World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

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Chapter 1: A Strange Force
There was a boy, who walked through the night as if it was day. He entered the small city, the streets as empty as the cloudless sky. His silver hair glistened with the single street light’s rays, he stopped at the intersection. He wore a white t-shirt and blue jeans. Foot steps pasted behind him, he turned around. They came from in front of him next, he turned around again.
“You’re doing a crappy job of sneaking around,” he joked. Icicles rose from the ground, heading in a straight line for him. He back-flipped out of the way, getting his Beyblade ready while in mid-air. He let loose his bey, it ran through the icicles. He smirked as it came back to him, the single street light illuminated his attacker.
“You haven’t last your touch,” he laughed. The boy took a step back, getting his bey ready again. “Come on, Tasku. Is that any way to greet an old friend?”
“You’re no friend of mine,” Tasku ripped his bey, the figure did as well. They clashed in the middle of the street, sparks scattering the ground. “Get him!”
“No use, Tragic Viper!” the figure called out. His black and gold bey spun faster, hitting Tasku’s bey at various points. Tasku cursed under his breath, looking at his opponent.
“Cyon, why can’t you just leave me alone!” Tasku’s bey struck back, going blow for blow with Tragic Viper. Cyon laughed.
“You know why. Stop holding back, unleash that wonderful power I gave you!” Tragic Viper rammed Tasku’s bey into a street light, making it topple over. The street was now covered in darkness, the sparks flying off the beys provided the only light.
“Damn it!” Tasku yelled. Viper didn’t seem to be affected by the darkness at all, still ramming Tasku’s bey every chance it got. Tasku was surrounded in a golden aura, giving off just enough light so that he could see the battle. “Get him now, Destru Draco!” Draco clashed against Viper, creating a line of rubble in the pavement.
“Now that’s that wonderful power,” Cyon clapped. His bey jumped out from the rubble, landing near Cyon’s feet. Draco dashed at Viper, who dodged his attack. Draco drifted back around, clashing against Viper.
“Damn! This is taking too long! Special Move:,” Tasku began. His golden aura began to waver before shooting into the sky. “The hell!?”
“There! There it is,” Cyon pointed into the sky. A bolt of lightning flew downwards, striking down on the two beys. Anyone who would’ve seen them would have been blinded by the light. As the light faded, so had the two bladers.

I know it's pretty short but this is just the prologe. Tell me what you think and I'll have the next chapter up as soon as possible. Stupid
it is alright, one of the better stories in terms of grammar, punctuation, and caps. In terms of plot....................... I will state my feelings once i have read the next 5 chapters.

Izuma Inzori
Agreed. Good with the grammar, minus the various comma-splices. The plot feels cliched, though.