main character Cain
Bey Mercury Corvus GB145MS I made up the face bolt its under the crow constellation its energy ring looks like a pair of crow wings to see face bolt just look at the image below what do you think of my story
"Man how come you always beat me?"whined Cains best friend Aron, as they were walking home from bey park. "You just gotta train and try to get stronger like me" replied Cain. "I'd be strong to if my dad was the worlds number 1 blader and champion of last years legend of the bey king tournament". Cain smiled. "hey were old enough to enter this year maybe you can come in second" said Cain "Hey!" shouted Aron but Cain just laughed. "NO!" they heard someone shout. when they turned to look they saw the neighborhood bully Teru. He was standing over a kid bey and launcher in hand. "Hey" Cain shouted. "You shouldn't pick on little kids is just cowardly" Cain continued. "Oh yeah" Said Teru "then how about a battle." Said Teru holding up his bey Rock Leone
"Let it rip!" they both shouted as they launched their beys. "go Leone" shouted Teru.
Leone moved swiftly towards Corvus and was on the defensive. Dumb move Cain thought to himself Leone is a defense type bey so his attack power is low. So to counteract Cain commanded Corvus to move. Corvus moved swiftly to the left. Cain already knew how to use two different special moves. "Special move Black Wind Crow Dance." He shouted and his bey released a hurricane of black wind shooting Leone out of the ring. "Www-what kind of special move was that" Teru stuttered.
and he ran off. END OF CHAPTER ONE PART ONE
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If it had a Gil clear wheel it should be Mercury Gil
well yeah but it has the corvus face bolt
dosent matter, its the energy ring that gives it the name
Why don't you just make a different clear wheel? If it's a black version of a virgo wheel, then it would be virgo. Maybe you should say similar?
By the way I post each chapter every tuesday thursday and saturday
Chapter 1 part 2
After defeating Teru the two boys walked home. "that was great!" Aron exclaimed. "that special move is incredible" finally they stopped at Cains house. both 14 year old boys said good ye to each other and Cain walked to his home but when he got inside he met something horrible. the ceiling had collapsed and he saw his fathers bey cyber pegasus lying in the ruble smashed in half. "Dad" Cain cried out. "son" came a reply, it sounded weak. Then Cain saw his father crushed under a pile of rubble. "son" he repeated. "Dad!" we have to get you out of there ill go get help who did this?" Cain said frantically. His father seemed to ignore him and instead he stared into Cains golden eyes lovingly and even though he was in pain he smiled. "son promise me that you'll become stronger and never give up you will become the strongest blader out there" and with that he died. "I promise dad" Cain cried with tears rolling down his face. he walked over to pick up the broken cyber Pegasus and placed it in his bag along with a few other things. He had decided to leave without saying anything. He walked off not looking back then he ran into a strange man. "I'm here for your bey" he said seemingly randomly. "What are you talking about" Cain asked. "I went to your house to look for it but your father wouldn't tell me where you were so i had to crush him." He said with no emotion. "you did this to my home and father!" Cain screamed in anger. "Yes" replied the man. Without another word Cain pulled out his bey Mercury Corvus and set up his launcher. "Let it rip" he yelled.As Corvus flew towards the strange main he pulled out his bey and launcher. Without a word he launched his bey. and a burst of power surged from it completely stopping mercury Corvus' rotation. "Come back when you become stronger" The man said.
"Wait!" yelled Cain. The man ignored him and continued to walk while cain stood ther defeated.
Chapter2
Cain hiked for days until he came up to a nearby city and he found the nearest B-Bit
He then walked inside to meet a young woman about the age of 20. "Hey" she said in a sweet voice. "How can I help you." She had blond hair with a cute face and large blue eyes. "mm-my bey was badly damaged could ya fix it." Cain said nervously. "Sure she said taking mercury corvus and examining it. "This might take a day or so kid where ya stayin." she said touching his black spiky hair while examining the bey. "I dont have a place to stay i planned on getting out of hear as soon as my Corvus is fixed. "well your gonna have to wait till tomorrow." She said "by the way my name is Akiko whats yours.?" "Cain" he replied. "well ill see you tomorrow." said Akiko." Cain walked of into the city to get some supplies. Later that night he set up camp to lay under the stars. looking up at the Corvus constellation. Wondering how the maintenance on his precious bey was going. With the thought of his Corvus all shiny and new he went to sleep. The next morning he got up and almost immediately ran to the B-bit. He rushed inside and nearly ran straight into Akiko "oh there you are kid you saved me the trouble of finding you." she said. "Heres your Corvus" she continued "the spintrack and performance tip were irreparable but lucky for you th energy ring, fusionwheel and facebolt were perfectly intact." "anyway I replaced the spintrack with the AXE145 a personal invention of mine (to see pic go to
http://www.bladeinformer.com/site/index.php?pg=46) and i gave it a MS performance tip"she said "Oh and I replaced the facebolt with a metal steel facebolt."
"So i take it your entering the Bey King tournament" she said casually "How did you know" asked Cain. "because ive met so many bladers that plan on entering, so what are you in it for? fame, fortune, power." "No cain replied im in it because I made a promise to my father" he said looking down. "Anyway I have to go. He continued to hike for a few days, and won many battles. Eventually he got bored. Later that night he decided to set up camp near NewBolt City. The worlds largest bey maintenance city in the world he decided to go check it out tomorrow. Then a gang appeared led by a large boy about the age of 17. "you got a bey." he demanded. "Search him" the large boy said. "my name is Jake and this is my gang of face hunters" He announced
Then to other boys came up and grabbed him. Then Jake took his Corvus. "I've never seen a bey like this before we can scrap it and sell it for a fair price on the market"
He laughed. Then Cain saw a twinkle from the distance. A bey hit Jakes hand forcing him to drop Corvus. using the distraction to his advantage he jumped up and kicked the boy on the left in the head then kneed the the one on the right in the stomach.
Then Cain rushed towards Mercury Corvus and picked him up. "Get him" Yelled Jake clutching his hand. Then the rest of the gang launched their beys at Cain. Then Cain launched his Corvus and took out all the face hunters beys in one fell swoop. Then Jake pulled out his bey, Gravity Lacerta 100F. 3.....Cain attached his launcher grip to his launcher,2............He attached his bey to his launcher,1......he aimed"Let it rip!" they both yelled as they furiously launched their beys. "Go Lacerta" Jake yelled. The bay seemed to have a mind of its own it swiftly moved towards Corvus. Cain commanded his Corvus to dodge it but then Lacerta did something strange "Special move Gravity Crossbuster" Jake commanded. Then Lacerta cloned itself 5 times nd instead of illusions they were real. They each moved swiftly across the ring crossing each other in nearly every direction. He knew he wouldnt be able to use his special move so he stood there frozen. Then Corvus Did some thing strange it surrounded itself with an ominous black energy then it released a huge storm of black wind and dark fire shooting the bey copies across the field until the true bey was revieled. then Corvus continued to surround itself with its dark aura and attacked Gravity unicorno.
After the battle Cain turned to look at his savior and was utterly surprised. "you didnt think you could leave without me" said the boy. It was his friend Aron standing there with his red eyes and short spiky brown hair, holding out his new bey burn fireblaze. "miss me?" he said with a smile
END OF CHAPTER 2
Im sorry but legend of the bey king has been cancelled it sucks so dont come back or I will shoot you and then hit your face with my burn fireblaze.