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Here are Acts from the fantasy novel I had going, but sadly I had to stop for the time being. I am looking for people who can continue this so if you're interested send me a PM.
This post contains:
Act 1 - 13

PS: Not Beyblade related.
Warning : Does contain words not learned in school and bad language. Recommended for audience above 15
Also most of these are not the finished product as I constantly update them privately. I don't know if I'm going to post the updated versions of all the Acts, just keep that in mind.


The following acts is on side 4 post 77:
Act 14 - Act 30

Chapter 2 on side 10 post 200:
Act 1 - Act 4

If you feel creative, check out the God's Pawn Arts where you can post your own drawings or something which involves this novel. You can draw places, characters, weapons and more and share them with others (or maybe even the cover art if this gets released).
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-God-s-Pawn-Arts

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Quote: Well, excuse me princess.
Lol. Zelda quotes make my day, especially that one! Grin
WOW. I was just blown away. This is an amazing story. Top-quality, minor spelling errors. This is just awe-inspiring. I could fill an entire page's worth of comments and praise about this, seriously. One of the best stories/ pseudo-graphic novels I have ever read (and I've read plenty, believe me). This beats about 70% of all the graphic novels in publication, IMHO.
Hrm does this fall under religious discussion?
And it does use bad language....
Hmmm
(Jan. 05, 2011  3:48 AM)Firinmahlazuh Wrote: [ -> ]
Quote: Well, excuse me princess.
Lol. Zelda quotes make my day, especially that one! Grin
WOW. I was just blown away. This is an amazing story. Top-quality, minor spelling errors. This is just awe-inspiring. I could fill an entire page's worth of comments and praise about this, seriously. One of the best stories/ pseudo-graphic novels I have ever read (and I've read plenty, believe me). This beats about 70% of all the graphic novels in publication, IMHO.
Glad you like it. Since my english is not good at all I used Microsoft Words to help me. When I read through this I might find some errors, when I read through a second time I find more and etc.

(Jan. 05, 2011  4:57 AM)Gloomy Wrote: [ -> ]Hrm does this fall under religious discussion?
And it does use bad language....
Hmmm

I don't think this will fall under religious discussion becuse this is a fantasy novel. But I'm not religious myself so I cannot say.

I agree that this contains bad language which I hopefully made clear befor the act started. I dunno if this is ok or not despite I don't know who many minors (did I spell that right?) will actually read this :\
Hey this is one nice story
Oh yes, that reminds me. Are you keeping a schedule for posting this? Like, every monday, tuesday, etc.? Or is it random? cause I've been checking this thread daily... Tongue_out XD
(Jan. 06, 2011  3:54 AM)Firinmahlazuh Wrote: [ -> ]Oh yes, that reminds me. Are you keeping a schedule for posting this? Like, every monday, tuesday, etc.? Or is it random? cause I've been checking this thread daily... Tongue_out XD

I will go throught some more acts to see any major spelling errors and then I MIGHT post it today or tomorow. When I post it, it will be in the same post as Act 1 with a huge space betwene so it will be easy to find or just use ctrl + f and then search for Act 2
Wow.... Very interesting haha.
Soooo... The next part's coming soon?
(Jan. 09, 2011  7:25 PM)GaHooleone Wrote: [ -> ]Soooo... The next part's coming soon?

people still read this? xD

sure, next part will be up soon. Just press Ctrl + F then search for Act 3 Tongue_out
I'm quite surprised. I never thought I'd see anything over 5000 words in "Your Creation"

Unlike most of the stories around here, this actually looks like a freakin' novel. Keep it up, mate!
Nice! At least, I'm reading and thoroughly enjoying this. We're at a cliffhanger! Although, for some of the younger crowd reading this, it might be hard to follow.
Act 4 is up, also I have update this to a Poll so I can see better what you guys think. If you guys really like this I will post more so stand by Wink
Wow. This story just got a helluva lot more interesting. Now what? hmmm...
Finally, something worth reading in this section.
All I usually is 500 word badly written stories... [the truth]
This is good! Keep writing!
Whoa...This kicks the carp out of my stuff...And I find my story pretty awesome. This might even beat Night's stuff!
Act 5 is up, just press Ctrl + F and search for Act 5 to begin. I would really like some feed back on that act please. Oh, and be 100% honest so I can make the novel better Tongue_out
Chuck Norris read this, and LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nice dude! This is freaking awesome!
...............wow.........................

I'm kinda speechless......................
wow! way better than all those carp beyblade stories out there. those r just to stupid and corney for me. nice work!
Can you read my story? The link is in my sig.
(Jan. 24, 2011  7:11 AM)bestblader1234 Wrote: [ -> ]wow! way better than all those carp beyblade stories out there. those r just to stupid and corney for me. nice work!

Erm...How many have you read? have you even seen Night's stuff? Look at the name, and you should be able to find out which ones are carp. Namely, ones called "My Story" usually need cleaning up. Ones that have all lowercase letters, and misspelled words in the title usually really need help.


God's Pawn could be a frickin' book. In fact, this should be the standard that all stories are held up to.
^Total agreement. I think it should be a manga/graphic novel, the way Kavasiki said he wanted it to originally be. But a book would also be great too.
(Jan. 28, 2011  10:47 PM)Megablader9 Wrote: [ -> ]Ones that have all lowercase letters, and misspelled words in the title usually really need help.

Miss spelling words irritates me too. I used Microsoft Words which actually helped me alot though I had the free version, now I use Open Office.

I thank you all BTW for the responses and for you guys to take your time reading this. I might have found someone intrested in publishing this thought I need to have this on over 200 sides and within 4 month so for now I cannot post more. Anyways... thanks Cute
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