Jul. 22, 2011 1:26 PM
School is over, I have some spare time on my hands and since I post a lot in this forum these days, I thought about making and actual story. I have made a total of four which I wished to present to the public but they each have their doubts. So now that the introduction/back story is done, lets go start the story!
Chapter 1: Summer Beycation
Chapter 2: No more Knuckle Head
Ok, so if my graphics tablet ever comes, I will be making illustrations for the story, second chapter should be out VERY soon and until then, just give me feedback
Chapter 1: Summer Beycation
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"Ahhh, finally, school is over and I can now get on with things which are actually useful."
"So Remon, what exactly do you have planned?"
"Dunno, but it will definitely involve Beyblades, that's for sure!"
"Sigh, Gankyou haven't you learnt not to ask Remon questions?"
"Shut up Sansei, today is the day I get my new Beyblade, nobody is going to ruin that!"
The three, Remon, Sansei and Gankyou reached the BeyShop where Remon would collect his new Beyblade.
"Finally, we are here!"
"Just go run in and collect your Bey, I got some parts I left at yours to collect", said Gankyou.
Remon runs in the shop, as he walks in he spots a sign reading "New Upgrades=New Game". The shop seemed pretty usual, Remon scanned it tip to toe in confusion to try and find anything new, sadly nothing.
He walked toward the back of the store and scanned his BeyCard against the BeyTopia. It registered him and his account popped up. He clicked on "Reservations", "Pre-Orders" then "Hyper Gemios [A]ir [R]ebound 125 [G]ravity [P]op."
A description of the new parts got sent to a box in the bottom right corner of the screen. It read "Air Rebound 125, commonly known as AR125 has the ability to push your Beyblade up to 600 ft on the air (at level 16) from what ever angle it is set off the ground at. Gravity Pop, commonly known as GP has the ability to rapidly push your Beyblade off the ground and make it land at 90 degrees whenever it goes past the angles of 45 and 135 degrees.
Remon then clicked on "Buy" however his card got rejected. The screen had a box which read "Error, must upgrade". He stared at it in confusion, he checked to see if he had any money on the card, which he did.
He called over Tebiki, a worker who he has known since his first visit to the shop.
"Hey dude, I'm in a rush but this BeyTopia machine won't accept my damn card!"
Tebiki checked the machine for a few minutes unpluggin things, shifting through settings and changing the core. Throughout this time, both had a confused look on their face.
"That's odd, everything seems pretty fine, unless.....do you have the new upgrade?"
"No..." Remon said cautiously.
"Well that's what you need! Lemme go grab one..." Tebiki laughed while shifting through draws.
"How can you GRAB an UPGRADE, don't you just plug something in and it updates?"
"Just you wait, haven't you seen anyone with it at school?"
"Nah, most kids that visit the shop often just bunk the last week off, It's pre--"
"FOUND IT!"He handed a small object to Remon, it looked very similar to a PokeDex.
Remon stared at it like if it was about to blow up. "Your joking right?"
"I present to you the BEYTOPIA HH!"
"So Remon, what exactly do you have planned?"
"Dunno, but it will definitely involve Beyblades, that's for sure!"
"Sigh, Gankyou haven't you learnt not to ask Remon questions?"
"Shut up Sansei, today is the day I get my new Beyblade, nobody is going to ruin that!"
...
The three, Remon, Sansei and Gankyou reached the BeyShop where Remon would collect his new Beyblade.
"Finally, we are here!"
"Just go run in and collect your Bey, I got some parts I left at yours to collect", said Gankyou.
Remon runs in the shop, as he walks in he spots a sign reading "New Upgrades=New Game". The shop seemed pretty usual, Remon scanned it tip to toe in confusion to try and find anything new, sadly nothing.
He walked toward the back of the store and scanned his BeyCard against the BeyTopia. It registered him and his account popped up. He clicked on "Reservations", "Pre-Orders" then "Hyper Gemios [A]ir [R]ebound 125 [G]ravity [P]op."
A description of the new parts got sent to a box in the bottom right corner of the screen. It read "Air Rebound 125, commonly known as AR125 has the ability to push your Beyblade up to 600 ft on the air (at level 16) from what ever angle it is set off the ground at. Gravity Pop, commonly known as GP has the ability to rapidly push your Beyblade off the ground and make it land at 90 degrees whenever it goes past the angles of 45 and 135 degrees.
Remon then clicked on "Buy" however his card got rejected. The screen had a box which read "Error, must upgrade". He stared at it in confusion, he checked to see if he had any money on the card, which he did.
He called over Tebiki, a worker who he has known since his first visit to the shop.
"Hey dude, I'm in a rush but this BeyTopia machine won't accept my damn card!"
Tebiki checked the machine for a few minutes unpluggin things, shifting through settings and changing the core. Throughout this time, both had a confused look on their face.
"That's odd, everything seems pretty fine, unless.....do you have the new upgrade?"
"No..." Remon said cautiously.
"Well that's what you need! Lemme go grab one..." Tebiki laughed while shifting through draws.
"How can you GRAB an UPGRADE, don't you just plug something in and it updates?"
"Just you wait, haven't you seen anyone with it at school?"
"Nah, most kids that visit the shop often just bunk the last week off, It's pre--"
"FOUND IT!"He handed a small object to Remon, it looked very similar to a PokeDex.
Remon stared at it like if it was about to blow up. "Your joking right?"
"I present to you the BEYTOPIA HH!"
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Chapter 2: No more Knuckle Head
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"Heh heh, so what do you think?"
"I dunno, what does it do?.....register....BEYBLADES!", Remon laughed histirically in tears.
"STOP WITH THE PUNS!", screamed Tebiki. "You don't even know what it is capable of!"
"Fine what?"
"Hah hah, faten your seatbelt because I'm going to take you for one WILD ride...IIIIIIIT allows you tooooo" then out of nowhere Tebiki started bombarding Remon with the millions of fuctions the BeyTopia HH could do. "Record matches, trade parts virtually, virtualize battles, scan world rankings, upload videos to MyBox, slot in your BeyCard, Link with people, connect to your Honker and Footscreen, track friends, track enemies, simiulate battles, compare millions of parts, voice chat, video call, connect to the BeyTopia, reserve Beyblade, Buy beyblades, order beyblades and MUCH MUCH MORE! It is like a cross between almost everything you can imagine and it kinda does....register...beyblades..." Tebiki rolled his fingers in embarrassment.
Tebiki finished teaching Remon and his friends all the nooks and crannies. Although they were running a bit late.
"Wow this is actually pretty cool, now can we go! It is five thirty and we finished school at two!" Screamed Gankyou.
Remon plugged in his BeyTopia HH and repeated all his previous steps. A rumbling came from the ceiling. The sound traveled down towards the chute, then suddenly out flew Hyper Gemios.
"Awesome let's go, thanks Tebiki"
"No problem boy, ah, such a nice lad."
The three of them ran to Remons house, when it was visible Sansei began to take out the keys. They were all travelling at great speed...BAM. All three of them hit the door as it fell off it's hinges.
"YOU IDIOTS, I'm the one with the keys so where the hell do you think your off to in such a rush!"
As they fell in Remon lost grip of his new Beyblade, it flew to the other side of the room. Sansei started to get up still staring at the boys.
"Err...Sansei" Remon pointed in the direction the Hyper Gemios went.
"Shut up, I don't care bou--"
A dark shady voice interpreted her, "Ahh how nice, you kids enjoying yourselves? I will just take this and be on my way."
The voice turned out to be a tall muscular man in black clothing. Sansei began to turn around, the man jumped and kicked her across the face.
"She's knocked out!" Screamed Gankyou. Him and Remon rushed to their feet.
"Gankyou, you stay where you are, I will get a hit and THEN you can join me". Remon ran towards the man.
The man jumped over Remon and went for Gankyou. Gankyou saw him coming and swung at great speed. The man caught his fist...
"Swoosh", the man swung and knocked the glasses straight off Gankyou's face.
Remon began to charge, the man leaped over him. He turned his head and whispered.
"I think he will like this Beyblade as a reminder, heh, cause in 7 days, there will be no more knuckle head".
"I dunno, what does it do?.....register....BEYBLADES!", Remon laughed histirically in tears.
"STOP WITH THE PUNS!", screamed Tebiki. "You don't even know what it is capable of!"
"Fine what?"
"Hah hah, faten your seatbelt because I'm going to take you for one WILD ride...IIIIIIIT allows you tooooo" then out of nowhere Tebiki started bombarding Remon with the millions of fuctions the BeyTopia HH could do. "Record matches, trade parts virtually, virtualize battles, scan world rankings, upload videos to MyBox, slot in your BeyCard, Link with people, connect to your Honker and Footscreen, track friends, track enemies, simiulate battles, compare millions of parts, voice chat, video call, connect to the BeyTopia, reserve Beyblade, Buy beyblades, order beyblades and MUCH MUCH MORE! It is like a cross between almost everything you can imagine and it kinda does....register...beyblades..." Tebiki rolled his fingers in embarrassment.
...
Tebiki finished teaching Remon and his friends all the nooks and crannies. Although they were running a bit late.
"Wow this is actually pretty cool, now can we go! It is five thirty and we finished school at two!" Screamed Gankyou.
Remon plugged in his BeyTopia HH and repeated all his previous steps. A rumbling came from the ceiling. The sound traveled down towards the chute, then suddenly out flew Hyper Gemios.
"Awesome let's go, thanks Tebiki"
"No problem boy, ah, such a nice lad."
The three of them ran to Remons house, when it was visible Sansei began to take out the keys. They were all travelling at great speed...BAM. All three of them hit the door as it fell off it's hinges.
"YOU IDIOTS, I'm the one with the keys so where the hell do you think your off to in such a rush!"
As they fell in Remon lost grip of his new Beyblade, it flew to the other side of the room. Sansei started to get up still staring at the boys.
"Err...Sansei" Remon pointed in the direction the Hyper Gemios went.
"Shut up, I don't care bou--"
A dark shady voice interpreted her, "Ahh how nice, you kids enjoying yourselves? I will just take this and be on my way."
The voice turned out to be a tall muscular man in black clothing. Sansei began to turn around, the man jumped and kicked her across the face.
"She's knocked out!" Screamed Gankyou. Him and Remon rushed to their feet.
"Gankyou, you stay where you are, I will get a hit and THEN you can join me". Remon ran towards the man.
The man jumped over Remon and went for Gankyou. Gankyou saw him coming and swung at great speed. The man caught his fist...
"Swoosh", the man swung and knocked the glasses straight off Gankyou's face.
Remon began to charge, the man leaped over him. He turned his head and whispered.
"I think he will like this Beyblade as a reminder, heh, cause in 7 days, there will be no more knuckle head".
Spoiler (Click to View)
Ok, so if my graphics tablet ever comes, I will be making illustrations for the story, second chapter should be out VERY soon and until then, just give me feedback