RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Hollowmind13 - Apr. 29, 2022
(Apr. 29, 2022 4:59 PM)beansworth Wrote: Alright, so about the newest chapter of Mystical. I haven't had much time to work on it, but this weekend, I'll basically be free the entire day, and I'll try to get 36 and beyond done. But also my birthday is coming up soon, and this weekend, I may be celebrating at my mom's. Anyway, the actual chapter itself, shouldn't take too long, but I don't really know yet.
Also, anyone who has the time to(and has read, Mystical), would you be willing to give me a rating. Please use the ratings in the spoiler.
Characters: 1-10: How are the characters written
Plot: 1-10: How's the plot right now?
Length: 1-10: How long are the chapters? Good length? Shorter? Longer?
Story: 1-10: Is the story good? The Arcs? More or less backstory?
Overall Score: 1-40: .
Seems fair to me to rate it, for to obvious reasons:
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Characters - 7: Some are deep in developed, others are surface value. As such, I think a 7 fits well
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Plot - ∅: I can't talk about plot, doesn't mean it is a zero.
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Length - 9: Some chapters break the chain, but they are well lengthed
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Story - 6: Idk if it is accurate or not since I'm bad at rating story and trash at plot, but that's what I came up with. It just fits there.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - Apr. 29, 2022
(Apr. 29, 2022 5:17 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Apr. 29, 2022 4:59 PM)beansworth Wrote: Alright, so about the newest chapter of Mystical. I haven't had much time to work on it, but this weekend, I'll basically be free the entire day, and I'll try to get 36 and beyond done. But also my birthday is coming up soon, and this weekend, I may be celebrating at my mom's. Anyway, the actual chapter itself, shouldn't take too long, but I don't really know yet.
Also, anyone who has the time to(and has read, Mystical), would you be willing to give me a rating. Please use the ratings in the spoiler.
Characters: 1-10: How are the characters written
Plot: 1-10: How's the plot right now?
Length: 1-10: How long are the chapters? Good length? Shorter? Longer?
Story: 1-10: Is the story good? The Arcs? More or less backstory?
Overall Score: 1-40: .
Seems fair to me to rate it, for to obvious reasons:
.
Characters - 7: Some are deep in developed, others are surface value. As such, I think a 7 fits well
.
Plot - ∅: I can't talk about plot, doesn't mean it is a zero.
.
Length - 9: Some chapters break the chain, but they are well lengthed
.
Story - 6: Idk if it is accurate or not since I'm bad at rating story and trash at plot, but that's what I came up with. It just fits there. Thanks, Hollowmind. I assume "Some chapters break the chain" mean how long they are/short they are. Once again, thanks for everything, Hollowmind.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 06, 2022
Chapter 36!
Chapter 36: Next Stop: BC Sol! Getting the stars!
{The next morning, everyone awoke to Valt on the announcers.}
Valt(Announcing): “Alright, Bladers! As you may know, Keith is currently in 1st Place with 5 Stars, and I’m sure some of you would like to get some stars too!”
{Almost everyone nodded, and then Shu came on the announcer, and called.}
Shu(Calm): “Alright, today we’ll be having a six way battle royale with these bladers: Keith, Obito, Baki, War, Himawari and Barry.”
{Free called from the deck}
Free: “Will those six bladers please come up to the deck.”
{Keith, Obito, Baki, War, Himawari and Barry all began walking and saw a new stadium that was tall, and had two layers.}
Keith(Curious): “Free, what’s this new stadium?”
{Free looked to Keith}
Free: “This is the Dropdown Orbit Stadium, Wakiya had the idea for it. It basically is two stadiums, one on top of the other, and a hole in the middle of the top one so that your bey falls there has a hole in the middle that drops you to the lower stadium.
Valt: "Yeah, also the upper level has two speed craters, at which your bey can increase it’s speed. Then in the lower level, the stadium is flatter so attack types will have a harder time."
{Keith stood there, and began looking at all the stadium’s features. }
Keith(Impressed): “This stadium is looking amazing! I can’t wait to battle in it!”
{Barry looked down, and began examining the stadium’s features, planning with Bellerophon their strategy.}
Barry(Mind): “Alright, Bellerophon. I’m thinking that I’ll launch you at a different angle than normal and try to knock out the other bladers while on the top stadium before you run low on stamina or they drop below.”
{Bellerophon appeared before Barry and he was impressed with Bellerophon’s shiny, golden armor.}
Bellerophon(Excited): “Barry, together I’m sure we can become just as strong as Keith, Baki and everyone else!”
{Barry smiled, and put his fist out, into the air.}
Barry(Happy): “Let’s show them our resonance! Bellerophon!”
{Barry exited his mindscape with Bellerophon and looked at his bey.}
{Obito looked at everyone, and began monologuing.}
Obito(Disappointed): “Why was I added to a battle with a bunch or morons, you have Keith Shadis, owner of Kratos and dating Irene Mao. He only got strength thanks to his bey's immense power. Baki Alcazaba, he’s got potential but he’s held back by using a Defense Type Bey too safely. Then there’s War, a traitor to Van and someone who doesn’t come up with plans, he uses an Attack Type that, honestly, isn’t much of a threat. Himawari, I know little to nothing about. She uses a Defense Type Bey, being Hooligan. Then finally, Barry Robertson. A worthless blader. He has nothing, he barely won any battles and uses a speedy Attack Type known as Revolution Bellerophon. I think will break Bellerophon, with Orion today.”
{Orion shined, agreeing with him}
{Finally, everyone settled in and prepared for battle.}
Free(Confident): “Alright, now: Ready and set.”
Everyone: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Kratos, Bahamut, Warrior, Hooligan, Orion and Bellerophon hit the stadium floor, and both Bahamut and Hooligan began circling the hole whilst Orion, Kratos, Warrior and Bellerophon, rushed around the outer ridge.}
{Barry clenched his fist}
Barry(Confident): “Go now, Revolution Flash!”
{Bellerophon jolted to the center, then jolted out again and slammed into Warrior.}
Barry(Excited): “You're my first opponent, War!”
{Bellerophon sped away from Warrior, and Obito watched as Barry seemed to have gained more power. He then decided to start his plan.}
Obito(Confident): “Now, Orion! Velocity Shoot!”
{Orion darted towards Bellerophon, with it’s Velocity Driver’s metal tip.}
{Hooligan and Bahamut began clashing, the beys were both different spin directions, barely dodging the hole.}
{Himawari was smiling, and War looked at her and thought about their past.}
{Tokyo, Japan. 2020}
{War and Himawari were best friends,and hung out all the time. And that day was Himawari’s birthday, so War took her to the local festival.}
War(Happy): “Alright, open your eyes Himawari!”
{Himawari opened her eyes, and saw the beautiful festival, going on at their high school.}
War(Excited): “Surprise!”
{Himawari’s eyes sparkled, as she looked at all the beautiful props and stands sitting in their school’s courtyard.}
{Himawari smiled and hugged War}
Himawari(Excited): “Thanks a bunch, War!”
{War smiled}
War(Happy): “Anytime, Himawari. Now, let’s hit as many things, as you want to today!”
{War and Himawari ran into the festival, and tried to do as much as possible. As little did the two know, what would happen in a few days.}
{A few days later, summer began and school ended, and with this, Himawari brought news.}
{Himawari and War both sat on swings in their local park, and War was swinging as high as he could. When Himawari said.}
Himawari(Sad): “Hey, War. I have something to tell you.”
{War stopped his swing, and turned to Himawari}
War(Confused): “What is it, Himawari?”
{Himawari looked to War}
Himawari(Sad): “Well, my dad got new work in South Korea and we are leaving soon. I didn’t want to tell you because we were having so much fun at the festival.”
{War smiled, though he was sad}
War(Sad): “It’s fine, Himawari. Although, you’d better stay in contact with me!”
{Himawari giggled}
Himawari(Happier): “I’ll make sure we talk every night. Remember what I told you, on the school roof?”
{War looked puzzled}
War(Confused): “Not at all?”
{Himawari giggles a little}
Himawari(Happy): “I said, the moon is beautiful, isn’t it.”
{War looked even more confused}
War(Confused): “What does the moon have to do with you moving out?”
{Himawari shook her head a little}
Himawari(Happy): “You’ll understand, eventually.”
{War smiled, and waved to Himawari.}
{After Himawari left, her and War would talk for three months before ultimately losing contact due to Himawari’s schooling. And soon, War would meet Van Aoi.}
{Present Time, BC Sol’s Yacht. 11: 18 AM}
Himawari(Tough): “Alright, Hooligan! Viral Roar!”
{Hooligan hit Bahamut from under and launched it into the air.}
{Baki looked surprised, and Lucy called out}
Lucy(Surprised): “Bahamut!”
{Baki then smirked}
Baki(Confident): “Not bad. Bahamut! Dynamic Sync!”
{Baki and Bahamut then entered their sync, while in their sync, Bahamut’s wings, copied and summoned behind Baki.}
Baki(Sync): “Atomic Crush”
{Bahamut leaned on Atomic and hit Hooligan down to the lower level.}
Baki(Sync): “Alright, nice!”
[Back with Barry, War and Obito]
{Orion had sped up, and was closing in on Warrior, and Bellerophon.}
Barry(Surprised): “I had no clue Orion could get so quick! I’ll just have to counter! Bellerophon!”
{Bellerohpon’s avatar appeared, his golden armor shone in the gleaming light. He grabbed his sword and swung it, cutting through the air.}
Barry(Confident): “Alright, don’t mind if I use Warrior, War!”
War(Confused): “Eh!?’
{Barry jumped up, and two orbs appeared in his hands as he called}
Barry(Confident): “Now, Eternal Revolution Pierce!”
{Bellerophon hit Warrior with all it’s power, and Warrior hit Orion, resulting in a combined attack.}
Bellerohpon: “Go for the win, BARRY!”
Barry(Excited): “Now, Revolution Sync!”
{Barry entered his sync, and his hair brightened in color.}
Obito(Irritated): “This is not acceptable! Omega Upper!”
{Orion hit Warrior over and smashed into Bellerophon, launching it into the air.}
Obito(Irritated): “Take that, Barry!”
{Barry looked up, and saw Bellerophon begin falling down, and he smirked.}
Barry(Confident): “Don't you know I'mgood at improv? This fight shows that I can keep up to my fellow members of Valhalla. You may be the smarter one, but I’m the best one!”
{Barry jumped up as an aura flared around his right hand, as he called. }
Barry(Sync): “Diving Revolution Spear!”
{When Bellerophon hit Orion, a bright light pierced the arena, then a bey could be heard getting knocked away and flying out. As the bladers watched, Omega Orion flew through the air, and Obito caught it.}
{Barry smirked, and remarked}
Barry(Sync): “Alright, now with Obito out, you’re next, Keith!”
{Keith smiled, and thought}
Keith(Mind): “I’m impressed, Barry grown so much more powerful. He’s very worthy of being on Valhalla!” (Excited) “Alright then, come at me with 100%, Barry!”
Barry(Sync): “Putting up any fight will be useless, Keith!”
{Bellerophon and Kratos, jolted towards each other, while Hooligan spun at the lower level, and Bahamut circled the drop.}
{Bellerophon and Kratos slammed into each other, both rubber contact points on the beys hitting each other.}
{Barry was surprised seeing rubber on Kratos and commented.}
Barry(Surprised): “I had no clue that Kratos even had rubber. What else do you have, Keith?”
Keith(Happy): “Well, Kratos also has….”
{At that moment, Keith remembered Neusa and how she hated when bladers revealed their strategies in battle.}
Keith(Reminiscent): “Kratos has enough power, to beat you, Barry!”
{Barry smirked}
Barry(Excited): “Say as much as you want! In the end, your words can only be put in stone with action!”
{Kratos and Bellerophon began smashing into each other, and soon both beys were on a crash course for the middle, where the hole drop was.}
Keith(Confident): “Alright, Kratos! Let’s go, Mythical Break!”
Barry(Sync): “Don’t let him, get any further! Revolution Breaker!”
{Kratos and Bellerophon went to the middle, to collide, when both beys fell.}
Baki: Oh... I guess I'm the only one on the top now."
{Keith and Barry gasped. They had completely forgotten about the drop.}
Barry(Sync): “Change of plans! Diving Revolution Slash!”
{Kratos hit the ground first, landing next to Hooligan, and Bellerophon slammed into the two beys, bursting both.}
Keith and Himawari(Shocked): *Gasp*
{Baki watched both beys’ parts come flying out, and Baki called.}
Baki(Confident): “Alright, sraying here would be unfair. Bahamut! Dynamic Dive!”
{Bahamut fell down the hole, and began diving to Bellerophon, slamming onto it.}
Barry(Nervous): “I believe in you Bellerophon! Push through!”
{Bellerophon began clashing with Bahamut, and a beam of light came from the stadium. Bahamut flew out and… burst.}
{Free threw his arm up}
Free: “That’s the battle. This leaves Barry as the winner, gaining him three stars.”
{Barry jumped into the air}
Barry(Excited): “That’s my first Yacht Royale win!”
{Valt smiled, and walked over to the bladers}
Valt(Happy): “Alright! Now, seems the most appropriate time to say our next destination.”
{Everyone walked close to Valt, so they could hear the newest location.}
Valt(Calm): “The next stop is with my team, BC Sol! My team consists of me, Free and Rantaro. Our beys being Holy Valkyrie, Illusion Fafnir, and Hurricane Ragnaruk.”
{Shu walked up}
Shu(Calm): “Alright, it’s time for the team choosing. Keith, Barry and Obito, come to me with your trios.”
{Keith, looked around and decided on his team, and walked up to Shu}
Keith(Confident): “I’ll take Baki and Irene. I trust them both as my best friends!”
{Shu smiled and nodded. Barry looked at Keith}
Barry(Faking frustration): “I was going to take Baki!”
{Keith and Barry chuckled}
Barry: “I guess, I’ll take War and Izuku.”
{Shu nodded, and looked at Obito}
Shu: “I’d assume your team is the same.”
"Obito nodded and turned back, returning to Requiem."
{Shu went to Valt, and gave him the list of bladers.
Valt began looking over the list, and everyone went to the cafeteria to get their lunches. Once they entered, Keith saw the triplets and Obito exit the cafeteria.}
{Annie, Lilia, and Cleo walked with Obito, as they had gotten him to talk to them, surprisingly.}
Cleo(Confused): “Obito, what happened when you moved?”
{Obito kept quiet, Lilia spoke up.}
Lilia(Curious): “Obito, just tell us! We’re your friends.”
{Obito looked at them all, and replied}
Obito(Cold): “Your not my friends, my only “friends” are Van, Daishi and Kai. I have no interest in weaklings like you, three.”
Lilia(calm): "I'm very aware of that already."
{Obito lost focus for a second after her reply. Annie jolted forward and grabbed Obito’s mask, trying to snap it off, but instead Obito dodged to the right enough that she didn’t remove his mask, but moved it.}
{Annie looked over, and saw Obito’s red eye, it now had multiple cuts all, going down to the eye. Obito ducked down and moved his mask back. Annie became shocked}
Lilia(shrugging): "It was worth a try. I don't know why you two are still on it actually."
Cloe(annoyed): "He is our friend! We can’t just abandom him!"
Lilia/Obito: "Actually, it is not that hard"
Cloe(annoyed): "Come on. Annie, tell her that... what's wrong?"
Annie(Scared): “You used to only have 6 scars Obito... What happened?”
Mystical, has really changed since the beginning. Well, I prefer it now, then before.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - PikaBeyblade - May. 10, 2022
Nice power up for Barry
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 10, 2022
(May. 10, 2022 12:05 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: Nice power up for Barry Yeah, I wanted to have him, win this battle. Also, who do you think his new rival is?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - PikaBeyblade - May. 10, 2022
Obito and Keith would be his new rivals probably
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 11, 2022
(May. 10, 2022 9:38 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: Obito and Keith would be his new rivals probably Obito is his new rival, i'd say Keith is almost more of a inspiration, kinda.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 12, 2022
Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet. Also I might have a character contest, but idk yet.
Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!
[spoiler]
{Shibuya, Japan. 10 AM}
Beyblade! A sport in which, you battle opponents from around the world, with your blading spirit and Beys!
And for 16-year-old, Akira Kamado, being a high ranking blader, was his dream. But first, he needs to get out of his dreams, and get to High School!
???(Irritated): "Big Bro, wake up, already!"
The little girl, presumably, Akira's younger sister, banged two pots together, and scared Akira out of his bed, his covers
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Anime Blader - May. 12, 2022
(May. 12, 2022 2:05 PM)beansworth Wrote: Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet. Also I might have a character contest, but idk yet.
Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!
[spoiler]
{Shibuya, Japan. 10 AM}
Beyblade! A sport in which, you battle opponents from around the world, with your blading spirit and Beys!
And for 16-year-old, Akira Kamado, being a high ranking blader, was his dream. But first, he needs to get out of his dreams, and get to High School!
???(Irritated): "Big Bro, wake up, already!"
The little girl, presumably, Akira's younger sister, banged two pots together, and scared Akira out of his bed, his covers
I hope you do have a character contest. Your expert writing can cause any bad written character be considered perfection.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 13, 2022
Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...
1st Place: OC will be a main character.
2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.
3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.
DualBurst System.
Avatar Core: Similar to the Sparking Chip Core, it features the first letter of the bey/avatar's name. (eg. An "A" for Ares)
Neo Chip: Similar to Sparking Chip and DB Cores. This chips features the locks, and design of the avatar. {eg, A horizontal core, with a hero thrusting his sword to right, his cape dancing with the wind, for Ares.)
Neo Blade: Similar to Sparking Ring and DB Blade, this features the main points of contact, this don't hold anything, as the locks are on the chip. {eg, A blade with three huge swords, that are similar to Valkyrie, for Ares.}
Neo Disc: Like Gatinko Discs, these discs have gimmicks like re-bound, or free spinning ring.
Neo Disc': Sorta like Numbered Core Discs, they are purely metal, and can hold a Neo Frame. {eg, three upper blades(not super slanted) that hit the opponents bey into the layer, for Ares.}
Neo Frame: Basically God Frames.
Driver: Same as always.
Dual Drive: Similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis, it has the weight for the layers. {eg, three mini swords like 2A, that add weight to Warlord Ares' sword.}
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Carma___bigbang - May. 13, 2022
Wdym bye appearance?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Anime Blader - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...
1st Place: OC will be a main character.
2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.
3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.
DualBurst System.
Avatar Core: Similar to the Sparking Chip Core, it features the first letter of the bey/avatar's name. (eg. An "A" for Ares)
Neo Chip: Similar to Sparking Chip and DB Cores. This chips features the locks, and design of the avatar. {eg, A horizontal core, with a hero thrusting his sword to right, his cape dancing with the wind, for Ares.)
Neo Blade: Similar to Sparking Ring and DB Blade, this features the main points of contact, this don't hold anything, as the locks are on the chip. {eg, A blade with three huge swords, that are similar to Valkyrie, for Ares.}
Neo Disc: Like Gatinko Discs, these discs have gimmicks like re-bound, or free spinning ring.
Neo Disc': Sorta like Numbered Core Discs, they are purely metal, and can hold a Neo Frame. {eg, three upper blades(not super slanted) that hit the opponents bey into the layer, for Ares.}
Neo Frame: Basically God Frames.
Driver: Same as always.
Here's my oc
Name: Valac Glass
Age: 17
Height: 5' 10"
Character: Valac is a highly intelligent individual who is also calm, sophisticated, and arrogant due to his training with his father Theodore Glass which he hates. While at school, Valac conducts himself as a sociable, likable, and often easygoing student. However, this is really a mask to hide his true nature. While as Zero who is a symbol he made to complete his objectives which is to destroy all evil organizations and bladers his true nature is expressed. His charisma and beliefs in justice gain him the trust and respect of many bladers like Free, Drum, Aiga, Valt, and Shu who try to stop evil bladers but due to Valac battling with the mask he wears and going by Zero no one knows who he truly is. Valac is known for having a very stoic personality. He never cared about schoolwork, seeing the entire thing as trivial, even though his high intelligence would make it easy for him. He enjoys seeking out challenges, so when he's off from punishing evil bladers and organizations he often challenges strong bladers. In general, Valac takes most day-to-day affairs with open disinterest, often not even noticing the affection of others, especially Savannah, his classmate. He has a strong dislike for the legendary bladers, and noble viewing them as tepid and "overprivileged parasites" which is a quote he uses when he refers to people like Phi. In battle, Valac is very cold and tactical. He is willing to sacrifice in team battles his own teammates and even himself, if that is what it takes to achieve the objective. He also forces draws in battle if it can give him a better chance of winning the battle over all. He is also very ruthless against evil bladers wanting to destroy their beys so it'll cause them to stop blading or take time too repair or evolve their beys which will at least give time for the innocent good bladers to not be hurt by the twisted bladers. Honestly Valac isn't a hero or villain he's more of a anti hero because a good hearted blader wouldn't sacrifice their teammates just to win and evil bladers wouldn't try to save the innocent from other bad bladers.
Appearance: Valac is a handsome young man with black hair and violet eyes, which he inherited from his mother. Though when his purple, black, and gold aura appears his eyes will turn pink with pupil being covered by a red V. Valac is somewhat scrawny, having little muscle, and is rather thin. His primary casual outfit is a red jacket with a black shirt underneath and grey trousers, though he occasionally wears other clothing. The Zero costume consists of a tight dark purple suit with golden stripes, long wrapped sleeves, and a frilled white cravat. The outfit combines Victorian fashion with that of a sleek bodysuit; worn over it is a black and gold cloak with crimson spandex lining the inside and an enormous black cape encircling the head. Its immediately recognizable feature is a spiky black and indigo mask with a long V stretched over its bottom, completely hiding the wearer's face; the mask appears opaque from the outside but is actually transparent from the inside.
Origins: Valac was trained in the Snake Pit to become Shu's successor but due to the disappearance of his mother he started to resent Theodore thinking he had something to do with her disappearance. After being replaced by the next Red Eye Valac goes to Japan and makes a suit which is the Zero uniform and becomes a mask of justice for the innocent people and starts a war on evil bladers and organizations like the Snake Pit so he can eventually go back to Mexico and destroy the Snake Pit by himself as vengeance for his father abandoning him and his mothers disappearance.
Bey: Obedience Valefar, Resurrection', Rebellion, Bearing
Avatar Core (V): The avatar core is a pink V.
Neo chip (Valefar): A dual spinning black chip with a purple demon made out of golden bones with golden skulls on the wings with the wrong color being black. The avatar also has its own golden skull and two golden legs and a golden tail.
Neo Blade (Obedience): A black dual spinning blade with purple rubber contact points on the top right and bottom left with the other sides being mini faces of Valefar like Spriggan has with purple eyes and the top part of the face being gold.
Neo Disc' (Resurrection'): A golden disc that is shaped like the metal part of Vanguard.
Neo Frame (Rebellion): Basically just the plastic. part of Vanguard but black.
Driver: A purple bearing with the plastic free spinning part being black.
Special Moves:
Obedience Spin: If Valefar is in the opposite spin of its opponent using the rubber on the blade of Obedience it's able to steal the spin of its opponent.
Bearing Drive: By using the slope of the stadium Valefar is able to speed up and attack the opponent.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 8:59 PM)Anime Blader Wrote: Here's my oc
Name: Valac Glass
Age: 17
Height: 5' 10"
Character: Valac is a highly intelligent individual who is also calm, sophisticated, and arrogant due to his training with his father Theodore Glass which he hates. While at school, Valac conducts himself as a sociable, likable, and often easygoing student. However, this is really a mask to hide his true nature. While as Zero who is a symbol he made to complete his objectives which is to destroy all evil organizations and bladers his true nature is expressed. His charisma and beliefs in justice gain him the trust and respect of many bladers like Free, Drum, Aiga, Valt, and Shu who try to stop evil bladers but due to Valac battling with the mask he wears and going by Zero no one knows who he truly is. Valac is known for having a very stoic personality. He never cared about schoolwork, seeing the entire thing as trivial, even though his high intelligence would make it easy for him. He enjoys seeking out challenges, so when he's off from punishing evil bladers and organizations he often challenges strong bladers. In general, Valac takes most day-to-day affairs with open disinterest, often not even noticing the affection of others, especially Savannah, his classmate. He has a strong dislike for the legendary bladers, and noble viewing them as tepid and "overprivileged parasites" which is a quote he uses when he refers to people like Phi. In battle, Valac is very cold and tactical. He is willing to sacrifice in team battles his own teammates and even himself, if that is what it takes to achieve the objective. He also forces draws in battle if it can give him a better chance of winning the battle over all. He is also very ruthless against evil bladers wanting to destroy their beys so it'll cause them to stop blading or take time too repair or evolve their beys which will at least give time for the innocent good bladers to not be hurt by the twisted bladers. Honestly Valac isn't a hero or villain he's more of a anti hero because a good hearted blader wouldn't sacrifice their teammates just to win and evil bladers wouldn't try to save the innocent from other bad bladers.
Appearance: Valac is a handsome young man with black hair and violet eyes, which he inherited from his mother. Though when his purple, black, and gold aura appears his eyes will turn pink with pupil being covered by a red V. Valac is somewhat scrawny, having little muscle, and is rather thin. His primary casual outfit is a red jacket with a black shirt underneath and grey trousers, though he occasionally wears other clothing. The Zero costume consists of a tight dark purple suit with golden stripes, long wrapped sleeves, and a frilled white cravat. The outfit combines Victorian fashion with that of a sleek bodysuit; worn over it is a black and gold cloak with crimson spandex lining the inside and an enormous black cape encircling the head. Its immediately recognizable feature is a spiky black and indigo mask with a long V stretched over its bottom, completely hiding the wearer's face; the mask appears opaque from the outside but is actually transparent from the inside.
Origins: Valac was trained in the Snake Pit to become Shu's successor but due to the disappearance of his mother he started to resent Theodore thinking he had something to do with her disappearance. After being replaced by the next Red Eye Valac goes to Japan and makes a suit which is the Zero uniform and becomes a mask of justice for the innocent people and starts a war on evil bladers and organizations like the Snake Pit so he can eventually go back to Mexico and destroy the Snake Pit by himself as vengeance for his father abandoning him and his mothers disappearance.
Bey: Obedience Valefar, Resurrection', Rebellion, Bearing
Avatar Core (V): The avatar core is a pink V.
Neo chip (Valefar): A dual spinning black chip with a purple demon made out of golden bones with golden skulls on the wings with the wrong color being black. The avatar also has its own golden skull and two golden legs and a golden tail.
Neo Blade (Obedience): A black dual spinning blade with purple rubber contact points on the top right and bottom left with the other sides being mini faces of Valefar like Spriggan has with purple eyes and the top part of the face being gold.
Neo Disc' (Resurrection'): A golden disc that is shaped like the metal part of Vanguard.
Neo Frame (Rebellion): Basically just the plastic. part of Vanguard but black.
Driver: A purple bearing with the plastic free spinning part being black.
Special Moves:
Obedience Spin: If Valefar is in the opposite spin of its opponent using the rubber on the blade of Obedience it's able to steal the spin of its opponent.
Bearing Drive: By using the slope of the stadium Valefar is able to speed up and attack the opponent. Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - MasterofDerp - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...
1st Place: OC will be a main character.
2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.
3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.
DualBurst System.
Avatar Core: Similar to the Sparking Chip Core, it features the first letter of the bey/avatar's name. (eg. An "A" for Ares)
Neo Chip: Similar to Sparking Chip and DB Cores. This chips features the locks, and design of the avatar. {eg, A horizontal core, with a hero thrusting his sword to right, his cape dancing with the wind, for Ares.)
Neo Blade: Similar to Sparking Ring and DB Blade, this features the main points of contact, this don't hold anything, as the locks are on the chip. {eg, A blade with three huge swords, that are similar to Valkyrie, for Ares.}
Neo Disc: Like Gatinko Discs, these discs have gimmicks like re-bound, or free spinning ring.
Neo Disc': Sorta like Numbered Core Discs, they are purely metal, and can hold a Neo Frame. {eg, three upper blades(not super slanted) that hit the opponents bey into the layer, for Ares.}
Neo Frame: Basically God Frames.
Driver: Same as always.
Dual Drive: Similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis, it has the weight for the layers. {eg, three mini swords like 2A, that add weight to Warlord Ares' sword.}
Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 10:13 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: (May. 13, 2022 5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...
1st Place: OC will be a main character.
2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.
3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.
DualBurst System.
Avatar Core: Similar to the Sparking Chip Core, it features the first letter of the bey/avatar's name. (eg. An "A" for Ares)
Neo Chip: Similar to Sparking Chip and DB Cores. This chips features the locks, and design of the avatar. {eg, A horizontal core, with a hero thrusting his sword to right, his cape dancing with the wind, for Ares.)
Neo Blade: Similar to Sparking Ring and DB Blade, this features the main points of contact, this don't hold anything, as the locks are on the chip. {eg, A blade with three huge swords, that are similar to Valkyrie, for Ares.}
Neo Disc: Like Gatinko Discs, these discs have gimmicks like re-bound, or free spinning ring.
Neo Disc': Sorta like Numbered Core Discs, they are purely metal, and can hold a Neo Frame. {eg, three upper blades(not super slanted) that hit the opponents bey into the layer, for Ares.}
Neo Frame: Basically God Frames.
Driver: Same as always.
Dual Drive: Similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis, it has the weight for the layers. {eg, three mini swords like 2A, that add weight to Warlord Ares' sword.}
Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs? Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used.
Valkyrie
Fafnir
Spriggan
Longinus
Achilles
Dragon
Belial
Ragnorok(Maybe)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - MasterofDerp - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 10:37 PM)beansworth Wrote: (May. 13, 2022 10:13 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs? Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used.
Valkyrie
Fafnir
Spriggan
Longinus
Achilles
Dragon
Belial
Ragnorok(Maybe)
Aight, I was gonna go for Bahamut and try going for a Major Side Antag, so thx for letting me know.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 13, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 10:59 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: (May. 13, 2022 10:37 PM)beansworth Wrote: Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used.
Valkyrie
Fafnir
Spriggan
Longinus
Achilles
Dragon
Belial
Ragnorok(Maybe)
Aight, I was gonna go for Bahamut and try going for a Major Side Antag, so thx for letting me know. Yep, excited to see your OC and Bey entry then!
@Hollowmind8 and others! I've finished DualBurst episode 1!
Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet.
Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!
{Shibuya, Japan. 7:40 AM}
Beyblade! A sport in which, you battle opponents from around the world, with your blading spirit and Beys!
And for 16-year-old, Akira Kamado, being a high ranking blader, was his dream. But first, he needs to get out of his dreams, and get to High School!
???(Irritated): "Big Bro, wake up, already!"
The little girl, presumably, Akira's younger sister, banged two pots together, and scared Akira out of his bed, he threw his covers to the side, and looked at his clock.
Akira(Nervous): “Oh shoot! I’m late, Naomi, tell mom I left through my window!”
Naomi called to Akira, as he opened and jumped through his window,
Naomi: “Mom’s gonna be mad, she said if you leave through the window again, she’ll have to take your phone.”
Akira slid down his shingled roof, and jumped off the end, landing in the backyard. He opened the gate to the front yard, and began running, his mom opened their door, and called.
Akira’s Mother: “Have a great day, Akira! Make sure you pay attention!”
Akira gave a thumbs-up to his mom and kept running.
Normally, Akira would’ve run across the street, but today, the traffic in Shibuya City was horrible, most likely due to a concert for KANA-BOON, one of Akira’s favorite bands, so Akira had to keep running forward.
Ahead of Akira, was a police car, with the local police watching to make sure no one was speeding through Shibuya. One of the police, had black hair that barely stuck out of his hat, whilst the other one, had short orange hair, which was hidden in his hat.
As the two were watching cars, the second officer had a speed gun, that read the speed of cars, and the first officer was finishing his coffee.
As Akira kept running, he saw the police car, and realized if he slowed down at all, he’d not make it to school on time. He then kept running, put his right hand onto the car’s hood, and flipped himself over the car, and kept running, whilst looking bad, saying.
Akira(Guilty): “Sorry officers, I’m going to be late!”
Second Officer(Confused): “Big Bro, that guy just jumped our car! Should we chase him!?”
First Officer(Proud): “Nah, that kid had the guts to flip over a police car. Let him go.”
Second Officer(Mind): “Won’t boss be mad at us, then!?”
Akira kept running forward, when his best friend ran beside him, Gouki Kazehaya, who had brown spikey hair, although the spikes were in the back, and a small ponytail, that was hung by his neck.
Gouki(Energetic): “Morning, Akira! I see we’re both running late again!”
Akira(Tired): “Yeah, we’d better get moving though, because gates close in 3 minutes!”
Both the boys continued running, and soon they saw their school’s wall, and both boys’ momentum was high, from their speed and Gouki said,
Gouki(Confident): “I have an idea, let’s jump the wall.”
Akira(Hesitant): “Sounds crazy enough. Let’s do it, bro!”
As Akira and Gouki, got closer to the wall, the two prepared to jump, and then Gouki jumped forward with his left leg, and jumped the wall with his right leg. Akira ran forward, jumped, grabbed the top of the wall with his hand, and flipped the wall.
Both boys landed in the school’s yard, and saw the Principal walking to them.
Gouki(Scared): “Oh no, Principal Komurasaki is coming!”
Akira’s body tensed up, he didn’t want to get in trouble with the Principal, normally the teachers or Student President would report him, and he’d get in trouble.
Wakiya: “Hello, Kazehaya. Kamado.”
Both boys bowed, when Wakiya began laughing.
Wakiya(Confused): “Why are you boys, bowing? You’re not in trouble.”
Both boys got up, and looked at Principal Komurasaki, and Akira blurted,
Akira(Surprised): “Sorry, did you say, we’re not in trouble!?”
Wakiya nodded, and Akira bowed, saying,
Akira(Thankful): “Thank you, Principal Komurasaki!”
Wakiya nodded, and said,
Wakiya(Reminiscent): “Let’s get you, guys to class now.”
Wakiya(Mind): “Akira Kamado. You remind me, too much of Valt. Good days, back then.”
Wakiya walked the boys to their class, and returned to his office, while the boys sat down and began chatting again, when…
Student Council President, Sumika Hanabusa, stood in front of them, her slim, yet beautiful body, light colored skin, lilac eyes, and her black hair with purple highlighted tips, and slammed her hand against their desks.
Sumika(Irritated): “Another late day, Akira. Gouki, I’ll let you slide, you haven’t been late in a month. But, YOU, Akira. This has been your 9th late day, this month, you’re paying up by cleaning the classroom at break.”
Akira got out of his desk, and looked at Sumika, replying angrily,
Akira(Mad): “Are you serious! I have to clean the entire room, alone because I was late again!?”
Sumika, slammed her foot onto Gouki’s desk, and said,
Sumika(Mad): “Yes! Yes, you have to clean the room alone!”
Akira pulled his Dangerous Valkyrie2 Giga Zone’+Z-9, and called,
Akira(Confident): “All or nothing Bey Battle! I win, I don’t have to clean the entire room, and you permanently stay off my late case. But, if you win, I’ll clean the entire room for the rest of the school year, and show up at 7:05 AM, every day!”
Sumika enjoyed the deal, he struck. Sumika was the most talented in their school, so she had no fear.
Sumika: “Deal.”
Everyone then walked to the BeyStadium on the roof, above their room, and Akira and Sumika prepared their battle.
Akira put his Dangerous Valkyrie onto his DB Launcher, and Sumika put her Roar Longinus Over Yielding’-0, onto her DB Launcher, and both bladers waited for a referee.
Gouki walked over to the stadium, and declared.
Gouki(Calm): “This is a 1-Point takes all, Bey Battle. Akira Versus Sumika, standard rules apply.”
Everyone(Unison): “3! 2! 1!”
Akira and Sumika: “Go Shoot!”
{Dangerous Valkyrie and Roar Longinus hit the stadium floor, and Roar Longinus easily took center, with it’s Yielding Driver, and it’s POM plastic, Dangerous Valkyrie circled the outer ridge, with it’s Zone+Z Driver.}
Akira(Confident): “Now, Zone Shoot!”
{Dangerous Valkyrie titled on it’s Zone+Z Driver, and hit the +Z Attachment, launching it to the center of the stadium, barraging Roar Longinus, but Longinus’ strong locks, weren’t letting up.}
Sumika punched her right hand out, and called,
Sumika(Confident): “Roar Longinus! Roar Counter!”
{Roar Longinus hit Dangerous Valkyrie on it’s blade, and burst it!! Akira stood there, in defeat and fell to his knees.}
Gouki turned to Sumika and thought,
Gouki(Enticed): “Woah, Sumika…she’s so cool. I wish I could date her, oh and Akira seems to be really mad.”
Classmate(Impressed): “Wow, Sumika! You’re the best! You have amazing grades, you can remember everything, you’re super helpful, and you’re an amazing blader.”
Sumika(Happy): “Thanks guys, don’t make me blush though.”
Akira(Mad): *under his breath* “I’ve got good grades too, I help the teacher a lot, and I have a good memory.”
Akira put his hands in his pockets, and began to walk away, when Gouki came over and said,
Gouki(Calm): “Come on dude.”
Gouki went to put his hand, on Akira’s shoulder, but Akira slapped it off.
Akira(Mad): “Leave me alone, go admire your stupid idol, Sumika! While your at it, ask her out, for all I care!”
Akira threw the stairwell door open, and ran down the stairs, and into his classroom, where he waited for class to begin.
Class went the same as always, and before everyone was dismissed for break, Sumika walked over to Akira, and sat down on his desk, and said,
Sumika(Cocky): “Don’t forget, clean the room then.”
Akira clenched his right hand, and grit his teeth.
Sumika hopped off, Akira’s desk, her black hair flowing with her, and then the bell rang, and everyone left, except Akira.
Akira opened the broom closet, and grabbed the broom, and kicked the closet shut, and began cleaning, and soon time seemed to go by quickly, and before Akira knew it, it was already halfway through break.
Akira still had about ¼ of the room to clean. He took the broom and threw it against Sumika’s desk, and ran forward, kicking it with all his force.
Akira turned away, and slumped against the whiteboard, and closed his eyes, and began to imagine things, and one of those was some Beyblade, that didn’t look like any other, one he’d even seen.
Akira then jumped at the sound of the shoji doors opening, Akira turned over to see Sumika standing there, Akira turned away, and grabbed the broom, and got back to sweeping.
Sumika(Guilty): “Hey, Akira…Look…I’m…”
Akira(Pissed): “Leave me alone. I don’t want to hear you speak.”
Sumika(Irritated): “I was going to say sorry, but ya know what, I’m gonna go back to break.”
Akira turned to her, his fists clenched, and yelled,
Akira(Pissed): “Leave! See if I care! I don’t need some snotty student, who thinks she’s so cool, because she’s the best of school, to lecture me!”
Sumika got irritated by Akira’s words, and ran over and slapped him on his left cheek, Sumika, after slapping Akira, realized her actions, and began stuttering,
Sumika(Afraid): “Akira! I’m…..I’m…”
Akira threw the broom to the left, grabbed his bag, and jumped through the window, landing on the ground, and running to the wall.
Akira then jumped the wall, and left school.
Just as this happened, Sumika’s friends and Gouki came to the classroom, and Sumika’s friend, Kay, asked.
Kay(Confused): “Where’s Akira?”
Sumika(Guilty): “He left school.”
Friends(Mad): “How could he straight up leave, he should be cleaning the room!”
Sumika(Guilty): “He left, because I slapped him.”
Friends(Mad): “He deserved it, that late idiot!”
Gouki walked forward, and said,
Gouki(Mad): “Sumika! Do you have any clue, about Akira and his past!? Do you even care?”
Sumika(Shocked): “I….I…”
Gouki(Mad): “His dad was abusive, and anytime he is hit or even threatened, he freezes up and takes the hit, not even speaking back, he’ll just stand there, and accept it.”
As Sumika listened to Gouki, she began feeling guiltier, and tears came to her eyes, Gouki turned and ran to the Principal’s office.
{With Akira}
Akira had run home, and up to his room, Naomi and their mother tried to enter his room, but his door was locked, and jammed a chair, to keep the door held shut.
Akira opened his notebook, and remembered his vision from earlier, and began drawing it, before once finishing, lying on his bed, and watching YouTube, and old Beyblade Battles, falling asleep at 15:03PM.
Naomi and their mother, Yuzuki, both sat downstairs and worried for Akira.
Naomi(Concerned): “Do you think, Big Bro, was picked on about Dad, again?”
Yuzuki gripped her book harder, and began tearing up, whilst saying,
Yuzuki(Sorrowful): “I should’ve never married your father, maybe you guys could’ve had a better life. I’m sorry!”
Naomi began crying and hugged her mother, Gouki, knocked on the Kamado door later, and was welcomed in by Naomi and Yuzuki, Naomi always called Gouki, her other older brother, and Yuzuki thought of Gouki, as her own kid, sometimes.
Gouki, took a stool by the kitchen island, and asked,
Gouki(Concerned): “Is Akira alright?”
Naomi and Yuzuki’s faces told Gouki, everything, so he got up and walked upstairs.
Gouki knocked on Akira’s door, but only to find out, it was ajar. He looked inside, and saw Akira sleeping, and looked at his drawing, and said,
Gouki(Impressed): “Oh my god, he’s designed his own Beyblade System! I know, what’ll make him better!”
Gouki ran downstairs and showed the drawing to Naomi and Yuzuki and explained his plan, then the Kamado’s and Gouki left for a few hours, and returned home, with a small box, and dinner.
Akira came downstairs, ate dinner and played games with Naomi and Gouki, before Gouki went home.
Yuzuki(Happy): “I’m glad, you have a friend like Gouki, he’s really a good guy.”
Akira smiled, and said,
Akira(Modest): “Yeah, he’s the best dude to have as a friend.”
Akira walked upstairs, and saw the small box, Gouki had brought home, he opened it and saw his drawn Beyblade, made.
Akira read the note with it.
Gouki’s Note: “Yo, Akira! I saw this drawing you made, and was inspired so me and your family went to the local Beystop, and got this custom-made for you. I explained the system, on the back.”
Gouki’s Note(Back): “The DualBurst System: Avatar Core, Neo Chip, Neo Blade, Dual Drive, Neo Disc and Driver.”
Akira picked his bey up, and began looking more at it.
Akira(Excited): “My very own Bey, and System! The Avatar Core has an “A” in the middle, not much to look at. The chip has a armored hero thrusting his sword to the right, and his cape is flying to the left, it looks like it has four tall locks, which means great burst resistance! The blade, has three huge swords, that have some Upper Attack potential to them, the disc is somewhat like a square, but it kinda has a shuriken design to me, but what are these slots for…oh! The driver! It’s a Rubber Flat, it kinda has the shape of a six-sided star. And finally the Dual Drive, it has metal placement where the swords are, so even better attack! And I bet if I rotate this Dual Driver, 180” the metal placement will be at the handles of the swords. So cool!”
Akira put his Bey together, and then realized the biggest part of Beyblade, your Bey’s name and Avatar.
Akira thought about his favorite Mythological Heroes, and picked one.
Akira(Inspired): “I’ll name you, Warlord Ares! And the part names are Ares(Chip), Warlord(Blade), Strike(Disc), Volt(Driver) and finally, Sword(Dual Drive)”
Akira held Ares, in his hands, and went to sleep, ready to conquer tomorrow.
This took a while to write, but I think it turned out good.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Anime Blader - May. 14, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 10:08 PM)beansworth Wrote: (May. 13, 2022 8:59 PM)Anime Blader Wrote: Here's my oc
Name: Valac Glass
Age: 17
Height: 5' 10"
Character: Valac is a highly intelligent individual who is also calm, sophisticated, and arrogant due to his training with his father Theodore Glass which he hates. While at school, Valac conducts himself as a sociable, likable, and often easygoing student. However, this is really a mask to hide his true nature. While as Zero who is a symbol he made to complete his objectives which is to destroy all evil organizations and bladers his true nature is expressed. His charisma and beliefs in justice gain him the trust and respect of many bladers like Free, Drum, Aiga, Valt, and Shu who try to stop evil bladers but due to Valac battling with the mask he wears and going by Zero no one knows who he truly is. Valac is known for having a very stoic personality. He never cared about schoolwork, seeing the entire thing as trivial, even though his high intelligence would make it easy for him. He enjoys seeking out challenges, so when he's off from punishing evil bladers and organizations he often challenges strong bladers. In general, Valac takes most day-to-day affairs with open disinterest, often not even noticing the affection of others, especially Savannah, his classmate. He has a strong dislike for the legendary bladers, and noble viewing them as tepid and "overprivileged parasites" which is a quote he uses when he refers to people like Phi. In battle, Valac is very cold and tactical. He is willing to sacrifice in team battles his own teammates and even himself, if that is what it takes to achieve the objective. He also forces draws in battle if it can give him a better chance of winning the battle over all. He is also very ruthless against evil bladers wanting to destroy their beys so it'll cause them to stop blading or take time too repair or evolve their beys which will at least give time for the innocent good bladers to not be hurt by the twisted bladers. Honestly Valac isn't a hero or villain he's more of a anti hero because a good hearted blader wouldn't sacrifice their teammates just to win and evil bladers wouldn't try to save the innocent from other bad bladers.
Appearance: Valac is a handsome young man with black hair and violet eyes, which he inherited from his mother. Though when his purple, black, and gold aura appears his eyes will turn pink with pupil being covered by a red V. Valac is somewhat scrawny, having little muscle, and is rather thin. His primary casual outfit is a red jacket with a black shirt underneath and grey trousers, though he occasionally wears other clothing. The Zero costume consists of a tight dark purple suit with golden stripes, long wrapped sleeves, and a frilled white cravat. The outfit combines Victorian fashion with that of a sleek bodysuit; worn over it is a black and gold cloak with crimson spandex lining the inside and an enormous black cape encircling the head. Its immediately recognizable feature is a spiky black and indigo mask with a long V stretched over its bottom, completely hiding the wearer's face; the mask appears opaque from the outside but is actually transparent from the inside.
Origins: Valac was trained in the Snake Pit to become Shu's successor but due to the disappearance of his mother he started to resent Theodore thinking he had something to do with her disappearance. After being replaced by the next Red Eye Valac goes to Japan and makes a suit which is the Zero uniform and becomes a mask of justice for the innocent people and starts a war on evil bladers and organizations like the Snake Pit so he can eventually go back to Mexico and destroy the Snake Pit by himself as vengeance for his father abandoning him and his mothers disappearance.
Bey: Obedience Valefar, Resurrection', Rebellion, Bearing
Avatar Core (V): The avatar core is a pink V.
Neo chip (Valefar): A dual spinning black chip with a purple demon made out of golden bones with golden skulls on the wings with the wrong color being black. The avatar also has its own golden skull and two golden legs and a golden tail.
Neo Blade (Obedience): A black dual spinning blade with purple rubber contact points on the top right and bottom left with the other sides being mini faces of Valefar like Spriggan has with purple eyes and the top part of the face being gold.
Neo Disc' (Resurrection'): A golden disc that is shaped like the metal part of Vanguard.
Neo Frame (Rebellion): Basically just the plastic. part of Vanguard but black.
Driver: A purple bearing with the plastic free spinning part being black.
Special Moves:
Obedience Spin: If Valefar is in the opposite spin of its opponent using the rubber on the blade of Obedience it's able to steal the spin of its opponent.
Bearing Drive: By using the slope of the stadium Valefar is able to speed up and attack the opponent. Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.
Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 14, 2022
(May. 14, 2022 2:50 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: (May. 13, 2022 10:08 PM)beansworth Wrote: Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.
Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is? Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Anime Blader - May. 14, 2022
(May. 14, 2022 3:09 AM)beansworth Wrote: (May. 14, 2022 2:50 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is? Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?
Alright then I'll do this:
Initiation: A pink dual drive shaped like two v's with the tops of each v being forged together.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 14, 2022
(May. 14, 2022 3:39 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: (May. 14, 2022 3:09 AM)beansworth Wrote: Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?
Alright then I'll do this:
Initiation: A pink dual drive shaped like two v's with the tops of each v being forged together. Alright sounds good, then Valac and Obedience Valefar are entered into the contest.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - MasterofDerp - May. 14, 2022
UMy OC for Beyblade Burst: DualBurst
Brandt Vahan
Age: 14
Height: 6’2
Bey: Vile Bahamut Earth-Barricade Dome Shatter
Personality: Brandt is what you could describe only as a brute in nature, harnessing his intimidation and overall power in order to win. A firm disbeliever in the idea of an established blading hierarchy based on merit and fun, Brandt’s own beliefs come from the idea that blading is meant as a means to prove one’s superiority by any means necessary. Incredibly blunt towards others, melding with his cold nature, he speaks little, though it is best to pay attention when he does so. He can be quite cruel, having no qualms with humiliating his opponents, and even utilizing intimidation tactics to shake up his opponents’ mental states.
Brandt regards his own skill quite highly, and can be incredibly arrogant at times. He can be incredibly reckless in battle due to his brutish battle style, chaining devastating impact based strikes for devastating damage despite his bey being a defense type; this does not prevent him from using strategy, however, and when regarding a battle with utmost focus or respect he will utilize legitimate strategy to take the opponents down.
Respect is something one must earn from Brandt, whether it be through battle or another act, though this is very hard to come by due to his unimpressed demeanor and gruff exterior.
While he is overall a brute, there is a hidden cruelty behind Brandt Vahan. While the prior Bahamut users aside from Basara were antagonistic, they did not attempt to destroy an opponent’s bey. Brandt has no qualms whatsoever in regards for the destruction of the opponent’s bey, and in some cases if infuriated will actively seek to destroy the opponent in order to prove a point.
Appearance: A tall and incredibly muscular figure, Brandt has bright crimson eyes as a means to mimic the central core of his bey, Bahamut, utilizing the blood like color to add onto his overall intimidation factor. He has dark purple, almost midnight hair, reflecting the coloration of his bey: Bahamut. His hair is slicked back in the front and brought into a ponytail that runs down his back; this ponytail is held together by a cyan band that fits around the hair. His nose is large, adding onto his gruff exterior, and his eyebrows are very bushy, and when not smiling it almost makes him appear as if his face is locked in an eternal grimace.
Brandt’s clothing attire consists of a black undershirt with a crimson dot on the front of it, creating a mesh between the two dark colors. The sleeves are torn, giving off a further brutish exterior. Crossing the dot and partially obscuring it is a dark purple strapped shoulder pauldron with a Purple shoulder guard with a crimson B painted on it. The strap runs diagonally down his body, adding more variety to his clothing. Over this shirt and pauldron he wears a dark purple jacket with a periwinkle pockets and detailing, alongside a teal zipper portion that remains unzipped. The jacket is laced with turquoise fur, akin to a smaller version of the one found on Lean Walhalla’s jacket; and runs down the zipper line as well on both sides, further shrouding his brutish nature. The shoulder portions are a lighter purple than the rest of the jacket.
When Brandt is serious in battle, he tosses the jacket away, revealing his muscular body and full shoulder pauldron.
He wears black pants with red lines going down them, alongside brown combat boots with royal purple detailing and black soles.
Brandt’s body is adorned with tattoos of cyan coloration, which appear similar to Lean Walhalla’s, albeit with some aspects taken from Arthur Percival’s(Especially on the forehead and nose), clashing with his darker tanned skin. The markings can also be found running up his arms as well. When his resonance is activated, these markings will glow brightly, signifying his power up.
Suggested Role: Major(Not main) Antagonist(Early Season Rival that develops further into something worse for the protag. Possible corrupted resonance?)
Brandt’s Bey
Vile Bahamut Earth-Barricade Dome Shatter
Neo Chip: Bahamut
-Unlike most other Neo Chips, the Bahamut Neo core is unable to feature an Avatar Core due to compensation for its gimmick. The Bahamut Chip features a horizontal design, unlike the previous Bahamuts, that features a similar depiction of the avatar to Diabolos I. The center of the Chip features a small drop where a crimson rubber grove is, giving Bahamut a burst slower that is similar to the Bahamut DB Core’s. Bahamut features a singular tooth of medium height at the very end, though it has rubber burst slowers in place for the rest of the teeth, thus granting increased burst resistance overall. There is a B like turquoise flame that stems from the central core made from plastic, with the mouth of Bahamut streaming turquoise fire akin to a horizontal version of the one that came from the DB Core. It features the first Bahamut DB Core’s color scheme.
Neo Blade: Vile
-Vile is a left spin Neo Blade featuring a Dread like design that focuses on a combination of reflection and low friction based defensive power with a blade shift gimmick. In its initial state the Vile core features two elongated blades with turquoise ends slanted into smaller tooth like blades akin to the Dread Wings on Dread, allowing for heavy reflection and offensive potential. These blades are rather large yet smooth, thus resulting in an optimal design for reflecting attacks back or dispersing recoil. When Bahamut reaches its last click, the Vile Neo Blade will transform akin to Dread, with two large strips of the blade shooting out due to the disc prongs pushing on them to make a much rounder shape that drastically increases defense and impact based attack. It features Roar’s original color scheme.
Neo Disc’: Earth
-A 2 inspired disc with a similar design that increases overall IWD, thus allowing for heavy defense usage. It is very heavy, and is compatible with a frame. It is unpainted.
Neo Frame: Barricade
-Barricade features a round, Bump like shape that utilizes a semi compression-able plastic to absorb blows that may stole it. It has high weight and its gimmick is excellent for stamina and defense combos. It is a dark red in color.
Driver: Dome
-A combination between the Atomic driver and Moment featuring a wide plastic freespinning ball akin to Atomic surrounded by a massive freespinning reverse cone akin to Moment’s but larger to allow for optimal KO resistance and drift/self right potential. It is a translucent black in color.
Dual Drive: Shatter
-Shatter Features an almost Wall like design with slightly slanted blades to allow for an increased amount of weight and defense to increase the overall impact and reflection of the bey, albeit the wall like blades are less droopy than the actual frame. It is a translucent teal in color.
Special Moves:
-Vile Wing: Using the two Vile Blades when Bahamut is in its fully clicked state, Bahamut unleashes a stronger version of Dread Wing from Dread Bahamut. This move, however, has a dual function, as Brandt will utilize it with a charging attack to launch a powerful slash attack/counter.
-Vile Guard: Using the now perfect circle form of Bahamut’s final click, a crimson dome of resonance will appear around it similar to Arc Bahamut’s final guard as Bahamut uses its rounded shape to reflect attacks.
-Dome Crash: Using the dome driver’s cone and freespinning ball, Bahamut will travel up the stadium’s slope, unleashing a devastating crash attack. There are two variations. When Bahamut still has the two wings out, it will unleash a two strike attack with the wings to send the opponent flying, while if it’s at its final click it will bash the opponent directly for devastating crash based impact damage.
-Vile Charge: A stronger version of Bahamut’s Dome Crash. Bahamut will use the Dome driver’s ring to grind against the tornado ridge, drastically increasing its speed in a Flash Shoot like manner before charging the opponent and slamming into them with brutal force from the momentum built up by the bey. This move is used only when Bahamut is in its perfect circle state.
-Vile Vertical/Vile Gyro: Vile Bahamut’s own version of the Vertical and Gyro moves of Dread.
-Frenzied Vile Smash: Brandt will forcefully launch Bahamut at a 90 degree angle or Bahamut will purposely make itself vertical by hitting the wall, forcing it to crash into the stadium vertically and using the Vile Wings to kick off the stadium floor, leaping into the air and launching a devastating downwards vertical smash with the Vile wings before using the recoil to send itself back into the air and self right. This often results in it being forced into its perfect circle state.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - Carma___bigbang - May. 14, 2022
Name: Katsumi Tokito
||Appearance:Light blue messy haired young man with A Darker shade of blue in his hair also he wears a black face-mask with a white Evil smile on it Katsumi also Has a black hoodie that hasn’t been Ironed the Hoodie Has black cat ears with white fluff in the ears his pants are black his left eye is red and his Right eye is Purple||
||Backstory:He was a kid Obsessed with Monsters so when he watched Godzilla he was Obsessed he saw the other Kaiju’s went on and on about Monsters and on his birthday he discovered Beyblade So he Made a Beyblade named off the monsters…Void Kaiju!||
||Bey:Void,Kaiju,Ex,Aero,Dy,Bst,4B||
||Avatar core: kaiju–A K in the center with green eyes on the right and left sides of the K and claws at the bottom and top||
||Neo chipxplosion–It would be little things that represent monsters& kaiju||
||Neo blade:Void–Right spin blade with a Godzilla and Gihdora features on two thick and sharp scythes and two more scythes that activate mid-Battle||
||Neo Disk:4—B-A thick+heavy Disk with two Smaller bit still big metal scythes||
||NeoFrame:Aero–The frames gimmick is that it shoots out more Scythes and it’s a circle||
||Driverynamic-a Driver that has four modes Balance,Attack,Defense,Stanima||
||DualDrive:Beast-Whatever you want it to look like, just more Scythes||
||Moves:Void counter, Void Rage,Explosion rush!,Dynamic Launch,Beast flare!||.
||Super-movesynamic Crush,Beast Stance!,Void Hyper slash,Explosion Slam!.||
||Final—move:GODZILLA+ GIHDORA HYPER LAUNCH!!! (Basically when all the scythes are out they hit with full on force meaning it’s a Fatal blow)| |
||Oh and:The Scythes don’t scrape because when the bey Is at really low spin the Extra Scythes go Back in||
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - beansworth - May. 14, 2022
MasterofDerp and Carma___bigbang, both yours OC and Beys are entered to the contest.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: DualBurst - UnseenBurst - May. 14, 2022
(May. 13, 2022 5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...
1st Place: OC will be a main character.
2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.
3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.
DualBurst System.
Avatar Core: Similar to the Sparking Chip Core, it features the first letter of the bey/avatar's name. (eg. An "A" for Ares)
Neo Chip: Similar to Sparking Chip and DB Cores. This chips features the locks, and design of the avatar. {eg, A horizontal core, with a hero thrusting his sword to right, his cape dancing with the wind, for Ares.)
Neo Blade: Similar to Sparking Ring and DB Blade, this features the main points of contact, this don't hold anything, as the locks are on the chip. {eg, A blade with three huge swords, that are similar to Valkyrie, for Ares.}
Neo Disc: Like Gatinko Discs, these discs have gimmicks like re-bound, or free spinning ring.
Neo Disc': Sorta like Numbered Core Discs, they are purely metal, and can hold a Neo Frame. {eg, three upper blades(not super slanted) that hit the opponents bey into the layer, for Ares.}
Neo Frame: Basically God Frames.
Driver: Same as always.
Dual Drive: Similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis, it has the weight for the layers. {eg, three mini swords like 2A, that add weight to Warlord Ares' sword.}
Tch... I'm pretty rusty at this so I'm going to use a Previous Character if that's okay.
Name: Perseus (Goes by Percy) Nakano
Age: 14
Height: 5'5
Favorite Food: Fried Rice. (He hates eating fish or any other sea animal).
Appearance:
Nicknames: Percy (By Everybody) The Hydro King, Ruler of the Seas, Peasant of the Kiddie Pool (By Enemies).
Personality: Percy is a very kind person but he is also pretty sensitive for himself and for his friends. Usually, he is loved by everybody for his kindness and his protectiveness to people even if he doesn't know them and especially his friends. He can get really mad since he has ADHD and Dyslexia, he gets Extremely Mad when people mess with other people for no good reason and he's protective over his friends and always makes sure their okay. He is an Average Weighted Kid and he has a Powerful Resonance with his Bey. He also has a Strong Sense of Justice and is very protective over his Bey as it was the last thing his mother gave him before she passed away, he does not tolerate bullies and sometimes even gets into fights because of bullying, (The Scar under his eye will be explained later). Even when he loses a fight and he knows he's going to lose, he gives it his all to protect the person being bullied no matter the cost. Percy is usually a smiling kid with an upbeat tempo and has a Powerful Resonance with his Bey that he talks to it occasionally and it responds so only he can hear so that some people think he is crazy. He usually puts a Positive Spin on things even in the Worst Situations. He is meant to reflect Izuku Midoriya but in my way.
Backstory: (It'll be a bit different since this is a Different Story): Growing up, Percy just lived with his Mom and his Dad went missing right after he was born. They both lived with each other and grew alongside each other until one fateful night, their apartment caught on fire and his Mom sacrificed herself so that Percy could live on with his life as he was only 5 at the time and had barely started Kindergarten. Percy was the only person who survived that Tragic Event and from that moment, he lived with his Cousin, Aunt, and Uncle. They were all very loving towards him and treated him like his own child but Percy was scarred from the event for the rest of his life. It took him a Few Months to get over the ordeal and since it was so tragic he eventually forgot about it and only remembers bits and pieces of it but sometimes they pop up into his dreams and he states those are the Worst Nightmares he has at nights. His Relatives and Cousin treated him like family and he's loved growing up with them but sometimes Percy wonders about his Mom. Once some kids were making fun of him for not having a Mother so he got into a fight which is the scar under his eye and caused him to be suspended for a week. He's pretty smart and ranges around A-'s and even though he acts like an Idoit he can read his opponent's moves with ease and understands almost every type of Math and pays attention in class.
Avatar Core: Water Cursive P.
Neo Chip: Poseidon: *It's shaped like the ValkyrieII Core but instead of the Yellow, it features Metal on it, the Yellow Parts that curve backward on the end of the chip are Water Stickers like Waves and Typhoons basically. On the Front, it features this Bright Metal Cover over its mouth, and on the top it has a Green Eye Glaring Forward).
Neo Blade: Vortex: *It has 3 Blades shaped like Divine Belial's Blades except longer and have sharp Rubber Tips on the edges of the Blade. On top of all 3 of the Blades, it has Metal Air Ducts similar to Slash Valkyrie's except they're metal and it can create Powerful Wind Tornados around it that act as a Vortex around the Bey, next to the Blades, it has Metal Seahorses on the side similar to the L Gear on Divine Belial and it connects Rubber Parts similar to the White Parts next to Divine Belial's Blades.
Neo Disk: Sprinkle: It is a Combination between S Gear and D Gear and the All Might Disk. It is pretty small and on the bottom, the Disk is shaped like Legacy and on the top, it has a Bound Gimmick. It has Powerful Springs and can rebound off Beys and Surfaces with ease and it increases its Speed by a lot.
Driver: Plus: It's like a Combination of Power, Adventure, and Venture. It has Two Sharp Rubber Edges on the Driver pointing up like Adventure and below it there is a Ring of Rubber connected to the Two Parts pointing up and it has the Power tip that sinks in. This Part can also sink in leaving a Rubber Flat Ring that can make the Bey move at Incredibly High Speeds and it gives the Bey some Tight Teeth comparable to a ' Driver.
Dual Drive: Water Gear: It is like the 9 DB Armor, it is Extremely Heavy and balances out the Bey's 3 Powerful Piercing Beys and makes the Bey more balanced and gives it more Powerful Attacks.
Moves:
Vortex Surface Slash: (Poseidon speeds up and slashes across the opposing Beys Layer with a Strong Slash of Water.)
Whirlpool Shoot: (Poseidon picks up speed and continuously rams into the opposing Bey with a Powerful Attack.)
Waterfall Downpour: (Poseidon crashes into the opposing Bey from the air as a Water Fall (Visual) Crashes onto the opposing Bey with it.)
Vortex Flux: Main Move: (Poseidon picks up speed and when Percy and Poseidon are Fully Resonated Together they unleash a Powerful Slash and or Ram as their Fighting Spirits cause a Dragon of Water to erupt from their Resonance as when the impact is made an Explosion occurs as the Water Dragon crashes itself into the opposing Bey).
I hoped you liked it. If you need to make some changes I don't really mind. I hope this contest goes well!
BTW: I added some changes from the Original Character.
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