Jun. 14, 2012 6:45 AM
Jun. 14, 2012 2:36 PM
You do realize that there's two of this thread, right?
Jun. 14, 2012 2:41 PM
Yes, for some reason, it posted this twice, so I asked the other one to be closed.
Jun. 14, 2012 2:46 PM
Good idea!
Jun. 19, 2012 10:26 PM
Just added Chapter 2, where Robby gets his first Creaturesgon.
Jun. 20, 2012 1:50 AM
So wait, we can actually buy "creaturegon" cards???
Anyways, to the story.
The first thing I noticed about chapter 1 was length. Damn, that must've taken you a while to write! *claps slowly* good job for taking so much effort into making each chapter, and really polishing it.
The names are sorta tacky (Maybe that's okay because it's a game card thing...), and not very realistic. From personal experience, using regular names can tell a lot about a character. First, it adds a dimension of realism - an element that's key to a far out idea such as this, where you still want to keep it "down-to-earth" so to speak. Also, using a name like "Johnny" gives some insight into personality. From TV Shows and such, some names have reputations as certain things. For example, Cornelius can be known as a name for someone smart. I don't mean to criticize (Well, I sorta do) but Pickles is an...well...eccentric name. And Mr. Pony?...
Anyway, do what you like. I'm just throwing out some suggestions.
Anyways, to the story.
The first thing I noticed about chapter 1 was length. Damn, that must've taken you a while to write! *claps slowly* good job for taking so much effort into making each chapter, and really polishing it.
The names are sorta tacky (Maybe that's okay because it's a game card thing...), and not very realistic. From personal experience, using regular names can tell a lot about a character. First, it adds a dimension of realism - an element that's key to a far out idea such as this, where you still want to keep it "down-to-earth" so to speak. Also, using a name like "Johnny" gives some insight into personality. From TV Shows and such, some names have reputations as certain things. For example, Cornelius can be known as a name for someone smart. I don't mean to criticize (Well, I sorta do) but Pickles is an...well...eccentric name. And Mr. Pony?...
Anyway, do what you like. I'm just throwing out some suggestions.
Jun. 20, 2012 5:09 AM
Well then again, this is an eccentric story. And i did make up the names when I was younger, and they kind of stuck. (To this day I still can't figure out where Pickles came from, or the fact he's a talking leopard.) Although the idea and names are indeed far out, I tried to develop person?alities for the characters (like Pickles is the typical main character being rash and overconfident, but loyal to his friends) throughout the story. Also, many characters in the series mentioned in the OP have eccentric/foreign names. I'll admit my sister came up with Mr. Pony.
And sorry, but not anymore. I saw someone's Bakugan thread closed for selling/trading things not related to Beyblade, so I guess that means I can't sell my cards. I can post pictures though.
And sorry, but not anymore. I saw someone's Bakugan thread closed for selling/trading things not related to Beyblade, so I guess that means I can't sell my cards. I can post pictures though.
Jun. 24, 2012 5:04 PM
Sorry for the double post, but Chapter 3 is up!
Jun. 25, 2012 6:18 AM
NICE! SO what does Beyblaade have to do with it? The launching? Well anyways great chapter! Please continue.
Jul. 01, 2012 1:59 AM
(Jun. 25, 2012 6:18 AM)Emperor Wrote: [ -> ]NICE! SO what does Beyblaade have to do with it? The launching? Well anyways great chapter! Please continue.
Right in the thread it says it's not beyblade related...
Apr. 22, 2013 11:11 PM
Alright, could one of the mods please close this thread? I haven't updated it in almost a year, and it isn't going to go anywhere. Thanks in advance!
Apr. 23, 2013 12:09 AM
Report it when you want to delete something.