World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

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This is my own story starring me,BattleBlader357,in the world championships(f.y.I. this is my own version of it)battling against a blader who likes to scare his opponents.Now,ON TO THE STORY!
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This is it,I thought as I walked to the stadium.Once I was there,my opponent,Mikai,stood there with a smug smile pasted on his lips.I clenched my fists,who could he call himself a blader?
"So,you're my opponent?You're nothing!" He barked,trying to through me off my game.He reached into his pocket and pulled out a black bey and said "You see this bey?It's my Nightmare Lacerta." His bey gleamed in the sun.I remained silent and pulled out my launcher and bey,Phantom Orion,and got ready to battle.Mikai did so too.The referee held up three fingers and began the countdown.

3...2...1...Go Shoot!

Lacerta,as soon as it hit the stadium floor,began to attack Orion rapidly.But Lacerta's attacks were doing nothing to Orion.I studied his bey for a moment and figured out that Lacerta used a D125 and an XF tip,meaning that it was an attack type."Orion!"I called out and my bey hit Lacerta and sent it flying.
"Mikai,I will not loose to someone like you,do you hear me?"as soon as Lacerta hit the floor,Orion began his famous barrage attack."My Orion may be a stamina type,"I said as Orion sent Lacerta flying again"but the difference between Orion and Lacerta is the bladers"
Mikai looked at me with a confused look"What do you mean?"I started to glow a violet purple aura and so did Orion"We are different because you don't have any blader's spirit!"I yelled and Orion's aura shot up into the air
"Special move,PHANTOM FANG DRIVE!"I called out and the spirit of Orion came out and Swallowed up the spirit of Lacerta.Soon after it,A huge explosion sounded out in the stadium.Once the smoke cleared,Lacerta was at Mikai's feet,motionless,and Orion was spinning in the center of the stadium.
Mikai looked at his bey in disbelief"How is this possible?How could I lose to a weakling like him?"My eyes shot daggers at him"Because you're not a real blader,got that?"
Orion returned to my hand and I walked away from the fake blader known as Mikai.Mikai,I thought,I hope you have learned something about blader's spirit.
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So,what do you think guys and gals?Tell me what you think,see you later!
This is a nice story. Remember to give your characters real personality, or else the story will become boring. Also, you need to put ONE space after a comma or question mark, and TWO spaces after a period or exclamation point. You have a nice plot to work with, just keep these tips in mind! Keep up the good writing!
Someone already has the same title,I suggest changing it...
dialogue goes like this, it needs its own line

"yo," I said.
"Hey," he said.
we began to battle
"Three!" I exclaim
lol when i see this im like YES MY STORY HAS A NEW POST! buuuuuuuuuuuuuuut then i realise its your story (we have the same story title