World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

As you all know,my first version of this story sucked so I am making a new one!
Chapter 1"Here,take this bey,young one.It will protect you from danger."The old man told me.
I nod slightly,and the old man scuttles offTwelve years later,we meaning me and John(my best friend were battling when a strange bey shot out from the surrounding trees.
"Whoa!What is that?"John yells.
"My gravity destroyer105rf ofcourse!"Yells a boy.
"Show yourself!"I yell.
"No need!I'm right in front of you!Battle me,"he yells as he calls his bey back.
"Ok,fine!Me first!"John yells.
"3,,21,LET IT RIP!"
Immediately,both beys circle the stadium.
"Destroyer,now!"
Destroyer suddenly turns around and heads straight for John's bey Flamespidered145sf.
"Is that reverse rotation?"Johnathan asks."Never mind,flamespider!"
Spider veers backwards,reveling his spintrack,ed145.
When Destroyer hit Spider's spin track,he circled around him without delivering damage.
"How'd you like my ed145?"John teased.
"Impressive,but futile!"
"Oh yeah?Special move Spider,Fiery Web!"
The mysterious blader only smirked.
John's bey quickly closed the distance between them,and then there was the explosion.

I could be wrong, but I think you can only have one thread per story, even if it's a redo.

Lol Dual.....try making your own beys

What the heck is that supposed to mean? That honestly made no sense...

i think he means storys, i guess, but classik don't say beys it just sounds confusing

If he did mean stories then his post is ridiculous as I've written many stories...

But the story?Do you guys like it?(You're Ultramarine,right Dual?)

(Feb. 14, 2014  3:21 AM)King EVIL Emper Wrote: [ -> ]But the story?Do you guys like it?(You're Ultramarine,right Dual?)

Yes, he is.

Having trouble with the spoilers...Can someone help me?

honestly this could be better.....space your words...

One thread per story. No need for multiples.