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I'm starting another story! But before I begin, I need a little help on something. I have not been able to decide what tip I should put on the main character's beyblade. I have narrowed it down to these options:
1. WB
2. ES
3. MS
4. WD
5. HF/S
The combo needing a tip is: Rock Gemios DF145.
Yes, I know that this is a very BAAAADD performing combo, no matter what tip it has, but that is what I am going to use. I will start the first episode once a tip has gained 5 votes. Thank You!
Only 2 votes so far... I can't start until this has been decided!
Please vote!
Thank you!
there you go, hope it's that one!
pwiz write wat teh abriviations mean (i am a noob wen it comes to abreviations) thx!! ;3;
you need chars?
Anyway heres mine
Name:sinos
Wears a brown leather wide brimmed hat,and a matching cape,wears a black garnet with a symble of fire on it,that doubles as a launcher
Bey:plasma distruptor MD100 HD
Plasma is a thick version of flame and while flame has 2 arrows plasma has 6 arrows
Disruptor is a clear wheel with holes all over emiting a pitch that interrupts the opponent's consentration
MD100 stands for magnectic defence
HD stands for hover disc
Sinos is a suger addict he is often seen eating white chocolate bars
WD-Wide Defense, from earth aquila/eagle.
WB- Wide Ball, from rock leone.
ES- Eternal Sharp, from flame libra or thermal Pisces.
MS- Metal Sharp, from burn Phoenix/Fireblaze
HF/S- Hole Flat/Sharp, from Storm aquario.
There's the abbreviations, hope this helps!
Yes it does! thx!!!
Ok everyone, it has been decided! The tip, who actually got 6 votes because I forgot to start when it had 5, is... ES!! So, without further ado, here is the first, and slightly shorter than I want it to be(sorry) episode!!

Episode 1

Jordan clutched his bey in his hand. He was thinking about how he had gotten it. His father had been fighting in a war overseas, and had sent him this beyblade as a birthday present. That was the last time that Jordan had ever heard from his father. The bey was Rock Gemios DF145. The tip of his bey had not been sent to by his father. Jordan was determined to become the world's best blader, so that he could help his mom pay bills and take care of herself. But he needed a complete beyblade to do that. Which was exactly what he didn't have. He had been saving up his money to buy a beypointer and a tip, and he thought he had enough.
"Hey, Mom? Can I go to the beyblade store?" he asked.
"Sure, honey, but you need to be home to help make supper!" his mom replied.
"I will!!" Jordan told her as he walked out the door.
He walked over to the beyshop, and was greeted by a friendly voice.
"Why, hello there! My name is Mr. Drae. Say, I've never seen you before! Did you just move here?" asked the man from behind the counter.
"Yes, we moved here a few weeks ago. I'm Jordan. I'm looking for a tip and a beypointer. Do you have any?" Jordan asked.
" Of course! If we didn't, we wouldn't call ourselves a beyshop!" Mr. Drae said, "What would you like?"
"Umm, I don't know, exactly. I'd like something with good stamina. Any ideas?" Jordan asked him.
"Yes, actually. Here, this one is called ES, for Eternal Sharp. Also, here's your beypointer, free of charge." Mr Drae said.
"You mean I don't have to pay for these?" Jordan asked
Again, sorry about the length.
Woah, sorta forgot about this... Sorry, I'll work on it now! Plz don't close this!!
Hmm....
ok so far
just maybe more long
oh and theres a typo
can i create a friend for your guy?
Name: Posie (girl)
Beyblade: Spike Possum SP125JRS
Spike 145(just a bunch of spikes that come off and attack the opponent)
Jagged rubber sharp: an awesome tip that can evade most attacks
Spike: has little metal spikes around the wheel
Special move: Playing possum, possum rage
Where's the typo? And thank you for your character!!
(Jan. 18, 2011  11:23 PM)Rukasu333 Wrote: [ -> ]Where's the typo? And thank you for your character!!

I see it. You said in the story " 'Umm, I don't know, exactly. I'd like something with good stamina. Any ideas?' Luke asked him." The character is Jordan, not Luke.
Oh, oops. I got mixed up with my other story... Sorry, I'll fix it when I get to a computer
Tee-Hee!!!!
(Jan. 19, 2011  2:29 AM)DarkCancer333 Wrote: [ -> ]Tee-Hee!!!!

Add more content to your post so you won't be WARNED dunh dunh dunh.... I will post the next part soon.
(Jan. 19, 2011  2:29 AM)DarkCancer333 Wrote: [ -> ]Tee-Hee!!!!

y'know if you post any more of these non-needed posts, Kai-V will actually falcon punch you
and Rukasu333
yur welcome
im also working on my own story
o-o well, actually i was reffering to the typo... srry... i didn't notice... Tongue_out. and that's not nice to say Pinching_eyes_2 and they aren't non-needed posts. I actually go to sckool with rukasu Tired.

Off topic: How do you make a thread Chocked_2?! D:
You go into a forum (example Your Creations) and click the "new thread" button or the "new topic" button, not sure what it's called. Please use pms for this, don derail the thread. Thanks. As for school, you had to tell all of them that?
(Jan. 19, 2011  11:16 PM)DarkCancer333 Wrote: [ -> ]o-o well, actually i was reffering to the typo... srry... i didn't notice... Tongue_out. and that's not nice to say Pinching_eyes_2 and they aren't non-needed posts. I actually go to sckool with rukasu Tired.

Off topic: How do you make a thread Chocked_2?! D:

LOL
changed yur Signature now huh?
you do know that kai- v is a girl right(or i think so)? Off topic
Oh and plz post some new parts of both of yur stories
do you accept characters
Yes, I do accept characters! By all means, give me one and I will put it in the story!
Sorry, this is going to be a little short as well... Sorry!
Episode 2

"You mean I don't have to pay for these?" Jordan asked.
"Nope! Since you've never been here before, I'll let you have them for free!" said Mr. Drae.
"Awesome! Thanks! Well, since I have all of these beypoints left over, can I use them to buy something else?" Jordan asked.
"Sure! What do you want?" Mr Drae asked.
"Hmm... I think I'll take a launchergrip, a string launcher, and an angle compass." Jordan replied.
"Ok! Let me go get all of the stuff you wanted!" Mr Drae said as he walked towards the back of his shop. He took a beypointer, an ES tip, a launchergrip, a string launcher, and an angle compass off of the shelf. he brought them back, and gave them to Jordan.
"That will be 250 beypoints total, please!" Mr Drae said.
"Only 250? Wow, you have low prices! Anyways, here you go. Thanks again!" Jordan said.
"No problem! Come back soon!" Mr Drae said.
"I will! See ya!" Jordan said.
He walked out the door feeling like he could take on the world.
Very ridiculously short episode 2, end.
AGAIN, SORRY ABOUT THE LENGTH...
still awesome
where do you get these ideas?
Name: (No one know his name so they just call him Whirpool)
Bey: Whirpool Poseidon T120 RB
Look: Blue jeans, white T-shirt, blue jacket, blue hair.

Bey description: The metal wheel whirpool is blue and is shaped like whirpool waves in the outside and some pop up waves near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is blue and is a whirpool. T120 (trident 120) is a blue 120 with four small gold tridents. RB (rubber ball) is a rubber ball. The facebolt is blue with a gold trident and two waves behind. Is a very powerfull bey.

Whirpool description: He is a 15 year old mysterious guy. No one knows nothing about him. Is a very good guy but no one talks with him. Whirpool is very strong blader and always is blading. He found Whirpool Poseidon when he was 8 yaers old. He was in a ship and a giant whirpool appear in front. The ship sunk and all his family died. He was the only one who survived. Under the sea he found his bey. Since then he is all mysterious. He is very smart. And can be a good friend.

Special Move: Giant Golden Whirpool. Appears water in the stadium and then Whirpool Poseidon Makes a giant whirpool . The tridents in his track get bigger.
Name: Max Daun
bey: Hyper griffin 100WMF
wide metal flat. griffin is half green, half purple and the green side is leone and the purple side is eagle.
side:bad
bio:he is aloof and easy distracted but very unforgiving. he is 13 Smile
oh yeah his move (is a dark move okay?) it is griffin destruction slash
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