World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

This is my first draft criticize all you need
Name Variation
Hasbro released this product as Vortex Ape

Attack Ring (AR): Mountain Hammer
Weight: 7 grams
The design of Mountain Hammer the AR of Voltaic Ape is completely circular with two ape heads on either side these two ape heads have a surprisingly amount of recoil so it should never be used competitive

Weight Disk (WD): MG WD
See MG WD

Spin Gear (SG): Neo Right SG (S-MG Core)
See Neo Right SG

Support Part(SP): Defense Ring
Weight: 3 grams
Voltaic Ape's prized part it can be used in both survival and defense combos.The small "knobs" lend themselves well to tier 1 spin stealing and the shape gives it tier 1 defense.

Use in Defense Customizations

* Note refer to Adding a Different SG if you do not know how to setup the SG.

As stated before, it is possible to make a defense type combinations by using Defense Ring Here is an example of one:

* AR: War Lion (Galeon)
* S-AR: War Lion (Galeon)
* WD: Wide Defense
* SG: Neo-Right SG (Customize Bearing) (Burning Kerberous)
* SG Shaft: (Bearing Version 2) (Wolborg 2)
* SP: Defense Ring (Voltaic Ape)
* BB: Customize Grip (Dragoon V2)

This combination is built to take a numerous amount of hard hits due to how circular in shape the parts are together. Defense Ring is able to use both the Customize Grip and the Customize Bearing SG allowing an opportunity for defense on the bottom half of the combination. In addition, War Lion nearly aligns with Wide Defense allowing the remainder of the top section to be defensive. Customize Bearing with the shaft of Wolborg 2 is used to limit its movement to the center area of the stadium to avoid a KO when attack type combinations are at their strongest moving around the outer side of the stadium.

Use in Spin Stealing/Zombie Customizations

* Note refer to Adding a Different SG if you do not know how to setup the SG.

Spin Stealers and Zombie Beyblades received a weight advantage with the release of Dragoon V2, but when other support parts were released such as Defense Ring (Voltaic Ape) and Cross Survivor (Dranzer V2), they became tier 1.

Here is an example of a Spin Stealers/Zombie:

* AR: Tiger Defense (Driger S)
* WD: Wide Survivor
* SG: Neo-Left SG* (Customize Bearing) (Burning Kerberous)
* SG Shaft: SG (Bearing Version) (Wolborg)
* SP: Defense Ring (Voltaic Ape)
* BB: Customize Grip (Dragoon V2)

Because of Defense Ring's circular SP, life after death was able to occur more often due to shape of Defense Ring .

Blade Base (BB): Customize Metal Sharp Base
Weight: 6 grams

Other Versions
Random Booster 11 Shadow Black ver.
Standard Recolor Metallic Green ver.

Overall
This beyblade is horribly outclassed except for it's SP Defense Ring. This beyblade also comes with a MG WD (also available in Dragoon V2 and the Magnacore Accessory Pack) which has several uses.
Due to the Sp having multiple uses every blader should own one of this beyblade

Some of the grammar is very informal, and I believe only at least one of these Beyblades as there is Dranzer V2's Cross Survivor, etc.

can you rephrase that i don't quite get it

Your grammar, the way you say the sentences are very unformal, like ''It is awesome attack'' to ''The attack it produces is very strong.''

This is a pretty terrible draft, sorry.

Multiples of this bey aren't neccessary, but defense ring is an excellent SP. Probably a little better than Cross Survivor/Survivor Ring for LAD, though I don't know how it does for upper protection.

We also do not have an MG WD article. I know another article does say "see MG WD", but it shouldn't. Someone needs to actually write it up.

And you also missed the Metallic Green version in recolours. Can't remember where that's from.

(Nov. 18, 2011  2:56 PM)th!nk Wrote: [ -> ]We also do not have an MG WD article. I know another article does say "see MG WD", but it shouldn't. Someone needs to actually write it up.

And you also missed the Metallic Green version in recolours. Can't remember where that's from.

I think that's just put there and linked up when it does go up, all the drats are linked up.
Standard recolor, not RB or coro coro.

okay added the recolor and changed it from multiples to one of this beyblade

Is it metalic green I though the official color was something like jungle green...? And it doesn't look very metalic...

i don't know Th!nk told me it was metallic

The mg wd is not a common part, and the other bey that has it already has an article up, which links to "mg wd", which doesn't exist. If you write about any bey you should write about all the parts. It's odd that it was overlooked initially, tbh.


I have no idea what the green recolor was named. It is somewhat metallic, similar to my voltaic ape SG casings, but dark green.

so what type of green is it?

It doesn't matter what green it is; more what green takara named it.

I have already explained the shade, I do not know the color.

Honestly, drafts like this are what annoy me about the one thread per article rule. A draft should only be posted once it is complete as far as the author is aware. You didn't even write a base section, the ar section is a poor paraphrasing of my response in the plastics testing thread, and the only part of the sp section not taken from another article is poorly written and gives little information on how the part works. To write about two sentences and call it a draft is just disgusting and doesn't help the project at all.

You're not the only offender (though this is one of the worst drafts in a long time), people scrambling to tag all the threads on their own instead of focusing on a single draft are just as bad, especially when the drafts have all the substance of a Graham cracker.

People, think about WHY you're writing drafts. If it's to "stick up" for a bey you love, it's not the right reason. If it's to write drafts for all beta in a particular series, it's the wrong reason. If it's the face thingy, it's the wrong reason (and the wrong way to go about it). If it's to share information and contribute selflessly with good quality material, then congratulations, you're doing it for the RIGHT reason.

And even then, doing it well is an entirely different matter.

(Nov. 18, 2011  9:31 PM)th!nk Wrote: [ -> ]Honestly, drafts like this are what annoy me about the one thread per article rule. A draft should only be posted once it is complete as far as the author is aware. You didn't even write a base section, the ar section is a poor paraphrasing of my response in the plastics testing thread, and the only part of the sp section not taken from another article is poorly written and gives little information on how the part works. To write about two sentences and call it a draft is just disgusting and doesn't help the project at all.

Yo, we also have a rule that if drafts are too bad, we close them. That, coupled with the "one-thread-per-article" rule, should create a decent environment.