Not a very good name but the story might be good
Chapter 1
Brian Lee was not a very good blader. His Dark Leone100F had only won him 1 battle. Anyways, when he woke up that morning, he overslept and had to get to school. "bye mom!", he yelled as he ran out. when he got to bey high school, he thought "another day, another loss." When suddenly, his dark leone was changing. It turned into Earth LeoneH145WD. He had heard a legend that the most powerful bey in the world could change into another bey much more powerful.
Name: Ken Riano
Bey: Earth Aries 105 WD
(Feb. 01, 2011 3:19 AM)BeyBlaster578 Wrote: [ -> ]Name: Ken Riano
Bey: Earth Aries 105 WD
Can you describe him a bit more
like a speacial move and stuff
Chapter 2
Brian was freaked out. "W-w-wha? I have the legendary bey?" A few kids heard him and challenged him to a bey battle, not believing him. 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!! Brian beat all of them easily. Another kid saw him and said the person wanted to talk to him. End of chapter!!! I need more character requests before I can write the third chapter.
lol ok
name: akio
Beyblade: stone hephestus
bio: a kid who blays beyblade you do what you want with him...
s move: stone hammar attack the stone weel breaks apart and become one thousade mini hammars and slamms the bey but hephestus looses half its stamana used best when about to lose...
My Character Entry-
Name - X
Age - 12
Bey - Cyclone Dragonoid L/R 90 ML/RF [(Metal Right/Left Flat)(Can Spin In Both Directions.)]
Desc. - X is a 12 year-old well behaved boy who feels very sad when someone is in trouble. He is very powerful and helps everyone and His bey Dragonoid is an attack type bey.
Wears a Black Jacket which has a tribal dragon design on it and a dark blue jeans.
Special Move - Dragonoid Fury Cyclone. The Bey starts to shine and a shining Blue color covers the fusion wheel and it attacks from nowhere at full speed.
A bit too short on the entries, but it's an okay story...
character request
name:max
age:13
bey:hell leone 85 wd
move:darkness counter strike:a red shining light appears from his bey and makes the opponent use there strongest move,hell leone absorbs the power and attacks with it using all of its power.
discription:max is a very shy and nervous boy,not sure about what to do and when to do it;but when he battles he turns into someone completely different, a more confident, well opinioned boy.
(Feb. 04, 2011 2:33 AM)hotskunk Wrote: [ -> ]lol ok
name: akio
Beyblade: stone hephestus
bio: a kid who blays beyblade you do what you want with him...
s move: stone hammar attack the stone weel breaks apart and become one thousade mini hammars and slamms the bey but hephestus looses half its stamana used best when about to lose...
Accepted, but he will no appear till later
X, accepted.
Max, well, he will be in very soon. accepted
I'll write chapter 3 soon, once I get an idea.
This is a very good story!
(Feb. 05, 2011 1:47 AM)Toungemaster Wrote: [ -> ]This is a very good story!
thanks! working on third chapter. going to see if I can think of anything. I'll have it by tomorrow.
name joe junior nickname the rock
beyblade rock wolf ed 145 wd
special move eternal smash he goes off of a ramp and smashes the oponett with his spintrack
you need to make the chapters WAAAAY longer. You could fit chapter 1,2, and, when it comes out, 3 together and make one legit chapter. good story tho. another critique: bey's shouldn't evolve within the 2nd(actually first) chapter. still good tho
Rock wolf is accepted, but do you mind if he is a coach?
Sorry everyone, but I hurt my hand and can not type that well so i can not get chapter 3 in today.
Storm Dranzer,
I think you should write a little more in the chapters.
I have a character request
Name: Tshabalala Azanu
Bey: GF Arial Emu JH125GB (Left Spin and Right Spin)
Description of bey- JH stands for Jet pack helium. It makes the bey fly in the air up to 5 minutes. It is charged by an electronic battery. It weighs very little. GB stands for Golden Ball. The Face bolt is also made out of gold and has a picture of an emu on it. If you don't know what an emu is then search it on google . Arial Fusion wheel looks like wings and our like wings because they help the bey drift while in air. Emu hybrid wheel looks like several Feathers. It is colored with all the colors of the rainbow.
Appearence: A leopard skin bib with leather skirt. he has black skin and long black dreadlocks. His bey launcher is made out of emeralds encrusted with rubies and is a 3 seg launcher. His string launcher is also emerald and encrusted in rubies. His eye color is grey. He is very muscular and tall.
Personality: He is a very kindhearted person, but is emotionally and mentally strong. He is also physically strong. He is around 16 and is known for being very fast.
Early life: Grew up in Liberia as a slave. His slave master got arrested and Tshabalala fled to wherever this piece of literature takes place. He learned the art of blading from a former world champion who died when he was 12, but he had mastered it by then. He lives in a WBBA building where he trains. He lost his family when being sold for slavery. He is secretly trying to find his family.
Special Moves: Arial Ace attack, Soaring Ace, Golden Spirit Blast.
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(Feb. 05, 2011 2:16 AM)storm dranzer Wrote: [ -> ] (Feb. 05, 2011 1:47 AM)Toungemaster Wrote: [ -> ]This is a very good story!
thanks! working on third chapter. going to see if I can think of anything. I'll have it by tomorrow.
great hey i have an idea for some characters here it is: kid loses beybattle and says "man, if only i could get stronger" "you can" a voice said behind him. "huh?" said the kid. the kid looks up and sees a 17 year old in a black coat. the 17 year old says "come, i will train you" "ok" says the kid. "what is your name kid?" the teenager asks the little kid. "jeremy" says the boy. "my name is Atlas and my bey is evil pegasus" " it evolved from a bey known as dark pegasus" the man says. "wow" says jeremy, " how did you do it ?" love and compassion for my bey along with never giving up and training my hardest ." wow, i wish my bey would be as strong as yours one day, thats it i know what i gotta do, i am never going to stop training, i believe in my bey!" alright, lets go train" the two headf into the mountains where they trained for six months none stop. jeremy came down with his new bey which had evolved from thermal pegasus into flame pegasus and whose special move is now flare strike in which pegasus fires up and starts spiraling in the air and leaps up high into the air and comes crashing down like a meteor and hits the opponnet, does massive damage but lowers health by 15% and defense by 6%.
Okay, that sounds cool. and Tashabala will come in as a very strong blader later.
(Feb. 06, 2011 12:36 AM)storm dranzer Wrote: [ -> ]Okay, that sounds cool. and Tashabala will come in as a very strong blader later.
um i was confused about when you said ok, that sounds cool were you refering to my story about atlas and jeremy or were you also refering to that one persons story about tashabala
pleas pick this character
name:Yamoshy
bey:evil gemios
s move:flame dash bash: it multiples the beys attack and speed but lowers defenses and stamina
Good story but yeah too short
Awesome. Gonna be in later, though
(Feb. 06, 2011 12:36 AM)storm dranzer Wrote: [ -> ]Okay, that sounds cool. and Tashabala will come in as a very strong blader later.
Thanks man! But ya spelled Tshabalala wrong. But it is okay. This is how you pronounce it- Sha- buh- la-la. Oh and thanks for making him come in as a strong blader like the description said.
i have one
Name:Marlo
Age:10
Bey: Amazonite Gemini SW135 (Switch Wing) EMS (Eternal Metal Sharp)
Can it be in please!!
Cool! Do you mind if he is 9? P.S., Nice Meap thing!
(Feb. 06, 2011 1:14 AM)beylander Wrote: [ -> ]pleas pick this character
name:Yamoshy
bey:evil gemios
s move:flame dash bash: it multiples the beys attack and speed but lowers defenses and stamina
Cool! I do not need any more characters. FOR NOW