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RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 17, 2012

Gah, I feel the exact same way China Bladeâ„¢ does! That was too adorable! Aww, poor Bri. Are the rest of Peacefully to Assemble gonna pick on them? Pinching_eyes

*cough*I can't believe Kai-V said yes. Well, I guess she always surprises us!*cough*


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 18, 2012

Well, after a much more emotional reaction to chapter 15 than I thought, onto Chapter 16!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 18, 2012

Okay, that ending got my heart racing. Oh dear. This is scary. I'm gonna pass out now. *passes out*


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 19, 2012

(Sep. 18, 2012  3:57 PM)Duck of Hades Wrote: Okay, that ending got my heart racing. Oh dear. This is scary. I'm gonna pass out now. *passes out*

No, don't pass out. The views are disappearing right before my eyes!!!

Anyways, Chapter 17!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 19, 2012

Yeah!!! Grin Go Cloud!!! That. was. an. epic. battle!

Aww... since when does Miles get scared like that?


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 19, 2012

(Sep. 19, 2012  7:22 PM)Duck of Hades Wrote: since when does Miles get scared like that?

I stated it in the story, but here's why:

--During his world championship finals match against R-Dev, Miles fought during a storm with lighting and wind, which (and i did not mention this) frightened him. He's been scared of storms ever since, kind of like that one fear we all have. I kinda forgot to mention that earlier in the beginning because I was focused on introducing the new plot of the story...--


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 19, 2012

(Sep. 19, 2012  10:17 PM)DefStamina88 Wrote:
(Sep. 19, 2012  7:22 PM)Duck of Hades Wrote: since when does Miles get scared like that?

I stated it in the story, but here's why:

--During his world championship finals match against R-Dev, Miles fought during a storm with lighting and wind, which (and i did not mention this) frightened him. He's been scared of storms ever since, kind of like that one fear we all have. I kinda forgot to mention that earlier in the beginning because I was focused on introducing the new plot of the story...--

Ah, I see. Thank you! Smile



RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - NenMrix - Sep. 20, 2012

After reading Bri and Miles breaking out of the romance and Yaoi,Yaoi and MOAR YAOI I.... got really upset....


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 20, 2012

Here's Chapter 18!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 20, 2012

Great chapter! I've been waiting to see Draco and Corona battle! Grin Keep it up!

NenMrix - Please don't complain here. Thank you.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - NenMrix - Sep. 21, 2012

(Sep. 20, 2012  10:04 PM)Duck of Hades Wrote: Great chapter! I've been waiting to see Draco and Corona battle! Grin Keep it up!

NenMrix - Please don't complain here. Thank you.
FYI: I wasn't complaining. I was saying my thoughts.Besides, I wasn't NEGATIVELY CRITICIZING his work. If I wanted to complain, I would have stopped reading. Can't you people not start a misunderstanding for once?





RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 22, 2012

Here's Chapter 19!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Dum Spiro Pugno - Sep. 22, 2012

Nice content, and pretty good.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 23, 2012

Chapter 20!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 23, 2012

Dose guns.... Must not go into gun lover mode...
And...
Dat ending...
o.o" Whoa.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Mandy© - Sep. 23, 2012

I am sure he can write more and actually sell this as a book like with pictures. Maybe he can earn some money Wink anyways, good job. I love your story.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 24, 2012

(Sep. 23, 2012  6:30 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Dose guns.... Must not go into gun lover mode...
And...
Dat ending...
o.o" Whoa.

I'm not. It's fine in moderation, like high fructose corn syrup!!! XD
(Sep. 23, 2012  6:46 PM)Aurora.Light Wrote: I am sure he can write more and actually sell this as a book like with pictures. Maybe he can earn some money Wink anyways, good job. I love your story.

I probably would. I like your feedback... Smile


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 25, 2012

Sorry for double post, but here's chapter 21!!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 25, 2012

Aw.
Atleast Bryan's okay.
I thought he was dead there for a second. XD


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Duck - Sep. 26, 2012

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Great chapter!


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 27, 2012

Chapter 22!!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 29, 2012

Sorry for the double-post, but I got Chapter 23!!!




RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Kujikato - Sep. 29, 2012

You have quite the number of Capitalization errors, as well as some grammatical. Well, the plot is interesting, somewhat, but way too fast. Develop the characters more. You overuse the dialogue, it looks rather long but is short. You should also describe the characters more. Get into detail for the battles. About the romance, I'm confused who's the guy and who's the girl, I'm seriously confused. Seriously. KIU nonethless.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 30, 2012

Hm, some legit help. Thanks, Kujikato!!

Anyways, here's Chapter 24!!


I also have a special ending after the Epilogue coming soon!! Look out for it after the final chapter!!!


RE: [Beyblade Story] Peacefully to Assemble [RATED PG] - Kujikato - Sep. 30, 2012

Cool, so wait, Miles is the girl right? Argh I'm confused! Good chapter nonetheless, KiU again!