World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

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I'm not done and It needs a name after youve read it please sugest a name.Like it or don't.

Chapter one:That Boy and WILLIAM
i don't understand
what is the point of all of this
There are many grammitical errors. Plus the first chapter is WAY to short. Please fix those mistakes, if you can. Plus I don't get it. What is the point of this?
(Jun. 09, 2012  8:22 PM)Raigeko13 Wrote: [ -> ]i don't understand
what is the point of all of this

Its a nonsens story filled with nonsense and fun but it will get bigger.

and
(Jun. 09, 2012  8:24 PM)Ozone Wrote: [ -> ]There are many grammitical errors. Plus the first chapter is WAY to short. Please fix those mistakes, if you can.
Ill try and fix them and by the way ya is is meant to be ya and like I said it will get bigger.It seemed much bigger on word......
Meh, this story, so many..... , it's just ......., basically what Rai and Ozone said.
... So that boy's name isn't capitalized? Chocked
Yeah, I probably shouldn't have put this up here-I wrote it straight off the top of my head without planning and without editing.
Do any of you know a good site with advice on how to write good stories?
I've fixed most of the mistakes hope you enjoy!
I've also included more.
I realy hope its made it better.
No offense but, this story is bad. Even if you fixed the errors, it makes no since. There's no plot, good storyline, or good dialog. Please try coming up with a good story before you go and write one all crazy like this one. I suggest you practice writing in real life before you come and post a random story on here. No offense.
I liked it,But i don't know why
(Jun. 11, 2012  10:34 AM)Hel1Aquila Wrote: [ -> ]I liked it,But i don't know why
Oh, I liked it cus of the names and the part where he jumps aroundTongue_out_wink

(Jun. 11, 2012  10:34 AM)Kye#4 Wrote: [ -> ]I liked it,But i don't know why
(Jun. 11, 2012  10:34 AM)Hel1Aquila Wrote: [ -> ]I liked it,But i don't know why
Oh, I liked it cus of the names and the part where he jumps aroundTongue_out_wink
Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I don't think Ill continue this but I WILL make other stories and I can tell you the'll be 100% better.They'll have a plot and trix and everything!!!!!Tongue_out
Oh and should I do it from the charecters point of view or mine?say yes or no