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This is a story im gonna be working on for a while its a fanfic as if percy jackso failed to retrive the lightning bolt
Percy Jackson: War amongst the Gods
Chapter Nature at war with itself
Blackpool, UK 12:00

The boy had elfish features, black hair, 8 years old; a fairly average kid. Somehow he’d managed to be kicked out of every school he’d been at yet. He ADHD and dyslexic just another troubled kid. His father, well he didn’t know. His mother told him that he died before he was alive.
He could feel the weather get cold in an instant and this was summer. It was midday and not single cloud in sight; until now. The world tuned grey. Nobody else noticed. Okay; to weird. In an instant water was at ankle height on me (and everyone else looked normal; why did nobody think this was freaky) and he’s sure it should be ice by now. It begun curving, twisting in all directions in seconds he was looking at a 10 meter wall of water being blasted towards the sky. Then the weirdest thing happened; it looked like nicely built in man with a fairly trimmed beard wearing armour carrying a large staff with 3 hooks coming out. What was that called in the myths? A trident? Awestruck, he watched in amazement as the water was being blasted up getting larger and larger as it was being launched in the sky. It wasn’t coming from the rain now; the sea itself (a short distance away) was adding to the wall. For a second he watched as the water begun glowing. And then he saw as the clouds in the sky begun coming together swirling like the water did. It was turning quicker now and he saw another man with a face full of hate he was dressed in black armour and waved his arm in a throwing motion. A look a wonder spread across his face and then hardened again .It was like he was throwing something familiar but it was missing. Both figures were flashing between water to the bearded guy or to the clouds to the black armour guy. Both figures were glowing so bright that it was like his heads going to explode. The golden light was so hard to look away from but a second before i thought my mind was going to explode I saw a man flash in front of me. He was tall and fit wearing white robes from.... when? This was all too familiar for my liking. The man looked into my eyes. Memories of my childhood flooded in; the warm feeling of that hand ... no his hand on my forehead as a child. He spoke “ look away now” and suddenly I realised that I could look away.
sorry but may i ask, isn't it like plagiarism? just wondering because it's like the name of percy jackson has a right reserved. Just wanted to know.
(May. 27, 2011  5:41 PM)peace Wrote: [ -> ]sorry but may i ask, isn't it like plagiarism? just wondering because it's like the name of percy jackson has a right reserved. Just wanted to know.

yeah i know its just a fanfic nothing that gonna be published its leading on from percy jackson
I see, I kinda love to ead the novels than watch the movie. sometimes the movie edited it to its own version.
most of the timesw they do i was going to make a apart when the earth started shaking as if to be hades but left it out
Plagiarism is copying an article or book without changing it. This is fan-fic. But I'm a big fan of Rick riot an and his work and this story is good, just improve punctuation.
thanks ill get to that in about a week and next chapter i suppose
i didn't read it just some of this and if your writing about percy then he is 12 or 13 not 8
ill give you a hint if you read it says elvish features
i know this is a bit of a necro, but shall i right another chapter, is it worth it ?
It's completely up to you. If you feel like you should write another chapter, write it. If not, don't.
i love the books.
Its pretty good, but maybe next time you should make up your own story.
its fanfic, thats the idea ...
seems ok, however some of the punctuation and grammar are off.
Pretty sure ive mensioned my hate of grammar somewhere, usually this isn't my "style" of writing i tried doing it similar to Rick. If iwere to write it now its properly be better, since Y8 and top sets helped me Tongue_out