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I know I am writing another story at the moment but I want to make a Beyblade story too. Here it is! If you vote for the last option, please tell me what I should do to improve.

Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6

Characters:

Name: Dezi Thompson
Beyblade: Phantom Quetzalcoatl W145WD
Age: 14
Personality: Hyper, stubborn.

Name: Karen O'Neil
Beyblade: Burn Bull 130SF
Age: 15
Personality: Cheerful, a tom boy.

Name: Eric Thomas
Beyblade: Basalt Sagittario 230JB
Age: 15
Personality: Jokes around a lot. Very self-confident.

Name: Jimmy Tranel
Beyblade: Lightning L-Drago 85WF
Age: 14
Personality: Friendly, very straightforward.
Well I really liked it, you got me excited to read the next chapter of your story. There were some little mistakes. But good job. I think you should have lots of chapters (not like china's guardians story).
Nice job, like always, and its only Chapter 1!
Nice. Seems like it's inspired from my story.

@ Kai: What's that supposed to mean?! Unhappy
Nice story. Oh I am excited on the next chapters!
Thanks everyone! If all works out, chapter 2 will be up in the afternoon.
it was Smile
Chapter 2 is up! Sorry the story is moving kinda slow but things should kick off next chapter which might maybe be up later today.
zeo uses a screw lyre ed145mf, toby uses screw fox... Great story though. Keep it up.
Actually I looked it up and Zeo does use Fox. Thanks for the compliment!
(Sep. 24, 2012  5:01 AM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: [ -> ]Nice. Seems like it's inspired from my story.

@ Kai: What's that supposed to mean?! Unhappy

I mean that it'll be good for him to write a story with a lot of chapters but not a lot like 30-40 chapters, hope that didn't offend you, china.
Chapter 3 is up!
Chapter 4 is up. Again, the story is going kinda slow but the action will pick up soon!
That's a good thing, if the action started right away it may become rushed. And also, will you still be writing your Beywheelz story?
Yah, I just want to right a beyblade story also.
Chapter 5 is up! The action is coming, almost here!
Well I can't wait for chapter 6 and the next ones. Keep it up!!!
Chapter 6 is up! The action has begun!
Sorry guys, I just don't really "feel" this story if you know what I mean. I'm thinking of an idea for a new one. Could some one please close this?