I will be rewriting Blaze to have mainly the same characters
including 's unused winning character for my contest
but have a relativley same plot but removing plot holes and rearranging when things happen.
And I Am Huge fans of yours and look up to you guys, I Would like your opinions on chapters, I do however not like when people are not honest when i am obviously doing something wrong so anyone reading including you two, please feel free to be critical of my work.
I'd like to know your opinions so quote me or pm when you get a chance
Chapter 1:
Blazing Spiral! Let's Go Σolomon!
???: I'm Kai and I'm gonna be the Very Best no matter what!
??? Yeah we get it dude, Could you shut up (annoyed expression
Kai: C'mon big sis stop being so mean!
???: Inari! Time for Brunch!
Inari: I'm going to eat, And then I'll make my bey.
Kai: Okay, I'll be at my big match, I am the european Champ after all!
Later At the beigoma Beyclub
Valt: Sup guys! Me and Slash valkyrie have been training what about you guys!
Rantaro: I've already evolved my bey, Can't you evolve yours?
Valt: I don't have any ideas, Where's Ken?
Rantaro: I Don't know, Doesn't he Have A match with some guy from europe?
Valt..... Wait! The match starts in an hour, We have to hurry!
Rantaro: K, Let's Go!
At the match, In Japan
Kai: Hey Ken, I'm gonna beat you! I don't care if you're a legendary blader or not, you're done for! *Smirk*
Keru: You Better watch that tone of yours!
Kai: H-Hand Puppets!? *Confused Expression*
Besu: Yeah we're hand puppets! Cool right?
Kai: Yeah I guess.
Valt: YOU CAN DO IT KEN!
Rantaro: YEAH!
Kai: You've got friends cheering you on, i admire that. But that all ends here, me and Strike Σolomon will win together!
Ken: Alright then,
Hanami-San: Oh, This Battle Is going to be intense! two legendary blader about to battle it Out! who will win?
Referee: Ready Set!
Both: 3 2 1 Let It Rip!
Ken: Let's go Chain Launch!
Kai: Σolomon! Break Strike!
*Clash*
Σolomon Is knocked back
Kai: Σolomon! Barrage Strike!
Ken: Guardian Strike! Go Kerbeus!
Both beys clash
Ken: What?!
Valt: He knows your weakness you have to attack! Defending won't work!
Ken: Atomic Counter!
Kai: It's all Over! Σolomon! *que avatar animation* Blaze Beat!
Kerbeus Is hit with a barrage, A blinding light shines, the light clears showing kerbeus' shattered remains.
[TO BE CONTINUED]
Note: I renamed Kai sister
also shes way more aggressive and indenpent than other protagonist siblings atleast for beyblade