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Here is a story, I've been making,
Ok, first, pronouns are not something to be ignored, using "he," "himself," etc once and awhile won't kill you, haha.
There were also quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as the fact that the chapter was quite short.
Work on those things and your story will improve.