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Chapter 1: The Infant Stage (Click to View)
this looks very intresting.
(Jan. 20, 2011  1:55 PM)darkangelkaieru Wrote: [ -> ]this looks very intresting.

Thank you! It gets much better, believe me.
i like it. and why does this part remind me of my story?
title Wrote:Ga's story:
(Jan. 20, 2011  11:12 PM)Ra Wrote: [ -> ]i like it. and why does this part remind me of my story?
title Wrote:Ga's story:

Because my nickname is Ga? I didn't even see the resemblance until you pointed it out. lol XD . What a coincidence.
Chapter 1 part 2 will be coming up very soon!! Hopefully today/tomorrow!

EDIT: I'm sorry, those who are actually bothering to read this, but this is Midterm week, and I've been cracking down on my subjects for my midterms. I'm also a bit low on creativity. I have the general gist of the plot, but putting in filler dialogue is difficult...
I'm almost done typing up the second part, and part 2 chapter 1 will most likely be up today! yeah!
Part 2 of Chapter 1 is up! It's really good! Please! This story needs more readers! And I've added a poll too!
i love this story its amazing it should be turned into a book i LLLLOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEE IIIIITTTTTTTT
Thanks! I'm hoping to do that actually!
well you should because it is AWESOME.i am now the number 1 fan of this story
you story is now 5 stars
Thanks! I appreciate it. It takes time to think up the other stuff that builds the plot.
This story i the most epic thing i've ever read! (And i think mine are good) ;O;
Thank you! I really appreciate the high ratings people! I just want more readers, is all. And can you vote in my poll? Thanks!
Entertaning indeed. You can really describe the environment so it's easy to imagen and I don't even get lost Tongue_out
(Jan. 29, 2011  12:40 AM)Kavasiki Wrote: [ -> ]Entertaning indeed. You can really describe the environment so it's easy to imagen and I don't even get lost Tongue_out

I was trying to describe it using imagery to "paint a picture" in the readers' heads. And how do you get lost? You mean with the location switching, by my bolded headlines?
I have finally got ideas for Part 3, ending Chapter 1! I'm writing it now! It should be up within the week.
Tip:never put a like it poll or jaems will always put the worst
I added a small part of chapter 3 into part 2 because I misplaced it. It's the last part before the scene switches to the human medical center with Angela dying.
What a great story! I will be checking back here often for updates.
Very Good =D
This is a good story. XD
wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Its kinda good but it needs more effect to make it shine or fly like a hawk!!!!!!!1
Pretty good for an earthbound.
^Hah. I can appreciate that.
(Kai-V's got me too! Tongue_out_wink)
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