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RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 4 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Aug. 27, 2012
(Aug. 27, 2012 11:13 PM)Insomniac Wrote:(Aug. 27, 2012 11:05 PM)Akio314 Wrote: Here is a passage: "Aw man, I lost." Shiki said in despair. The guy with the headphones walked away "You lost, you're a waste to hang around with." "Neku, wait!" Shiki cried. "No, it would be a waste to have you with me." Neku said coldly. Was that how you want your characters to act?
Yes, exactly. The do the same sort of thing in the beginning of the game too XD
I haven't even played the game.
RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 4 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - sarabscientist - Aug. 27, 2012
Well then, it shows how much you are able to connect with character descriptions and envision their connections.
RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 4 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - King of Misfits - Aug. 27, 2012
Name: Joey Utara
Personality: He is very friendly, and loves to battle. He is A optimistic, friendly guy. His big brother is Leonardo Utara, the #1 Blader in Italy. He brags about it alot. In battles he is clever and tricky. When an opponent gets him angered, he looses it and totally destroys his opponent, transforming into a corrupted, being of darkness, a curse set on him by the Shigami.
He is brave and not scared of anything, except for waterfalls, which reminds him of his mother's death. She died by falling off a waterfall.
Appearance: He wears a Monster Energy drink cap, long brown hair, brown eyes, a green t-shirt with the WBBA logo on it, official WBBA gloves, blue skinny jeans, grey converse shoes, and a pair of green headphones around his neck.
Bey: Assassin Nocturnal DR165RDS (Double Rubber 165 Rubber Defense Spike
Special Move(s):Normal: Infernal Gamma Fatal Booster (The whole stadium erupts into a green aura, and Nocturnal's spirit, an assassin comes out and throws multiple knives at the opponent, and if he really wants to destroy his opponent, the assassin pulls out a sword and destroys the opponent's bey. Dark Move: Corrupted Darkness: A darkness consumes the whole stadium, swallowing up the opponents bey, obliterating the opponents bey.
RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 4 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Aug. 29, 2012
I'm sorry I didn't write tonight, it was just a hectic night.
RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 4 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Aug. 31, 2012
Chapter 5 in the OP. How do you like it?
RE: {STORY} Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 6 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 03, 2012
Chapter 6 is up. Sorry for double-posting.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 6 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 04, 2012
I won't be able to make a chapter tonight. Insomniac and Shirayuki's characters have entered the story. Sorry for triple-posting. Hiro and Emi are Neku and Shiki.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 6 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 08, 2012
Chapter 7 is in the OP. I won't write anymore unless you guys post.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - King of Misfits - Sep. 08, 2012
AWWWW YEEEEAAH
GO JOEY!
lolwut
I lieked chapter 7 yo
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 08, 2012
(Sep. 08, 2012 5:09 PM)Kitai Wrote: AWWWW YEEEEAAH
GO JOEY!
lolwut
I lieked chapter 7 yo
I was trying to make the battle more important than the characters for this chapter.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 08, 2012
I am doing character Q and A like ChinaBlade and Beyniac. So ask away!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 08, 2012
I feel special now. XD
Anyways, try avoiding double posts. XD
Good luck with trying to manage all the questions.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 08, 2012
(Sep. 08, 2012 7:14 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: I feel special now. XD
Anyways, try avoiding double posts. XD
Good luck with trying to manage all the questions.
My story isn't that popular so I won't get as many questions as you? Have you read my story yet, there's already seven chapters.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 08, 2012
(Sep. 08, 2012 7:19 PM)Akio314 Wrote:(Sep. 08, 2012 7:14 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: I feel special now. XD
Anyways, try avoiding double posts. XD
Good luck with trying to manage all the questions.
My story isn't that popular so I won't get as many questions as you? Have you read my story yet, there's already seven chapters.
To be honest, I haven't.
Not a big reader of others' stories unless I know the person really well, like Shi, DefStamina, Insomniac, or Shirayuki.
I may read it when I have free time.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 7 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 08, 2012
(Sep. 08, 2012 7:22 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:Actually, all of those people besides DefStamina have requested characters for the story.(Sep. 08, 2012 7:19 PM)Akio314 Wrote:(Sep. 08, 2012 7:14 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: I feel special now. XD
Anyways, try avoiding double posts. XD
Good luck with trying to manage all the questions.
My story isn't that popular so I won't get as many questions as you? Have you read my story yet, there's already seven chapters.
To be honest, I haven't.
Not a big reader of others' stories unless I know the person really well, like Shi, DefStamina, Insomniac, or Shirayuki.
I may read it when I have free time.
But I am just setting up the story, you guys haven't seen nothin yet!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 09, 2012
Chapter 8 is up, sorry the chapter is so short. Sorry for double-posting. Joey to the rescue!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - sarabscientist - Sep. 09, 2012
(Aug. 20, 2012 11:57 PM)Akio314 Wrote: "What kind of jerk are you?" I yelled at Hiro. "Get away from me." He aimed a launcher at me, I raised mine in return.
This is like that one time the reaper tells Neku that he is free to leave if he kills his partner!
Nice work, keep it up!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 09, 2012
Thanks for the compliment. I have already written an outline of Chapter 9 but I'm trying to make sense of it.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - King of Misfits - Sep. 10, 2012
So Excited for next chapter!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 10, 2012
(Sep. 10, 2012 1:27 AM)Kitai Wrote: So Excited for next chapter!
It will focus on Hiro and Emi, maybe.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 8 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 11, 2012
Chapter 9 is in the OP. I think the next one will be about Hiro and Emi.
EDIT: Hiro and Emi will not make a large appearance in the next episode.
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 9 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 11, 2012
Sorry for triple-posting, but this story has OVER 1000 views!
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 10 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 16, 2012
Chapter 10 is done.
Chapter 10 (Click to View)
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 10 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - TakasuMouce - Sep. 16, 2012
I think that you should space out your chapters. The sentences are all fit together in one "chunk", or "paragraph". Difficulty is brought because of a bit of trouble reading it.
And I would suggest you to make a chapters longer, or maybe think about combining a few into one.
~Takasu
RE: {STORY}Beyblade: Kazuki's Quest (Chapter 10 in the OP) Taking Character Requests - akio314 - Sep. 16, 2012
(Sep. 16, 2012 9:21 PM)Takasu Wrote: I think that you should space out your chapters. The sentences are all fit together in one "chunk", or "paragraph". Difficulty is brought because of a bit of trouble reading it.
And I would suggest you to make a chapters longer, or maybe think about combining a few into one.
~Takasu
Yeah, the first few chapters were REALLY short, but I like having it the same. What do you mean by clumped?