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RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUIS SOUL STORY 1 - Brooklyn-Z - Dec. 20, 2010
please, spell Pegasus correctly
the tittle
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUS SOUL STORY 1 - banki - Dec. 20, 2010
i did
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUS SOUL STORY 1 - Brooklyn-Z - Dec. 20, 2010
in the tittle? not even close
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUS SOUL STORY 1 - Dude - Dec. 20, 2010
Haha...I love those kind of stories. The same way I love crappy movies like The Room and the Troll series. I'm kind of an idiot, that way.
The edited version of Kyuubi-Master is somewhat...readable, if that's a word, but it still lacks any form of originality and fails to strike interest in my heart. The first few lines of a story are exactly made to swoop people in reading the story...
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUS SOUL STORY 1 - banki - Dec. 20, 2010
what about it
GLOOMY CHECK IT
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUASUS SOUL STORY 1 - Terra Blazer - Dec. 20, 2010
pegasis, that's how you spell it
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUASUS SOUL STORY 1 - banki - Dec. 20, 2010
i put more stuff in it
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUASUS SOUL STORY 1 - Kyuubi-Master - Dec. 20, 2010
(Dec. 20, 2010 3:42 AM)alexscott12 Wrote: pegasis, that's how you spell it
Slightly untrue. In Japan it's Pegasis and I think it was only for the Pre-HWS version. In Canada it's Pegasus.
(Dec. 20, 2010 1:36 AM)Dude Wrote: Haha...I love those kind of stories. The same way I love crappy movies like The Room and the Troll series. I'm kind of an idiot, that way.
The edited version of Kyuubi-Master is somewhat...readable, if that's a word, but it still lacks any form of originality and fails to strike interest in my heart. The first few lines of a story are exactly made to swoop people in reading the story...
Yes I know. I would have added a lot, but I was giving him a sample of what stories normally look like.
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 - banki - Dec. 20, 2010
yes he,s right > <
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 - Gearfried97 - Dec. 20, 2010
Yeah, Kyuubi-Master pretty much has it right. That is what a story should look like. Always remember, put quotations, and have good overall spelling and grammar. Make sure you have an interesting plot as well! Keep at it, and you could have a great story too!
edit: Just read the title clearly and read the story like really read it. What does this story have to do with a Pegasus? Tyson uses Leone and Blaze uses Aquario. If it's supposed to be coming later, maybe you could have hinted to it at least?
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 - Kyuubi-Master - Dec. 20, 2010
Glad to be of service.
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 - banki - Dec. 22, 2010
ok now make it longer more
RE: THE STORY OF PEGUISUIS SOUL STORY 1 - WhyD125 - Dec. 22, 2010
(Dec. 20, 2010 1:13 AM)Gloomy Wrote: please, spell Pegasus correctly
the tittle
Please, spell title correctly.
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 - aries blader - Dec. 23, 2010
(Dec. 22, 2010 9:28 PM)geem456 Wrote: ok now make it longer more
Ok,now make it longer.
RE: THE STORY OF PEGASUS SOUL STORY 1 you cant win - banki - Dec. 29, 2010
umm....