RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - bladestriker99 - May. 09, 2012
(May. 06, 2012 3:21 AM)T. L-Drago 9207 Wrote: Oh my gosh, that's the most n00b-ish character request I've ever seen, no offense.
None taken and don't be cliche
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - NPB - May. 09, 2012
When the part 4 is ready?
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - SpiralLyre9753 - May. 16, 2012
(May. 09, 2012 1:03 PM)NPB Wrote: When the part 4 is ready?
I've just finished Part 4, but I can't upload it till the weekend
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - SpiralLyre9753 - May. 18, 2012
Finally heres part 4, but it won't be the last
I was back in the participant area, watching the next battle, another competitor was talking to me.
"You were brilliant in that match." he complimented.
"Thanks, what's your name?" I asked.
"Er... Jakumi Himashawa, what's yours." Jakumi spoke in a shy tone.
Jakumi was a shy blader with a white coat, cowboy hat, trousers and shoes with white sunglasses.
I continued to watch the TV, Red Shinigami was winning without even trying that hard. It made me wonder, if me and him got to the final would I be able to beat him.
"Are you wondering about how you're going to beat Red?" asked Jakumi softly.
"How did you know?" I questioned
"Er... Well... You were closer to the participant area than you think when you two were... Er... Arguing." Jakumi replied shyly.
"What's your Bey then?" I questioned.
"Er... Lead Corona LT130RHF." explained Jakumi as he showed me a Bey with jewels on it as well as a crown on the Face Bolt.
Many rounds later, it was the semi finals where I would be facing Jakumi Himashawa. I exited the participant area knowing that I was good enough to get this far, the battles were tougher than I ever faced before especially the first round. Red was still in the tournament though, I knew it would probably be me and him in the final.
I stepped in front of the stadium as everyone cheered my name.
This was going to be a tough fight. We prepared our launchers as everyone chanted, "3... 2... 1... GO SHOOT!"
Both Beys dashed around the stadium trying to fight the match of their lives. Either way both of us would get a spot in the WBO, but I guess this match decides what roles we'd play in the organisation.
"Let's win this Byxis!" Byxis centred itself into middle preparing itself for it's special move as I spoke.
"Er... I wouldn't... Er... Use the same the tactics if I was... Er... You." Jakumi's words hit me, I'm just using the same tactics all the time.
If I'm going to win I'm going to need different tactics...
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - DefStamina88 - May. 18, 2012
Awesome! I like how you put my character in the Semis. Makes him seem important.  Great story! Can't wait for the ending!!
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
If you can put it in ... Here's my request
Name: Ray White
Desc. A American boy whose parents are trying to make a start in a new continent. He is humorous and relaxed
Beyblade: Wave Serpent RS145 MWD (Rubber Spiked 125 and Metal Wide Defense)
Special Move: Ocean Strike ( The bey dashes toward his opponent while water runs behind him and when it hits the other bey there is an explosion of water)
Bey Desc. Very fast and defensive.
Type: Defense but can be Attack at times
Thanks!
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - Damaged - May. 20, 2012
great story but try to describe things a little more here's a character request to try and help you out
Character's Name:Falling (A.K.A) Dentu Hatuni (A.K.A) Agent 0617
Character's Description:blonde hair,red jacket,orange shoes
Character's Personality:laid back 50 o/o other half VERY serious
Character's Bey Name olar glare 230 F
Bey Description:great at high-speed attacks and a solid defence
special moveolar storm (metal wheel heats up and starts to smoke smoke is used to make a tornado of heat then charges at opponent(
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - DefStamina88 - May. 20, 2012
I love how 2 people just submitted their characters, when we are already on the semifinals, and the Finals are already set.
Guys, don't be doing these late submissions of characters. AetherByxis probably had a plan for writing his story, and you guys might have him changing his plans for the story...
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - SpiralLyre9753 - May. 27, 2012
Part 5
I would like to tell you now what was going on outside of tournament. I saw this ages after I joined the WBO on a CCTV tape.
Two Bladers dressed in average cloths were battling to earn Beypoints when a massive black and purple flame boomed from the centre of the stadium as a veil of mist covered the stadium revealing a dark shadow.
"At last, after years of being in that deadly realm I return! Now go Tempo SLICE THEM INTO PIECES!" spoke the shadow as both Beys were sliced apart.
Anyway back to the battle. I tried to devise a new tactic, but Jakumi's Corona wasn't helping as he kept smashing into me at top speed. Then a sudden thought came to mind, something my father taught me before he somehow disappeared. I drew an image in my mind, then I realised how to beat Corona.
"Get ready, SPECIAL MOVE, COMPASS CONTROL!!!" I boomed as the motif of Byxis appeared over the stadium.
Next thing Jakumi knew, his Corona was being controlled by Byxis' Special Move, but Jakumi wasn't going to give up.
"Let's stop this... Er... Madness, Special Move... Er... Dazzling Crown!" a large beam of dazzling light shot out of Corona, then it curved and started chasing my Byxis across the stadium.
Then there was a voice in my mind, it was my fathers voice, "Keep calm, concentrate on the movement of Corona, then command your Bey to dodge!"
So I did what he said, it was easy due to all the techniques he taught me when I was young. I could see it in my mind, Corona's movement. Could I some how use it to my advantage.
"Byxis, dodge!" I shouted.
Byxis dodge the laser of light, but it followed me like a homing missile. So I commanded Byxis to lead the laser towards Corona, which I did. The light whooshed towards me trying to stop me in my tracks.
Soon enough I had my plan set out.
"NOW!!!" Byxis swept to the side leaving the laser of light to go straight into Corona causing an explosion of smoke.
After the smoke finally cleared, Byxis was the only Bey remaining in the stadium whereas Corona had been smashed right beside Jakumi.
I had won, to the final I go...
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - SpiralLyre9753 - May. 27, 2012
Part 5
I would like to tell you now what was going on outside of tournament. I saw this ages after I joined the WBO on a CCTV tape.
Two Bladers dressed in average cloths were battling to earn Beypoints when a massive black and purple flame boomed from the centre of the stadium as a veil of mist covered the stadium revealing a dark shadow.
"At last, after years of being in that deadly realm I return! Now go Tempo SLICE THEM INTO PIECES!" spoke the shadow as both Beys were sliced apart.
Anyway back to the battle. I tried to devise a new tactic, but Jakumi's Corona wasn't helping as he kept smashing into me at top speed. Then a sudden thought came to mind, something my father taught me before he somehow disappeared. I drew an image in my mind, then I realised how to beat Corona.
"Get ready, SPECIAL MOVE, COMPASS CONTROL!!!" I boomed as the motif of Byxis appeared over the stadium.
Next thing Jakumi knew, his Corona was being controlled by Byxis' Special Move, but Jakumi wasn't going to give up.
"Let's stop this... Er... Madness, Special Move... Er... Dazzling Crown!" a large beam of dazzling light shot out of Corona, then it curved and started chasing my Byxis across the stadium.
Then there was a voice in my mind, it was my fathers voice, "Keep calm, concentrate on the movement of Corona, then command your Bey to dodge!"
So I did what he said, it was easy due to all the techniques he taught me when I was young. I could see it in my mind, Corona's movement. Could I some how use it to my advantage.
"Byxis, dodge!" I shouted.
Byxis dodge the laser of light, but it followed me like a homing missile. So I commanded Byxis to lead the laser towards Corona, which I did. The light whooshed towards me trying to stop me in my tracks.
Soon enough I had my plan set out.
"NOW!!!" Byxis swept to the side leaving the laser of light to go straight into Corona causing an explosion of smoke.
After the smoke finally cleared, Byxis was the only Bey remaining in the stadium whereas Corona had been smashed right beside Jakumi.
I had won, to the final I go...
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - TwiztidBlader - Jun. 01, 2012
I have a character request but do not put him until you feel it be nesscary
Character's Name:Akamo Kazuku
Character's Descriptionhaggy Light brown hair, blue eyes, medium height, wears a dark grey hoodie but has the sleeves rolled up to his elbows, Dark Blue jeans and white shoes with orange and blue designs.
Character's Personality:Akamo is a very fun loving guy but is serious about blading. He is also very intelligent and can design a plan very easily with his IQ of 175
Character's Bey Name: Rock Cancer ED145EWD
Bey Description: The Rock wheel is silver, the cancer wheel is a light blue, both spin track and preformance tip are a translucent white and the facebolt as well. Special Move: Rock Shell Guard (The bey it self becomes entirely greyish silver and invincable to virtually any attack)
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - Renpt0 - Jun. 01, 2012
Character's Name: BeybladeFreak (Called: The Bladers Freak. Example: Look there is The Bladers Freak!)
Character's Description: A player in your team that is the second Co leader.
Character's Personality: As he is in the normal 4D series
Character's Bey Name: Variares D : D (without spaces)
Bey Description: As it's on the real 4D series
Type: Defence, Attack, Stemina
Special Moves: King of Thunderstorms
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - ThaKingTai - Jun. 02, 2012
This is a great story so far, but what I suggest is don't take silly character request. You don't need to add other people's characters to make them like your story. It's okay to have someone create the personality, but you decide the story. And the crazy made-up parts and Beys that are hard to describe, don't take those either. It's best to use parts people already know or very slight differences in the design so people don't have a hard time visualizing them. Overall, this is one of the better stories right now.
RE: [Story] Beyblade: WBO Secret Service [Character requests needed] - Driger Kai - Jun. 02, 2012
Cool love it so far!
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