Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Demon Belial - Jul. 09, 2021
Hello! I'm new to this community and wanted to make a fan fiction series(So if my english is bad it's not my first language)
So in this series the character focus is Shu Kurenai not Valt Aoi and show that how consequences changes when the focus goes to Shu.
So Shu is a novice blader and Valt is experienced and Shu wants to beat Valt and wanna battle him in the finals
I will start this very soon!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Dragon Blader Z - Jul. 09, 2021
This is really interesting
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Demon Belial - Jul. 09, 2021
(Jul. 09, 2021 12:37 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: This is really interesting
Thanks!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Dragon Blader Z - Jul. 09, 2021
checked you made a account today so welcome to the WBO @DemonBelial
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Demon Belial - Jul. 09, 2021
(Jul. 09, 2021 12:42 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: checked you made a account today so welcome to the WBO @DemonBelial
Yeah thanks. I actually come here to read spoilers for beyblade burst anime then I saw people making fan made stories so I decided to make one too
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Dragon Blader Z - Jul. 09, 2021
(Jul. 09, 2021 12:43 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: (Jul. 09, 2021 12:42 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: checked you made a account today so welcome to the WBO @DemonBelial
Yeah thanks. I actually come here to read spoilers for beyblade burst anime then I saw people making fan made stories so I decided to make one too
oh ok
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Demon Belial - Jul. 09, 2021
The Proluge is out!
Episode 0: Valtryek VS The Winter Knight!!
Hanami: Ok Boys and Girls! Are you ready for the final battle of the National Tournament?!!
Crowd: Yeah!!!!!!
Hanami: On the red corner we have The Wonder Boy! Defeating the 3 members of Supreme Four back to back and now came to the finals!
Valt: Me and my partner are gonna win this match!(shows Valtryek)
Shu: Valt! You got this thing!
Hanami: On the blue corner We have Japan's strongest Blader the Winter Knight Lui Shirosagi!!
Lui: *Does'nt says anything and pulls his launcher*
Valt: Lui! Valtryek and I are just one step behind to become Japan's best. After this I'm gonna take on the World Championships
Lui: *Laughs* You think you can best Luinor? Luinor is gonna wreck Valtryek once and for all!
Shu: (thinking) Valt after this match I'm gonna make my own bey and beat you
Referee: First Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
*Luinor goes straight at Valtryek and knocks it out on one hit*
Valt: What? It's so fast!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a Over Finish! The score is now 1:0
Valt: Partner I know you got this let's go straight with Ultra Flash Launch!
Lui: You won't be smiling for long.
Referee: Second Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1!
Lui/Valt: Let it Rip!!
Lui: Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
Valt: Ultra Flash Launch!
Hanami: Valtryek is speeding up! It even surpassed Luinor's Speed!
Shu: Go Valt! Defeat him!!
Valt: Let's go Valtryek!!!(Resonates up)
Lui: You may have surpassed Luinor on speed but it got more attack power than Valtryek.(Resonates up)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
Lui: Finish this Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
*Valtryek and Luinor both flew up*
*Valtryek Bursts*
Valt: *Shocked* What?
Lui: Told you! You won't be smiling for long! *Laughs*
Hanami: It's Finished!! Valt climed up so high but cannot defeat the Winter Knight!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a burst finish! Lui Shirosagi wins the match with the score of 3 to nothing.
Valt: *Grabs Valtryek and cries*
Shu: Valt....
*After the match*
Valt: Oh Shu! Sorry I lost but the battle was exciting!! Valtryek and I enjoyed it!
Shu: But you did'nt win.
Valt: Winning is not important. I always battle just to enjoy myself and Valtryek!
Shu: I don't know how you are even smiling after being humiliated. I'm gonna make my own bey and show you that I'm the Best!
Valt: Fine then. So let's meet in the final then?
Shu: Yeah!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 09, 2021
(Jul. 09, 2021 1:41 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: The Proluge is out!
Episode 0: Valtryek VS The Winter Knight!!
Hanami: Ok Boys and Girls! Are you ready for the final battle of the National Tournament?!!
Crowd: Yeah!!!!!!
Hanami: On the red corner we have The Wonder Boy! Defeating the 3 members of Supreme Four back to back and now came to the finals!
Valt: Me and my partner are gonna win this match!(shows Valtryek)
Shu: Valt! You got this thing!
Hanami: On the blue corner We have Japan's strongest Blader the Winter Knight Lui Shirosagi!!
Lui: *Does'nt says anything and pulls his launcher*
Valt: Lui! Valtryek and I are just one step behind to become Japan's best. After this I'm gonna take on the World Championships
Lui: *Laughs* You think you can best Luinor? Luinor is gonna wreck Valtryek once and for all!
Shu: (thinking) Valt after this match I'm gonna make my own bey and beat you
Referee: First Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
*Luinor goes straight at Valtryek and knocks it out on one hit*
Valt: What? It's so fast!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a Over Finish! The score is now 1:0
Valt: Partner I know you got this let's go straight with Ultra Flash Launch!
Lui: You won't be smiling for long.
Referee: Second Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1!
Lui/Valt: Let it Rip!!
Lui: Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
Valt: Ultra Flash Launch!
Hanami: Valtryek is speeding up! It even surpassed Luinor's Speed!
Shu: Go Valt! Defeat him!!
Valt: Let's go Valtryek!!!(Resonates up)
Lui: You may have surpassed Luinor on speed but it got more attack power than Valtryek.(Resonates up)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
Lui: Finish this Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
*Valtryek and Luinor both flew up*
*Valtryek Bursts*
Valt: *Shocked* What?
Lui: Told you! You won't be smiling for long! *Laughs*
Hanami: It's Finished!! Valt climed up so high but cannot defeat the Winter Knight!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a burst finish! Lui Shirosagi wins the match with the score of 3 to nothing.
Valt: *Grabs Valtryek and cries*
Shu: Valt....
*After the match*
Valt: Oh Shu! Sorry I lost but the battle was exciting!! Valtryek and I enjoyed it!
Shu: But you did'nt win.
Valt: Winning is not important. I always battle just to enjoy myself and Valtryek!
Shu: I don't know how you are even smiling after being humiliated. I'm gonna make my own bey and show you that I'm the Best!
Valt: Fine then. So let's meet in the final then?
Shu: Yeah!
Nice Chapter! 9/10 keep it up, mate.
(Jul. 09, 2021 2:00 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: (Jul. 09, 2021 1:41 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: The Proluge is out!
Episode 0: Valtryek VS The Winter Knight!!
Hanami: Ok Boys and Girls! Are you ready for the final battle of the National Tournament?!!
Crowd: Yeah!!!!!!
Hanami: On the red corner we have The Wonder Boy! Defeating the 3 members of Supreme Four back to back and now came to the finals!
Valt: Me and my partner are gonna win this match!(shows Valtryek)
Shu: Valt! You got this thing!
Hanami: On the blue corner We have Japan's strongest Blader the Winter Knight Lui Shirosagi!!
Lui: *Does'nt says anything and pulls his launcher*
Valt: Lui! Valtryek and I are just one step behind to become Japan's best. After this I'm gonna take on the World Championships
Lui: *Laughs* You think you can best Luinor? Luinor is gonna wreck Valtryek once and for all!
Shu: (thinking) Valt after this match I'm gonna make my own bey and beat you
Referee: First Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
*Luinor goes straight at Valtryek and knocks it out on one hit*
Valt: What? It's so fast!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a Over Finish! The score is now 1:0
Valt: Partner I know you got this let's go straight with Ultra Flash Launch!
Lui: You won't be smiling for long.
Referee: Second Battle! Ready Set!
Valt/Lui: 3! 2! 1!
Lui/Valt: Let it Rip!!
Lui: Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
Valt: Ultra Flash Launch!
Hanami: Valtryek is speeding up! It even surpassed Luinor's Speed!
Shu: Go Valt! Defeat him!!
Valt: Let's go Valtryek!!!(Resonates up)
Lui: You may have surpassed Luinor on speed but it got more attack power than Valtryek.(Resonates up)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
Lui: Finish this Luinor! Lost Spiral!!
*Valtryek and Luinor both flew up*
*Valtryek Bursts*
Valt: *Shocked* What?
Lui: Told you! You won't be smiling for long! *Laughs*
Hanami: It's Finished!! Valt climed up so high but cannot defeat the Winter Knight!!
Referee: Lost Luinor with a burst finish! Lui Shirosagi wins the match with the score of 3 to nothing.
Valt: *Grabs Valtryek and cries*
Shu: Valt....
*After the match*
Valt: Oh Shu! Sorry I lost but the battle was exciting!! Valtryek and I enjoyed it!
Shu: But you did'nt win.
Valt: Winning is not important. I always battle just to enjoy myself and Valtryek!
Shu: I don't know how you are even smiling after being humiliated. I'm gonna make my own bey and show you that I'm the Best!
Valt: Fine then. So let's meet in the final then?
Shu: Yeah!
Nice Chapter! 9/10 keep it up, mate.
You could work a little bit on dialogues it's 70% battle and 30% dialogue.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
Great chapter keep it!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Reboot - Demon Belial - Jul. 19, 2021
I discontinued it cuz I'm busy now a days
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