Jul. 02, 2019 7:46 PM
Jul. 02, 2019 9:05 PM
I feel like you should use dub names because most people are probably more familiar with them(at least I am) but both are okay.
Jul. 02, 2019 10:08 PM
Okay. What about the BEYBLADE names?
Jul. 02, 2019 10:44 PM
I prefer the Sub names.
But either works.
But either works.
Jul. 02, 2019 11:01 PM
Dub names for the beys
Jul. 02, 2019 11:09 PM
Would alternating them work? Like odd numbered chapters are dubbed, and even numbered chapters are subbed?
Jul. 02, 2019 11:10 PM
(Jul. 02, 2019 11:01 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: [ -> ]Dub names for the beysIt’s funny that for both questions we had opposite answers.
(Jul. 02, 2019 11:09 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]Would alternating them work? Like odd numbered chapters are dubbed, and even numbered chapters are subbed?If you want. But that might get confusing, so I think you should stick with one or the other. You choose.
(Jul. 02, 2019 11:10 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ](Jul. 02, 2019 11:01 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: [ -> ]Dub names for the beysIt’s funny that for both questions we had opposite answers.
(Jul. 02, 2019 11:09 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]Would alternating them work? Like odd numbered chapters are dubbed, and even numbered chapters are subbed?If you want. But that might get confusing, so I think you should stick with one or the other. You choose.
But I’m not the writer, you are! It’s totally your decision.
Jul. 02, 2019 11:18 PM
Thanks guys. I’ll just type and whatever I type is what it is.
Jul. 02, 2019 11:30 PM
Cheeto, as long as you keep it consistent, it won’t be confusing because all the Beys have the same initials in Dub and Sub.
Jul. 04, 2019 6:28 PM
Chapter 3: The Super Awesome Training Camp!
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Harold was getting into his chair for dinner. They were having spaghetti and meatballs. Harold was sitting next to his little sister, London.
“So, Harold, What was in the mail?” Asked Mrs. Laberdol.
“I’ll be right back.” Harold said rushing to the mailbox. “Okay, I’m back! Okay, we have one bill, another bill, three bills, four bills, and a birthday party invitation for London. Mrs. Laberdol sighed as she heard all of the bills.
“Who’s it from?” Asked the curly haired younger sister.
“It says, Sara.” Harold said annoyed by constantly being asked questions instead of eating.
“OMG! Sara’s my very best friend!” London giggled.
“OMG! Let me eat my dinner!” Harold said mocking London.
After dinner Mrs. Laberdol called Harold over. “Harold, I have to work full time for a while and I can’t be home, I know dad will be home, but you probably don’t want to stay with London, so I’m letting you pick a camp to go to for a while.”
“Thanks!” Harold, relieved that he won’t have to spend Summer with his sister, said.
*insert nighttime skip*
Harold woke up and looked out his window. Reagan was shoving her younger siblings out of her room then went to her window because she saw Harold. Both of the kids opened their windows.
“G’morning.” Harold said.
“Hey.” Reagan replied. “What do you wanna do?”
“Well my mom said to find a camp to go to, so I want to find a camp.” Harold said.
“Oh, want to go to my camp? It’s a BEYBLADE camp. My parents don’t want me getting so many migraines from so many screaming idiots.” Reagan said.
“I heard that!” Yelled Reagan’s little brother, Tommy.
“Get away from my door!” Reagan yelled. “Anyways, the camp is a sleep away camp. It says that it’s top notch training. So if we become really good, we can beat Gold eye guy!”
“Okay, when does it start?” Harold asked.
“Tomorrow.” Reagan replied.
“Okay.” Harold was just sitting there then he realized something: he needed to pack. Frantically Harold threw some clothes, toothpaste, a toothbrush, and his stuffed wolf into his suitcase. Looking back at Reagan’s house, she was leaning out the window shooting a Nerf gun at her twin brother, Samuel, because he was shooting too.
Harold reached for his Nerf Rival, and cocked it. He opened the window, leaned out, aimed the Nerf gun at Sam and put his finger on the trigger. Just as Harold was about to pull the trigger, Harold had a migraine, he lost every last ounce of his strength and the weight of the Nerf gun pulled him out the window and the house had no roof at that part of the house, so Harold fell.
Falling twenty feet off the ground, or so he thought, he was about to hit the bottom, Harold braced himself for the impact but the impact didn’t hurt much. As he fell four feet, not twenty. Harold had gotten a mere bruise on his arm, nothing much.
“You good, Harold?” Reagan asked.
“Sure.” Harold said brushing himself off.
Harold went inside and asked his mom if he could go to the camp.
“Sure. Just one thing. You need to get a ride there.” Mrs. Laberdol said.
“I can ride with Reagan. She’s going to the same camp.” Harold said scratching his back.
“Okay, when does it start?” Asked Mrs. Laberdol.
“Tomorrow.” Harold said before seeing the look on his mom’s face. “But I already packed!”
“Okay, I’ll go tell your dad and sister.” Replied Mrs. Laberdol.
Harold ran back to his room and opened his window. Reagan was eating a Twinkie while reloading her Nerf guns. Harold opened his window and said: “I can go to the camp if I can get a ride! Can I ride in your car?”
Reagan, whose window was already open, ran upstairs and asked her dad. “Sure he can come!” Said Mr. Kuqier.
“Thanks!” Reagan said running down the stairs. “Okay, Harold! He said yes! Now let’s go play BEYBLADE!”
“Okay.” Harold said picking up his launcher and BEYBLADE while running towards his front door.
Harold and Reagan played BEYBLADE until dinner time. Then they slept.
“Harold! Wake up! Get dressed and get your BEYBLADE! They’re waiting for you!” Yelled Mr. Laberdol.
Harold, being shocked and caught off guard, pulled on some clothes, grabbed his BEYBLADE and suitcase, and ran out the front door.
“I forgot to set my alarm! Sorry!” Harold said frantically.
“I guess that explains why you were late.” Reagan said mocking Harold from three days ago.
“Shut up.” Harold said.
A hour later, they arrived.
“Bye dad!” Reagan said jumping out of the car. “Thanks Mr. Kuqier!” Harold said following Reagan.
Harold and Reagan followed a large group of kids to the registration stand where a kid with a blue zipped up jacket, who looked about eleven was signing people in.
“Kuqier, Reagan. Migraines. Sign here please.” The curly haired boy said handing his pen to Reagan. Reagan signed her named in the designated spot and handed the pen back to the boy. “Laberdol, Harold. Blind in an eye. Sign here please.” The blue jacketed boy handed the pen to Harold. Harold signed his name and ran to Reagan.
Both of the children went into a small auditorium and found two seats. About thirteen minutes later the kid who was registering people came on to the stage.
“Hi everyone! Welcome to BeyCamp! My name is-“
…To Be Continued.
“So, Harold, What was in the mail?” Asked Mrs. Laberdol.
“I’ll be right back.” Harold said rushing to the mailbox. “Okay, I’m back! Okay, we have one bill, another bill, three bills, four bills, and a birthday party invitation for London. Mrs. Laberdol sighed as she heard all of the bills.
“Who’s it from?” Asked the curly haired younger sister.
“It says, Sara.” Harold said annoyed by constantly being asked questions instead of eating.
“OMG! Sara’s my very best friend!” London giggled.
“OMG! Let me eat my dinner!” Harold said mocking London.
After dinner Mrs. Laberdol called Harold over. “Harold, I have to work full time for a while and I can’t be home, I know dad will be home, but you probably don’t want to stay with London, so I’m letting you pick a camp to go to for a while.”
“Thanks!” Harold, relieved that he won’t have to spend Summer with his sister, said.
*insert nighttime skip*
Harold woke up and looked out his window. Reagan was shoving her younger siblings out of her room then went to her window because she saw Harold. Both of the kids opened their windows.
“G’morning.” Harold said.
“Hey.” Reagan replied. “What do you wanna do?”
“Well my mom said to find a camp to go to, so I want to find a camp.” Harold said.
“Oh, want to go to my camp? It’s a BEYBLADE camp. My parents don’t want me getting so many migraines from so many screaming idiots.” Reagan said.
“I heard that!” Yelled Reagan’s little brother, Tommy.
“Get away from my door!” Reagan yelled. “Anyways, the camp is a sleep away camp. It says that it’s top notch training. So if we become really good, we can beat Gold eye guy!”
“Okay, when does it start?” Harold asked.
“Tomorrow.” Reagan replied.
“Okay.” Harold was just sitting there then he realized something: he needed to pack. Frantically Harold threw some clothes, toothpaste, a toothbrush, and his stuffed wolf into his suitcase. Looking back at Reagan’s house, she was leaning out the window shooting a Nerf gun at her twin brother, Samuel, because he was shooting too.
Harold reached for his Nerf Rival, and cocked it. He opened the window, leaned out, aimed the Nerf gun at Sam and put his finger on the trigger. Just as Harold was about to pull the trigger, Harold had a migraine, he lost every last ounce of his strength and the weight of the Nerf gun pulled him out the window and the house had no roof at that part of the house, so Harold fell.
Falling twenty feet off the ground, or so he thought, he was about to hit the bottom, Harold braced himself for the impact but the impact didn’t hurt much. As he fell four feet, not twenty. Harold had gotten a mere bruise on his arm, nothing much.
“You good, Harold?” Reagan asked.
“Sure.” Harold said brushing himself off.
Harold went inside and asked his mom if he could go to the camp.
“Sure. Just one thing. You need to get a ride there.” Mrs. Laberdol said.
“I can ride with Reagan. She’s going to the same camp.” Harold said scratching his back.
“Okay, when does it start?” Asked Mrs. Laberdol.
“Tomorrow.” Harold said before seeing the look on his mom’s face. “But I already packed!”
“Okay, I’ll go tell your dad and sister.” Replied Mrs. Laberdol.
Harold ran back to his room and opened his window. Reagan was eating a Twinkie while reloading her Nerf guns. Harold opened his window and said: “I can go to the camp if I can get a ride! Can I ride in your car?”
Reagan, whose window was already open, ran upstairs and asked her dad. “Sure he can come!” Said Mr. Kuqier.
“Thanks!” Reagan said running down the stairs. “Okay, Harold! He said yes! Now let’s go play BEYBLADE!”
“Okay.” Harold said picking up his launcher and BEYBLADE while running towards his front door.
Harold and Reagan played BEYBLADE until dinner time. Then they slept.
“Harold! Wake up! Get dressed and get your BEYBLADE! They’re waiting for you!” Yelled Mr. Laberdol.
Harold, being shocked and caught off guard, pulled on some clothes, grabbed his BEYBLADE and suitcase, and ran out the front door.
“I forgot to set my alarm! Sorry!” Harold said frantically.
“I guess that explains why you were late.” Reagan said mocking Harold from three days ago.
“Shut up.” Harold said.
A hour later, they arrived.
“Bye dad!” Reagan said jumping out of the car. “Thanks Mr. Kuqier!” Harold said following Reagan.
Harold and Reagan followed a large group of kids to the registration stand where a kid with a blue zipped up jacket, who looked about eleven was signing people in.
“Kuqier, Reagan. Migraines. Sign here please.” The curly haired boy said handing his pen to Reagan. Reagan signed her named in the designated spot and handed the pen back to the boy. “Laberdol, Harold. Blind in an eye. Sign here please.” The blue jacketed boy handed the pen to Harold. Harold signed his name and ran to Reagan.
Both of the children went into a small auditorium and found two seats. About thirteen minutes later the kid who was registering people came on to the stage.
“Hi everyone! Welcome to BeyCamp! My name is-“
…To Be Continued.
Jul. 04, 2019 6:31 PM
Nice chapter!
Jul. 04, 2019 6:32 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:31 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ]Nice chapter!Thanks! I think it’s my longest chapter!
Jul. 04, 2019 6:33 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 6:34 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:33 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ]I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big off an achievement.(Jul. 04, 2019 6:32 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]Thanks! I think it’s my longest chapter!Really? They all seem similar.
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:33 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ]I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big of an achievement.(Jul. 04, 2019 6:32 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]Thanks! I think it’s my longest chapter!Really? They all seem similar.
Jul. 04, 2019 6:35 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:34 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]Oh. Well, the chapters are great, so keep them coming!(Jul. 04, 2019 6:33 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ]Really? They all seem similar.I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big off an achievement.
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:33 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ]Really? They all seem similar.I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big of an achievement.
Jul. 04, 2019 6:36 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 6:35 PM)Dash Driver Wrote: [ -> ](Jul. 04, 2019 6:34 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ]I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big off an achievement.Oh. Well, the chapters are great, so keep them coming!
I did word count and I had over 900 words. Probably not too big of an achievement.
Next one on July 7th.
Jul. 04, 2019 6:39 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 6:40 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 7:03 PM
You have accomplished a feat only the writers of Seinfeld have ever accomplished:
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You have made likable characters that are still terrible people!
Jul. 04, 2019 7:09 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 7:03 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: [ -> ]You have accomplished a feat only the writers of Seinfeld have ever accomplished:
Spoiler (Click to View)You have made likable characters that are still terrible people!
YAY!Also anyone know who the guy is?
Jul. 04, 2019 7:45 PM
(Jul. 04, 2019 7:09 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: [ -> ](Jul. 04, 2019 7:03 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: [ -> ]You have accomplished a feat only the writers of Seinfeld have ever accomplished:
Spoiler (Click to View)You have made likable characters that are still terrible people!
YAY!Also anyone know who the guy is?
It’s Valt. He’s in every series of Burst ever. It’s the only way.
Jul. 04, 2019 7:53 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 7:54 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 7:56 PM
Jul. 04, 2019 8:03 PM
Valt doesn't have curly hair, so not him.
Maybe... Toko?
Maybe... Toko?