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RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 01, 2021
(Jul. 01, 2021 6:47 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:(Jul. 01, 2021 6:35 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Thing is though, the gimmick has function properly with the Sparking system and considering I wasn't impressed with how CrazyAries handed his Phoenix. Its basically the same reason a GT Phoenix never happened, the Ring/Base would be pretty wide and there needs to be room in the layer for the internal workings that makes the gimmick function. I hope this makes sense
You can fuse the layer (lazy one) or make the internal working at the ring, all you need is a circular line for armor and some "teeth" at that line (try to imagine revive phoenix with a chip/ring, its still possible(at least in my head it is)) also lemme watch the CrazyAries thing, it might change everything
He basically just made the entire ring the actual Armor which is a pretty bad design flaw.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 01, 2021
(Jul. 01, 2021 6:52 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:Yeah, check out my edited spoiler. Also I've would make an un-pop-up-able armor for a different "double burst"(Jul. 01, 2021 6:47 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: You can fuse the layer (lazy one) or make the internal working at the ring, all you need is a circular line for armor and some "teeth" at that line (try to imagine revive phoenix with a chip/ring, its still possible(at least in my head it is)) also lemme watch the CrazyAries thing, it might change everything
He basically just made the entire ring the actual Armor which is a pretty bad design flaw.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 08, 2021
I'm excited for the next chapters lol (Also Lane's being a real pain at this point it'll be satisfying for Athena to win WITHOUT breaking Lucius LOL)
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 08, 2021
(Jul. 08, 2021 4:34 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I'm excited for the next chapters lol (Also Lane's being a real pain at this point it'll be satisfying for Athena to win WITHOUT breaking Lucius LOL)
Yeah all chapters are building up to the final battle so its gonna be a wild ride.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 12, 2021
Wattpad is down so I can't write until its fixed, hopefully it comes back up soon.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - LegendJustice - Jul. 12, 2021
Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 12, 2021
(Jul. 12, 2021 12:44 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?
Because Wattpad is my main writing outlet and I don't like writing directly on WBO anymore. even if I was going to do that, because Wattpad is down i cannot go in and retrieve what ive written until it comes back up.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - LegendJustice - Jul. 12, 2021
(Jul. 12, 2021 1:07 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(Jul. 12, 2021 12:44 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?
Because Wattpad is my main writing outlet and I don't like writing directly on WBO anymore. even if I was going to do that, because Wattpad is down i cannot go in and retrieve what ive written until it comes back up.
Okay make sense!
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 12, 2021
Great Fanfic! Adeona looks like black suit Samus(A character from Metroid)
plus I ship Aiga and Athena lol
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 13, 2021
New Chapter released soon.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 13, 2021
(Lane when he senses Athena's presence)
Lane: UGHHHHHHHH!!!
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - LegendJustice - Jul. 13, 2021
Lol lane works alone
(Jul. 13, 2021 8:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: New Chapter released soon.
I’m excited
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 17, 2021
![[Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]](https://i.postimg.cc/pLTNRX0F/20210717-135414.jpg)
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RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
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How much free time do you have?!
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 8:25 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:(Jul. 17, 2021 7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
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How much free time do you have?!
Considering I'm on summer break and I don't have much to do, quite a lot
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 8:29 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(Jul. 17, 2021 8:25 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: How much free time do you have?!
Considering I'm on summer break and I don't have much to do, quite a lot
Touche, as a fellow writer I can relate to that just being up at 9 trying to finish a chapter lol, Anyways good luck! I'm excited to see the next chapter!
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - ColdFlames13 - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
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Hmm...
Ha
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*tea .. **tears??**
Adeo
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 8:38 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote:(Jul. 17, 2021 7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
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Hmm...
Ha
Sp
wit
*tea .. **tears??**
Adeo
OMG She or He gave us a leak how did I not see it before
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
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1839 words? lol that's a big one
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 17, 2021
Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story-of-lanes-sister-athena-~beyblade-burst
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story-of-lanes-sister-athena-~beyblade-burst
I didn't expected Lane would switch places with Aiga.... Anyways, Nice Chapter!
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 17, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story-of-lanes-sister-athena-~beyblade-burst
How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!
Spoiler (Click to View)
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:(Jul. 17, 2021 9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story-of-lanes-sister-athena-~beyblade-burst
How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!
Spoiler (Click to View)
Yeah, Shu isn't exactly hard to write for.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - UnseenBurst - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 3:30 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:For me it is I'm trying to make him cool but nice but not as nice as Valt but you get what I'm saying(Jul. 17, 2021 9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!
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Yeah, Shu isn't exactly hard to write for.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - ColdFlames13 - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story-of-lanes-sister-athena-~beyblade-burst
IT'S TOO SHORT!! I expected better from you.
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