World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

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Hey guys! I thought it would be cool to try my Beyblade fanfic on you and get some feed back.

Chapter 1: Aim for the top, BEYeaters!

As he stepped out under the blaring lights of the arena, Tetsuya Akiyama looked down in shock as he saw his hands shake. "Unbelievable" he screamed in his head, "you are Tetsuya! Leader of the BEYeaters! Pull yourself together!" With those words ringing in his heart, Tetsuya stepped up to the stadium and prepared for battle.

This was Tetsuya's first time blading outside of his village in the mountains. A few days ago, this wouldn't of been such a big deal. But after the course of events that have played out, this exhibition tournament has now become his most important battle yet.

He barely heard the announcer give the all too familiar countdown before he returned his focus to the arena. Tetsuya launched his Nightmare Wolf T125RSF with as much force as he could, his opponent did the same.

"Go Storm Aries" his foe cried as the opposing bey went in on the offensive."Dodge it now!" Tetsuya yelled. Wolf swept to the left and evaded the attack with ease. "Now show 'em what an attack is supposed to look like!" Wolf then charged at Storm Aries at full speed, knocking it halfway across the stadium.

"Wow, what was that? Maybe it was a good idea to let that weird guy borrow you." Tetsuya was trying to recall one of the many strange encounters he had over the course of the last week.

After saving his town from a gang of thugs called the BEYeater (which promptly took over), he was confronted by a strange man wearing a blue suit. "Do you want to know why I like this area so much?" he asked in a too friendly tone. "Not really..." Tetsuya said with apprehension. "I like it because there aren't any cacti, at least none that I can see..." "What do you want?" Tetsuya cut in, "I'm kind of busy at the moment." Tetsuya turned back to his bey, which was heavily damaged during the fight with the BEYeaters

"I'll just get to my point then" the man said unphased. He turned away from Tetsuya in order to get a better look at the town. "I'm here because of your accomplishment," he began, "You managed to beat the leader of the BEYeaters, a group of bladers I hired in order to scout out new talent." Tetsuya looked down at his severely worn bey as he heard this.

"I wish to congratulate you! Not only did you beat them, you also managed to become the new leader" the man then pointed at Tetsuya's bey. "I understand that your bey has probably seen better days..." Tetsuya quickly became alert, "What is it that you really want?" he said while staring daggers at the mysterious man. "Merely want thank you for getting that situation under control, by fixing that bey of yours..."

That moment has been etched into Tetsuya's mind since that day. Soon after that he received a package along with a set of explicit instructions

"This gift is given to you with only one condition, participate in the exhibition tournament being held next week.
D."

Inside of the package was a bey, Nightmare Wolf W105WB. "well...the least I could do is try it out, I guess."

"Silver horn smash!" Tetsuya's opponent yelled as Storm Aries rushed towards Wolf. Tetsuya had to act fast. "Counter it now with Savage Maul!" he said as if it were a reflex. Wolf dodged the attack and rushed in like a starving animal. Wolf struck Storm Aries 3 times rapidly before realigning itself for another stike "Cling, Cling, Cling," Wolf hit 3 more times. "Alright lets fini...Agh!" Tetsuya 's head began to puond as if it were being beaten with a hammer.

"...use it..." "...finish this now..."

Before Tetsuya could try to find out what was happening, he heard himself say "Dark Spin Move: Infinite Savage Maul!" As soon as the command was given, Tetsuya start to feel disorientated, as if he were having an out of body experience. He watched as Wolf began to attack. At first, it looked like the special move he had used a moment ago, then he looked at the stadium. Wolf tearing it apart! "That definitely isn't like my old Wolf" he thought as he saw marks all over the stadium that resembled the scar on his cheek. "I think I have to stop this before this gets out of hand"

Apparently, his opponent was thinking thing as he screamed "I forfeit, Storm Aries can't take another hit!" He called his bey back just before Wolf could make another pass at it.

"The winner of this match is... Tetsuya Akiyama!" The announcer was barely heard over the roar of the crowd and Tetsuya's scrambled thoughts.

"Dodge it now!" Tetsuya yelled. Wolf swept to the left and evaded the attack with ease. "Now show 'em what an attack is supposed to look like!" Wolf then charged at Storm Aries at full speed, knocking it halfway across the stadium.

"Wow, what was that? Maybe it was a good idea to let that weird guy borrow you." Tetsuya was trying to recall one of the many strange encounters he had over the course of the last week.

After saving his town from a gang of thugs called the BEYeater (which promptly took over), he was confronted by a strange man wearing a blue suit. "Do you want to know why I like this area so much?" he asked in a too friendly tone. "Not really..." Tetsuya said with apprehension. "I like it because there aren't any cacti, at least none that I can see..." "What do you want?" Tetsuya cut in, "I'm kind of busy at the moment." Tetsuya turned back to his bey, which was heavily damaged during the fight with the BEYeaters.

"I'll just get to my point then" the man said unphased. The man turned away from Tetsuya in order to get a better look at the town. "I'm here because of your accomplishment," he began, "You managed to beat the leader of the BEYeaters, a group of bladers I hired in order to scout out new talent." Tetsuya looked down at his severely worn bey as he heard this.

"I wish to congratulate you! Not only did you beat them, you also managed to become the new leader" the man then pointed at Tetsuya's bey. "I understand that your bey has probably seen better days..." Tetsuya quickly became alert, "What is it that you really want?" he said while staring daggers at the mysterious man. "Merely want thank you for getting that situation under control, by fixing that bey of yours..."

That moment has been etched into Tetsuya's mind since that day. Soon after that he received a package along with a set of explicit instructions
"This gift is given to you with only one condition, participate in the exhibition tournament being held next week.
D."

Inside of the package was a bey, Nightmare Wolf W105WB. "well...the least I could do is try it out, I guess."

"Silver horn smash!" Tetsuya's opponent yelled as Storm Aries rushed towards Wolf. Tetsuya had to act fast. "Counter it now with Savage Maul!" he said as if it were a reflex. Wolf dodged the attack and rushed in like a starving animal. Wolf struck Storm Aries 3 times rapidly before realigning itself for another stike "Cling, Cling, Cling," Wolf hit 3 more times. "Alright lets fini...Agh!" Tetsuya 's head began to puond as if it were being beaten with a hammer.

"...use it..." "...finish this now..."

Before Tetsuya could try to find out what was happening, he heard himself say "Dark Spin Move: Infinite Savage Maul!"

As soon as the command was given, Tetsuya start to feel disorientated, as if he were having an out of body experience. He watched as Wolf began to attack. At first, it looked like the special move he had used a moment ago, then he looked at the stadium. Wolf tearing it apart! "That definitely isn't like my old Wolf" he thought as he saw marks all over the stadium that resembled the scar on his cheek. "I think I have to stop this before this gets out of hand"

Apparently, his opponent was thinking thing as he screamed "I forfeit, Storm Aries can't take another hit!" He called his bey back just before Wolf could make another pass at it.

"The winner of this match is... Tetsuya Akiyama!" The announcer was barely heard over the roar of the crowd and Tetsuya's scrambled thoughts.

Tetsuya didn't even notice as his friends, Hanako and Yoshi, run up to the side of the stadium to congratulate him. "Alright Tetsuya!" yelled Hanako as she waved her arms in the air gleefully. "We are off to a good start," Yoshi said calmly, "just one more win to advance."

Tetsuya came to his senses after hearing them. "Yeah just one more win." He walk quickly off the stage and headed towards the bench located near the stadium, ready to watch Yoshi performance. In a way, all of Yoshi's battles were exactly that, a performance. He clearly made an effort to make each battle as entertaining as possible. Tetsuya looked on as Yoshi began to try stirring up the crowd before preparing for his match. Tetsuya turned to Hanako as she sat next to him on the bench. "You know, I sometimes forget why I put up with this guy" he said in a joking manner. "I don't know, maybe because you two are, in a way, the same?" Hanako responded, trying not to take her eyes of the stadium. "I guess so..." Tetusuya didn't want to take his eyes off the stage either, because he wanted to see Yoshi's "Transformation."

Every time Yoshi begins a beybattle, everything about him changes. He becomes quite, still and very alert. It seems as he is a totally different person, well to everyone except Tetsuya. Tetsuya has always had something like a sixth sense about bladers, he could always tell what kind of blader they were just by being near them.

Tetsuya first started noticing this a few years ago, after his mother finished making Flame Wolf for his dad. Shortly after it was finished, his father took him out into a nearby forest that had many hollowed out tree stumps with Beystadiums fit into them. He could still remember what his Father said that day:

"You know, it's said that when someone that wishes to leave this village in pursuit of glory would first have to create a new stadium from one of these stumps. If you can't at least make a dent in them with your bey, then it's clear that you aren't ready..."

After that, They began to batlle. Tetsuya had a Wind Wolf100F back to fight with. They battled from that afternoon all the way to that very evening. After they had battled, Tetsuya and his father noticed the increasing darkness and started to head back home, but their path was blocked by a pack of hungry wolves. Tetsuya hid behind his father as he watch him launch his Flame Wolf at the wolves dispersing all of them. Except for the leader...

Tetsuya's mind was suddenly snapped back to reality when he heard Yoshi and his opponent's battle begin. "3...2...1...Go, SHOOT!" The battle was under way. Yoshi's Dark Aquario C145WB (or Squire) landed dead in the center of the stadium and sat there waiting. "Ladies first" was all that Yoshi said before he crossed his arms and waited for his opponent's move. "Looks like Yoshi of the BEYeaters is going on the Defensive" said the announcer as the other blader began her assault. She raised her hand and pointed towards Yoshi. "Your going down," she shouted as her Storm Leone began to rush towards Squire. "Now use your special move, Lion's Proud Shatter-claw, to end this quickly!" After her command, her Leone began to tilt forward as it went across the the stadium. Yoshi uncrossed his arms and then waged his finger, as if chastising a little child. "Tsk, Tsk, I thought you would tried something original...Go Squire, Chivalrous Shield!"

A Navy blue Aura surrounded Squire as Storm Leone made contact. There was a loud bang followed by a flash of blue light. The entire arena went silent waiting to see the outcome of the collision, everyone except for Yoshi. He looked at his opponent, who was completely baffled by the collision's results. "How anticlimactic...I thought we would at least dance for a little longer..." Yoshi then called his bey back to his hand and then pointed towards his opponent. "Maybe next time, we could meet in a more...pleasant situation." The announcer then jumped from his position above the stadium. "It looks as if Yoshi decided to forfeit this battle to Miss..." he didn't finish, because as he turned towards the other blader, he could see what looked like a crack in the wall behind the opposing team's bench area. Inside the crack was Storm Leone. (End Chapter One)

Chapter Two: Howl Tetsuya! 1 on 1 Finale

The announcer just gawked at the blade size crater left in the wall as he tried to regain his composure. The sound of the PA after he dropped his mic brought him to his senses "U-unbelievable, Yoshi was able to repel Storm Leone and bounce it clear out of the stadium, making team BEYeaters the winner of the semi-final match!" The audience was still in awe, there was barely a sound as Yoshi made his way towards his friends.

"So, can I put on a show, or what?" Yoshi said with large grin. Hanako stood up with an even bigger grin, "I give it a seven, 'cause you didn't make her cry," she said playfully.

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... If you could actually post your story, it would be better ...
sorry added part of it to OP (that would be kind of important lol)
Due to the limitations of the PS3 browser I'm being forced to use until next Friday, I can't add anymore to the OP. I have to break it up into many different posts...
(continued from OP)

"Dodge it now!" Tetsuya yelled. Wolf swept to the left and evaded the attack with ease. "Now show 'em what an attack is supposed to look like!" Wolf then charged at Storm Aries at full speed, knocking it halfway across the stadium.

"Wow, what was that? Maybe it was a good idea to let that weird guy borrow you." Tetsuya was trying to recall one of the many strange encounters he had over the course of the last week.

After saving his town from a gang of thugs called the BEYeater (which promptly took over), he was confronted by a strange man wearing a blue suit. "Do you want to know why I like this area so much?" he asked in a too friendly tone. "Not really..." Tetsuya said with apprehension. "I like it because there aren't any cacti, at least none that I can see..." "What do you want?" Tetsuya cut in, "I'm kind of busy at the moment." Tetsuya turned back to his bey, which was heavily damaged during the fight with the BEYeaters

"I'll just get to my point then" the man said unphased
Posting more tomorrow, sleep...
i like that story i also like these stories leoneswar and drahelix is born!
I'm going to update in a few moments
(continued)

The man turned away from Tetsuya in order to get a better look at the town. "I'm here because of your accomplishment," he began, "You managed to beat the leader of the BEYeaters, a group of bladers I hired in order to scout out new talent." Tetsuya looked down at his severely worn bey as he heard this.

"I wish to congratulate you! Not only did you beat them, you also managed to become the new leader" the man then pointed at Tetsuya's bey. "I understand that your bey has probably seen better days..." Tetsuya quickly became alert, "What is it that you really want?" he said while staring daggers at the mysterious man. "Merely want thank you for getting that situation under control, by fixing that bey of yours..."

That moment has been etched into Tetsuya's mind since that day. Soon after that he received a package along with a set of explicit instructions
"This gift is given to you with only one condition, participate in the exhibition tournament being held next week.
D."
Inside of the package was a bey, Nightmare Wolf W105WB. "well...the least I could do is try it out, I guess."

"Silver horn smash!" Tetsuya's opponent yelled as Storm Aries rushed towards Wolf. Tetsuya had to act fast. "Counter it now with Savage Maul!" he said as if it were a reflex. Wolf dodged the attack and rushed in like a starving animal. Wolf struck Storm Aries 3 times rapidly before realigning itself for another stike "Cling, Cling, Cling," Wolf hit 3 more times. "Alright lets fini...Agh!" Tetsuya 's head began to puond as if it were being beaten with a hammer.
"...use it..." "...finish this now..."
Before Tetsuya could try to find out what was happening, he heard himself say "Dark Spin Move: Infinite Savage Maul!"
nice job man
i love it!
thanks! as soon as I figure out how, I'm going to try putting it all in the OP (unless someone else can help)
(continued)
As soon as the command was given, Tetsuya start to feel disorientated, as if he were having an out of body experience. He watched as Wolf began to attack. At first, it looked like the special move he had used a moment ago, then he looked at the stadium. Wolf tearing it apart! "That definitely isn't like my old Wolf" he thought as he saw marks all over the stadium that resembled the scar on his cheek. "I think I have to stop this before this gets out of hand"

Apparently, his opponent was thinking thing as he screamed "I forfeit, Storm Aries can't take another hit!" He called his bey back just before Wolf could make another pass at it.

"The winner of this match is... Tetsuya Akiyama!" The announcer was barely heard over the roar of the crowd and Tetsuya's scrambled thoughts.
Edited OP to include chapter name
(continued)

Tetsuya didn't even notice as his friends, Hanako and Yoshi, run up to the side of the stadium to congratulate him. "Alright Tetsuya!" yelled Hanako as she waved her arms in the air gleefully. "We are off to a good start," Yoshi said calmly, "just one more win to advance."

Tetsuya came to his senses after hearing them. "Yeah just one more win." He walk quickly off the stage and headed towards the bench located near the stadium, ready to watch Yoshi performance.
(continued)

In a way, all of Yoshi's battles were exactly that, a performance. He clearly made an effort to make each battle as entertaining as possible. Tetsuya looked on as Yoshi began to try stirring up the crowd before preparing for his match. Tetsuya turned to Hanako as she sat next to him on the bench. "You know, I sometimes forget why I put up with this guy" he said in a joking manner. "I don't know, maybe because you two are, in a way, the same?" Hanako responded, trying not to take her eyes of the stadium. "I guess so..." Tetusuya didn't want to take his eyes off the stage either, because he wanted to see Yoshi's "Transformation."

Everytime Yoshi begins a beybattle, everything about him changes. He becomes quite, still and very alert. It seems as he is a totally different person, well to everyone except Tetsuya. Tetsuya has always had something like a sixth sense about bladers, he could always tell what kind of blader they were just by being near them.
(continued)

Tetsuya first started noticing this a few years ago, after his mother finished making Flame Wolf for his dad. Shortly after it was finished, his father took him out into a nearby forest that had many hollowed out tree stumps with Beystadiums fit into them. He could still remember what his Father said that day:

"You know, it's said that when someone that wishes to leave this village in pursuit of glory would first have to create a new stadium from one of these stumps. If you can't at least make a dent in them with your bey, then it's clear that you aren't ready..."

After that, They began to batlle. Tetsuya had a Wind Wolf100F back to fight with. They battled from that afternoon all the way to that very evening. After they had battled, Tetsuya and his father started to head back home, but their path was blocked by a pack of hungry wolves. Tetsuya hid behind his father as he watch him launch his Flame Wolf at the wolves dispersing all of them. Except for the leader...
(continued)
Tetsuya's mind was suddenly snapped back to reality when he heard Yoshi and his opponent's battle begin. "3...2...1...Go, SHOOT!" The battle was under way. Yoshi's Dark Aquario C145WB (or Squire) landed dead in the center of the stadium and sat there waiting. "Ladies first" was all that Yoshi said before he crossed his arms and waited for his opponent's move. "Looks like Yoshi of the BEYeaters is going on the Defensive" said the announcer as the other blader began her assault. She raised her hand and pointed towards Yoshi. "Your going down," she shouted as her Storm Leone began to rush towards Squire. "Now use your special move, Lion's Proud Shatter-claw, to end this quickly!" After her command, her Leone began to tilt forward as it went across the the stadium. Yoshi uncrossed his arms and then waged his finger, as if chastizing a little child. "Tsk, Tsk, I thought you would tried something original...Go Squire, Chivalrous Shield!" (Chapter 1 is almost over...)
(continued)

A Navy blue Aura surrounded Squire as Storm Leone made contact. There was a loud bang followed by a flash of blue light. The entire arena went silent waiting to see the outcome of the collision, everyone except for Yoshi. He looked at his opponent, who was completely baffled by the collision's results "How anticlimactic...I thought we would at least dance for a little longer..." Yoshi then called his bey back to his hand and then pointed towards his opponent. "Maybe next time, we could meet in a more...pleasant situation." The anouncer then jumped from his position above the stadium. "It looks as if Yoshi decided to forfeit this battle to Miss..." he didn't finish, because as he turned towards the other blader, hs could see what looked like a crack in the wall behind the opposing team's bench area. Inside the crack was Storm Leone. (End Chapter One)
Chapter 2 will be up after a little feedback...
my friend came over yesterday and i showed him the story and he said he loved it!
Well thanks! I will post the next chapter soon.
epic dude
During next summer I'm probaly gonna do a beyblade metal fusion show with my friends. It will be fun the setting will have to be at our school outside at our park .
...good to know...I guess but this really isn't the place for that. I am posting part of the next chapter in the afternoon...
I am borrowing my cousin's computer so that I can edit chapter one into the OP...chapter 2 when I get home
will finish later...have to go...
Chapter Two: Howl Tetsuya! 1 on 1 Finale

The announcer just gawked at the blade size crater left in the wall as he tried to regain his composure. The sound of the PA after he dropped his mic brought him to his senses "U-unbelievable, Yoshi was able to repel Storm Leone and bounce it clear out of the stadium, making team BEYeaters the winner of the semi-final match!" The audience was still in awe, there was barely a sound as Yoshi made his way towards his friends.

"So, can I put on a show, or what?" Yoshi said with large grin. Hanako stood up with an even bigger grin, "I give it a seven, 'cause you didn't make her cry," she said playfully.

(this chapter may/may not contain cannons)
EDIT: meant canons lol
ah nice
very nice, hope there are cannons, got an obsession with 'em!
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