me, but now it's shattered to pieces! (He started crying again, banging his fists on the wall)
Reiki: Lyvvi, calm down. I have a solution for this. Come with me. (He'd say, motioning his hand for Lyvvi to follow him)
(Lyvvi wiped his tears once more, proceeding to follow Reiki downstairs)
(Lyvvi follows Reiki into their house's basement, where BeyStadiums, 3D printers, and several blueprints lay scattered)
Reiki: Well, Lyvvi, this is my workshop-
Lyvvi: You have a workshop?! You never told me about this! (He said as he races around the room, looking at the different beyblade pieces and blueprints)
Reiki: Yep. I do enjoy making beys and launchers in here!
Lyvvi: Wow! That's totally wicked, big bro!
Reiki: Yeah. Anyways, let's get started on your new bey, shall we?
Lyvvi: Yeah! Lets do it!
(They'd both grab various scraps of metal, place them into the 3D printer, and started to work on Lyvvi's new bey!)
Reiki: So, which system do you want to base your bey off of? There's GT, Sparking, Dynamite Battle...
Lyvvi: Well, actually, I was thinking about making my own system-
Reiki: You WHAT? Don't you know how difficult and lengthy the process of making a new system is? There's planning, and proofreading, and testing, and-
Lyvvi: I know... but I'm sure we can do it! Besides, I already have plans for it!
Reiki: Oh really? Well then, let's get on it!
(They'd each grab one piece of paper, a pencil, and Lyvvi would guide Reiki through the new system)
Lyvvi: So, this new system will be called the Incognito system, since at first everyone will think I'm weak, but when I show off my amazing new bey, I'll be known as the new strongest blader!
Reiki: Pssh! Sure, keep on dreaming.
Lyvvi: Ooh! It will also have a very unique set of parts, like never before! I'll draw it.
(Lyvvi would pick up a pencil, then he'd start to draw various Bey parts, ranging from slightly small to medium sized)
Lyvvi: Done!
Reiki: Hmm... alright, I see! Let's get to work, then!
(They both put on gloves, and safety goggles, then they get to work on Lyvvi's new bey)
(Finally, after 5 laborious hours of hard work, Lyvvi and Reiki are finally finished with Lyvvi's new bey)
Reiki (Tired): So... Lyvvi, what're you gonna name your bey? (Yawns)
Lyvvi (Tired): Well... I'm thinking of naming it... (He plants his face into the table, falling asleep)
Reiki (Tired): (Sighs) W-Wait, Lyvvi, wake up- (He'd also slowly descend to the table, following his little brother in dreamy pursuit)
"Lyvvi, wake up!"
Lyvvi: Ugh... Ms. Perkins, I promise, my dog ate my homework- wait, who's talking to me?
???: It's me, your avatar.
Lyvvi: Avatar? What's that?
???: The spirit of your beyblade, of course. It gives said beyblade power and soul energy to harness into its special moves.
Lyvvi: Wait a minute- beyblade? So, I really did finish with making you?
???: Indeed. And this is the avatar realm, where I reside and restore my energy.
Lyvvi: Amazing! Wait, so you're my beyblade?
???: Yes. But, first, you shall name myself to make our bond that much more unique.
Lyvvi: Name you? I thought we just-
???: That which you said is unfortunately incorrect. We spirits are given names to further amplify our battle performance, and our bonding with our partners.
Lyvvi: Oh! I get it now... so, what should I name you?
???: That it up to you to decide.
Lyvvi: Oh. Ok... how about... (Snaps fingers) I got it! How about Loki! And my full beyblade's name will be named Cognizant Loki! People can call me the Jack of all Trades!
Loki: Very amusing. Also, very splendid choice of a name! Loki does have a good ring to it. So, tomorrow, are you ready to set off on our journey?
Lyvvi: You betcha! This'll be my way of retribution for my uncle, and payback for all those times I was messed with! Especially by Dakota Bushida!
Loki: Very well then! Now it is time for you to rest. Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Yeah! Let's do it!
(Lyvvi and Loki would high-five as the avatar realm would fade away)
[Morning]
(Lyvvi would arise from the chair he was currently sitting on. To his left, his brother, Reiki, was still asleep)
Lyvvi: Gotta stay quiet. Don't wanna wake Reiki up!
(He quietly grabbed his bey from out of the 3D printer)
Lyvvi (whispering): Loki, if you can hear me, let's go completely wild today!
(As if if heard what Lyvvi said, Loki glimmered, the entire bey illuminating as it did so)
Lyvvi: Alright then, lets go- wait... uh oh!
[Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: Alright Dakota! I've forged a new bey and I'm here for a rematch-
Dakota: HAH! You, coming to battle me? What a pitiful display! (He then burst into laughter)
(Suddenly, an entire crowd bellows in laughter)
Lyvvi: W-What?!
[Out of Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: If I return, I'll just get made fun of... and who's to say that I'll actually win against Dakota with my new bey? I haven't even trained yet... wait, I have an idea! (He'd run of towards his room)
(In his room)
Lyvvi: Reiki did give me a black jacket once... I might be on to something! (He'd rush to his closet, grabbing a black jacket. It didn't have a zipper, and the bottom was spiky)
(Lyvvi would then go into his drawer, grabbing a green mask with black pupils, and two black spikes going on the top of it. It also have various black details on the main part of the mask)
Lyvvi: (He'd put on the mask) So from now on, I'll be known as... the Masked Rogue! (He'd say, pumping his fist upward) Since nobody will know who I am, I'll be able to enter back into the beyblade world as a new person!
(Lyvvi would take Loki from out of his pocket)
Lyvvi/Masked Rogue: Let's cause some havoc, Loki!
(Loki would glimmer, a deep voice laughing in the distance as Lyvvi exited the room, headed back for the BeyPark)
Constructive Criticism is welcome! I would like to note my mistakes and grow better from them!
Episode 2 Sneak Peek:
Lyvvi: I'll take revenge on Dakota using this new persona!
Lyvvi: Hah! I'll take you all on! Let's go, Loki!
Lyvvi: What's that? Confidence I see? A single person wants to challenge me!
Lyvvi: Let's show 'em what we're made of, Loki!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
Three... two... one! Go... SHOOT!!
hey, i like this!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - UnknownIfirit - Apr. 03, 2022
Terribly sorry for the huge lack of chapters. I suddenly figured out that me and my family had to move houses on Monday, so we spent the rest of this week packing and setting up our new house. Therefore, I haven't had much time to be on and make chapters. However, I will be uploading more often, now that we have already moved in. I hope you forgive me for this.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - Hollowmind13 - Apr. 03, 2022
(Apr. 03, 2022 1:47 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: Terribly sorry for the huge lack of chapters. I suddenly figured out that me and my family had to move houses on Monday, so we spent the rest of this week packing and setting up our new house. Therefore, I haven't had much time to be on and make chapters. However, I will be uploading more often, now that we have already moved in. I hope you forgive me for this. .
Real life always have the priority, you don't need to worry about not posting chapters and people getting angry, that doesn't happen here (Afaik).
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - LegendJustice - Apr. 04, 2022
(Mar. 22, 2022 2:24 AM)UnknownIfirit Wrote: Episode 1!
Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Episode 1!
Enter Lyvvi Hisoki!
(A green haired boy runs across a street, tears falling down his face as he cradled in his hands what looked to be very small, broken pieces)
???: W-Why would he do such a thing? Why would anyone do such a thing? (The boy dodged an incoming car, then proceeded to run through the busy streets of Tokyo, Japan)
(Finally, after a good 6 minutes of running, the green haired boy burst through a house door, ran up the stairs, went through a room, and planted his face into his pillow)
???: I-I thought we would become the best... ever since... that day...
(A flashback occurs, with the green haired boy holding a beyblade in his hand, looking a bit younger. He was surrounded by a spacious, woodland environment. Next to him was a man taller than he, adorned with a beard, a grey shirt, black shorts, and running shoes)
???: Here you go! I used to use it in my old days, but now its yours, Lyvvi!
Lyvvi: WOW! Uncle, is this really a beyblade?! (He'd say, his eyes sparkling with excitement)
Uncle: Yep! Passed down from my dad! I figured, since you love those beyblade tournaments, that you would love to actually have a beyblade yourself! (He'd say, ruffling Lyvvi's messy green hair) Now take good care of it, y'hear me?
Lyvvi: Don't worry, Uncle, I'll take care of this with all I have! (He'd say, holding his bey up to the gleaming sun) Together, we'll totally become the best in the world!
(Lyvvi's Uncle would chuckle, and the image would fade back into Lyvvi's room, where he was still crying)
Lyvvi: But now, your broken. I failed to achieve our goal. It's all my fault-
???: Are you seriously crying while talking to your beyblade? Jeez, what is wrong with you?
(Lyvvi turned around)
Lyvvi: R-Reiki, what are you doing here?
Reiki: Just came to stop by and see what the heck you were crying about. But, seriously, what happened?
Lyvvi: (He wiped a tear from his cheek) Well, it all started when we were having a beyblade battle...
(Another flashback, yet this time it's at a BeyPark)
(Lyvvi rushes up to a stadium, panting and sweating from the running he did, then approaching a particularly medium height teen)
Lyvvi (panting): I'm finally here, Dakota... (He'd hold up his bey, Magma Ragnarok Giga Venture-3) Let's battle!
Dakota: Tch! So you really did come, loser? (He'd hold up his bey, Cyclone Phoenix Over Atomic-2) Well, don't be surprised once you lose! (He'd say as he'd push up his purple, spiky hair)
(A person would walk up to the BeyStadium, then instantly started to stare at Dakota)
Random Person: Wait a minute... is that Dakota Bushida? The winner of the local tournament?
Dakota: Yep, that's my name. Don't wear it out though.
Random Person: O-Oh my gosh! C-Could I please get your autograph?
Dakota: Well, unfortunately, I don't have a p-
(Suddenly, an entire crowd encircled the BeyStadium Lyvvi and Dakota would be battling in)
Crowd: DAKOTA!!
Lyvvi (Mind): Of course. Typical Dakota, always gotta be in the spotlight.
(The entire crowd made a thundering uproar, either shouting Dakota's name or asking for his autograph)
Dakota: Alright, alright, settle down, you all.
(The crowd became absolutely silent)
Lyvvi: Can we just start the battle already?
Dakota: Fine then! If you're so desperate to lose... (He'd grab his launcher from the belt on his waist, then he'd click his beyblade in)... then allow me to assist you! (He'd smirk)
Random Person (Crowd): Dakota's battling? Wow, I truly feel bad for his opponent! (He'd snicker)
Dakota: I'll be the one who counts down! (He'd position his launcher over the stadium, and Lyvvi would do the same) First battle! Ready, and set!
(As if on cue, the entire crowd started chanting)
Crowd: DAKOTA! DAKOTA! DAKOTA!
Lyvvi and Dakota: Three! Two! One! Go... SHOOT!
(The two beyblades would descend from their launchers, falling until they hit the stadium floor)
Lyvvi: Go in for an attack, Ragnarok! (He'd yell, pumping his fists forward)
(Magma Ragnarok surges towards Cyclone Phoenix)
Dakota: You fool! Think I'm just gonna let you attack? Phoenix, dodge it! (He'd yell, raising his hand before suddenly dropping it)
(Phoenix easily dodges the attack, then begins to close in on Ragnarok)
Dakota: Now go!
(Phoenix clashes with Ragnarok, creating an intense burst of wind as Ragnarok crashes into the wall from the impact)
Lyvvi: Not giving up now! Hit him with another attack!
Dakota: Intercept it!
(Ragnarok ricochets off the wall, then goes for another hit on Phoenix! However, Phoenix meets the attack with its own, creating a large shockwave throughout the stadium)
Lyvvi and Dakota: C'mon!
(Finally, both beys push each other towards the stadium wall. Ragnarok, hitting the stadium wall, starts to waver from the impact)
Lyvvi: (Gasps) W-What?
Random Person: It's over now! That kid should've gave up from the beginning!
Dakota: Heh. Now's my chance! NOW, PHOENIX!
(Phoenix then becomes enveloped in a red aura)
Dakota: SHOULDN'T HAVE MESSED WITH ME, HISOKI!
(Phoenix finally charges towards Ragnarok, creating an impact that completely knocked Lyvvi off his feet)
Lyvvi: What the...
Dakota: Now BURST!
(Phoenix then throws Ragnarok into the air. It starts to form tiny cracks all over it, until those cracks start to become gradually bigger)
Lyvvi: No... please...
(Finally, Ragnarok breaks, with both the Magma blade and Ragnarok core shattering into tiny pieces)
(Both Lyvvi and Dakota gasp, both surprised at the result of the battle)
Lyvvi: No... NO! (He'd fall to his knees, picking up the broken pieces of Ragnarok in horror)
(A grave silence filled the area)
Dakota: Tch... well, that's what you get for picking a battle with me!
(As soon as he said that, the entire crowd started bellowing in laughter)
Lyvvi: NOOO! (He'd then turn around, running off towards the street as the memory faded)
Reiki: So long story short, your bey broke and you started crying and weeping like a baby?
Lyvvi: It wasn't just a bey, Reiki. It was a gift. The last thing Uncle Itsuki gave us before he left to America.
Reiki: Uncle... Uncle Itsuki, huh?
Lyvvi: Yeah. This bey meant the world to me, but now it's shattered to pieces! (He started crying again, banging his fists on the wall)
Reiki: Lyvvi, calm down. I have a solution for this. Come with me. (He'd say, motioning his hand for Lyvvi to follow him)
(Lyvvi wiped his tears once more, proceeding to follow Reiki downstairs)
(Lyvvi follows Reiki into their house's basement, where BeyStadiums, 3D printers, and several blueprints lay scattered)
Reiki: Well, Lyvvi, this is my workshop-
Lyvvi: You have a workshop?! You never told me about this! (He said as he races around the room, looking at the different beyblade pieces and blueprints)
Reiki: Yep. I do enjoy making beys and launchers in here!
Lyvvi: Wow! That's totally wicked, big bro!
Reiki: Yeah. Anyways, let's get started on your new bey, shall we?
Lyvvi: Yeah! Lets do it!
(They'd both grab various scraps of metal, place them into the 3D printer, and started to work on Lyvvi's new bey!)
Reiki: So, which system do you want to base your bey off of? There's GT, Sparking, Dynamite Battle...
Lyvvi: Well, actually, I was thinking about making my own system-
Reiki: You WHAT? Don't you know how difficult and lengthy the process of making a new system is? There's planning, and proofreading, and testing, and-
Lyvvi: I know... but I'm sure we can do it! Besides, I already have plans for it!
Reiki: Oh really? Well then, let's get on it!
(They'd each grab one piece of paper, a pencil, and Lyvvi would guide Reiki through the new system)
Lyvvi: So, this new system will be called the Incognito system, since at first everyone will think I'm weak, but when I show off my amazing new bey, I'll be known as the new strongest blader!
Reiki: Pssh! Sure, keep on dreaming.
Lyvvi: Ooh! It will also have a very unique set of parts, like never before! I'll draw it.
(Lyvvi would pick up a pencil, then he'd start to draw various Bey parts, ranging from slightly small to medium sized)
Lyvvi: Done!
Reiki: Hmm... alright, I see! Let's get to work, then!
(They both put on gloves, and safety goggles, then they get to work on Lyvvi's new bey)
(Finally, after 5 laborious hours of hard work, Lyvvi and Reiki are finally finished with Lyvvi's new bey)
Reiki (Tired): So... Lyvvi, what're you gonna name your bey? (Yawns)
Lyvvi (Tired): Well... I'm thinking of naming it... (He plants his face into the table, falling asleep)
Reiki (Tired): (Sighs) W-Wait, Lyvvi, wake up- (He'd also slowly descend to the table, following his little brother in dreamy pursuit)
"Lyvvi, wake up!"
Lyvvi: Ugh... Ms. Perkins, I promise, my dog ate my homework- wait, who's talking to me?
???: It's me, your avatar.
Lyvvi: Avatar? What's that?
???: The spirit of your beyblade, of course. It gives said beyblade power and soul energy to harness into its special moves.
Lyvvi: Wait a minute- beyblade? So, I really did finish with making you?
???: Indeed. And this is the avatar realm, where I reside and restore my energy.
Lyvvi: Amazing! Wait, so you're my beyblade?
???: Yes. But, first, you shall name myself to make our bond that much more unique.
Lyvvi: Name you? I thought we just-
???: That which you said is unfortunately incorrect. We spirits are given names to further amplify our battle performance, and our bonding with our partners.
Lyvvi: Oh! I get it now... so, what should I name you?
???: That it up to you to decide.
Lyvvi: Oh. Ok... how about... (Snaps fingers) I got it! How about Loki! And my full beyblade's name will be named Cognizant Loki! People can call me the Jack of all Trades!
Loki: Very amusing. Also, very splendid choice of a name! Loki does have a good ring to it. So, tomorrow, are you ready to set off on our journey?
Lyvvi: You betcha! This'll be my way of retribution for my uncle, and payback for all those times I was messed with! Especially by Dakota Bushida!
Loki: Very well then! Now it is time for you to rest. Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Yeah! Let's do it!
(Lyvvi and Loki would high-five as the avatar realm would fade away)
[Morning]
(Lyvvi would arise from the chair he was currently sitting on. To his left, his brother, Reiki, was still asleep)
Lyvvi: Gotta stay quiet. Don't wanna wake Reiki up!
(He quietly grabbed his bey from out of the 3D printer)
Lyvvi (whispering): Loki, if you can hear me, let's go completely wild today!
(As if if heard what Lyvvi said, Loki glimmered, the entire bey illuminating as it did so)
Lyvvi: Alright then, lets go- wait... uh oh!
[Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: Alright Dakota! I've forged a new bey and I'm here for a rematch-
Dakota: HAH! You, coming to battle me? What a pitiful display! (He then burst into laughter)
(Suddenly, an entire crowd bellows in laughter)
Lyvvi: W-What?!
[Out of Lyvvi's mind]
Lyvvi: If I return, I'll just get made fun of... and who's to say that I'll actually win against Dakota with my new bey? I haven't even trained yet... wait, I have an idea! (He'd run of towards his room)
(In his room)
Lyvvi: Reiki did give me a black jacket once... I might be on to something! (He'd rush to his closet, grabbing a black jacket. It didn't have a zipper, and the bottom was spiky)
(Lyvvi would then go into his drawer, grabbing a green mask with black pupils, and two black spikes going on the top of it. It also have various black details on the main part of the mask)
Lyvvi: (He'd put on the mask) So from now on, I'll be known as... the Rogue Oni! (He'd say, pumping his fist upward) Since nobody will know who I am, I'll be able to enter back into the beyblade world as a new person!
(Lyvvi would take Loki from out of his pocket)
Lyvvi/Rogue Oni: Let's cause some havoc, Loki!
(Loki would glimmer as a deep voice would laugh in the distance)
Constructive Criticism is welcome! I would like to note my mistakes and grow better from them!
Episode 2 Sneak Peek:
Lyvvi: I'll take revenge on Dakota using this new persona!
Lyvvi: Hah! I'll take you all on! Let's go, Loki!
Lyvvi: What's that? Confidence I see? A single person wants to challenge me!
Lyvvi: Let's show 'em what we're made of, Loki!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst: Incognito!
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
Three... two... one! Go... SHOOT!!
I really like this, it felt a little rushed but I liked it the grammar was good and I was able to understand it. look forward to chapter 2!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Incognito! - UnknownIfirit - Dec. 18, 2022
Episode 2?
Beyblade Burst: Incognito
Episode 2:
Impending Chaos! Loki's Onslaught!
*Lyvvi, AKA, the Rogue Oni, held his bey high up in the air with confidence*
Lyvvi: COME FACE ME, DAKOTA!! (The sheer force of the scream shook nearly all of the birds perched in any trees bound within the area)
*Lyvvi was standing in the very stadium that Dakota destroyed his very first bey, Magma Ragnarok, which was gifted to him by his uncle*
Lyvvi (Mind): I shall vow to defeat Dakota... no matter what! After what he did...
*The image of his first bey, Magma Ragnarok, materialized in his mind*
Lyvvi: W-What the...
*Suddenly, a vaguely familiar bey, Cyclone Phoenix, instantaneously rushed in and destroyed his bey*
*CLANK!! was the sound Lyvvi's old bey made once it shattered on impact, seeping into Lyvvi's mind like water into a dry sponge*
Lyvvi: STOP IT!! *Lyvvi pulled his head back in rage* AGH!!
*Lyvvi realized that seven other bladers were surrounding the beystadium where his outburst had occured, all staring at Lyvvi in confusion*
*Suddenly, one of the blader's cocked their head back and laughed uncontrollably*
Blader #1: 'Stop it! Aaaah!' *He waved his hands around like an angry baby, mocking Lyvvi*
*The entire group of bladers started laughing hysterically, proceeding to mock Lyvvi one at a time*
Lyvvi: Hey! S-Stop-
Blader #2: Looks like we got a Wreck-It Ralph on our hands! *He said, waving his hands in the air and stomping around like the familiar movie protagonist*
Blader #3: 'I'ma wreck it!' *He stomped around and growled, further increasing the group's laughing*
Lyvvi: STOP LAUGHING AT ME!! *He screeched, successfully shutting the blader group up*
Blader #4: Heh. 'Else what? You'll-
Lyvvi: I'll be forced to shut you down. *He pulled out his bey, Cognizant Loki, which gleamed in the sunlight as a new green aura developed around Lyvvi*
*The blader group briefly shuddered, but they quickly shook it off, stirring up around the beystadium to prepare for battle*
Blader #1: Haha! Another wannabe Dakota fanboy among the rest!
Lyvvi: Hold the phone... (Lyvvi lowered his bey, gritting his teeth) You know Dakota?!
Blader #5: Who doesn't? He’s one of the most popular bladers around!
Lyvvi: Would you happen to know about his whereabouts?
Blader #6: And why should we tell you?
Lyvvi: Well, because... he's my... friend?
Blader #7: That's a lie. Dakota wouldn't hang out with a loser like you.
Lyvvi: Fine, you got me. But, how about a deal... *Lyvvi grinned under his green oni mask* If I win against all seven of you, you all have to tell me about Dakota's whereabouts. But if I lose... *Lyvvi tossed his bey in the air* One of you get to keep my bey. Deal?
*The entire blader group stood in shock of Lyvvi's bold, yet stupidly risky bet*
Blader #1: Huh. It takes guts to organize a deal like that, especially against bladers like us. However, that bey of yours... I ain't seen nothin' like it before. We could use it... or sell it. A bey like that could go for a lot of money... so deal. Spin Raiders! *As if on command, the entire blader group pulled out their launchers, clicked in their beys, and took their stance, ready to launch*
*Lyvvi cringed at the fact that the group actually had a name, and their amazing synergy, but nonetheless, he clicked Loki in his launcher and got ready for battle*
Blader #1: First battle...
Lyvvi (Mind): Cognizant Loki... an amazing creation by me and Reiki, I must say. An astounding balance type with six blades on its Sheath, consisting of three big blades with the remaining three blades being small and in the middle of the bigger three. Its siege wheel is more focused on attack, as it is metal and quite synchronized with Loki's three big blades. Its Cognition Gear has four short blades going along the side for speed support. Finally, the performance tip is quite sharp, but flat at the bottom, if that makes any sense... With these amazing features, Loki's bound to win!
Blader #4: Ready... and set!
Everyone: Three! Two! One!
Blader #1: Go...
Lyvvi: SHOOT!!
*All bladers would pull off powerful launches as all of the eight beyblades would enter the stadium!*
Blader #1: Alright, Spin Raiders! Like we practiced...
Spin Raiders: Surround our prey and tear 'em down!
Lyvvi (Mind): What the...?
*Like Blader #1 said, all of the Spin Raider's beys closed in on Cognizant Loki from all sides, each hacking at Loki from all sides*
Blader #2: You may have some flashy bey nobody's ever seen before, but your completely outnumbered and overpowered!
Blader #3: Heh! That bey is as good as ours!
Lyvvi: Tch... I should've trained a bit more... I'm completely outnumbered, and I can't even control Loki-
*Suddenly, Lyvvi remembered the specific words Loki said*
Loki (Memory): Let us wake in the morning with our greatest power!
Lyvvi: Loki...
Loki (Memory): ...Our greatest power!
Lyvvi: I think I got it... *Lyvvi would develop a green aura around his body* Let's turn this battle AROUND!
*Loki's avatar would emerge from its beyblade, spear in hand, as a powerful, vibrant green aura surrounded him*
Blader #1: W-What the-?!
Blader #2: What's going on?
Lyvvi: Cognizant... SPEAR!
*With all of the opposing seven beyblades lined up, Loki rushed straight into the beys, bursting all of them spontaneously while coated in a green aura*
Spin Raiders: (Gasps) What the?!
Lyvvi: H-How did I do that? *He'd pick up his bey from the stadium*
Blader #1: What do you mean? There's no way that was just improvisation!
Lyvvi: I-I dunno... I had no experience with this bey... maybe- *He held Loki up to his face* Maybe me simply channeling Loki's bey spirit helped me win!
Blader #2: What a load of crock! Beys don't have spirits; they're just pieces of metal you use for battle!
Blader #3: Yeah, what you're saying is nonsense-
???: Actually, he's right.
*The entirety of the Spin Raiders, along with Lyvvi, gasped at the sudden appearance of a strange girl with both dark hair and dark eyes. She wore a dark blue blouse with long, black socks and what looked to be black ballet shoes*
*Alongside her was another girl, yet she actually looked quite familiar, with her brunette stranded hair and green eyes*
Spin Raiders: M-Miss Toshiko?!
Toshiko: Hey.
???: Took you idiots long enough to realize. Isn't that your boss?
Lyvvi: Wait, who is that- Reiki! *Lyvvi would run up to Reiki and fist bump her*
Reiki: What's up, little bro?
Blader #1: Can someone please explain to me what is going on?
Lyvvi: Right! Like, who is that? *He'd point a finger to Toshiko, who simply grinned*
Toshiko: The name's Toshiko. Toshiko Akagi.
Reiki: Yeah, long story, little bro. Just, let me tell you...
*At that point, Reiki began to tell the story...*
Do I still have it in me? Probably not, but let me know with some commentary please!
I know this episode was pretty short, sorry, but I didn't really want to make it too long for you guys and just ended up making it this way. Sorry again. Next episode will be significantly longer. Also I thought I would end it at a sort-of cliffhanger, let me know if you guys liked that one.
Also, I'm not the best with comebacks, but like Afton said:
"I always come back."
I missed you guys 
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