Poison doesnt have enough description
Maybe use this:
Metal Wheel: Poison
Poison was first released with Poison Serpent SW145SD. It has 15 small blades, each the same size and about 4 mm apart at it's widest point. Just like dark, it is outclassed Attack, Defence and Stamina combinations, the recoil may explain why its outclassed in Stamina and Defence. Poison, just like Flame, more of the track is exposed, hence making attackers more likely to strike it's track.
Maybe I'll expand my own.
I dunno if it's just me, but the serpent section sounds really odd, I think you should take away the part where you mention a long sticker.
Explain why it has recoil, why it does bad in stamina or defence etc.
Look at any article with Dark and just reword some of the info there.
actually sw is worth to buy cause its good for attack/balance/stamina customizations like galaxy pegasis sw145 cs
(Feb. 16, 2011 5:20 PM)sigmathecool Wrote: [ -> ]actually sw is worth to buy cause its good for attack/balance/stamina customizations like galaxy pegasis sw145 cs
This is expert advice.
Except Galaxy Pegasis is completely useless and so is SW145 probably. That combination is awful. You should keep practicing until you learn the real good parts ...
Outclassed means beat in stamina, attack, and defense already. Also a beywiki article doen't tell people to test and find out personal preferance.
You forgot to put the word grams after the face weight, clear wheel weight, and metal wheel weight.
......Was kai-v being sarcastic in that last post? about the "expert advice" part
Yes, yes she was (guess the reference
). But I honestly don't see anything wrong with this article. Problem is, there are 2 good drafts for this horrible bey XD.
if poison manages to get underneath the opponent it can manage to cause a limited amount of damage with the top of the fusion wheel
(May. 06, 2011 5:57 PM)faissaloo Wrote: [ -> ]if poison manages to get underneath the opponent it can manage to cause a limited amount of damage with the top of the fusion wheel
...no it can't. Poison is horrible and has no use. You should look at tests for Poison. These articles have to be based on valid tests, so if it can, you should do tests in a TT Attack Stadium against top-tier beys to prove it.
Perhaps a mention about how the multiple protrusions on Poison both cause huge recoil and are very detrimental to spin loss? Also mention that it's worse than Dark if necessary.
I think that you should mention SW145 does well as an attack track
If you're serious, GET LEARNED. If not, that's SPAM.
Wraith, RustyXD is correct, SW145 is a good attack track, gravity works well with it as well as LLD.
Also, tbh, right now, 90/100 aren't really that great any more, and even 85 isn't that useful either, as BD145 and 230 wreck it. Frankly, the aim of SW145 is different anyway, so it's not directly outclassed by those three. CH120 maybe, but it's main competition is R145 and H145 (and BD145, if you want to count that).
Anyway, a couple of days back I actually wrote my own SW145 Description (for an unrelated purpose)
SW145: Switch 145 Wrote:Weight: ??g
SW145 is a 145-Height track with a Mode-Change gimmick. The track has a large plastic plate, with wing-like protrusions. This plate can be removed and replaced in the opposite orientation, giving it Attack and Defense modes. The track has little use in defence, and was largely considered useless. However, in attack mode, it has begun to find use in various [[Attack]] customs, due to its weight and ability to make contact with lower opponents to score KO’s that wouldn’t be otherwise possible. It competes with R145 and H145 for this purpose, having marginally lower recoil, and slightly better [[Survival | Stamina]], however, for pure smash attack, the latter two tracks are often preferred.
Man, I am so out of date.
Feel free to steal/adapt my description, if you want.
I'm working on updating the track list with all the missing tracks (and updating everything I can spot that's out of date), s'yeah
Edit: I see you did, that's awesome! I'll give it a look over and see what I think. After a quick check it seems a little bit unprofessional, but I haven't read it properly.
Okay, my notes:
Just include the total weight of SW145, as the parts cannot be used separately (though I'd think the shaft would be interchangeable with UW145, as they're identical).
I'd include what I wrote about the Pro's/Con's of SW145 compared to it's competition, seems relevant, at least to me.
Maybe include a note (which I forgot) about how the mode cannot be changed between the 5 rounds of a single beybattle.
I'm not entirely sure on the "purposes" of the attack and defence modes, or if it's that necessary.
Defence mode can be noted as not being useful for defence, and being outclassed by it's attack mode.
That said, I'm obviously biased towards my own writing style/description, so other's critiques may be more relevant/useful/fair
Beef it up more, Add allot more detail it's lacking some information.
Other than that its pretty good, I am looking forward to reading more of your Bey-Wiki's Paragraphs!
And tell how to use it in a Stamina combo.