Sorry, Couldn't think of a title; o-o
Well, Here it is,
Episode 1
*Bey flys out of stadium*
Child: Aww, I lost!
Alex:... Here, Take this.
*Alex Hands the Boy a WD and a Shiny New Metal Wheel, Earth.*
Child: Wow...! Thanks! Is there anything you want in return?
Alex: No thanks. But if your friends asked who you got it from, Tell them it came from a special friend.
*Child looks down at his shiny new parts, then looks back up*
Child: Thanks Miste-
Alex is gone.
*In a secret location*
It is Luke's Birthday.
Luke: Hey Alex, How have you been?
Alex: Fine. Hey, I got a present for you.
*Alex Hands out a humungous box*
Luke: Wow! this is huge!
Alex: Well What are waiting for? Open it!
End of Ep 1.
accepting characters
It's ok....
Way too short for the first story
I know... I didn't have time and had to go to bed.
Good story. Here are some characters you can use.
Name: (No one know his name so they just call him Whirpool)
Bey: Whirpool Poseidon T120 RB
Look: Blue jeans, white T-shirt, blue jacket, blue hair.
Bey description: The metal wheel whirpool is blueand is shaped like whirpool waves in the outside and some pop up waves near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is blue and is a whirpool. T120 (trident 120) is a blue 120 with four small gold tridents. RB (rubber ball) is a rubber ball. The facebolt is blue with a gold trident and two waves behind. Is a very powerfull bey.
Whirpool description: He is a 15 year old mysterious guy. No one knows nothing about him. Is a very good guy but no one talks with him. Whirpool is very strong blader and always is blading. He found Whirpool Poseidon when he was 8 yaers old. He was in a ship and a giant whirpool appear in front. The ship sunk and all his family died. He was the only one who survived. Under the sea he found his bey. Since then he is all mysterious.
Special Move: Giant Golden Whirpool. Appears water in the stadium and then Whirpool Poseidon Makes a giant whirpool . The tridents in his track get bigger.
He is a good guy.
Name: Briel
Bey: Green Libra 100WB ( Green is like rock but bigger and green)
Description: He is like 14. He is a very strong blader and wants to get much stronger. Libra comes from the sky and sice Briel found it he wears all green: Green jacket, green pants, greenshoes, green hair, green skin.
Special move: Green tornado. The bey makes a green tornado making all things green and then blow the opponent bey away.
He is good too.
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Ep. 2:
Luke Gets out his pocket knife and opens the box. Inside there is Another box. He opens that one, And inside there is just one bey - Ray Unicorno.
Luke: Wow! Thanks Alex!
Alex: No Problem.
Luke: Wanna Test it out?
Alex: Sure!
They Launch Their Beys in a tornado stadium.
Alex: Go, Torch Aires! (125D)
Luke: Torch... Aires?
Alex: It's a New bey I Got From the shop down the block!
Luke: Oh. Well, Time to see what Ray Unicorno can do! Ray Unicorno!!!
* Unicorno Spins into The middle of the tornado stadium and flies at Torch Aires*
Alex: That's Not Enough to beat me!
*Torch Aires dodges the attack, and Unicorno flies out of the stadium.
Luke: Aww, I lost. Oh Well, Now I'll learn not to Use that on a stadium with low walls.
Alex: Cool. Hey, Wanna Go Down to the park and train?
Lucas: Sure!
Then They Left for the Park.
End of Episode 2.
It Was Kinda short, But oh well.
Ok brielyranger, I'll put both Characters in episode 3 :0
Maybe a little short, but good! Keep it up!
Episode 3;
At the park, There were bladers everywhere. Then Two Peolpe Walked up to them.
Briel: Hi, My Name is Briel and this is my Friend Whirlpool. We were wondering if you would like to battle.
Luke: Sure!
Alex: I'm in if it's a team battle.
Whirlpool:...It is...
They Launched their beys into A large Beystadium in the middle of the park.
Alex: I got Whirlpool's Bey!
Luke: Ok, I got Briel's
Briel: Go Green Libra!!!
His beyblade started Circling Around Whirlpool's Bey.
Alex: Luke, I think He's Trying to defend Whirlpool. I'll Go around!
Luke: Ok, Go Unicorno!!!
Unicorno smashes into Green Libra, But Libra is Barely Effected
Briel: Ha! My Green Libra Has a sturdy Defense, And With that, I can defend Whirlpool Poseidon!
Whirlpool: Briel: Get To the Highest point of the Stadium.
Whirlpool posiedon's Track Gets Larger.
Luke: W-What's Happening?!
Alex:Look! Water Is somehow forming inside the stadium!
Alex's and Luke's Beys are starting to wobble.
Alex: Luke! Use Unicorno's Special move, This stadium Has a High Wall!
Luke: Ok! Unicorno! Special move: Horn Smash!!!
Unicorno Flies at Poseidon, and Hits it, and the water starts to drain.
Alex: Torch Aries! Go!!!
Aries runs into Whirlpool Poseidon and Flies into Green Libra, Making both Beys Fly out of the stadium.
Briel: That was Amazing How you two finished the battle!
Luke and Alex: Yeah!
They said Thanks for the battle , and left thwe Park for the Day.
End Of Episode 3.
Name:Unknown(no seriously, thats his name)
Bey
tealth shadow SU80 SA
SA stands for sudden attack and allows the bey to move at 10mph.SU stands for silent upper and has very good upper attack.Shadow looks like pegasis exepet its black and more pointy.Stealth is like a mercury and vulcan wheel mixed together.
Special move:Vanish
Shadow disaperes and then reapperes in the opponent's bey.(more like a dark move)
Personality:Cruel and silent
explain what the parts are and what they do
nice story heres 2 characters first
name Billy Draco
beyblade Burn FiCo AD145 MD (metal defense)
type stamina
bio the disappointmeaant of the famous draco family
with
Michael jay know as blue jay defense type
beyblade tidal siren Wc145 wd ( tital is a defense wheel with edges like needles dont attack those siren as the mermaid and ring has a tail activate spin track which wave crasher 145 is 145 height and wave crasher has 3 bottles siren providdes unlimited water when bottle open shoot water defeating spin balance and movemeant wd basic
(Jan. 26, 2011 10:55 PM)Off Topic King Wrote: [ -> ]explain what the parts are and what they do
done
I don't get your story. Is it about Alex helping kids? Maybe if you write more, you could turn it into a show.
May I make a critique? This reads like a movie script, and the story seems a tad disjointed. Other than that, it's very good.
Sorry, I Usually write moviescripts for speech/drama at school. XD im not used to writins stories online
masamuneunicorn: No, It isn't. I was just trying to make an intro to the beginning of the story- like the characters
Looks good, Darkcancer333! Keep it up!
Ep: 4
They were Walking Home. Lucas And Alex Saw something Zoom Past their Faces and then Heard a Crash. They just Had to see what it was. To their right, A beyblade Was shredding into a Slab of limestone with a target painted on it, shredding the limestine Apart. They bey Then retreats to it's owner.
"Hi. My name's Unknown.", said the child. Luke said,"You don't know your name?" "No!!! My name is 'Unknown'"!, said Unknown."Ooohhh...", said Luke. "I haven't battled today, so i'm just training.", said Unknown. Luke replied, "Would you like to battle me?" "Sure!" said Unknown. They Launch their Beys on the concrete. "Go Unicorno!!!", Shouted Lucas. Unicorno Ran into Unknown's bey (Stealth Shadow), and Suprisingly, Unicorno's bey got sent flying into the air. "Unicorno!!!", said Luke. Unknown said, " Wow, is that all you can do? I guess I'll just finish it now. Stealth Shadow!!! Vanish!" Stealth Shadow Disappeared.Then Suddenly Uoncorno Started Getting hit At all Angles, Outside, And inside his bey. "What's going on!?", said Luke. "Luke! This Guy Is attacking You from The inside!!!", said Alex. Then Luke Came up with An idea. "Go Unicorno!!!", said Luke. Unicorno Started Running into walls, not only damaging itself, but the other bey. Suddenly, Stealth Shadow Reappeared. "Now Unicorno, Finish it! Horn Smash!!!" Stealth Shadow retreated to its owner during battle. Unknown ran away, shouting back, "I Can't Be defeated by a n00b!! I will return!!!" Alex then told Luke, "He doesn't know, but he's the real n00b for choosing to give up." Luke replied, "Yep. And I, Will never give up." They then Headed beck on their route to Luke's house.
~End of Episode 4 ~
Oh, And As you know, In every Story, there is a climax. Soon there WILL be a tournament, Hosting many beys and bladers. This is why I am accepting Characters. On some episodes though, I will use some of my Own Characters. Now The tournament won't probably start until episode 10, but they will know about it slightly beforehand.
so, for next time, I will accept 1 (ONE) character for anyone who wants to be in the story.
~Stay Tuned~
Cool! Keep it up.
The length is getting better, but it could maybe be a little bit longer?