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(Jul. 01, 2021  6:47 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 01, 2021  6:35 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]Thing is though, the gimmick has function properly with the Sparking system and considering I wasn't impressed with how CrazyAries handed his Phoenix. Its basically the same reason a GT Phoenix never happened, the Ring/Base would be pretty wide and there needs to be room in the layer for the internal workings that makes the gimmick function. I hope this makes sense

You can fuse the layer (lazy one) or make the internal working at the ring, all you need is a circular line for armor and some "teeth" at that line (try to imagine revive phoenix with a chip/ring, its still possible(at least in my head it is)) also lemme watch the CrazyAries thing, it might change everything

He basically just made the entire ring the actual Armor which is a pretty bad design flaw.
(Jul. 01, 2021  6:52 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 01, 2021  6:47 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: [ -> ]You can fuse the layer (lazy one) or make the internal working at the ring, all you need is a circular line for armor and some "teeth" at that line (try to imagine revive phoenix with a chip/ring, its still possible(at least in my head it is)) also lemme watch the CrazyAries thing, it might change everything

He basically just made the entire ring the actual Armor which is a pretty bad design flaw.
Yeah, check out my edited spoiler. Also I've would make an un-pop-up-able armor for a different "double burst"
I'm excited for the next chapters lol (Also Lane's being a real pain at this point it'll be satisfying for Athena to win WITHOUT breaking Lucius LOL)
(Jul. 08, 2021  4:34 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: [ -> ]I'm excited for the next chapters lol (Also Lane's being a real pain at this point it'll be satisfying for Athena to win WITHOUT breaking Lucius LOL)

Yeah all chapters are building up to the final battle so its gonna be a wild ride.
Wattpad is down so I can't write until its fixed, hopefully it comes back up soon.
Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?
(Jul. 12, 2021  12:44 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: [ -> ]Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?

Because Wattpad is my main writing outlet and I don't like writing directly on WBO anymore. even if I was going to do that, because Wattpad is down i cannot go in and retrieve what ive written until it comes back up.
(Jul. 12, 2021  1:07 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 12, 2021  12:44 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: [ -> ]Why can’t you just post it on the WBO?

Because Wattpad is my main writing outlet and I don't like writing directly on WBO anymore. even if I was going to do that, because Wattpad is down i cannot go in and retrieve what ive written until it comes back up.

Okay make sense!
Great Fanfic! Adeona looks like black suit Samus(A character from Metroid)
plus I ship Aiga and Athena lol
New Chapter released soon.
(Lane when he senses Athena's presence)

Lane: UGHHHHHHHH!!!
Lol lane works alone

(Jul. 13, 2021  8:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]New Chapter released soon.

I’m excited
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(Jul. 17, 2021  7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ][Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]


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How much free time do you have?!
(Jul. 17, 2021  8:25 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 17, 2021  7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ][Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]


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How much free time do you have?!

Considering I'm on summer break and I don't have much to do, quite a lot
(Jul. 17, 2021  8:29 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 17, 2021  8:25 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: [ -> ]How much free time do you have?!

Considering I'm on summer break and I don't have much to do, quite a lot

Touche, as a fellow writer I can relate to that just being up at 9 trying to finish a chapter lol, Anyways good luck! I'm excited to see the next chapter!
(Jul. 17, 2021  7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ][Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]


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Hmm...

Ha
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*tea .. **tears??**

Adeo
(Jul. 17, 2021  8:38 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 17, 2021  7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ][Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]


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Hmm...

Ha
Sp
wit
*tea .. **tears??**

Adeo

OMG She or He gave us a leak how did I not see it before
(Jul. 17, 2021  7:58 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ][Image: 20210717-135414.jpg]


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1839 words? lol that's a big one
(Jul. 17, 2021  9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story...lade-burst

I didn't expected Lane would switch places with Aiga.... Anyways, Nice Chapter!
(Jul. 17, 2021  9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story...lade-burst

How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!

(Jul. 17, 2021  9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 17, 2021  9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story...lade-burst

How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!


Yeah, Shu isn't exactly hard to write for.
(Jul. 18, 2021  3:30 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]
(Jul. 17, 2021  9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: [ -> ]How do you pull off Shu's character lol! It's a very hard one to pull and you did it awesomely!


Yeah, Shu isn't exactly hard to write for.
For me it is I'm trying to make him cool but nice but not as nice as Valt but you get what I'm saying
(Jul. 17, 2021  9:36 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 41
https://www.wattpad.com/1093752880-story...lade-burst

IT'S TOO SHORT!! I expected better from you.

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