Dec. 24, 2010 2:23 AM
hey all you bladers out there i want to share a story with you all based on my team and i added some twist and turns and it will blow your mind so i will begin just give me a moment reply and i will start
Dec. 24, 2010 2:23 AM
Dec. 24, 2010 2:26 AM
the bey zodiac force isnt that kidda like zodiac bladers but
Dec. 24, 2010 2:26 AM
Meow.
Dec. 24, 2010 2:28 AM
^ what does that have to do with this and cant wait for the story
Dec. 24, 2010 2:31 AM
He wanted a reply, I complied.
Dec. 24, 2010 3:00 AM
PROLOUGE:
''NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'' yelled a voice as the bey flew into the air and out of the stadium crumbling to pieces, while meeting direct contact toward the hard floor. The sound of young bladers cry filled the air the dark figure who was cloaked in grey walked away with a grin and said, '' Better off next time kid, to bad your blade is broken go play in the play pen''. Then there was flash of wind and a bey hit the surface causing a flame that lit up the nigth sky. The other figure standing in the distant yelled, '' hey you leave him alone''.
Chapter 1: THE NEW KID IN TOWN.
It was sundown there was a faint breeze, the sound of beybladers was overwhelming. As they shot there beys there were screams of victory crys of defeat. Collin was a local blader who was really good. His storm pegasis backed him up whenever he was in a pickle or issue. He was sort one of the best bladers around but thats until i came.
Collin: um who are you ?
NEW KID : my name is BERNARD, i hear youre a great blader with your storm pegasis so bring it on lets blade.
THEN there was a mummur through the crowd as if they were excited that someone challenge Collin.
Bernard : so ready 3,2,1 LET IT RIP !!!!!!!!!!!!!
Collin: okay 3,2,1 LET IT RIP !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The two beys launched into stadium with unbreakable force!!!!!!!!!
Collin: GO PEGASIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bernard: OKAY GIVE IT ALL YOU GOT FIREBLAZE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THE beys collided the air was growing dense , pegasis was moving swift and fast attacking fireblaze with such force. The walls of the stadium were cracking the battle was getting out of hand Bernards was losing, Fireblaze was being beaten.
Collin: Ok PEGASIS STORM REVOLUTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Collin's pegasis rushed towards fireblaze in a blue streak of energy. The impact was overwhelming and caused fireblaze to be sent flying out of the stadium.
Collin: Its all over
Bernard : THATS WHAT YOU THINK, FIREBLAZE IMPERIAL PHOENIX ATTACK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
There was a flash in sky fireblaze came down soaring into the bey stadium. hitting pegasis and causing it to wobble.
Collin: What was that why yo....
Bernard : Don't be so quick to speak FIREBLAZE FLAME SHOOTER !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THE STADIUM FLARED UP WITH FLAMES AND PEGASIS WAS KNOCKED OUT OF THE STADIUM. BERNARD WAS HAILED THE VICTOR.
Bernard: hey better luck next time man.
Collin : um yeah sure great battle
Unknown : Hahaha great battle its my turn know
Collin and Bernard : Who are you ?
Unknown: I am VIXEN, THE POISION BLADER, HERE'S MY PARTNER POISION SERPENT WHO WANTS TO BE THE FIRST VICTUM
Chapter 2 : THE POISION BLADER
THAT WAS CHAPTER 1
''NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'' yelled a voice as the bey flew into the air and out of the stadium crumbling to pieces, while meeting direct contact toward the hard floor. The sound of young bladers cry filled the air the dark figure who was cloaked in grey walked away with a grin and said, '' Better off next time kid, to bad your blade is broken go play in the play pen''. Then there was flash of wind and a bey hit the surface causing a flame that lit up the nigth sky. The other figure standing in the distant yelled, '' hey you leave him alone''.
Chapter 1: THE NEW KID IN TOWN.
It was sundown there was a faint breeze, the sound of beybladers was overwhelming. As they shot there beys there were screams of victory crys of defeat. Collin was a local blader who was really good. His storm pegasis backed him up whenever he was in a pickle or issue. He was sort one of the best bladers around but thats until i came.
Collin: um who are you ?
NEW KID : my name is BERNARD, i hear youre a great blader with your storm pegasis so bring it on lets blade.
THEN there was a mummur through the crowd as if they were excited that someone challenge Collin.
Bernard : so ready 3,2,1 LET IT RIP !!!!!!!!!!!!!
Collin: okay 3,2,1 LET IT RIP !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The two beys launched into stadium with unbreakable force!!!!!!!!!
Collin: GO PEGASIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bernard: OKAY GIVE IT ALL YOU GOT FIREBLAZE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THE beys collided the air was growing dense , pegasis was moving swift and fast attacking fireblaze with such force. The walls of the stadium were cracking the battle was getting out of hand Bernards was losing, Fireblaze was being beaten.
Collin: Ok PEGASIS STORM REVOLUTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Collin's pegasis rushed towards fireblaze in a blue streak of energy. The impact was overwhelming and caused fireblaze to be sent flying out of the stadium.
Collin: Its all over
Bernard : THATS WHAT YOU THINK, FIREBLAZE IMPERIAL PHOENIX ATTACK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
There was a flash in sky fireblaze came down soaring into the bey stadium. hitting pegasis and causing it to wobble.
Collin: What was that why yo....
Bernard : Don't be so quick to speak FIREBLAZE FLAME SHOOTER !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THE STADIUM FLARED UP WITH FLAMES AND PEGASIS WAS KNOCKED OUT OF THE STADIUM. BERNARD WAS HAILED THE VICTOR.
Bernard: hey better luck next time man.
Collin : um yeah sure great battle
Unknown : Hahaha great battle its my turn know
Collin and Bernard : Who are you ?
Unknown: I am VIXEN, THE POISION BLADER, HERE'S MY PARTNER POISION SERPENT WHO WANTS TO BE THE FIRST VICTUM
Chapter 2 : THE POISION BLADER
THAT WAS CHAPTER 1
Jan. 12, 2012 10:08 PM
say what
Jan. 12, 2012 10:14 PM
...
This has to be one of thw worst style writing I've seen.
Simply because you wrote it like
JOE: Hello.
BOB:yo jo.
etc.
Write, I don't know, properly. Research, research, research on the GOOD stories around here.
usepropergrammartookthxbai
This has to be one of thw worst style writing I've seen.
Simply because you wrote it like
JOE: Hello.
BOB:yo jo.
etc.
Write, I don't know, properly. Research, research, research on the GOOD stories around here.
usepropergrammartookthxbai
Jan. 16, 2012 5:25 PM
wow thats mean but it was just a draft i'm a good write it was just some brain storming of the story
Jan. 16, 2012 7:13 PM
i'm not trying to be mean.
It's more script then story.
It's more script then story.
Jan. 18, 2012 10:11 PM
you may have a point here