World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

NOTE:my first story was ignored so i hope people will make this active and if you wan to join my story just post a coment (everything is not real)

episode 1
rokuto's biggest day

hey im rokuto im 11 and here's my partner bull h145 hf/S

its summer i went on vacation in a place called bey water park then there were bey stadiums in the pools and ocean
rokuto:dad im gonna stroll around ok?
Dad:okay,but come back after lunch.
the a boy was tapping me he said let's beybattle then i quickly got my bey equipment and and said 3
2.........
1.........
GO SHOOT!!!!

he used a bull h145hf/s ,then i said why you little copy cat then won then he said im your cousin and then i said what rakita is that you you copy cat any way its lunch cmon over for some lunch in our cabin then we ate alot then we went strolling in the park the a bladers aproached us wearing a black mask making them hard to be identified

what will happen next toon in for the next episode

....no offense, but before you post a "less than average" story like this, try reading around, see the quality of other's stories.....this is pretty...bad....no offense....the story is rushed...there is literally no plot...no character establishment....improper grammar....no quotation marks....terribble, terrible narration...too cliche...overused "masked bladers"...no description...rushed plot...the list goes on and on

Read Night's stories, NightWolf7919's story, Kavasiki's story, Dude's story, and the one in my sig, and try to pick up some writing tips. You should develop your writing skills more and try to extend the length of your sections. This is constructive criticism, so no hard feelings, kay?