The Bey Islands(chapter 6 is up) - wtater888 - Aug. 19, 2012
The Bey Islands
In the year....oh what was it..... Well anyway the continents break leaving 14 islands. Beyblade rules change and the wbba loses control over events. On each island there are new rules, new styles, new stadiums and of course NEW BEYS. Now let’s check on a new blader Wade Moore (yeah a name we can actually pronounce). Wade Moore lived on the only island that the wbba had control of and the safest island, Smith Island. This island was known for making beys and parts so they were considered the strongest beys though they had no special rules or special cheating skills. Now where they make the beys they have had accidents. They've made a bey that was dark and could make more dark beys. These controlled some people on other islands but the wbba got rid of them on Smith Island. They even had accidents where people were transported into beys and became the bey spirit (talk about unsafe work environment). "Don't forget all your gear “said Wade's mother.
"I won't," replied Wade, "Please stop worrying."
"I'm not worrying why do you think I'm worrying," said mother, "Now treat this bey as your partner and your best friend."
"I will mom calm down" I respond, "BYE!"
Wade started his journey in his own neighborhood.
"I am at the bottom of the chain. I must prove until I can beat anyone. NO ONE CAN TAKE ME AND MY BEY FLAME WOLF!†screamed Wade so then Wade embarked on his journey and decided to battle the former worst (now 2nd worst due to Wade having no record). Wade walks to the bey stop for the tournament of the neighborhood. It wasn't seeded like most tournaments (i.e. 1 vs. 16) but seeded to the best way of showing who is best:
1vs.2 3vs.4
15vs.16 13vs.14
5vs.6 7vs.8
9vs.10 11vs.12
"We should start 15vs.16" says Wade. “It’s my Flame Wolf 230 WD vs. Azhar Awan and his Twisted Bull AD145 WD"
"Participants please head to the Stamina Stadium please" said the talking intercom a.k.a a clerk. "May the battle begin!"
"3......2......1........ Go Shooooooot"Wade and Azhar said in unison.
So Wolf goes to the middle and Bull is coming after him. Wolf being faster passes the middle of the stadium goes higher and goes back down to reclaim his spot. He hits bull with so much power.....wait it got deflected. Wolf flies to the edge of the stadium but barely stays in. He circles as wolf decides not to attack till he has a plan.
"Why didn't he get affected?" Wade asks himself apparently not so quietly.
"It’s because of the bey’s weight. It weighs so much no attack can affect it “said Azhar
Wade gets covered with red aura and a dog next to him, wait not a dog a wolf
"We shall see about that" replied Wade
"Special Move: Wolf claws “said Wade
Wolf changes course and with all the power he has and hits Bull. This time it is clear Wolf made Bull move as he is circling the stadium.
"So you did move him" said Azhar†But now it’s snack time. Special Move: 3 o'clock"
Bull comes and attacks Wolf in the center of the stadium but Wolf uses his quickness to move out of the way.
"Put him away Wolf “Wade yells "Special move: Flaming Bite"
Wolf comes with everything he has got. Bull flies out of the stadium next to Azhar who is on his knees asking how. Wolf flies to Wade, he catches his bey and the red aura disappears and Wade passes out. "Need... Food..."mumbled Wade “WHERE AM I?"
"Calm down said E-Man
"Yeah, you’re at the hospital and P.S. you don't want the food here. It tastes horrible." said Neku
"Why aren't you guys at the tournament? I didn't miss your match did I?" asked Wade
"No our match was postponed so you could see all the matches." replied Neku
"I can't wait to see your match! “Exclaimed Wade
"Well let’s go!" said E-Man
"I hope we aren't late “said Neku
"And here they are “exclaimed the DJ" Neku and E-Man!"
"3...2...1... GO SHOOT!" yelled Neku and E-Man
"I have never seen that bey “said E-Man
"Then my trips have paid off “said Neku “I got this bey from a different zone."
"What is your bey? “Asked E-Man
"Reviser Dragooon SA165EWD"said Neku “And your bey is Cosmic Befall 90MF"
"Go Befall “said E-Man
"Phft Dragoon special move Absorb “said Neku
"Wait stop Befall" but it was too late.
"That was easy. I need an EASY button. “Said Neku as Befall stopped spinning.
"Whoa I wish that could have been longer. “Said the DJ
"Now for the 12th and 11th seeded bladers" exclaimed the speaker “The 11th seeded blader Shirou Nayzaman, he is 10 years old and his partner Burn Rex 145WD.And his opponent Garry Forestfire and Evil Libra SA165 EWD."
"You ready? “Said Garry
"Yeah" Can you lose quickly as I got a soccer game to go to “said Shirou while putting on his cleats.
"3...2...1...LET IT RIP!!!"Said Shirou and Garry
"Let’s end it right now Rex, SPECIAL MOVE: T-BITE."
Rex hits Libra but it shows no sign of the hit.
"What just happened?!?!?!?"Screamed Shirou
"Well I see the picture isn't there yet. “Said Garry calmly
"What picture? “Said Shirou confused
"Were you not listening when he announced us? “Asked Garry “My name is Garry Forestfire. Does it ring a bell?"
"It can't be. Your last year’s world champion, Mr.Lois Forrestfire's son?"
"Yep. He trained me with no remorse. I was better than him until someone tried to rob our house. I caught the robber and he launched his bey at my arm and broke the bone. I’ve gotten worse due to lack off practice but I can beat you!!!SPECIAL MOVE: BAT WING!!!"
Libra clipped the side of Rex chipping the metal off.
"SPECIAL MOVE: NOCTURNAL “yelled Gerry
Libra went to the middle of the stadium and made Rex Sleep out.
"Why did I lose?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!"Yelled Shirou throwing his launcher at the ground.
Now Wade felt as if the other matches didn't matter. No upsets happened. He was just too pumped to face Neku. He went and ate at Olive Garden for a pre-match meal. He watched video clips of the past, and the most recent of Neku's battle. He even played out the battle with Neku in his head. He practiced everyday with E-Man. One practice battle his bey started glowing and turned into fire. He then had to do repairs to E-Man’s bey. So then the final day had come. He saw Neku and shook his hand.
"3...2...1..."they said in unison
"Wait wait wait" are we saying Let it rip or Go shoot? “Asked Neku
"Well let’s say Go Shoot “replied Wade
"3...2...1...Go Shoot “they screamed together.
"Go up the side of the stadium and come back to hit Dragoon “said Wade
"Not a chance, Special Move: Absorb! “Yelled Neku
"Think you’re so smart don't you Neku “replied Wade “Go now Wolf, Flame Ball." Wolf turned into a ball of fire and hit Dragoon who hit the stadium wall.
"Come at me bro"said Wade
"I never back down from a challenge. GO NOW DRAGOON “Neku said extremely loudly.
Just as Dragoon hit the fireball it glowed so bright no one could see. The Fusion Wheel got bigger and then the bey stopped glowing. Dragoon fell out of the stadium giving Wade the win. Wade checked his bey. He saw what the Wheel was and was stunned. It was a Death wheel; the instant sign of an evil blader. Wade was speechless. He was so embarrassed he ran home. It was over. He was one of the 20 special bladers and also had the element of death which was aligned with the other 10 evil bladers. Wade abandoned the tournament. He started to avoid people. He didn't want to deal with them. He wandered alleys, and battled a person trying to mug him. He of course obliterated him, controlling the spirt and not letting what happened in Round 1 of the tournament happen again. As he wandered around, he pondered what his initial feeling was when he found out about the wheel. He decided that he didn't care what others thought, as he wasn't bad at heart, with or without a legend. He traveled back, only to find Neku and E-man, had gone looking for him. He asked around if anyone knew their location, or at least a tip. He finally came across the DJ.
"Do you know where Neku and E-Man are?" asked Wade.
"When I asked Neku to take your spot he declined saying he was heading for the Radio Tower, I tried to tell him not to, because of the dangerous path you have to take. He seemed too conceded, almost like he could beat anyone. He felt a new pride, I guess. He left 3 days ago and still no signal, so he may not be okay.
Name:
Bey  Can be customized,but parts must be real)
Age:
Additional Info(Not Required but happily accepted):
RE: Story - Voltage - Aug. 19, 2012
Way, way, way to short and terrible grammar.
RE: Story - Cookie Bouquets - Aug. 19, 2012
Dialogue needs it's own line like this:
We were walking down the street
"Yo," I said.
"Hey," He replied.
We walked away.
And the prologue is a little short.
RE: Story - Eternal-E - Aug. 19, 2012
you gotta make the chapter's longer, have dialouge like this
"Hey Jim," Mike said
"Waddup Mike?" Jim asked.
you misspelled bad for bar.
Edit: you beat me to it. dang.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 19, 2012
Ok thanks. It was a start. Its just midnight but I said I would do this and I really need my brain to rest.
RE: Story - Cookie Bouquets - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:37 AM)Eternal-E Wrote: Edit: you beat me to it. dang.
I own the title "Grammar nazi" I see broken dialogue, I post about it.
RE: Story - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:38 AM)Taylor Swift Wrote: (Aug. 19, 2012 6:37 AM)Eternal-E Wrote: Edit: you beat me to it. dang.
I own the title "Grammar nazi" I see broken dialogue, I post about it.
Ah, so I must be your 2nd in command. 
I post about grammar edits all the time XD
Anywas, read my story for help.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 19, 2012
No it's swift. I see her edits alot. I've never seen you.
RE: Story - Voltage - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:44 AM)wtater888 Wrote: No it's swift. I see her edits alot. I've never seen you.
its china she just changed her username theres no way you have never seen one of chinas edits.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 19, 2012
Well if there's spelling errors and the bar thing I blame my phone. Stupid auto correct
RE: Story - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:49 AM)wtater888 Wrote: Well if there's spelling errors and the bar thing I blame my phone. Stupid auto correct
You shouldn't use your phone...
You should use a computer...
RE: Story - Cookie Bouquets - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:32 AM)wtater888 Wrote: The bey islands
Prologue: In the year....oh what was it..... Well anyway the continents break leaving 14 islands. Beyblade rules change and the wbba loses control over events. On each island there are new rules, new styles and of course NEW BEYS. Now lets check on a new blader Wade Moore(yeah a name we can actually pronounce).
Chapter 1:
"Don't forget all your gear"said Wade's mother.
"I won't," replied Wade, "Please stop worrying."
"I'm not worrying why do you think I'm worrying," said mother, "Now treat his bey as your partner and your best friend."
"I will mom calm down" I respond, "BYE!"
Wade started his journey in his own neighborhood. I am at the bottom of the chain. I must prove until I can beat anyone. NO ONE CAN TAKE ME AND MY BEY FLAME WOLF! Fixed.
RE: Story - Voltage - Aug. 19, 2012
(Aug. 19, 2012 6:52 AM)Charlie Scene Wrote: (Aug. 19, 2012 6:49 AM)wtater888 Wrote: Well if there's spelling errors and the bar thing I blame my phone. Stupid auto correct
You shouldn't use your phone...
You should use a computer...
I made the mistake of using my phone to write my first story and it ended in me writing a completely new story because there was no coming back from that awfulness.
RE: Story - sarabscientist - Aug. 19, 2012
Generally, you should always write on a computer. Since it is easier and has spell check.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 19, 2012
My computers got a virus. My dad dosent like me using his computer.
Does anyone have character suggestions?
RE: Story - Eternal-E - Aug. 19, 2012
Name-Evan.
Name he goes by- E-man
Age- 12
Bey- cosmic befall 90 MF
Other stuff- he has long black hair that sticks up (like dogi without the weird golden strand) and a scar on his forhead, from training as a child. Average hight for his age.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 27, 2012
I've fixed this one and I need character requests.
RE: Story - sarabscientist - Aug. 28, 2012
Request: Neku Sakuraba
Personality:
Neku's personality is generally unsociable; he claims he "doesn't get people", and because of this, he usually dislikes interacting with other people. His opinion of others is so low that he tends to see people only for their use. Neku refuses company, as he feels that friends only drag him down, cause him pain when they fail him and make him feel like "unnecessary baggage" to them. Neku sees society as simply an annoyance that forces their values on him, pester him and expect him to do things he doesn't want to do.
Apperance:
Neku is tall and slender, with spiky orange hair in a unique hairstyle and blue eyes. He almost always has his signature indigo headphones on. He wears a sleeveless shirt with a funnel-shaped collar and an indigo stripe outlined with gold going down the middle. He also wears a yellow sweatband on his left arm, and white shorts held up by a loose-fitting belt. He wears black shoes with an indigo stripe outlined in gold, similar to the color and style of his shirt. He also wears his MP3 player around his neck.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 28, 2012
Great insomniac is away but didn't specify the bey. Post the new characters bey.
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 29, 2012
Insomniac if you are here please post the bey.
Edit: Sorry about double post. I was a newb back then and now I'm correcting my mistakes.
RE: Story - sarabscientist - Aug. 29, 2012
Dude, you could have messaged me. Anyways, here is the Bey name:
Uken Abarukas 999ZR
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 29, 2012
I'm going to randomly pick winners except in Wade Moore's battles. I use random.org for randomization.
RE: Story - sarabscientist - Aug. 29, 2012
MSF-H Reviser Dragooon SA165EWD is the real Bey you wanted.
(Aug. 29, 2012 4:33 AM)wtater888 Wrote: I use random.org for randomization. rofl XD
RE: Story - wtater888 - Aug. 29, 2012
(Aug. 29, 2012 9:26 AM)Insomniac Wrote: MSF-H Reviser Dragooon SA165EWD is the real Bey you wanted.
(Aug. 29, 2012 4:33 AM)wtater888 Wrote: I use random.org for randomization. rofl XD
Why is this funny?
RE: Story - sarabscientist - Aug. 29, 2012
I have a very bad sense of humor, forgive me.
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