I know it's short but i'll update it soon.
Prologue: I positioned the rifle so the crosshair was between the targets eye's. As soo as my rifle was in perfect position I looked away and pulled the trigger. I'm not a wuss I just need to stop my emotion from getting in my way of survival. As I heard the crack I quickly grabbed my rifle and jumped off the roof to the slumped body. As soon as I got there I began searching his pocket's for it.
''Dammit!'' I said, ''Someone has gotten here before me.
This is pretty interesting so far.
I like the warning in the title.
In My opinion Yes you should otherwise this was a waste of like 30 seconds of my life.
AGES 10+
Chapter 1: You probably don't think it's normal for 13 year old kids to have shotguns under there pillow but it is.It's normal for 9 year old boys to carry knives half their size. Well you get used to it after a month or two after your parents die. There's no rules now, Gangs rule the streets it's not safe anymore. The only way you'l survive is to tough it out and steal a beyblade. The gangs won't kill you but if you lose a beyblade battle then you might. So thats the reason I had to shoot that guy, I had to get his bey. And I won't rest till I do!
The writing is okay, but the chapters are tooo short. Also, the idea seems exaggerated... I mean, shooting people for spinning tops? Plus, where do these kids get these guns? They're not exactly easy to get when you're, you know... 13 years old.
There are No Adults anywhere there all dead!
(May. 01, 2011 5:30 AM)Hope Wrote: [ -> ]There are No Adults anywhere there all dead!
Yeah, but still, where did they get the guns? So, a bunch of kids and teens just unleashed their fury and killed all the adults?
More will be explained later in the story but it's set in america where some people can carry firearms.
(May. 01, 2011 5:34 AM)Hope Wrote: [ -> ]More will be explained later in the story but it's set in america where some people can carry firearms.
I know that some people can carry firearms in America, but that gives all the more reason for the adults to be skilled in handling one. Which means, the kids would stand no chance. But whatever, I'll just wait to the next chapter.