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RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Hyper G in progress* - Aadi Lui - May. 16, 2020
(May. 16, 2020 12:14 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Hyper G Episode 31 - A Super Awesome Rebirth!
*not long after the fierce battle with The Dark Emperor*
Paladin: AHHHH!!!!! WHY DID HE HAVE TO DESTROY PEGASUS!!!!!!
Wakiya: he's been like this for a while now... i guess Pegasus' destruction got to him....
Aurora: Paladin.....
*Paladin runs through Japan and finds Della sketching a V E R Y well designed flower*
Paladin: oh hey Della....
Della: Paladin.... i saw what happened.....
Paladin: so you saw my battle with The Dark Emperor....!!!!
Della: *not turning from her sketchpad* yep sure did...
*Paladin sits next to her*
Della: what do you plan to get back in the game...
Paladin: Rebuild my bey...
Della: ill help you... come on!!!!
*they head to the Heaven Wings*
Valt: Paladin.... we need to reforge our beys! Lets go....
*they head into the back room*
Paladin: *thinks* my bey will be stronger than Neutron Pegasus.... one that will put an end to The Dark Emperor and Nova's nonsense!!!!
Valt: my Valtryek will be strong.... one that can overcome any obstacle....
Shu: Nova and The Dark Emperor will definitely be coming after us now.... my Spryzen will be fiercely powerful.... one that will reign supreme....
*their new avatars loom over them*
about 10 minutes later
Paladin: Behold!!!! Fusion Pegasus
Valt: Instinct Valtryek!!
Shu: Mystic Spryzen!!!!
*they all walk to separate Stadiums*
LET IT RIP!!!!!
*Pegasus, Valtryek and Spryzen all race ahead*
Paladin: TEAR THEM APART!!!!
*Pegasus bursts Angel*
Valt: GOOO!!!!!
*Valtryek bursts Roktavor*
Shu: END THIS!!!!
*Spryzen bursts through Luinor*
the beys fly in the air and clash with each other above the ground and fall
Everyone: WE ARE THE HEAVEN WINGS!!!!!
~{TO BE CONTINUED}~
(sorry the episodes have been so short, ive been trying to keep up with school)
Honestly good episode but you treat Lui like fodder, this is what I dislike in Beyblade Burst anime and your chapters. CHARACTER RELEVANCE.
Lui is supposed to be Shu's equal, just putting him forward as a scapegoat is not his style. Why don't you send him away instead of making him lose every match.
Now, It has started to seem that Lui may even lose to Rantaro. JUST SEND HIM AWAY LIKE FREE INSTEAD OF DISGRACING HIM. A former world champion losing his every match like boom. Aurora seemed strong to in the earlier eps, but now her powers are fading. As the no. of characters are increasing, u need to do something with relevance as well, this was the 2nd match Lui lost to Shu and Aurora lost as well. JUST SEND LUI AWAY.
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *New Eps Every Day* - MasterKurenai - May. 16, 2020
Lui was never world champion in the first place because even though in the anime he won against free he only challenged him to a normal battle.
Anyway DeltaZakuro are there gonna be more bladers in the dark citadel
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *New Eps Every Day* - DeltaZakuro - May. 16, 2020
(May. 16, 2020 2:33 PM)MasterKurenai Wrote: Lui was never world champion in the first place because even though in the anime he won against free he only challenged him to a normal battle.
Anyway DeltaZakuro are there gonna be more bladers in the dark citadel
yes the owner of Prism Balkesh
(May. 16, 2020 12:16 PM)Aadi Lui Wrote:(May. 16, 2020 12:14 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Hyper G Episode 31 - A Super Awesome Rebirth!
*not long after the fierce battle with The Dark Emperor*
Paladin: AHHHH!!!!! WHY DID HE HAVE TO DESTROY PEGASUS!!!!!!
Wakiya: he's been like this for a while now... i guess Pegasus' destruction got to him....
Aurora: Paladin.....
*Paladin runs through Japan and finds Della sketching a V E R Y well designed flower*
Paladin: oh hey Della....
Della: Paladin.... i saw what happened.....
Paladin: so you saw my battle with The Dark Emperor....!!!!
Della: *not turning from her sketchpad* yep sure did...
*Paladin sits next to her*
Della: what do you plan to get back in the game...
Paladin: Rebuild my bey...
Della: ill help you... come on!!!!
*they head to the Heaven Wings*
Valt: Paladin.... we need to reforge our beys! Lets go....
*they head into the back room*
Paladin: *thinks* my bey will be stronger than Neutron Pegasus.... one that will put an end to The Dark Emperor and Nova's nonsense!!!!
Valt: my Valtryek will be strong.... one that can overcome any obstacle....
Shu: Nova and The Dark Emperor will definitely be coming after us now.... my Spryzen will be fiercely powerful.... one that will reign supreme....
*their new avatars loom over them*
about 10 minutes later
Paladin: Behold!!!! Fusion Pegasus
Valt: Instinct Valtryek!!
Shu: Mystic Spryzen!!!!
*they all walk to separate Stadiums*
LET IT RIP!!!!!
*Pegasus, Valtryek and Spryzen all race ahead*
Paladin: TEAR THEM APART!!!!
*Pegasus bursts Angel*
Valt: GOOO!!!!!
*Valtryek bursts Roktavor*
Shu: END THIS!!!!
*Spryzen bursts through Luinor*
the beys fly in the air and clash with each other above the ground and fall
Everyone: WE ARE THE HEAVEN WINGS!!!!!
~{TO BE CONTINUED}~
(sorry the episodes have been so short, ive been trying to keep up with school)
Honestly good episode but you treat Lui like fodder, this is what I dislike in Beyblade Burst anime and your chapters. CHARACTER RELEVANCE.
Lui is supposed to be Shu's equal, just putting him forward as a scapegoat is not his style. Why don't you send him away instead of making him lose every match.
Now, It has started to seem that Lui may even lose to Rantaro. JUST SEND HIM AWAY LIKE FREE INSTEAD OF DISGRACING HIM. A former world champion losing his every match like boom. Aurora seemed strong to in the earlier eps, but now her powers are fading. As the no. of characters are increasing, u need to do something with relevance as well, this was the 2nd match Lui lost to Shu and Aurora lost as well. JUST SEND LUI AWAY.
tbh, you really should have saw this coming, i made this VERY clear a few posts back in S1 that Lui, Free and Shu would all similar roles going foward but they would have more battles, also there is more at stake right now in this point of the season than the relevance of a singular character
Announcement: At this point of the story, things are getting dark, so this means character development/relevance is out of the picture until later on. Something else I would like to touch on is characters, i have made this clear in the past but Lui, Shu and Free are GOING to have similar roles going forward, so i don't wanna hear "OH GIVE LUI MORE RELEVANCE" or "MAKE VALT OP", im sorry buts not happening.....
As for peeps, go easy on "helpful" feedback, because right now, im going through SEVERE i repeat, SEVERE anxiety due to everything going on...
That's all for now ~ DeltaZakuro
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - DeltaZakuro - May. 17, 2020
Beyblade Burst: Hyper G will be delayed until Friday due to some problems, one of them being the fact that i just sprained my ankle while playing soccer with a friend and recently my motivation has kinda gone down the drain but until then i will post updates
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *New Eps Every Day* - Aadi Lui - May. 17, 2020
(May. 16, 2020 3:47 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(May. 16, 2020 2:33 PM)MasterKurenai Wrote: Lui was never world champion in the first place because even though in the anime he won against free he only challenged him to a normal battle.
Anyway DeltaZakuro are there gonna be more bladers in the dark citadel
yes the owner of Prism Balkesh
(May. 16, 2020 12:16 PM)Aadi Lui Wrote: Honestly good episode but you treat Lui like fodder, this is what I dislike in Beyblade Burst anime and your chapters. CHARACTER RELEVANCE.
Lui is supposed to be Shu's equal, just putting him forward as a scapegoat is not his style. Why don't you send him away instead of making him lose every match.
Now, It has started to seem that Lui may even lose to Rantaro. JUST SEND HIM AWAY LIKE FREE INSTEAD OF DISGRACING HIM. A former world champion losing his every match like boom. Aurora seemed strong to in the earlier eps, but now her powers are fading. As the no. of characters are increasing, u need to do something with relevance as well, this was the 2nd match Lui lost to Shu and Aurora lost as well. JUST SEND LUI AWAY.
tbh, you really should have saw this coming, i made this VERY clear a few posts back in S1 that Lui, Free and Shu would all similar roles going foward but they would have more battles, also there is more at stake right now in this point of the season than the relevance of a singular character
Announcement: At this point of the story, things are getting dark, so this means character development/relevance is out of the picture until later on. Something else I would like to touch on is characters, i have made this clear in the past but Lui, Shu and Free are GOING to have similar roles going forward, so i don't wanna hear "OH GIVE LUI MORE RELEVANCE" or "MAKE VALT OP", im sorry buts not happening.....
As for peeps, go easy on "helpful" feedback, because right now, im going through SEVERE i repeat, SEVERE anxiety due to everything going on...
That's all for now ~ DeltaZakuro
Sorry for the criticism, but it does seem you are inclined towards Shu and partial towards him, giving him a new bey when bladers like Aurora require it the most. Shu is being pushed heavily while Lui, Free, Rantaro are sulking from the sidelines. All of them are supposed to be equals so treat them as equals.
So I don't see Free, Lui and Shu having similar roles. Shu is in the main event. Lui is basically scapegoat and loses literally every match. Free is... nowhere. How can you say they have same roles going forward?
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - DeltaZakuro - May. 17, 2020
After going to the doctor today, my ankle will be fine in about 2 days (a lot quicker than i expected) so episode 32 will be out on either Monday or Tuesday
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - FreeFafnir64 - May. 17, 2020
That's good. Hope you feel better soon!
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - CheetoBlader - May. 17, 2020
That’s good. I sprained my ankle playing basketball before the quarantine started, and it hurt a lot for almost a week, then it hurt every once and a while the next week. You got lucky lol. Get well soon!
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - DeltaZakuro - May. 17, 2020
Episode 32 and 33 will debut on Monday while Episode 34 and 35 debut on Tuesday
In the meantime, check out my other series thats still kinda a WIP: https://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Fan-Fiction-Beyblade-Burst-Diamond
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - MasterKurenai - May. 18, 2020
Hope you get soon better and when I was playing my soccer match for the championships I sort of twisted my ankle and I was ok but it took me 3 weeks for my ankle to heal
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - DeltaZakuro - May. 18, 2020
Hyper G Episode 32: Coming Together! Entering The Dark Citadel!
*Paladin is training with his new bey*
Paladin: GOO PEGASUS!!!!
*Pegasus begins to wobble a carp ton*
Paladin: Whats wrong.... Why are you not working right?
*Pegasus stops spinning*
Paladin: Why am i losing so much....
Lui: Maybe its because you haven't mastered it yet.....
Wakiya: I hate to spoil the party-
Rantaro: YOU KINDA ARE, GOLDIELOCKS!!!!!
Wakiya: Anyway, 7 bladers have been chosen to infiltrate The Dark Citadel, and they are Paladin Venpor, Valt Aoi, Shu Kurenai, Aurora Kyrona, Della Faris, Rantaro Kiyama and Lui Shirosagi....
Rantaro: And what the point?
Wakiya: The WBBA worries this might be HELL all over again...
Rantaro: Awww great.....
Wakiya: Anyways we need to go ahead and go
*the chosen bladers leave and heads on a plane to Australia*
Wakiya: My sources claim there are 2 bladers at The Dark Citadel, one of them being The Dark Emperor and a new one... Berana Pierre...
*the plane nears Australia, and the sky begins to turn purple*
Paladin: Look at the sky.... It looks like its corrupted.....
Wakiya: We're close...
Della: LOOK THERE!!!!! IT'S THE DARK CITADEL!!!!!
Wakiya: yes it is.... Pilot take us down!!!
*the plane lands and the 8 bladers exit the plane*
*a HUGE fortress stands in front of them*
Paladin: we're finally here....
Della: its massive....
Valt: Its bigger than the Dread Tower.....
Rantaro: I hope there's no unicorns inside.... Are you sure this is the place?
Wakiya: this is definitely the place... its kinda giving me Snake Pit vibes....
Paladin: hands?....
*they all join hands and they enter the ominous fortress....*
[~TO BE CONTINUED~]
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - MasterKurenai - May. 18, 2020
And here comes the intensity
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) *Currently Delayed* - daheavydl3 - May. 18, 2020
hope you get better.
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 18, 2020
Hyper G Episode 33: Ultimate Defense! Prism Balkesh!
*after about 2 hours of exploring, the team finds a lab*
Paladin: Hey Della, Look!
*he holds the beakers at his eyes*
Della: *Giggles* you're funny!!
*a man wearing a purple lab coat walks in*
Lui: Who is this guy?
Wakiya: I have no clue....
???: You must be the "Intruders" The Dark Emperor told me about....
Aurora: We're trying to find him... But first who are you?
Berana: I am Berana Pierre- ARE YOU SERIOUSLY TOUCHING MY BEAKERS!!!!!
*he snatches the beakers from Paladin and puts them in a cabinet*
Berana: Sorry for my rude behavior, i dont like it when people touch my belongings...
Valt: So do we HAVE to battle before we continue?
Berana: Of course, i may be apart of IMPERIAL but i love to battle!!
Berana: So who's going first?
Lui: Me...
Berana: Ah yes, Lui Shirosagi... Weren't you a world champion at one point... Oh how the mighty have fallen...
Lui: Are you implying that Ive gotten weaker...
Berana: No of course not....
Lui: LETS DO THIS!!!!!
3 2 1 LET IT RIP!!!!!
*Balkesh takes the center*
Lui: ATTACK LUINOR!!!!
*Luinor strikes over and over again*
Berana: NOW PRISM SHIELD!!!!
*Balkesh turns into a perfect circle*
Everyone: WHAT THE HECK!!!!!!!!
Lui: GIMME A BREAK!!!!! LUINOR!!!!!
*Luinors avatar comes out and enters Color Resonance*
Berana: What Fun!!!! Balkesh!!!!!
*Balkesh avatar comes out and enters Dark Resonance*
Lui: CRYSTAL SLASH!!!!!!!
Berana: END THIS!! PRISM COUNTER!!!!!
*both beys clash and a explosion shakes the area*
Lui: AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!
Berana: *laughs menacingly*
*Luinor bursts*
Everyone: *visible shock*
Paladin: Lui... Lost.....
Berana: So who's next?
{~TO BE CONTINUED~}
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - CheetoBlader - May. 18, 2020
(May. 18, 2020 8:43 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Everyone: *visible shock*I swear, if ‘shock’ was changed to ‘confusion’ that would be hilarious lol. Great chapter!
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 20, 2020
Hyper G Episode 34: The Mugen Stadiums Challenge! Part 1
Paladin: Stand aside!!! Ill wipe that guys smug look off his face!!!!
Berana: Then come at me!!!!
Shu: Balkesh can transform even after taking damage.....
Berana: Lets begin....
3 2 1 LET IT RIP!!!!!!
*Balkesh takes the center*
Paladin: KNOCK EM DOWN A PEG!!! Fusion Launch!!!!
*Balkesh begins to transform*
Berana: Transform! Prism Shield!
*Balkesh becomes a perfect circle*
Lui: Carp.... Its that move again.....
Paladin: Your research means nothing to us!!!!! PEGASUS!!!!!!!
*a armored horse with golden wings emerges*
Berana: I will never lose to you!!!!! BALKESH!!!!!!
*Balkesh avatar comes out*
Paladin: OK PEGASUS!!! FUSION UPPER!!!!
*Balkesh gets blasted into the air and bursts*
Berana: *visible shock and confusion* n-no way.....
Paladin: HOW'S THAT!!!!!!!!
*the team continues into a room with a mugen stadium*
The Dark Emperor: *on Loudspeaker* so you made it past Berana..... but dont take him for a fool, his inventions are.... Frightening!!! Beat Poison Hydra and ill battle you all *the loudspeaker turns off*
Paladin: Ill go first!!!!
3 2 1 LET IT RIP!!!!!!
*Hydra starts spinning at top speed*
Paladin: Its so fast!! That won't stop us!!!! Fusion Launch!!!!
*Pegasus unleashes a barrage of attacks*
Paladin: GREAT JOB!!!!!
???: Yes... Great Job....
*Berana steps from the shadows*
Berana: NOW!!! Poison Strike!!!!
*Pegasus bursts*
Paladin: What just happened...
Valt: No way....
Rantaro: Woah...
Aurora: I don't believe it.....
{~TO BE CONTINUED~}
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - FreeFafnir64 - May. 20, 2020
Great chapter! Oh, and is your leg feeling better?
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 20, 2020
(May. 20, 2020 3:53 PM)FreeFafnir64 Wrote: Great chapter! Oh, and is your leg feeling better?
Yep, i can walk like a normal human being now
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - FreeFafnir64 - May. 20, 2020
(May. 20, 2020 4:03 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(May. 20, 2020 3:53 PM)FreeFafnir64 Wrote: Great chapter! Oh, and is your leg feeling better?
Yep, i can walk like a normal human being now
Nice. It's a great feeling to have legs, isn't it?
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 20, 2020
(May. 20, 2020 4:06 PM)FreeFafnir64 Wrote:(May. 20, 2020 4:03 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Yep, i can walk like a normal human being now
Nice. It's a great feeling to have legs, isn't it?
I don't dare think of a world without legs
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - BeyZoid Corrupt - May. 20, 2020
Can me be in it T~T
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 20, 2020
(May. 20, 2020 6:02 PM)BeyZoid Corrupt Wrote: Can me be in it T~T
We're in a bit too deep ( thats what she said ) so im sorry but no maybe in a future season
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 22, 2020
Sorry Episode 34 Part 2 is taking so long, juggling 3 fan fictions is not as easy as I thought, jokes aside ill post it tomorrow when I get around to it or until I watch ep 9 of Super King
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - DeltaZakuro - May. 22, 2020
Episode 34: The Mugen Stadiums Challenge! Part 2
Paladin: Berana.... You...
Wakiya: THIS GUY HAS 2 BEYS?!?
Aurora: I thought it was one per blader!!
Berana: Shu... Valt.... Come forth, ill be the one to destroy you!!!!
Valt: We'll See!!!
Shu: You're gonna regret this....
*they both launch their beys toward Hydra*
Paladin: THEY'RE FAST!!!!
*Valtryek circles around the edge*
Della: What are they doing?
Rantaro: They got a trick up their sleeves......
*Valtryek and Spryzen clash together*
Berana: Whatever you do wont mean anything!!!!
*Spryzen and Valtryek speed toward it, still locked in clash*
Valt/Shu: GOOOOOO!!!!!!
*Spryzen and Valtryeks avatar comes out*
Valt/Shu: FLAMING SWORD AND AXE STRIKE!!!!!
Rantaro: THAT'S INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!!!
Paladin: AWESOME!!!!!!
*the two beys blow Hydra into a wall*
Berana: *falls to his knees* no... Hydra...
The Dark Emperor: *on Loudspeaker* so you defeated Hydra.... Im impressed, i promised i would battle yall beat Hydra and i will open the doors to my throne room.....
*two MASSIVE doors open and Paladins jaw hits the floor as they walk in the giant throne room*
Paladin: *Makes eye contact with The Dark Emperor* You.....
The Dark Emperor: Welcome.....
~[TO BE CONTINUED]~
RE: Beyblade Burst Generations Saga (All Seasons) - FreeFafnir64 - May. 22, 2020
Wait, isn't that like Hyuga and Hikaru's move when they faced Rantaro and Free?