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(Apr. 29, 2022  4:59 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Alright, so about the newest chapter of Mystical. I haven't had much time to work on it, but this weekend, I'll basically be free the entire day, and I'll try to get 36 and beyond done. But also my birthday is coming up soon, and this weekend, I may be celebrating at my mom's. Anyway, the actual chapter itself, shouldn't take too long, but I don't really know yet.

Also, anyone who has the time to(and has read, Mystical), would you be willing to give me a rating. Please use the ratings in the spoiler.


Seems fair to me to rate it, for to obvious reasons:
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Characters - 7: Some are deep in developed, others are surface value. As such, I think a 7 fits well
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Plot - ∅: I can't talk about plot, doesn't mean it is a zero.
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Length - 9: Some chapters break the chain, but they are well lengthed
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Story - 6: Idk if it is accurate or not since I'm bad at rating story and trash at plot, but that's what I came up with. It just fits there.
(Apr. 29, 2022  5:17 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: [ -> ]
(Apr. 29, 2022  4:59 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Alright, so about the newest chapter of Mystical. I haven't had much time to work on it, but this weekend, I'll basically be free the entire day, and I'll try to get 36 and beyond done. But also my birthday is coming up soon, and this weekend, I may be celebrating at my mom's. Anyway, the actual chapter itself, shouldn't take too long, but I don't really know yet.

Also, anyone who has the time to(and has read, Mystical), would you be willing to give me a rating. Please use the ratings in the spoiler.


Seems fair to me to rate it, for to obvious reasons:
.
Characters - 7: Some are deep in developed, others are surface value. As such, I think a 7 fits well
.
Plot - ∅: I can't talk about plot, doesn't mean it is a zero.
.
Length - 9: Some chapters break the chain, but they are well lengthed
.
Story - 6: Idk if it is accurate or not since I'm bad at rating story and trash at plot, but that's what I came up with. It just fits there.
Thanks, Hollowmind. I assume "Some chapters break the chain" mean how long they are/short they are. Once again, thanks for everything, Hollowmind.
Chapter 36!

Mystical, has really changed since the beginning. Well, I prefer it now, then before.
Nice power up for Barry
(May. 10, 2022  12:05 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: [ -> ]Nice power up for Barry
Yeah, I wanted to have him, win this battle. Also, who do you think his new rival is?
Obito and Keith would be his new rivals probably
(May. 10, 2022  9:38 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: [ -> ]Obito and Keith would be his new rivals probably
Obito is his new rival, i'd say Keith is almost more of a inspiration, kinda.
Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet. Also I might have a character contest, but idk yet.

Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!

[spoiler]

{Shibuya, Japan. 10 AM}

Beyblade! A sport in which, you battle opponents from around the world, with your blading spirit and Beys!
And for 16-year-old, Akira Kamado, being a high ranking blader, was his dream. But first, he needs to get out of his dreams, and get to High School!
???(Irritated): "Big Bro, wake up, already!"
The little girl, presumably, Akira's younger sister, banged two pots together, and scared Akira out of his bed, his covers
(May. 12, 2022  2:05 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet. Also I might have a character contest, but idk yet.

Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!

[spoiler]

{Shibuya, Japan. 10 AM}

Beyblade! A sport in which, you battle opponents from around the world, with your blading spirit and Beys!
And for 16-year-old, Akira Kamado, being a high ranking blader, was his dream. But first, he needs to get out of his dreams, and get to High School!
???(Irritated): "Big Bro, wake up, already!"
The little girl, presumably, Akira's younger sister, banged two pots together, and scared Akira out of his bed, his covers

I hope you do have a character contest. Your expert writing can cause any bad written character be considered perfection.
Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...

1st Place: OC will be a main character.

2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.

3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.


DualBurst System.
Wdym bye appearance?
(May. 13, 2022  5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...

1st Place: OC will be a main character.

2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.

3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.


DualBurst System.
Here's my oc
(May. 13, 2022  8:59 PM)Anime Blader Wrote: [ -> ]Here's my oc
Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.
(May. 13, 2022  5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...

1st Place: OC will be a main character.

2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.

3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.


DualBurst System.

Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs?
(May. 13, 2022  10:13 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 13, 2022  5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...

1st Place: OC will be a main character.

2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.

3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.


DualBurst System.

Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs?
Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used. 

(May. 13, 2022  10:37 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 13, 2022  10:13 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: [ -> ]Question, are we allowed to have them utilize canon motifs?
Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used. 


Aight, I was gonna go for Bahamut and try going for a Major Side Antag, so thx for letting me know.
(May. 13, 2022  10:59 PM)MasterofDerp Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 13, 2022  10:37 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Depends on the motif. I have some planned for this check the spoiler for them. Any that aren't in the spoiler can be used. 


Aight, I was gonna go for Bahamut and try going for a Major Side Antag, so thx for letting me know.
Yep, excited to see your OC and Bey entry then!

and others! I've finished DualBurst episode 1!

Beyblade Burst: DualBurst begins! I'm going to try and make this my best fanfiction yet.

Chapter 1: New Era! Akira Kamado!

This took a while to write, but I think it turned out good.
(May. 13, 2022  10:08 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 13, 2022  8:59 PM)Anime Blader Wrote: [ -> ]Here's my oc
Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.

Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is?
(May. 14, 2022  2:50 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 13, 2022  10:08 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Your in, also for the part with Savannah does she like him, or no. Also with the Neo Disc', you don't need to include a dash for the disc name. Oh, and you need a Dual Drive, check the original post for info on Dual Drives.

Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is?
Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?
(May. 14, 2022  3:09 AM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 14, 2022  2:50 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: [ -> ]Yes Savannah likes him. Can you make it just Resurrection then? Sorry but I can't find where you said what dual drive is the closest I've gotten to it is you listing how you write a bey combo in the dual burst system so can you tell me what the dual drive is?
Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?

Alright then I'll do this:
(May. 14, 2022  3:39 AM)Anime Blader Wrote: [ -> ]
(May. 14, 2022  3:09 AM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Anime Blader, okay so the DualDrive acts as the weight for the Layer, similar to DB Armors and Single Chassis from SuperKing, they features metal placement to well..ya know add weight to the layer. Although unlike the Single Chassis, these don't features the teeth/locks of the Bey, these just have metal placed to add weight. That make sense?

Alright then I'll do this:
Alright sounds good, then Valac and Obedience Valefar are entered into the contest.
UMy OC for Beyblade Burst: DualBurst


Brandt’s Bey

Name: Katsumi Tokito

||Appearance:Light blue messy haired young man with A Darker shade of blue in his hair also he wears a black face-mask with a white Evil smile on it Katsumi also Has a black hoodie that hasn’t been Ironed the Hoodie Has black cat ears with white fluff in the ears his pants are black his left eye is red and his Right eye is Purple||

||Backstory:He was a kid Obsessed with Monsters so when he watched Godzilla he was Obsessed he saw the other Kaiju’s went on and on about Monsters and on his birthday he discovered Beyblade So he Made a Beyblade named off the monsters…Void Kaiju!||

||Bey:Void,Kaiju,Ex,Aero,Dy,Bst,4B||

||Avatar core: kaiju–A K in the center with green eyes on the right and left sides of the K and claws at the bottom and top||

||Neo chipEeexplosion–It would be little things that represent monsters& kaiju||

||Neo blade:Void–Right spin blade with a Godzilla and Gihdora features on two thick and sharp scythes and two more scythes that activate mid-Battle||

||Neo Disk:4—B-A thick+heavy Disk with two Smaller bit still big metal scythes||

||NeoFrame:Aero–The frames gimmick is that it shoots out more Scythes and it’s a circle||

||DriverGrinynamic-a Driver that has four modes Balance,Attack,Defense,Stanima||

||DualDrive:Beast-Whatever you want it to look like, just more Scythes||

||Moves:Void counter, Void Rage,Explosion rush!,Dynamic Launch,Beast flare!||.

||Super-movesGrinynamic Crush,Beast Stance!,Void Hyper slash,Explosion Slam!.||

||Final—move:GODZILLA+ GIHDORA HYPER LAUNCH!!! (Basically when all the scythes are out they hit with full on force meaning it’s a Fatal blow)| |

||Oh and:The Scythes don’t scrape because when the bey Is at really low spin the Extra Scythes go Back in||
and , both yours OC and Beys are entered to the contest.
(May. 13, 2022  5:45 PM)beansworth Wrote: [ -> ]Ok, DualBurst is getting a character contest. The rules are simple, your OC must be under the age of 18, use a DualBurst System Beyblade, appearance is required. The contest will end on May, 20th. The places are...

1st Place: OC will be a main character.

2nd Place: OC will be a recurring character.

3rd Place: OC will be a supporting/little appearance character.


DualBurst System.

Tch... I'm pretty rusty at this so I'm going to use a Previous Character if that's okay.

I hoped you liked it. If you need to make some changes I don't really mind. I hope this contest goes well!

BTW: I added some changes from the Original Character.
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