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hi this is my first story and im very bad at language so if i foget a coma our misspell somthing pleas dont spam about it and just say i forgot it there okay well here i go BEEP BEEP BEEP WAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH(thump)Wauh im late for school oh god.well that wasnt a very spectacular opening to our hero was it well im the narrarator andill pop in every once and a while to explain things.this is earth and on this planet there is a sport alled beyblade.its a popular sport thats won the hearts of miilions.our hero is called zack a blader that just want to have fun but hes a little lazy.he owns cyber pegausis 100 hf.in his town he is a decnt blader while he also has a rival(what hero dosent) his name is dan and his bey is counter leon d125 b.they both go to the same schools and there best freinds always battleing to see whos the best but know ts time to get to the story.wauh im here exclamied zack.everyone looked at him.errrrrrrr late agin pop quiz whats better for a defence tip rubber sharp our rubber semi flat exclamed his teacher.ummmmmmmmmmm rubber sharp.good his teacher said instantly calmer now take your seat and we will continue the lesson.zack had sat down and toke out his note book and started copying the notes when someone behind him said nice job.he turned around and blushed it was sakura the girl he has liked since 2nd grade.her bey was rock oroso ed145 rs.ummm thanks she said now i know that since i changed my rubber semi flat to rubber sharp has better power.DING DONG DING DONG.yahh time to go yah.wait zack it was dan.huh what i said.hu hu (he was brobaply out of breath from runing)how about a battle me and leon are bored.sure i said lets do it at the school stadium so every one can watch.sure dan said.later that day...here we are ready to lose i saidi think its the other way aroun dan responded.i looked around the stadium alot of kids from school some he new and some he didnt but he stoped breathing when he saw sakura watching at the top of the stadium chatting with some freinds.he knew he had to win this time.he zack huh i responded lets start alright i said.3 2 1 go SHOOT.all noise stoped when the 2 beys colided a long ding weith the collison as the 2 beys fell down to the ground for another strike.to be countinued...thank you for reading i need 5 people to say its good to continue.like i said i suk at language and i made alot of mistakes please just ignore them.
its a good story just reread the story before you post
i did i actually been thinking about this story for 2 months know.ive nearly completeide the first whole story.oh yah and just like any story i will accept characters no fake parts till i say so.
oh darn that means i cant post my request
im not sure if you insalted me our not but sure you can enter a character and it could be in the story.just his bey his name breif description and if he is good our bad.
(Jan. 26, 2011  3:08 AM)bladerxack8522 Wrote: [ -> ]im not sure if you insalted me our not but sure you can enter a character and it could be in the story.just his bey his name breif description and if he is good our bad.

no i am not insulating you but you said no made up parts on my request there are 2 made up parts the fusion wheel and spin track
sorry i thought your post said can not cant but yeah later in the story they will meet a man that uses illegal parts meaning if your dude does use it he will be bad.well tell me yor character if its not so crazy then i might accept it early in the story as a good guy if you want
name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy who's bey contains a terrifing power(it a good power but it is very terrifying because it is so strong)he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way.lastly during battle pegasis can swich from left spin to right spin.
hmm its nice but i cant do the right spin switch to left spin mid battle i wouldnt mind a perseus affect where you choose which direction it spins befor the fight..if you agree to what i say then your bey may be in the story early on not later.
77 veiws only one person posted and 2 people voted come on people.
thank you someone else voted ohyah new rule if you say my story is bad pleas explain why and i will try my best to fix it.3 more good votes till next part.
okay fine what you said the choosing before battle thing
okay great im sory you didnt get what you wanted but i dont want my story to get all wilie nille with fake parts that i will have to keep remebering what the do.thats why i want for people to use real parts so i know what those parts do but yeah i will squeze your character in after the battle between zack and dan.(pasicly part 3)
i need more than 1 character come on people.
hehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh come on please if you dont like the story u can just say it.
eventough i dont have 5 ill wriht the next part to see if more people come

the beys were going spining staring at each othe as there owners stared into each others eyes trying to predict the next move."gooooooo cyber strike"said zack."not this time counter it"exclaimed dan!the 2 beys colided agin when a faint whisper behind them stated"a sheild that can not be peirced againts a sword that can peirce any thing,enteresting"he said as he walked away."gooooooooooooooooooooooooo"the said in unison."cyber use all your might"exclaimed zack."you to counter"said dan! as they colided evrey thing went silent zack couldent think his pupils went blank as he entered a endless path of red.red every where but in the center there he was cyber."wait whats going on,cyber what are you doing here."as he said this cyber glowed a faint red realesing a pegauses that looked like made of lighting.it nealed down.zack stared at it amazed as he walked to it his feet got heavey his stomach turned.as he touched cybers head every thing glowed cyber went in to the bey and zack could feel the power pulsating from his bey.sone after his pubals returned and he came back to the real worl and he looked at dan.dan was the same way looking blank his pubals gone soon he returned amazed but befor the could chat the battle was still on.they stared at each other eagerness in their eyes."gooooooooo"they exclaimed!the 2 beys glowed cyber stareded glowing a bright red and charged while counter glowed a bright teil formin a sheild as the 2 beys colided a large burst of wind flew through the stadium."ahhhhhhhhh"you could hear it all through the stands"STOOOOOPPPPPPPPP"huh when they looked up threr was a boy there holding his arms out covering all the kids behind them."wait who are you"dan exclaimed!my name is kevin hagata."wait ive heard of you,your that bey genus"exclaimed zack."yeah and you might want to pay attention to the battle.""whaaaaaaa"they exclaimed!it was a draw.now that i have your attention my turn to battlekevin said.what why exclaimed zack.because you hurt my freind and i will protexct him now come on he took his bey added it to his launcher and was prepared for battle.me and pegauses are prepared for battle.to be continued.