{Lucy stood there, after asking what she thought was the hardest question of her life. Silence was around them}
Baki(Flustered): “Do you really want that?”
{Lucy gripped his right hand harder, and watered up her eyes}
Lucy(Crying): “Of course, I do!”
{Baki then hugged Lucy and walked her to her room.}
Baki(Sincere): “If you really want that, then I’ll be your boyfriend.”

{The sun rose over the sea, and pierced the Yacht’s windows, and the Yacht was less then 5 minutes from arriving at Onigashima Island.}
{Keith and his team stood on the deck, and so did Izuku’s and Obito’s teams. In front of them all stood Valt.}
Valt(Excited): “Alright bladers! Today, you three will all battle Lui, Bell and Drum, in team battles! The first team to three points will win.”
{Then the Yacht docked, and Keith ran down the stairs with Izuku right next to him.}
Izuku(Excited): “Try to keep up!”
Keith(Excited): “Don't worry about it, let's go!”
{The rest of their teams ran with them, but Obito’s team walked behind, slowly and was talking about their plans.}
Obito(Cold): “Alright, Daishi. I’d like for you to use Void on Lui and Bell, and Wither for Drum.”
{Daishi nodded, and Obito looked to Van.}
Obito(Cold): “Van, when you go up, try and knock Extinction Longinus out. Lui’s the biggest threat with his powerhouse bey.”
{Van nodded and soon all three teams stood on the mountain’s peak, where Lui had decided to battle.}
Lui(Excited): “Alright, your Keith Shadis right? I’ve been looking forward to battling you.”
{Keith smiled, full of confidence}
Keith(Confident): “Alright, let’s see who will lose first!”
{Lui, Bell and Drum sat on the one side of the stadium while Keith, Irene and Kaede sat at the other.}
{Free walked to the stadium}
Free(Calm): “Alright, then. This is the first 3 on 3 battle, it will be first to 3 points. How we’ll begin is with two 1 on 1 battles, and then we’ll go to double battles. Use your BeyLoggers to register your bladers.”
{Lui looked at the opposing team.}
Lui(mind): "They're sending either Keith or Kaede, so predictable" (confident) "They're sending that kid first"
Drum(surprised): "Really? How do you know?"
Lui: "Experience. Now Bell, you go up first.”
{Bell jumped up}
Bell(Excited): “I’ll make you proud!’
{Keith looked over and said}
Keith(Confident): “I think Lui will be sending himself or Drum. I’ll go up!”
{Keith walked up, and Irene said}
Irene(Nervous): “Keith, do your best!”
{Keith smiled to Irene}
Keith(Confident): “I’ve got this!”
{Keith then saw Bell, and realized he messed up.}
Keith(Mind): “Oh carp! I messed up. I should have thought of sending Kaede”
Bell(Mind): “Lui was right! I’ll use Deadly Belial and beat Keith!”
{Both bladers put their beys onto their launchers.}
Keith(Surprised): “Hold up, Bell! Belial looks different.”
Bell(Excited): “That’s because I’ve evolved Belial into the Mythical System! Now it is even easier to crush you!”
Keith(Surprised): “Woah! That’s so cool, glad I get to battle you!”
Both: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Belial and Kratos hit the stadium floor, and Belial darted around the outer ridge.}
Bell(Excited): “Let’s go, Belial! Flashing Shoot!”
{Belial began barraging Kratos. And Keith couldn’t think of what to do.}
Bell(Excited): “I’ll burst Kratos!”
{Keith kept thinking, until he released.}
Keith(Confident): “I’ve gotten it! Mythic Break!”
{Kratos dodged Belial and went to the outer ridge.}
Bell(Surprised): “Nani!?”
Keith(Confident): “I’ve been training for this!”
{Bell smiled, and talked to Belial.}
Bell(Excited): “Belial, this battle is amazing so far!”
Belial(Excited): “It sure is, Bell!”
Bell(Excited): “Let’s go all out!”
Belial: “Right!”
{Then Belial sped up.}
Bell(Excited): “Now, Deadly Sync!”
{Bell and Belial entered Sync and rushed into the center, but Kratos barely dodged him.}
{Keith stomped his right foot into the floor}
Keith(Nervous): “Let’s go, with God Sync!”
{Then Keith and Kratos entered their sync, and Bell smiled.}
Bell(Mind): “This battle is so fun! I can’t hold back anymore!” (Sync): “Now, Deadly Bomber!”
Keith(Sync): “We’ll stay strong! Mythical Axe!”
{Both beys clashed, and the wind kicked up around the beys.}
Bell(Sync): “Keep going, Belial!”
Keith(Sync): “We’ll beat him, Kratos!”
{Then Kratos flew out of the stadium, and Keith caught it.}
Free: “And that makes Bell, the winner.”
{Bell jumped up}
Bell(Excited): “Yeah, I did it!”
{Lui chuckled, and Drum ran to Bell.}
Drum(Excited): “Nice going, Bell!”
{The two fist-bumped, and Keith returned to his team}
Keith(Guilty): “Sorry guys, I could have done better. Maybe I could’ve went with my attack mode.”
{Irene got up, and hugged Keith}
Irene(Proud): “It’s fine, Keith. Even if you fail, you did your best.”
{Keith smiled and hugged Irene, and whilst this went on Kaede watched from the side, and felt something.}
Kaede(Mind): “What am I feeling?”
Free: “Alright, send up your next blader!”
{Keith looked at his team, and Lui’s team}
Keith(Confident): “I’m sending you in, Irene.”
{Irene nodded, and prepared to walk to the stadium.}
Bell(Thinking): “Lui, who are you sending in?”
{Lui smirked while getting up.}
Drum(Confident): “We’ll be winning!”
{Bell smiled as Lui scanned his beyLogger and walked up}
Free: “Alright, Irene Mao versus Lui Shirasagijo, their beys are Eruption Ifrit and Extinction Longinus.”
Irene(mind): "I'm going against Lui!? I don't know if I can..." {Ifrit shined for a brief moment} "... But I'll try my best!"
{Irene and Lui readied their launchers and beys.}
Lui(Confident): “I’ll crush you and Ifrit.”
{Irene looked at Lui, and thought about her mother’s battle against him.}
Irene(Mind): “Mom, give me and Ifrit the power to beat Lui!”
{Irene gripped her launcher harder, and got ready to launch.}
Both: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Ifrit and Longinus hit the stadium floor, and Ifrit took center.}
Irene(Confident): “Now, Eruption Zone!”
{Lui stomped his foot}
Lui(Excited): “Now, Nightmare Shot!”
{Longinus began barraging Ifrit, and didn’t let up.}
Keith: “Come on, Irene! Show him, what you can do!”
{Irene heard Keith’s words, and felt more power.}
Irene(Mind): “Thank you for everything you’ve done for me, Keith!” (Confident): “Ifrit! Now, Eruption Upper!”
{Ifrit hit Longinus into the air, and Drum and Bell called.}
Drum(Nervous): “No way, Lui!”
Bell(Confused): “Lui, you’re a legend and your losing to her!?”
{Lui was unfazrd by that move, surprising Irene}
Lui(serious): "Doing an upper attack on Longinus? Daring today, aren't we?" (Smirking): “Our turn Longinus! Extinction Squall!”
{Longinus began diving down. Keith and Kaede both got nervous.}
{Longinus hit the wall and sprinted towards Ifrit, giving it a powerful upper attack and sending it out of the stadium.}
Free(Surprised): “Lui wins. Lui’s team is awarded another point, one more and you guys win.”
Irene walked back, and Keith hugged her, saying she did her best.
Keith, looked over to Lui’s team, and tried to figure out, their next blader.
Keith(Confident): “Alright, so far they’ve used everyone but Drum, so you’d think they’d sent him up, but they won’t. That’s why we'll be sending you up, Kaede.”
{Kaede chokes on her own saliva and coughs a little}
Kaede(Surprised): “Eh?”
{Keith chuckled}
Keith(Happy): “I was just saying, that you’ll be the best one suited for this!”
Kaede(nervous): "But what if I fail? We will lose!"
Keith: "That statement could be applied to everyone, just believe in yourself and you can do it"
{Kaede reluctantly nodded and walked up to the stadium. Bell walked up for Lui’s side. }
{Keith smiled}
Keith(Proud): “You got this, Kaede!”
{Kaede blushed and nodded, grabbing Kerbeus. Bell grabbed Belial}
Bell(Confident): “I’ll take you down, with Belial.”
{Kaede stayed silent as she put Kerbeus on the launcher with some difficulty}
All: "3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!"
{Bell does a powerful launch but Kerbeus only drops from the launcher without any spin}
Free(Confused): “Um, restart." {goes to Kaede} "Kaede? Are you ok?”
{Kaede couldn’t hear him, she was paralized. Fre was waving his hand in front of her face with no response}
Free: "Um... Let's have a 5 minute pause."
{Free walks away as Keith and Irene go to Kaede}
Irene(worried): "Kaede, what is going on?"
Keith: “Kaede, you got this, take a deep breath.”
{Kaede blushed, and soon began taking some deep breaths and soon put Kerbeus on her launcher.}
Kaede(Confident): “I’ll win for us, Keith!.. Oh, and Irene! Sorry!"
Irene: "Don't worry about that. Now show them what you got!"
{Kaede smiled, and the two fist-bumped. They walked back to their corner, while Kaede stood there and got ready to win.}
Free: “Alright, Round 3, take 2!”
Both: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Kerbeus and Belial hit the stadium floor, and Kerbeus took center while Belial rushed around the outer ridge.}
{Bell chuckled}
Bell(Confident): “Belial! Flashing Shoot!”
{Belial began barraging Kerbeus, but the attacks weren’t doing much.}
Bell(Surprised): “Huh? Seems Kerbeus packs more defense then I thought! Now, Deadly Bomber!”
{Belial rushed to the center, and slammed into Kerbeus and flew out of the stadium.}
Bell(Confused): “What the!? Belial!”
{Kaede smiled, and leaped into the air, a tiny bit.}
Keith and Irene(Proud): “Nice job, Kaede!”
{Kaede smiled back to them and grabbed Kerbeus.}
Bell(confused): "How did you even won?!"
Kaede: "Oh I just used your attack to send you out"
Free: “Alright then, Keith’s team could come back, but now it’s time for the Two on Two matches.”

{Lui’s Team}
Lui(Thinking): “I don’t know who I should send up for this.”
{Bell looked to Lui}
Bell(Confident): “You and Drum should go!”
Drum(Confused): “But don’t you want to battle?”
{Bell smiled}
Bell(Happy): “I did battle, but you haven’t yet so go!”
{Lui nodded}
Lui(Confident): “Let’s go, Drum. Bell gave his opinion and I agree.”
{Bell smiled, and cheered}
Bell(Excited): “Go get em, Lui and Drum!”

{Keith’s Team}
Keith(Thinking): “I think that Kaede needs to go back up, she proved her potential well. But who else?”
Irene: “Well, you are our leader so you should go.”
{Keith, was surprised by Irene’s comment}
Keith(Confused): “But you’ve barely battled, why don’t you want to go?"
{Irene smiled}
Irene(Happy): “I’m happy as long as your happy, Keith. Besides, I'msure they will send Lui and Drum, They've battled tag battles before.”
{Keith smiled, and blushed while Kaede watched the whole thing, and walked up.}
{Keith, Kaede and Lui and Drum all walked up to the stadium, and prepared to launch their beys.}
Keith(mind): "Irene was right."
Free: “Alright this battle could mean Lui’s win or Keith’s comeback, get ready, and set!”
Everyone: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Kratos, Kerbeus, Longinus and Dragon hit the stadium floor, and began spinning around the stadium. Kerbeus took center, and Kratos, Longinus and Dragon rushed around the outer ridge.}
Keith(Mind): “I went with Balance Mode, so I have everything in one, but I need to make sure I can help Kaede.”
Lui(Confident): “Go now, Longinus! Nightmare Shot!”
Drum(Confident): “Follow him, Dragon! Dragon Shoot!”
{Both dragons beys rushed to Kerbeus, and Keith was surprised.}
Keith(Mind): “They have amazing teamwork!”
Drum and Lui(Excited): “Go now, Double Dragon Impact!”
{Longinus and Dragon began colliding, and go even quicker the center.}
Keith(Nervous): “Kaede! Don’t get knocked out!”
{Kaede nodded, and called.}
Kaede(Nervous): “K-Kerbeus! Omen Shield!”
{Lui and Drum smirked, and their beys slammed into Kerbeus. And launched it into the far wall.}
Kaede(Surprised): “Kerbeus!”
Keith(Nervous): “We can’t let them win, Kratos! Mythical Break!”
{Kratos scraped on it’s Driver’s rubber and shot towards Dragon and Longinus.}
Drum(Surprised): “We can’t let them take Lui out, right Dragon? Now, Crescent Bound!”
{Kratos hit Dragon’s bound blades and was hit back a bit, but got back to shooting towards the center.}
Keith(Surprised): “I totally forgot about your bound blades!”
Drum(Happy): “Ha! Yeah, but that’s not Dragon’s only trick!”
{Dragon shot towards Kratos and ,when the two beys collided, Dragon’s rebound wings pushed in, and locked in place, revealing rubber attack points.}
Keith: *gasp*
Drum(Excited): “That’s right, Dragon’s Crescent Ring features an awakening gimmick!”
{Keith smirked}
Keith(Surprised): “You sure have a lot of things with your bey, rubber and rebound with the layer, and metal on the driver, but I have more!”
Drum(Excited): “Let’s see who’s better, Keith!”
{Kratos and Dragon began clashing, and both bladers looked at their beys with excitement for who the winner would be.}
{Then as the beys were clashing, Kratos’ Blade began awakening, and the bound blades, locked in place, revealing rubber, and exposing the metal axes, on top, more.}
{Dragon was launched away from Kratos, and Drum gasped.}
Drum(Surprised): “Woah! Your Blade evolved!”
{Keith smiled}
Keith(Confident): “Yep, and now we’ll beat you! Mythical Axe!”
{Drum chuckled}
Drum(Confident): “Not so fast, newbie! Crescent Break!”
Lui: "Syke!"
{Longinus rams onto Kratos and sends it towards Kerbeus. Dragon lost control and rammed on a wall, bursting}
Drum: *gasp*
{Kratos barely dodges Kerbeus}
Keith(surprised): “That was close.”
Lui(Confident): “Alright, Longinus! Extinction Sync!”
{Longinus rushed to where Kerbeus was and Kaede got nervous, but thought about what Keith had said}
Kaede(Nervous): “Don’t let him beat us, Kerbeus….Omen Counter!”
{Lui stomped his right foot into the ground, and yelled}
Lui(Sync): “Alright now, Longinus! Extinction Upper!”
{Longinus slammed into Kerbeus and sent it flying into the air. Kaede gasped.}
{Keith looked at the situation while Kratos appeared behind him}
Keith: “Alright, Kratos, what should we do?”
Kratos(Thinking): “I think we should wait for Kerbeus to fall, and then rush over and do a pincer attack on Longinus!”
Keith(Excited): “Sounds good, partner!”
{Keith and Kratos fist-bumped, and Keith looked over and saw Kerbeus almost at position.}
Keith(Confident): “Alright, Kaede! Prepare for this, God Sync!”
{Keith and Kratos synced up, and shot towards Longinus.}
{Kerbeus then fell, and hit Longinus while Kratos came in from behind and did the same,}
Keith(Sync): “This is our Synchronized Pincer!”
{Lui chuckled and called}
Lui(Confident): “You truly thought, you’ve cornered the Great Lui! Your wrong, Keith Shadis! Extinction Upper!”
{Longinus then hit both beys with it’s dragon heads, and launched them into the air, and Kerbeus burst whilst Kratos didn’t, but landed outside pf the stadium.}
Keith(Surprised): “It didn’t work! Ugh, come on!”
{Lui chuckled}
Lui: “This is what happens, when you guys try to win against a Legend!”
{Keith sighed and walked down with Kaede. Obito walked up to Lui with his team.}
Obito(Cold): “Lui Shirasagijo, I’ll destroy you.”
{Lui cackled}
Lui(Entertained): “Okay, then, Mr. Confidence!”
{Van and Daishi looked at Lui and his team, and whilst they did, a helicopter landed.}
{Obito looked over to the helicopter, and saw Valt with two other people.}
Obito(Confused): “Who did Valt bring?”
{As the helicopter door’s opened, Van’s eyes opened as he saw his family exit from the helicopter.}
Shasa(Happy): “Van, is that you!? I’m so glad to see you!”
{Shasa ran over to Van, but before she could hug him, he pushed her away}
Van(Angry): “Valt, why the hell did you bring them!”
{Shasa looked at Van, and her mind became filled with how her son had changed, Valt walked over to his wife, and held her close.}
Valt(Concerned): “Van, this isn’t you. What made you change?”
{Van clenched his fists and grit his teeth, and looked at Valt with pure anger.}
{Then from behind Shasa and Valt, a short girl walked out. She had long deep blue hair, and was wearing panda themed clothes.}
{Van tensed up more as he looked at her.}
Tsugumi(Confused): “Where’s big brother, mama?”
{Shasa began crying into Valt’s shoulder, and the two saw Van walking over to Tsugumi.}
{Van lowered his body, so he could be near eye to eye level with Tsugumi.}
Van(Angry): “I’m right here, Tsugumi!”
{Tsugumi was frightened, by Van’s yell, and began crying.}
{Van grabbed her collar, and pulled her to him}
Van(Angry): “Shut up, your so annoying! Why were you even born!”
{Before Van could say anything else, Keith ran over and punched Van.}
Obito: "Nice punch."
Keith(Pissed): “How could you say this to your own family! Let alone your little sister!”
{Van, rubbed his arm where he was punched, and looked to Keith and yelled}
Van(Angry): “What would you know about family!?”
Keith(Pissed): “I would know because I have one too, I have two sisters! And both of them are the best sisters I could ever ask for! You’re the one who knows nothing about family!”
{Van smacked Keith’s arm and yelled}
Van(Angry): “You want to start a fight right here, and now! I’ll beat you to a pulp!”
{Valt and Obito step in between them}
Obito: "As much as I'd love a fight, this isn't the right place or time."
Valt: "Fighting never goes anywhere but the Hospital."
Van(Angry): “Outta my way, Obito!”
Keith(Pissed): “Valt, let me teach your son, a lesson!”
{Valt frowned}
Valt(Sad): “Why must this happen, you two could’ve been best friends. I have no clue why you guys think brawls are the easiest way to settle things.”
{Keith stood there, and loosened his grip}
Keith(Guilty): “Sorry, Valt. I should’ve thought more into this.”
{Van loosed his grip, and just looked away}
{Valt walked back}
Valt(Happy): “See what talking can do, maybe you guys should do that mor…”
{Van jumped forward and slugged Keith in the chest, caughting Obito and Valt off-guard}
Van(Angry): “Take that, Keith Shadis!”
{Everyone’s faces became concerned, and Irene yelled}
Irene(Concerned): “Van! Why would you do that!”
{Van looked to her, his eyes pierced her soul and he rushed to her, but Obito appeared in front of him, and grabbed his fist.}
Obito(Cold): “Van, don’t waste your time on them, else you might get in even more trouble.”
{Van loosened his grip, and turned away. Obito's team walked away}
Valt(Concerned): “Get Keith to the Yacht now! Lui!”
{Lui nodded. They canceled the rest of the matches.}
{Valt, Shasa, Baki and War grabbed Keith and ran him to the Yacht.}
{Irene followed them, her tears flying off her cheeks. By nightfall, Keith was up and feeling fine, and Van was punished for fighting with a fellow member, and all his stars were taken, plus he wasn’t allowed to participate in the next stop.}
{Keith stood outside on the deck, watching the sunrise. Behind him came Baki, Irene, Lucy, War, Shu, Valt and Free.}
Valt(Concerned): “You sure your alright, Keith?”
{Keith nodded, and smiled.}
Keith(Confident): “That punch was nothing.”
{Irene walked up, and hugged Keith and he hugged her back. }
{Shu walked up to Keith and said,}
Shu(Concerned): “Keith, I’ve been watching you blade and I can’t help but see myself and Valt in you. So I made you some things.”
{Shu grabbed a bag, and opened it up, and Keith gasped.}
Shu(Happy): “I was inspired by you, and made a Mystic Dash Launcher, it features a stronger clicking system, bearing and finally a pretty long string.”
{Keith smiled, and took the new launcher.}
Keith(Amazed): “I can’t thank you enough, Shu!”
{Shu smiled}
Shu(Sincere): “But that’s not all, I also wanted to battle you with my Legacy Spriggan.”
{Keith gasped, as he saw Legacy Spriggan.}
{Keith smiled}
Keith(Overjoyed): “Of course, I’d love to!”
{As the two bladers battled, Van lurked in the shadows and watched their battle.}
Van(Cold): “Enjoy your fun for now, Keith. As you’ve provoked Van Aoi. Prepare for war.”

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